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Aradh_27

@Aradh_27

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#81

Originally posted by: Banjaaran.

meri alpha.
🤗.

woah! 6 am? reading Angel.
aww... now you are making me feel so damn good for being his creator... if you found him this good.
love you bas.

thank you SO much for reading him and loving him. and reminding me of him my angel.

a big heartfelt thank you for being you.
and for your love.🤗.
and yes.. badiwaali jhappis.❤️.

p.s. have to say this.. your SS is going GREAT. All that intrigue, suspense and story and characters. perfecto!

Okay , Phoenix first:

Why oh why is Suraj not this smart in the show??? All the time he's going "Chakor humaari madad karo" on a loop. He was so smart before and now it's like his brain needs a human crutch. It's Imli who realized that KNR-Ragini will destroy each other if left alone instead of this guy who knows them best. I guess it could be blamed on his starvation and dehydration which is so OTT. It's like these writers googled and read that 3 weeks is the average time one can go without only food and are hell bent on making Suraj achieve the same feat.

Chhagan I really dislike on the show and think he's up to no good. But here, I'm imagining the old Chhagan to enjoy the little bromance. He's nothing on Mav though 😛

Haha whined a little too much I guess. And moved on to Angel.😆

I love this story though! I guess it's a little harder to paint an epic if the canvas is so small with the peripheral characters being rather insipid and the very premise on which the show was built being so trivialized over time, but this fic is just awesome!

About Angel. I've told you enough already in my PMs 😃

I'm so glad you liked Name of the Game...it's been a mystery masquerading as romance for all this time and all the puzzle pieces will be revealed in time.

Anyway, love love love Phoenix! Maybe not as much as Angel., but let's give him some time!

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sonali mishra

@Shivi_forever

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 8 years ago

#82

Very interesting & beautiful story👏

Wished that the show would have been like this

Loved this suraj, phoenix word suits him😊

Waiting for next

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Sruti

@vs215blooms

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#83

@banjaaran, thank you so much for your lovely message... Am sure that everyone reading your writing will assume the girl as mini chakor...😊 she even gives food to our lone ranger suraj... Waiting for phoenix to rise...

With lots of love...

-sruthi

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srividhya68

@srividhya68

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#84

oh god...i'm just loving it
this suraj is really a genius
awesome upt
i wish they show something like this in serial too
waiting for next part
cont soon

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nimmi

@Banjaaran25

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: vs215blooms

"The writer is an explorer.. Every step is an advance into a new land"

Dear sissy, you made me to explore a miles and miles in suraj's battlefield. Mind is his toy to play games, his game is let to begin.. Mini chakor and gang is his friends...their bonding is nice... It is better that chagan don't change his colours often...

Already i caught the update bt now only i cauht time to comment and also reading your updates again and again and boosting myself... You are a unique writer sissy... Amazing updates... Love to read again and again... Portrayal of suraj is amazing...

Evil kamalnarayan and co, "you have seen his descent... Now watch his rising" like a phoenix.

- Sruthi

this is such a deep comment Sruthi.🤗.
thank you so much Sis.

you made my day a little more brighter with your wonderful words for me.
this story is simple so far. so don't think Chagan will go brutus.
and i hope you will love further updates with mini chakor and Suraj.

i LOVED this line.

"you have seen his descent... Now watch his rising"

sounds so powerful

thank you so very much once again Sruthi.
and loads of love.🤗

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nimmi

@Banjaaran25

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: Aradh_27

Okay , Phoenix first:

Why oh why is Suraj not this smart in the show??? All the time he's going "Chakor humaari madad karo" on a loop. He was so smart before and now it's like his brain needs a human crutch. It's Imli who realized that KNR-Ragini will destroy each other if left alone instead of this guy who knows them best. I guess it could be blamed on his starvation and dehydration which is so OTT. It's like these writers googled and read that 3 weeks is the average time one can go without only food and are hell bent on making Suraj achieve the same feat.

Chhagan I really dislike on the show and think he's up to no good. But here, I'm imagining the old Chhagan to enjoy the little bromance. He's nothing on Mav though 😛

Haha whined a little too much I guess. And moved on to Angel.😆

I love this story though! I guess it's a little harder to paint an epic if the canvas is so small with the peripheral characters being rather insipid and the very premise on which the show was built being so trivialized over time, but this fic is just awesome!

About Angel. I've told you enough already in my PMs 😃

I'm so glad you liked Name of the Game...it's been a mystery masquerading as romance for all this time and all the puzzle pieces will be revealed in time.

Anyway, love love love Phoenix! Maybe not as much as Angel., but let's give him some time!

aradhana.
🤗.

don't remind me of 'humhari madad karo' re. but for VJ .. but for VJ.

human crutch. wow.. that's perfect sum up.
Chakor, imli and now even Vivaan finds their moments of glory. well Suraj too is getting few once a while. thank god for small mercies.

bahahhaa... google search for period of starvation. this is killer.
but for all we know the writers must have actually done that😆. can't put anything past them.

told you i love bromance. old Chagan had that innocence around him with his looks and characterization.

ahh Maddy. he is love❤️ and Mav.
to quote him.. in his precise description.. Magnificent Maverick😆

whine? c'mon.. that was fun read. i say more.

love the way you worded it. and nailed it..
too small a canvas. too restricted with characters.

but thank you for still finding the story so good.

and i cherish those 'Angel' pms.❤️
thank you my angel.

your SS.. my favourite genre then. all shades and colours thrown in at perfect arcs.

Phoenix is khool.
but Angel is Angel. i understand girl. will never be able to match him. ever.

once again a big thank you and love for reading and loving this story.
and this wonderful comment.🤗

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Esha Singh

@eshasrk

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#87

This story is just amazing, I simply love the Suraj here, one who is determined to get back on his feet, and get his revenge, unlike in the show. Damn they have reduced Suraj to such a helpless guy, who is in constant need of help from wifey, but I am still willing to give them the benefit of the doubt that Suraj will get back...
In your story , I also like Chagan...he seems genuine, whereas in the show he's nothing but a flip flop character just like the rest of the bastiwaalen
And it almost seems now as if either you read the CV's correctly or they read you and borrow ur ideas 😆 😆
Plsss update soon, it gives me immense satisfaction to see Suraj slowly but steadily taking his sweet revenge...
Don't know when we'll get to see this in the show

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FatedSoulMates

@FatedSoulMates

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#88

Aahhh she finally updates and what an update it is with our guy going all Rambo on us

Lord knows it will almost be impossible to get this version of Suraj in TV land coz as soon as our heroes hearts start bajaoing ghantis all their dimag ki battis die & as soon as the heroines fall in love they turn into freaking wonder women who can literally carry the hero & pados ka 10 bacchas 24*7 while delivering epic bhashans at that 😆 Someone needs to show our heroes Home Alone 1-3, that kid plans & messes with the villains better than any Indian hero can 😆

Love how our Phoenix here gets to rise & shine... where he is being SMART, oh the novelty of it all ❤️
I think if we don't get a strong & intelligent Suraj in Udaan I will just put VJs face on your version of Suraj & be happy shappy 🤗

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Riddhima

@Khushi_Dillse

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#89

SO now it's SHOW TIME...

Director Suraj Rajvanshi ne apni aazadganj audience ki audience k liye pura setup ready rakha hai...With his ad...chagan 😉😆

Ab mangi haveli main asli diwali with lots of KN sutli bomb and Ragini crackers 😆

Now game beginn...what a superb move suraj, sorry smart baba or baba suraj dev 😉...ghode ki chaal chali hai...smart very smart...dekhna ye hai ki kn jo itna lamba or aage ki sochta hai kya wo suraj ko Pakad payega...short but dhmakedar update di... love it so much and Im enjoying as well...Thank you for appreciate me...main itni bhi achhi nahi hu...😳

Zindgi kabhi bhi le sakti hai karvat

Tu gumaa na kar..,

Bulandiya chu hazaar

Per uske liye koi gunah na kar...!!

Edited by Khushi_Dillse - 8 years ago