STORY: TWO...
Writer: DEMONSTAR...
7.5/10
Story started with Some Huge Dramatic Scene and then the Entry of A1 and the Simple Plastic Bomb Threat on Stage coming Up...😳👏
then CID Team added in that Plan where DIG personally Contact them and giving the Bar of those Russian Delegates Security...😊😊
DEMONSTAR as U already wrote this when DIG briefing the Team that they've perhaps got insiders here already, it already showed that they are not Trusting on their Staff but Neither the DIG nor the Team talk anything abt this matter...😕😕 Nobody raise that we Should examine Each Servant (they are Minimum) or even used their Outgoings or Using BUG is another Good Idea...😊
DIG after that Big Doubt allowed Servant to open the Bottle and be in room during the Whole Conversation...😲😲
Then there was No CCTV outside that GUESTHOUSE even No Metal Detectors on that Road...😕😕
A1 easily met with the Insider and taken all Information...
then Team back in car... I m Surprised that ACP Sir giving the security of such Big Case to Two Inspector rather Two Senior Inspector already inside the car...😕😕
Yaar in these case, mostly Seniors should be Place na either experience are Less than DUO or FREDDIE Sir...😊😊
its looking Original that if U make a Proper Scene and Apt Reason for using SACHIN and PURVI there...👍🏼
then PURVI Entered inside the GUESTHOUSE without any Vehicle... I mean how She came here...???❓
then the Call, I really liked the Call, PURVI reaction all are so Natural and zabardast...😳👏👏
But why PURVI did not Call Her dad or Her House to Her Nurse as well even Ambulance too...😲😲
its Completely Unacceptable from a Sharp Cop...
then the All Scenes were going Good...😳👏
A1 Character was Lovely 👏👏 but U make it little Odd after telling about His all Professionalism and He did such Mistakes like coming on camera and DUO informers got the Info abt Him either about FARHAD TAHA as well...
ABHIJEET Sir was Good and I really Liked that till His coming, PURVI did not left the GUESTHOUSE 👏👏 but again how PURVI moved from there... Pedal... again unacceptable na...
CID team did not use any backup in that situation...😲😕
The fake Attack was Superbly Portrayed by U...⭐️⭐️⭐️
then ABHI Sir Trapped badly...😉😉
PURVI arrested but could U think for a Moment that any Cop who already knew that I m about to Trap entered and taken out the Dagger...😲😲
Yaar kum az kum jub Usy Khud malum tha kay Wo Trap ho rahi hay tou aisa krna bilkul Ghalat laga...
DIG, DCP, Team does not ask those Police people who arressted PURVI that how they come to know about this Murder...😕😕
The Encounter Scene was Nice and u really Portrayed it Well 👏👏 but the way FREDDIE Sir got the Vdo was Amazed ...😒
CID Team or No Force did not Scanned that Area where the Apartment situated where DR. BORIS murdered Brutally...😲😲
then DUO moved inside that Minning Building... BTW how they know that the Top Floor and the Secret way was there as they till not entered inside before that Explosion so what A1 talked to Reception they did not hear na...😕😕
FARHAD TAHA did not use any Device/Electro Megnatic waves/laser Lights in that Small Cubical in any emergency...👎🏼
DUO fought with so many Ppl without any Scratch... U really made them Super Heroes Boss...😆😆
A1 easily Died was also Unacceptable in the Background of His Character which U made...😉😉
the last Fight, Honestly DEMONSTAR, U made Ur Character Lively and mostly Ur Negative Characters are the Soul of Ur stories but U ended them just in a Bit, so easily which Undigestable same like this in FARHAD TAHA case...😒😵
I like that atleast CID Team used back Up there...👏👏
I am so Sorry to U and Ur Buddies and fans if anyone find any Hurt from My Feedback but I did not find that Crisp and Grip which would be DEMONSTAR Benchmark...😊😊
I hope U and All take it Casual and dunt Feel anything Personal attack...😊
the FB is based only about this Story although I knew U are such Spectacular Writer Forum Proud on them...⭐️⭐️
Yes, One Suggestion, Gives Ur Stories Shades/Variations...😊
We all know that U are a Tremendous Skills of Writing and We all are waiting for Ur masterpieces but now I m feeling that Ur Stories moved on same track...
Really Monotonous way...
try to give Some variation as I know U will Do it easily as u have such Skills people (like ME) asking from LORD...⭐️⭐️⭐️
U are a True GEM and We (ME) taking so many Lessons of Creative Writings from Urself...⭐️⭐️
I m so Sorry again...😊
Thank You so Very Much...😳😳
Edited by gadhadada - 9 years ago
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