~Reserved~
I am finally here with my comment. Sorry for this lateness yaar, but still as they say der aaye durust aaye. Okay, so moving on to the part:
What to say Ani, there were a lot many things which I liked in this part, I would say that it wasn't anything out of the box as such but still it had a uniqueness in it; a feeling of freshness if you know what I mean. As I mentioned to you earlier as well, its the way you write that makes it different to read. Reading certain paras, I was sighing but still with a certain smile on my face, at times with pity and at other times with the simplicity with which you decribed the details.
So starting with Armaan's dull life, his feelings and his pain, that was described very well. I could definitely imagine it all happening in front of me, him entering his huge mansion with no one else except his servant......his life full of Anjali's memories and nothing else.
I liked the way you described Rahul's positive attitude; supporting as well as consoling Armaan and trying to make him come out of his miseries.
That scene where Armaan gets his supper and takes a bite without feeling a drive to feed himself due to the black and white life of his was again very well written. Even though it was a small part but it conveyed a lot about his present life. Really nice Anita.
Now coming to one line which I particularly liked. Its when the past haunts him in the form of a nightmare that disturbs him almost everyday reminding him about the painful truth.
This nightmare still continued to shock the life out of him after her death. It wasn?t leaving him alone. It continued to torment his soul. He didn?t need a visual reminder to show him how his life was separated from him?HE HAD WITNESSED IT FOR GODS SAKE! WASN?T THAT ENOUGH?!?!?
The one in italics, loved how you put it together. Absolutely spot on.
Riddhima's nature has been described really well too. I could feel her chirpy, lively self by the way you wrote about her. The churidaar suit, that "first impression being the last impression" while grooming herself in front of the mirror could all help me imagine her standing there and literally behaving like that. Even when she collided with the person in the office (I won't mention his name here, would rather like you to roll that out yourself in the next part 😉 LOL) and the way she says that all this had to happen today only, it was again very nicely depicted.
I am waiting to see how Mr. Mallik reacts on seeing Miss Churidaar. Would definitely be an interesting meeting to read. I am sure its not only Riddhima whose fate would change after this but even Armaan would see a beam of light rising like a rainbow in his colourless life. Continue soon.
Love ya
Richa
P.S. I loved the servant's name "Ramlila". LMAO How did you come up with that Ani? I was cracking up reading it and even more so as you had mentioned about him quite a number of times. Kuchh aur nahin soojha tujhe like Ramu or Ramdayal.......but Ramlila? LMAO Still a unique one. he he
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