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Posted: 14 years ago
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The Family Misfit


She looked around and saw all familiar faces, the faces that she had been seeing for years together. She knew most of them there. Everyone there recognized her too , yet she felt lost in the crowd. She felt like a complete stranger standing there.She had known them for years,but failed to understand them. She was dressed in a saree according to her mother's order! Though the turquoise blue color did wonders to her skin and the saree draped around her enhanced her features and made her look stunning, she thought it was unnecessary.

She walked around, smiling at everyone who seemed to know her though she recognized only a few. She acknowledged everyone's presence and they returned the gesture.

""Have you thought anything about her wedding"? She heard someone ask her mother.

"Ofcourse we have. But you know this new age girls, they don't want to get married till they are independent and all".

"But she is 22. She will be completing her graduation this March and I heard that she already has a few joboffers from college recruitments or something like that".

"Yeah, she does. But she wants to work for a year before she gets married. We have been looking around for a guy if we do get someone worth we will get her married".

"Oh! In that case, I do know a guy. He is from Bangalore, well educated and comes from a very good family. . ."

She walked away from there with no interest what so ever in that topic. She had been hearing such conversations from the past two years, people all around her seemed extremely concerned with her marriage.

"Ananya, come here", she could hear one of her aunts calling.

She turned to see who it was and met her Aunt Shilpa's eye. She sighed and wished she hadn't.

"Hello aunty. How are you"? She said with the fakest smile possible.

"I am absolutely fine dear and how are you"? She asked looking at her from top to bottom, surveying everything that was on her and its worth. That was how her Aunt was, she measured a person's worth with the money they had.

"I am doing fine too aunty", she said and started to walk away.

"Wait there, this is a beautiful sari. . you know I have bought one like this for my daughter but ofcourse a much better one and more costly too. You know, she doesn't wear a sari that isn't classy. I am not saying this isn't nice", she added in the end with a smile.

Ananya just managed a smile struggling to keep her fury inside. She had promised her parents she would behave and she intended to keep that promise atleast this time. She over the years had developed an image in her family circle that her parents weren't proud off. She always said what she felt, she always spoke her mind, and she spoke about things that seemed like a taboo in her family. A girl being so independent wasn't accepted in her family.

"Oh! Will you look at that!" her aunt exclaimed. Ananya looked in the direction and found her friends Nikhil and Krithika walking towards the empty chairs. Nikhil was holding the baby Rohan, who looked so adorable that Ananya couldn't wait to go and give him a big kiss.

"Nikhil is holding the baby while Krithika is walking like a queen. What ever happened to dignity of men? A man is doing a women's job".

"What's wrong with carrying your own baby"? Ananya asked not able to make sense of anything just said.

"It's a women's job to take care of the baby. It's not a guy's job. Our husbands never ever held our kids. I even heard he does house chores like cooking and cleaning. Now, our husbands. . ."

"Not all husbands are so inconsiderate", Ananaya said and walked away from there before she could blurt out anymore.

She pitied Krithika, everything she did would be written as wrong as she had gone ahead and married someone whom she loved not caring about his caste or background. The best part though was that her parents were open minded and accepted it, which she was sure wouldn't have been possible if Krithika's parents belonged to her family.

She walked towards Krithika and Nikhil who were sitting with her Grand Pa.

"What do you think you are doing?" she said snatching the glass away from her grandpa.

"Why aren't you up on the stage, helping the bride?"

"To keep an eye on you", she said and placed the glass on tray.

"You don't have to keep an eye on me. I am 78 and I know how to take care of myself. You are nagging a lot just like my late wife", he said like a child.

This what Ananya loved in her Grandpa, his child like quality. She and her grandpa shared a special bond which very few understood. He was her best friend. She was a spitting replica of his mentality. They were different from the crowds yet never had an urge to walk with them. He had traveled around world and was broad minded which he passed on to her. He was eager to learn and changed with the changing times, holding on to the tradition. He was a perfect blend of east meets west.

Just then she saw one of her uncles walking towards them. She genuinely liked him and gave a smile. He was a sweet adorable man but a coward to say what he thinks, so even if he didn't approve of something, he never voiced his opinion.

"Hello uncle", he said while bending to touch her Grand father's feet.

"Live a long life son".

"How are you uncle"? He asked while dragging a chair between Ananya and her Grandpa.

"I am doing great except that my grand daughter tortures me and keeps an eye on what I eat and drink".

"I have to. Your sugar levels have gone very high and I don't like that", she replied with anger in her voice.

"You have got a fine girl here. Are you planning on getting her married soon", he said tapping her shoulder.

"Uncle, not you too", she sighed.

"What! You are 22 now. Look at Sowmya, she is just 19 and is getting married. Look how happy she is", he said looking the wedding ceremony.

Sowmya did look beautiful but Ananya knew this wasn't what she wanted. She was being forced into this marriage. She had big dreams of being independent and earning before getting married. But she fell in love with a guy who dint belong to their caste and her parents thought that getting her married would be the only way to get her separated from him. She at first dint listen and rebelled but later on started giving into the emotions of her parents and decided to ruin her life for their happiness. Atleast that's how Ananya saw that.

"She is making a huge compromise", Ananya said at last.

"What"?

"What she means is, Marriage is a compromise and we can't deny that", her Grandpa said, gesturing towards Ananya not to say anything.

"She would be going to US and staying there. That's a blessing. I better leave, my sister seems to be calling me", he smiled and left.

"I hate sitting here and watching her go through this. Even yesterday night, she was crying. How can they think she will be moving on from Sameer so soon? He is a great guy, he would have made Sowmya so happy. What is wrong if he belongs to some other caste? Who made these castes anyway? How can getting her married to someone else be the solution? Has anyone even asked her what her dreams are? Has anyone bothered to ask her if she even liked her husband, he is 10 years older than her God's sake and look at him, and he is already going bald?" fumed out Ananya.

"Calm down, will you? What can we do? We tried everything we could to get her out of this. She gave in, we can't do anything now", Nikhil spoke at last.

"Well young man, All I can say is-She shouldn't have given in. She should have fought for that guy. Life Partner is the most important person in life and you should be the one choosing and caste or parents should not come in between."

He continued " Promise me one thing Ananya; come what may, you will never compromise in your life, not especially in maters of life partner." her grandfather said with moist eyes.

"I promise you Grand Pa! I promise you!." replied back Ananya.

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-Sharmila



Edited by -Sharmila- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#32

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Hey Shar! 🤗

What was that?

I mean, how could you actually write such an awesome OS?

I'm glad that I read it!! 😃

Like you described, she is indeed a very strong and independent woman.

These relatives!! I tell you, suck he good out of you!! 😡

There were a lot of instances when I was forced to get married that too at such a young age! Of course, not by my parents but by those stupid relatives!! Damn them all!

I wonder why all the people are divided into religions and castes! 😡

One should remember that we all are human beings first.

I love her Grandpa. I so wish I had one too! 😭


The feel was maintained till the very end. 👏 One thing I love the most about your OS.😳

The message you wanted to give was well conveyed. 😊

Well done. 👍🏼 Keep up the good work! 😉


Love you loads,

Sindhuja


P.S. Thanks for patiently waiting for my comment! 😛

Edited by -Sindhu- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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It could not have gotten any better, really. The highlight of this particular OS is the way it ended, Sharmila! What an absolutely a m a z i n g job you've done! ⭐️

Tell me something, what made you pick up this topic to write an OS? I haven't read something so well written on such real a theme in days. I find Ananya sinisterly close to Ananya and her Grand father's mention pushed me into nostalgia. I miss my Dadu!

I am absolutely stunned, you're amazing. I wonder what you've got next in store. I aspire to write such off-beat stories, if I can that is. Lately I have been only and only into romanticsm. Thanks, S!

-Kankshita




Edited by -Kanky- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#34
hellooOOoo my darlin kjo.... btw dats ur name from here after cz i love ur story telling technique and it reminds me of karan johar who's a mind blowin script writer....😉

oh dear lord, i'd hav run away from dat family if i were anaya😆😆 do u really find ppl like dat in india??!!?! im shocked and amused😆 i looooooove her grandpa, she sounds lot like my dad... insanely crazy and really broad minded.

all right as for my crazy pov, i imagined anaya as preity zinta cz she's da only blunt, outspoken gal i'v come across from indian film fraternity plussssssssss her role in salaam namaste reminds me of dis anaya.... really sweet and suits her well.

i enjoyed readin dis OS choti sis i mean my kjo🤣

like i always say, keep writin more!!!!!!!🤗
Edited by NaDzGirl - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey Shar 🤗
Ohmigosh! Absolutely brilliant sweety!
I am so impressed and beyond glad that you've picked such an offbeat topic and gone ahead and written such a wonderful piece on it.
I absolutely loved Ananya's character! She reminded me so much of me at most of the places! Totally fabulous OS!
And your writing is just amazingly well! Bravo!
Keep writing more~!
Love
Daania
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Posted: 14 years ago
#37

Originally posted by: -Sindhu-

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Hey Shar! 🤗

What was that?

I mean, how could you actually write such an awesome OS?

I'm glad that I read it!! 😃

Thanks alot ... I'm so happy I wrote it!! 😆

Like you described, she is indeed a very strong and independent woman.

Yeah... I love such characters! ⭐️

These relatives!! I tell you, suck he good out of you!! 😡

There were a lot of instances when I was forced to get married that too at such a young age! Of course, not by my parents but by those stupid relatives!! Damn them all!

I know... there are always some stupid shallow minded ppl in every household!

Wat??.. U and marriage?? already... but u are just 18!! 😲 I'm so glad Aunty n Uncle are such superb ppl! ⭐️ . . .

I wonder why all the people are divided into religions and castes! 😡

I always wonder about this one too! .... Dumb division! 😕

One should remember that we all are human beings first.

Agreed!

I love her Grandpa. I so wish I had one too! 😭

Aww. . . Me n Pallz would be glad to share our grand pa wid U n bhaiyya! ... My grand pa... is exactly like this.. infact I imagined him and wrote out the character... You'll love him for sure... Why don u come over to BVRM the next time wid me??


The feel was maintained till the very end. 👏 One thing I love the most about your OS.😳

The message you wanted to give was well conveyed. 😊

Well done. 👍🏼 Keep up the good work! 😉

Thank you so much such a huge n amazing comment!! 🤗



Love you loads,

Sindhuja


P.S. Thanks for patiently waiting for my comment! 😛

Don u dare thank me for this! 😡 😆

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Posted: 14 years ago
#38

Originally posted by: -Kanky-

*Edited*

It could not have gotten any better, really. The highlight of this particular OS is the way it ended, Sharmila! What an absolutely a m a z i n g job you've done! ⭐️


Thank you Kanky! .... I'm so glad you like it!

Tell me something, what made you pick up this topic to write an OS? I haven't read something so well written on such real a theme in days. I find Ananya sinisterly close to Ananya and her Grand father's mention pushed me into nostalgia. I miss my Dadu!

This one is based a li'l bit on a real incident which happened wid my cousin last sunday at a family gathering! ... I felt that the story needs to be told... so added a bit of stuff from here and there... and added Grand pa too... to end it on a good note!
Yeah... I remember you telling me about ur Dadu.. sorry for reminding him!

I am absolutely stunned, you're amazing. I wonder what you've got next in store. I aspire to write such off-beat stories, if I can that is. Lately I have been only and only into romanticsm. Thanks, S!

I haven't got a great response for this as u can see.... I guess people aren't ready yet to read off-beat ones! ...So.. no more diff topics for present.. and back to the sappy stories as always ! 😆
I'm sure u'd do a better job at writing them .. than I've done! ....

-Kankshita




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Posted: 14 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: NaDzGirl

hellooOOoo my darlin kjo.... btw dats ur name from here after cz i love ur story telling technique and it reminds me of karan johar who's a mind blowin script writer....😉

oh dear lord, i'd hav run away from dat family if i were anaya😆😆 do u really find ppl like dat in india??!!?! im shocked and amused😆 i looooooove her grandpa, she sounds lot like my dad... insanely crazy and really broad minded.

all right as for my crazy pov, i imagined anaya as preity zinta cz she's da only blunt, outspoken gal i'v come across from indian film fraternity plussssssssss her role in salaam namaste reminds me of dis anaya.... really sweet and suits her well.

i enjoyed readin dis OS choti sis i mean my kjo🤣

like i always say, keep writin more!!!!!!!🤗


Gosh Nadini Di, Me and Kjo?? ... Bechara... He'll commit suicide .. if he knows that he's being compared to such a dud!! 🤣
Yes Di, There are people like that in India!! ... Kyun Sri lanka mein Nhn hai?? 😲

I love the Grand pa too.... 😳
Wow!! PZ in this OS.... Wah.... Full of tadka n all.... You have such a superb imagination!! 😆 😉

Thanks for this Awesome comment!!
Love ya! 🤗
Sharmi
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Daania-

Hey Shar 🤗

Ohmigosh! Absolutely brilliant sweety!
I am so impressed and beyond glad that you've picked such an offbeat topic and gone ahead and written such a wonderful piece on it.
I absolutely loved Ananya's character! She reminded me so much of me at most of the places! Totally fabulous OS!
And your writing is just amazingly well! Bravo!
Keep writing more~!
Love
Daania


Hiya Daania,

Thats an amazing and a totally rocking comment!... Thank you!!
I'm also glad I wrote it..... But koi response hi nhn de raha! 😭... Not even 1 full page of comments!
Khair chodo! .... I'm really happy... that the people I like Liked it! .... Thats enuf for me! ....

Thanks once again! 😳

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