Aditya Srivastava & Ansha Sayed B'day - Story Contest Rating - Page 7

All three reviews done and rated

I have finally read them all ! Phew ! 😆

Okay, I will give my ratings first... But reviews a little later cos I am a little busy right now.

Story 1 : 8.5
Story 2 : 9
Story 3 : 8

All the 3 participants need a big round of applause ! I know it means a lot to write a story.. so much of time and dedication required. Inspite of the busy schedules, you guys managed to send in your stories. Hats off !  Thank you so much. It was so lovely to read the stories. All of them were so wonderful. They had the simplicity which today's episodes miss ! Will give a detailed review soon 😊

Originally posted by: -SNEHAL-

Yes ofcourse!!

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Waise it seems, everyone knows who wrote what. 

Sorry for late reply. My net wasn't working since the day i posted these contest threads.

Okay so I had read these stories on Saturday, but I wasn't sure if I should post the ratings and reviews for only 2 or not. Now that it's clear, let's get on with it.Edited by KhotaSikaShreya - 9 years ago

Originally posted by: KhotaSikaShreya

. You seemed to rush through the entire kidnapping and the rest of the story.  😆

It's obvious I rushed. Next time I am NOT going to write a story with a 3 hour deadline.😆  Edited by visrom - 9 years ago

Story 1: A well begun story with some really great dialogues. Sharp investigation for a sharp cop. The role given to Purvi was commendable and worth applause. I could actually imagine her struggle with the abductors. However Purvi could have been shown to get quite panicked about her father's condition, IMO. Otherwise the story was excellent and gave a pleasant feel and a smooth read. Great job! I'd give it an 8

 

Story 2: The beginning was simply too thrilling. The Lord Narasimha narration was just wow. The style is as usual amazing. Purvi's role in the story was as expected and you did a really great job. The fight scenes were flawlessly written and the story gave a soothing feeling and a smooth read just like the previous one. Also loved the Abhijeet-Purvi scenes as usual. Great job! An 8.5 from me.

 

Story 3: Loved the way you began the story. The idea of those reference links were cool. The descriptive part was simple and comprehensible. I had to take a break while reading yet I didn't get the break from the story. The whole scene was playing in front of me. Skillfully written investigation scenes and the fight scenes were marvelous. A commendable role to Purvi. Great job boss! An 8 from me. 

Originally posted by: visrom

It's obvious I rushed. Next time I am NOT going to write a story with a 3 hour deadline.😆 

At last read it 😃😃
First of all i appreciate 3 writers (i know them very well 😆) for writing wonderful stories...3 are different from one another & overall I enjoyed a lot 😃 Good job yaar ! 👏👏

Story 1

Sorry but i dnt like the sequence of ur writing - one scene present while next one past! I think that u can write it separately...i mean u can start with present...then go past & completes it then back to present. It would be better to understand for readers. [I cut 0.5 marks for it 😈]

I like how Abhijeet fired a shot in the air...very good idea! ⭐️ Actually i love the investigation throughout by Abhijeet...You cleverly use Purvi also by giving clues to Abhijeet. 👏👏
I missed Daya sir in your story...I know its Abhijeet-Purvi centric still I want to read more on duo...but last conversation of duo is really very good! 😃
Overall I can say that I enjoyed reading ur story. 😃👏

Rate - 8/10


Story 2

In first story, the writer involves the team very less while u used team also. And u used Abhijeet & Purvi very well. 👏 Story is somewhat different from above but entertaining. I like how u gave importance to the character of Freddy. 👏 I like Freddy-Purvi scenes.😃 Woodcutter reminds me the episode - Abhijeet in Jail. 😃 Its quite unbelievable that ACP sir trusts his officers specially Abhijeet 😆 [Shayad kavi FW vi aisa kahani likhe]...while reading i was thinking may be any Russian delegation is involved in it & i proved right...in ur story, everything is present - investigation, thriller, suspense, strong motive & good climax! ⭐️👏
Well Done! 👍🏼

Rate - 9/10


Story 3

My curiosity to your story increases so much when i read the title...unique one! One thing i must say DCP Chitroley becomes favorite of all writers - all of u used him! 😆

Starting is very sweet 😃...at first acp sir-freddy conversation then duo 😃😃...adoption part is very true! 😛

when i read the following dialog, instantly those irritating scenes came to my mind... [u know what i mean 😆]
Abhijeet: Tumhe yeh sab mazaak kag raha hai? humare duty mein pyar aur shaadi  ke liye koi jagah nahi hai. Tumhi ne toh kaha tha mujhse.

Sorry i dnt understand the line - ACP sir told this to Abhijeet or his statement is against Abhijeet?
ACP: Abhijeet...CID team par yeh ek kala dhabba hai.

mask part is quite interesting...climax is very good ! 👏⭐️
i like the end...its very true...har baar apradhi ko sazaa nehin milta...
overall enjoyed a lot ! 😃👏

Rate - 8.5/10

I have updated my post on page 4 for 2nd story 😃

sorry yaar have no time to sit down with reviews because i am busy wt studies and exams in less than 40 days time. competitive exams. a short hurried review wud not do any one justice! but here are my ratings!