Fatejo OS - Shackles - Page 3

Originally posted by: Halestorm21

Me: Broken was perfection

You: hold my beverage of choice.

RES till I get to a laptop and can give you an in-depth review like you deserve

Well...then I will wait ❤️❤️❤️

Originally posted by: D_e_s_t_i_n_y

Fab❤️

Thank you🤗

Originally posted by: Mehr03

Amazing os... you have a way with words that set you apart from other writers. Thank you so much for sharing this piece with us. 🤗

Awieee...thanks a lot for the appreciation and encouragement. I will definitely write more.

- Niki

Originally posted by: mrym_rauf

Amazing piece of writing, just loved this os, would love to read more from you, you have commendable way of expressing raw emotions especially angst and tension between the characters, it would be amazing if you continue this story, i want tejo to confront him and tell him that how much she is hurting all because of him.

Thank you so much 🤗

I think I might just continue this. No sure commitment though. When muse strikes, I will write.

This one had a lot of raw emotions in comparison to my previous one. I am glad you liked it.

- Niki

awesome os

the way you had narrated from tejo's side is splendid her all emotion whether its pain, longing helplessness, love hate all the emotions for fateh. And fateh's character how he blame everytime to tejo whether its heartbreak coz of jasmine or from her family even for lust he is feeling for tejo. But is it lust or something else? he can't bear her to leave him! why? hope she had to make him realise that showing she is not affected by him or enjoying all these at least not then pretend such. when he will feel that he is nothing and alone without tejo he will realise his true feeling or he will keep throwing frustration of tejo.

loved the way you described all even jasmine with tejo (from new born to hate journey in few words) would love to see next parts tejo showing courage to handle it and make it reailse to fateh its not only physical as he thinks but feelings are deep down her heart and same applied to him too.

tried to open your other os thread broken but showing error plz check

Originally posted by: Aniash

Hi dear

I read all of ur os much earlier , didnt get the time to comment

Only huge compliment

Characterisation well placed

Emotions wrapped in them beautifully

Fantastic flow

U are a born writer

Keep it up

On a light note

Even i llove writing but i find it a huge fun to write more on the kudos style with simple language and straight forward

So my os are like an adult reading a childs story book

😂😂😂

U already knew it before i could say it out coz

Writers connection 😂😂😂

Ah....hello my dear!

I love your writing. That humour is solely needed and Tejo beating Fateh Up is my ❤️

Thank you so much for appreciating my work. You keep writing too. I have many left to read. Will read and comment.

- Niki

Originally posted by: Marathi_Mulgi

awesome os

the way you had narrated from tejo's side is splendid her all emotion whether its pain, longing helplessness, love hate all the emotions for fateh. And fateh's character how he blame everytime to tejo whether its heartbreak coz of jasmine or from her family even for lust he is feeling for tejo. But is it lust or something else? he can't bear her to leave him! why? hope she had to make him realise that showing she is not affected by him or enjoying all these at least not then pretend such. when he will feel that he is nothing and alone without tejo he will realise his true feeling or he will keep throwing frustration of tejo.

loved the way you described all even jasmine with tejo (from new born to hate journey in few words) would love to see next parts tejo showing courage to handle it and make it reailse to fateh its not only physical as he thinks but feelings are deep down her heart and same applied to him too.

tried to open your other os thread broken but showing error plz check

Hi dear!

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.

Fateh has a long way to go.

He hurt and is still hurting but he has no clue that his feelings for Tejo has changed. That idiot wants to keep her near him without realising that he is into his wife.

It is as if his common sense too went away with Jasmine 😌

Anyway, regarding 'Broken', I have a sad news. It was taken off due to its "graphic description". As such I am in the process of re-writing it.

I will post the original in my blog and share the link too.

Till then; you can have a look at another of my works - 'A Cup of Coffee'. It is in the Main forum.

- Niki

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Hi dear!

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.

.welcome

Fateh has a long way to go.

.he is slow in realisation

He hurt and is still hurting but he has no clue that his feelings for Tejo has changed. That idiot wants to keep her near him without realising that he is into his wife.

.thats what he didn't understand its not lust but love and he wanted to punish her for that too. his wife should make realise him that being little strong infront of him not giving in his believing one step of her away from him made him restless think what will be happen if she avoid him being with him.

It is as if his common sense too went away with Jasmine 😌

.yeh you are right are you going to show her side? don't meant her more scenes

Anyway, regarding 'Broken', I have a sad news. It was taken off due to its "graphic description". As such I am in the process of re-writing it.

I will post the original in my blog and share the link too.

.oh thats the problem! but by selecting matured content will not do? I thought you must have word copy saved of it. no problem plz share link when you post.

Till then; you can have a look at another of my works - 'A Cup of Coffee'. It is in the Main forum.

will search read and comment

we should have one index listing up all ffs here will be easy to find all readers

- Niki

but why all writers write only os not ff or not few parts ss when it can be with detailed scenes and parts?😔

Originally posted by: Marathi_Mulgi

but why all writers write only os not ff or not few parts ss when it can be with detailed scenes and parts?😔

Don't know about others but mera clear hain. Till I am not confident that it is Fatejo, I am not starting any multi piece. The moment they lean towards JasFa, I am Outta here😅

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Hahaha....50 shades huh?

😂😂

Yep....Fateh does resemble those toxic idiots doesn't he.

Kya karu....this one I thought I will lower the angst. Broken was in complete narration with dialogues. Since this one had dialogues, I thought angst will tone down.

But nope...aisa nahi hua 😅😅😅

Ulta it increased.

I swear my writing keeps on pranking me.

Btw, I like your username. I like strong FLs too.

But what do I call you? Your name?

- Niki

@red: hehe well, I guess then you should just stick to angst since its your forte. Besides, we lack stories like yours on this forum.

@blue: OMG I just realized I never introduced myself!

You can refer to me as Mayuri.😊