Fatejo OS - Shackles - Page 2

Amazing os... you have a way with words that set you apart from other writers. Thank you so much for sharing this piece with us. 🤗

Amazing piece of writing, just loved this os, would love to read more from you, you have commendable way of expressing raw emotions especially angst and tension between the characters, it would be amazing if you continue this story, i want tejo to confront him and tell him that how much she is hurting all because of him.

Hi dear

I read all of ur os much earlier , didnt get the time to comment

Only huge compliment

Characterisation well placed

Emotions wrapped in them beautifully

Fantastic flow

U are a born writer

Keep it up

On a light note

Even i llove writing but i find it a huge fun to write more on the kudos style with simple language and straight forward

So my os are like an adult reading a childs story book

😂😂😂

U already knew it before i could say it out coz

Writers connection 😂😂😂

Originally posted by: masin

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Gosh Niki... how do you do it every time!? I seldom come across angsty pieces for ITV couples, so I resort to reading that genre elsewhere. This is such a welcome change in my reading list!

I like that you maintained the consistency of FaTejo's characters from your previous story. Fateh is still in a very toxic place, naturally, and Tejo truly derives her strength from her relationships (as you aptly worded!). She's given her heart to Fateh and even though he trampled all over it with his words and accusations, she's bound to be drawn back to him. In fact, she is bound to him.

I'm glad she left him in due time to pursue a better life away from Fateh and Jasmine's toxicity. But I'm equally glad Fateh found her! It speaks volumes about how disturbed he is and how he needs to control Tejo in order to control his haywire emotions. He's not entirely bad, he's just in a bad place and it's hard to empathize with him because he doesn't posses the typical "good" qualities you'd expect from the hero of the story.

Can't wait to read what you have in mind next! As much as I love Fateh's angst and turmoil, I'd love to see you unraveling Tejo's head and heart soon! 😊

Hi there!

Thanks a lot ❤️❤️❤️

The Fateh I envision is a pitiable creature. I know he is domineering and unapologetic but he is someone fraught with negative emotions. He has been unable to leave the toxic life behind and it has corroded his entire life.

Problem is Tejo kept him sane. She was an easy one to blame and the moment she goes away, the realisation sinks in that he is abandoned again. Not the toxicity hopefully but this abandonment issue is even there in the show the way he tells her not to leave her. I just upped the quota a notch.

He cannot function without her and that makes him even more angry. In fact, behind his anger is the desperation that made him hunt her down and make arrangements to get her previous job back.

It was your suggestion by the way that made me write 'A Cup of Coffee'. Felt like writing other dimension and give a glimpse into Tejo's head and a new Character.

- Niki

Originally posted by: Sparklle801

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Heya niki🤗

Wonderful piece by you again

Mann I have to ask, is angst your favorite genre to write?

But whatever the answer is, i must tell you it suits you bcause you write the angsty ones so perfectly,

You said broken and shackles are not connected but they do feel like part of a series to me..

Back to the current os, it was amazing as always☺️

No dear....Angst is my second favourite genre. My primary is thriller all the way.

It suits me 😅

Trust me I have recently started doing angst. You can say this was my fourth try with Broken and now this one.

They might feel similar but Broken and Shackles are not connected plot wise. Otherwise the angst is Simar, may be on different levels but yes.

Thanks a lot for reviewing ❤️

- Niki

Originally posted by: Cherryrose

its just fabulous. What a beautiful piece of writing👏

Thank you.

Originally posted by: Loveexists

Wonderful os 👏👏👏please write more in this...I want Fateh to realise the truth and regret his actions and love her unconditionally

I will try. Whenever muse comes with a good storyline, I will pen it down.

Originally posted by: Loveexists

He has started to love her and is blinded by hatred I hope he understands she was not at fault

You got it right. He is too blinded to realise his affection for her.

Originally posted by: I_StanStrongFLs

Goodness! the s*xual tension in this one was so high it felt like '50 shades of Fatejo' 😆

Fateh felt like one of those overbearing CEO's from Asian webnovels. He was so hot I could relate with Tejo, hated him but also wanted him. The emotions like always were vivid and enthralling. The angst was top-notch!

I absolutely loved it, you never disappoint Niki! I had tried my hands at writing angst once but gave up halfway. Its only meant for the stronghearted! I'll just stay put as your reader.👏

Hahaha....50 shades huh?

😂😂

Yep....Fateh does resemble those toxic idiots doesn't he.

Kya karu....this one I thought I will lower the angst. Broken was in complete narration with dialogues. Since this one had dialogues, I thought angst will tone down.

But nope...aisa nahi hua 😅😅😅

Ulta it increased.

I swear my writing keeps on pranking me.

Btw, I like your username. I like strong FLs too.

But what do I call you? Your name?

- Niki

Originally posted by: qwerty012

The sexual tension between is so palpable and the love-hate feeling of Fateh is so tempting.. Just like Tejo, even i am also not able to hate him. Please consider converting this story to SS or FF. I loved Broken too. Please write more stories on Fatejo

Hi dear. I tried my best to weave the sexual tension and angst together. I am glad you liked it.

I will definitely write more.

Thanks a lot.

- Niki