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scarlett.lady

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Posted: 15 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: aish_punk
hey SL..sweet story..

The guy was a joker..n he recounted the story of how he had become one..

He didn't know why nomads were called homeless..n being a stubborn kid..he asked his father n mom..who didn't quite give in to his explaination..his mom didn't eat anything n he had to persuade her..

He lost his father when he was doing an act in the circus..n his mother was really depressed..n that made him sad too..but one day he met Heidi..n she was really friendly with him..she even offered to get married so that he doesn't have to leave..she actually did the rituals n they got married..lol, so innocent. But her dad came n took her away..

she had protested n fighted..n her dad had to give in because he loved her so mch..so Carlos stayed..

i loved the way u described her accent!..

They're still married..but nothing happened between them until they were of mature age..thats good..his mother took care of that!..

after that even he started working in the circus as per the tradition..n her dad started liking him too..but still his confusion about nomads being homeless wasn't cleared, lol.

thnx 4 d pm

do write more

-aish

Thank you for the long comment Aish! I'm glad you enjoyed the story, it wasn't paced or eventful as such, and yet plenty happened! Btw, just so you know, it was the boy who did not eat, and his mother tried to make him, and then the same night he wandered away and found Heidi. Quite a few miracles all at once?

Just a simple piece really, I wasn't trying to formulate messages out of it I suppose!

Thanks again!

(S.L.)

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scarlett.lady

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Posted: 15 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: chhilt
Quite good... would like to read more from of you... have you ever considered writing something tragic? I think you'd do well in that particular genre ;)

Ha Ha! I wonder what brings you to that conclusion Chhilt! Actually, I usually write majorly depressing stuff, which is not my rule, but it just happens cause I seem to want to write and vent out most, when I'm in the off mode.

Glad you enjoyed reading though - did you read, one or both in this thread? - Curious!

Thanks for dropping by!

(S.L.)

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Sookie

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Posted: 15 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: scarlett.lady

...Actually, I usually write majorly depressing stuff, which is not my rule, but it just happens cause I seem to want to write and vent out most, when I'm in the off mode.

:-) Ahh! Fellow comrade !! My thread here (navigate few pages on this forum) named "Transmigration" used to be called "Death Talkies" . I did have a funky name (or so I thought ) before and a friend suggested to name it as "Death Talkies" so that people know what they are getting into. 😆

The story there are vignettes, mostly and there is no specific style. After twenty or so depressive stuff, am moving towards light at the end of the tunnel. 😆 😆

Apologies for spamming your thread... The stress of dealing with one ridiculously illogical person is much greater than pacifying a dozen two year olds! Sigh...I am getting back to work.

Edited by -Sookie- - 15 years ago

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Pooja

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Posted: 15 years ago

#34

Unfortunately, there is only a 'like' button. If there had been a 'love'd, it would have suited my requirements more. It was a bit fast. I liked the interaction between Heidi and Carlos. The end of the story was a bit faster than the first pace. Thanks for the PM.
(I will write more soon. In a hurry just now :()

Edited by Pooj@ - 15 years ago

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Just call me Chhilt :)

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Posted: 15 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: scarlett.lady

Ha Ha! I wonder what brings you to that conclusion Chhilt! Actually, I usually write majorly depressing stuff, which is not my rule, but it just happens cause I seem to want to write and vent out most, when I'm in the off mode.

Glad you enjoyed reading though - did you read, one or both in this thread? - Curious!

Thanks for dropping by!

(S.L.)

I don't know... judging by your writing, I thought you'd do well when writing something emotional because your descriptions are really good :) I only read the first one right now.... I'll read the second one soon though :)

No problem! It was my pleasure! ;)

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scarlett.lady

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Posted: 15 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: -Sookie-

My thread here (navigate few pages on this forum) named "Transmigration" used to be called "Death Talkies" . I did have a funky name (or so I thought ) before and a friend suggested to name it as "Death Talkies" so that people know what they are getting into. 😆[

As a matter of fact, I kind of know the tale behind the naming of DT. Tell you another time, but for now, yes, I shall get to reading the stuff some time in a lower mode! I'm sure it will inspire more writing from me too!

(S.L.)

Edited by scarlett.lady - 15 years ago

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scarlett.lady

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Posted: 15 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: Pooj@
Unfortunately, there is only a 'like' button. If there had been a 'love'd, it would have suited my requirements more. It was a bit fast. I liked the interaction between Heidi and Carlos. The end of the story was a bit faster than the first pace. Thanks for the PM.
(I will write more soon. In a hurry just now :()

Thank you Pooja! I beamed at the 'loved' compliment!

As for the hurried end, I suppose that I see it more, now that you point out. It must have been my haste to not make it any longer than it ale\ready was, I can rarely limit myself to word constrains.

Glad you could chip in a comment despite your packed schedules!

(S.L.)

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scarlett.lady

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Posted: 15 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: chhilt

I don't know... judging by your writing, I thought you'd do well when writing something emotional because your descriptions are really good :) I only read the first one right now.... I'll read the second one soon though :)

No problem! It was my pleasure! ;)

Like that! Phew, a relief, I was expecting something more on the lines of 'you sound like one depressed writer' (=

Emotional - tragic/ depressed stuff has a difference, and I should have read that right, but on that encouraging prompt, I shall try to give a shot to your suggestion at the earliest I can motivate myself!

Glad you could read and comment Chhilt!

(S.L.)

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Hema

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Posted: 15 years ago

#39

Awww, this was so, so beautiful!! The little boy's innocence was so touching. I loved his interpretation of the word 'nomad.' English is such a crazy language. Most of it makes no sense. lol. I really loved this one!! Your writing is brilliant! Your portrayal of the kids seemed so realistic, I was completely mesmerised...and quite disappointed when it ended :)

Thanks so much for the pm :)