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Posted: 8 years ago
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Okay apologies for the late reply yasmin...awesome update...
Lovely use of poetry explaining her longing and acceptance of losing once love...truly and beautiful emotion...

Nice touch of showing how she hope and cherishes the moments they have spent and find closure in that...although what she truly wishes is for him r cherish her back...

Like the opposite effect you have shown between the two ladies were only seeks light is small gestures the other brings darkness with her wealth. ..

Wah shocked me was that sanskaar failed to spend the money he had on her by gifting her that chain...is his friends really that weak infront of his dream...

Sad to see that he couldn't put together what he had to make her smile lime she does by the mere mention of his prayer for success. ...

Happy to see the track progress and seems like swara life is about to take a uturn...wonder how sanskaar will react to that...

All in all a fantastic update full of faith and hope...wonder whine will win in the end...

Update soon...waiting already raz...
Edited by raaz19 - 8 years ago
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A/N:-Each one of u is feeling bad about Swara's condition well let
me clear one thing Swara's love for Sanskar is unconditional but her love is not her
weakness infact it is her biggest
strength. Sanskar is indirectly hurting her feelings but I ensure u the day
Sanskar realizes Swara's worth his condition would be much worse than that of
Swara. As I said before this is a complex story having loads of emotional stuff
in it hence I would be introducing lots of twists and turns in the coming
updates. The pace of this FF would be really fast.</font>




Pls do give me your valuable suggestions as this is the first
time that I am writing an emotional FF which is decorated with the colors of
love.




Love-Yasmin




Chapter:5
Along with Swara another boy also rushed to help the old lady
Both of them together: Maaji aap thik toh haina? [R u alright?]
Both of them lifted their eyes to see each other
For a few seconds something changed Swara felt a strange connection with that boy but she immediately cleared her thoughts and gave her attention to the lady
Lady: Haan bete main thik hoon [Yes child I am fine]
Boy: Par maaji aapko chot lagi hai aapko hospital jaana chahiye [But Maaji I can see some bruises on your body I think u should go to the hospital]
Swara: Aap thik keh rahe hai chaliye main aapko hospital le chalthi hoon [U r right, Maaji I will take u to the hospital]
Boy: Suniye inhe kafi chot lagi hai aur mere paas car hai agar aap bura na maane toh hum inhe mere car se hospital lekar jaa sakthe hai [ Excuse me I think this lady is badly injured if u don't mind we can take her to a nearby hospital in my car]
Swara: Ji mujhe koi problem nahi hai chaliye hum inhe hospital lekar chalthe hai [No I don't have any problem let us take her to a nearby hospital]
Lady: Bachho aap dono ek anjaan aurat k liye itna soch rahe ho [Children both of u r thinking so much for an unknown women]
Both of them together: Aap ki jagah agar humari maa hothi toh kya hum usse takleef mein chodkar chale jaate? [Our mom could have been in your place so would we have left her alone in such a condition?]
Both of them share an eyelock there was certainly some unknown bond that was connecting both of them
Boy: Chaliye maaji [Let us go Maaji]
Both of them help the lady to get up
Lady: Tumhara naam kya hai bete [What's your name?]
Swara: Mera naam Swara hai [I am Swara]
Lady: Aur tumhara? [And what about u?]
Boy: Prem
Prem: Swara aap inke saath rukhiye main apni car lekar aata hoon [Swara u stay with this lady I will just get my car and come]
Prem goes to get his car.
After few minutes Prem comes back and all 3 of them go to the hospital
The doctor does all the necessary treatment and prescribes some medicines
Prem purchases the medicines and since the injuries were minor the doctor allowed the lady to go to her house
Prem once again drops the lady to her house Swara was also there with him
Swara could make out that the financial condition of the lady was not good
She removed her purse she had in all 2000 Rs/- with her.
She herself was a struggling actress but she had this habit of saving money so that she could use it in times of need.
Without any second thought she gave the entire amount in the hands of the lady
Lady: Bete iski kya zarurat hai? [There is no need for all this]
Swara: Maaji aapki beti aapko kuch de rahi hai ye samaj kar rakh lijiye aapko inn paiso ki zarurat ho sakthi hai [Maaji don't hesitate consider me as ur daughter and accept this u might require this money sometime]
Lady: Par bete main tumhe ye paise shayad itne jaldi lauta na saku [But I may not be able to return this money so soon]
Swara: Wo toh aap abhi lauta sakthi hai wo bhi sudh samed [U can return me this amount right now and that too with interest]
Lady: Wo kaise? [How is that possible?]
Swara: Mujhe apne aashirwaad ka khazana dekar [By showering me with the treasure of your blessings]
Swara bends down to take her blessings
Lady: Teri har tamanna puri ho bete bhagwan teri zindagi khushiyoon se bhar de [ May all ur dreams be fulfilled may God bless u ur life with happiness]
Prem was observing this from his car
Prem:(thinking) Swara jitna khoobsurat aapka chehra hai usse kayi guna khoobsurat aapka dil hai [Swara ur heart is more beautiful than ur face]
Swara : Achha maaji main chalthi hoon aur haan agar kisi bhi cheez ki zarurat ho toh mujhe iss number par call kar dijiyega [ Okay Maaji I need to go now but if at all u need something then contact me on this number]
She gave her cell number to the lady and starts walking
Swara: (thinking) Abhi toh mere paas paise hi nahi hai main audition k liye kaise jaayungi? [I don't have any money right now how will I go to the audition?]
She looked at her watch
Swara: Audition ka time toh khatm ho chuka hai ab waha jaakar kuch fayda nahi chalo ab seedha ghar jaate hai paidal hi jaana hoga ab toh [The auditions must be over by now so it is better that I go back to my apartment I have to go back walking there is no other choice]
Swara started walking when Prem stopped her
Prem: Swara agar aap bura na maane main aapko aapke ghar tak chod saktha hoon wo kya haina yaha aapko koi bus ya rickshaw nahi milegi aur aapka akele jaana shayad theek bhi na ho [ Swara if u don't mind then may I drop u at your residence actually it is not easy to get a bus or a rickshaw in this area and I don't think that u should go alone as it can be dangerous]
Swara would never had accepted such a help from a stranger but Swara could see sincere feelings in Prem's eyes, moreover she had a strange power of recognizing people and their intentions she knew Prem was a good guy
Swara gave him an assuring smile and got inside the car
They were silent throughout the ride after some time Prem stopped his car infront of her apartment
Swara: Prem aap yaha tak aaye hai toh coffee peekar jaaiye [Prem why don't u come in for a coffee?]
Prem: Phir kabhi Swara filhaal mujhe apne ek dost ko lene jaana hai wo aaj hi Pune se pehli baar Mumbai aa raha hai agar kismat menin hua toh aapke haath ki coffee kisi din zarur peeyunga [Sometime later Swara actually I need to pick up my friend from the station he is coming to Mumbai for the first time but if my destiny blesses me again I will surely taste the coffee of your hands]
Swara: Aap kismat bhar bharosa karte hai? [Do u believe in destiny?]
Prem (with a smile on his face) Pehle toh nahi par ab vishwaas karne ka mann kar raha hai [Not initially but now I feel like believing in it]
Prem: Bye Swara phir milenge [Bye Swara hope to see u soon]
Swara: Bye
These simple words of Prem had a deep impact on her mind she enters her apartment still lost in his thoughts
Meanwhile,
Adi: Ye Mumbai toh Pune se bhi zyada khatarnak hai yaar najaane mere jaise bhole bhale insaan ka kya hoga? [Mumbai is more dangerous than Pune what will happen to an innocent soul like me?]
Prem: Innocent aur tu lagta hai innocent word ki defination change karni hogi [Innocent and u it seems I need to change the defiantion of this word]
Adi had a huge smile as soon as he heard Prem's voice
Adi goes and hugs him
Adi: Kaisa hai yaar? [How r u dude?]
Prem: Ekdum fit and fine
Both of them break their hug
Adi: Prem tu khud kyun aa gaya railway station mujhe lene mujhe laga k shayad tera driver aayega [Prem I was expecting your driver to come what was the need to trouble yourself yaar?]
Prem: Tu mera sabse jhigri dost hai main driver ko kaise bhej saktha hoon tune aise soch bhi kaise liya yaar? [U r my best friend how could u even think that I will send the driver?]
Adi: Par Prem tu itna bada businessman hai aur main ek mamuli sa.. [But Prem u r one of the topmost businessman and I am an ordinary...]
Prem hits him on his forehead
Prem: Khabardaar agar tune mere dost ko ordinary kaha toh aur koi bhi insaan bada ya chota nahi hotha mere liye toh sachhe rishte karodo k heere se bhi zyada keemthi hai [Dare if u speak any wrong word for my friend and by the way let me tell u no individual is big or small and for for me a sincere relationship is more precious than diamonds]
Adi: Tu bilkul bhi nahi badla [U r still the same]
Prem: Aur mujhe badalna bhi nahi hai yaar tune woh A.R.Rehman ka gaana nahi suna kya "Rehna tu hai jaisa tu" wo song mujhse inspired hoke hi toh likha tha usne [I don't want to change myself do u know that A. R. Rehman composed the song Rehna tu hai jaisa tu as I was his inspiration]
Adi: Haan haan jaanta hoon chal ab baate banana chod aur mujhe ghar le chal zoro ki bhook lagi hai yaar [Ya ya I know very well common stop making stories and take me to the house as soon as possible I am really hungry]
Prem: Chalo [let's go]
Singhania Villa
Prem: Kaka Adi ka saaman mere bagal wale room mein rakh dijiye [Uncle keep this luggage in the neighbouring room which lies next to my room]
Servant: Ji bete [ok son]
Adi goes to his room and after sometime he comes down for the lunch
He could not find Prem and hence he went towards his room
Prem was busy sketching a beautiful pair of eyes
Adi: Prem ye kiski aakhein bana raha hai? [Prem whose eyes r u trying to sketch?]
Prem: Tu kismat par bharosa karta hai Adi? [Do u believe in destiny Adi?]
Adi: Ye tu mujhse puch raha hai tujhe toh kismat par kabhi bhi yakeen nahi tha [U r asking me this question from when did u started believing in all these things?]
Prem: Aaj se [From today]
Adi: Kya matlab? [What do u mean?]
Prem: Inn aakhon ne mujhe kismat par yakeen karne par majboor kar diya kaash meri kismat ek baar mera saath de de aur inn aakhon k deedar phir se mujhe ho jaaye [These eyes forced me to believe in destiny I wish my destiny stands by my side and atleast one time I become fortunate enough to get a glimpse of these angelic eyes]
Adi: Tujhe kisise se pyar toh nahi hogaya? [Have u fallen in love wit someone?]
Prem: Pyar pehli nazar mein kabhi nahi hotha Adi. Pyar dheere dheere hotha hai. Mujhe abhi toh kisise pyar nahi hua par dil mein tamanna hai k kaash iss bheed bhaad k duniya mein koi apna mil jaaye [I don't believe in first sight love True love grows with time. I have not fallen in love with someone but yes I wish I can find someone who would belong only to me]
Prem gave final touches to his sketch
Adi: Zarur milegi [This will surely happen]
Prem: Achha bata tere movie ka kya hua? [Okay tell me what r your plans regarding ur movie]
Adi: Story toh hai mere paas aur tune khud mujhse kaha hai tu meri movie mein paise lagayega ab rahi baat lead actor aur actress ki toh mere 2 dost hai aaj unse shaam ko jaakar milthe hai I am sure wo mera saath zarur denge [Story is ready and u r going to give me the financial help now regarding the main leads well I have 2 friends I am sure they will help me and accept my proposal. We will go and meet them in the evening]
Prem: Pakka milenge yaar chal usse pehle achhe se lunch kar lethe hai phir der saari baate bhi toh karni hai [Yes we will go and meet them but before that let us have our lunch and then we will chat with each other for some time peacefully]
Adi and Prem start walking downstairs
Prem turns his face and looks at the sketch
Prem :(thinking) Kaash tumse ek baar mulakat ho jaaye Swara [I wish we meet again Swara]
PRECAP 1: Sanskar: "Kuch bhi toh nahi hai Swara ki aakhon mein" [There is nothing special in Swara's eyes]
PRECAP 2: Prem: "Ye aakhein ek kahani bayan kar rahi hai" [These eyes are narrating a story]


Edited by kashaf789 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#23
Hi yasmin...
Wow thanks for the early update... getting back to your note thanks for the reminder indeed this seems like a emotional ff full of twist and turns which I look to read but for know loving the contrasts of love shown in all the characters...One love is endless once based upon passion and the others on dreams...look forward to reading about the darkness they will see of having that desire unfulfilled or gained...wonder will that like what they see or will they wish for simpler times...

Just wanted to say don't rush the plot line of this ff as what I am enjoying the must about this piece the the simplistic blend of poetry with the intention of telling the journey...just keep the phase slow and steady like the first few updates...It really helps the reader connect...and makes your writing a much more adorable read then it is...tell the story they way you wish to but just be careful with typo...as some part above had another name rather then swara...

Back to the update it was awesome seriously loved both prem and swara they are so similar and wish to help others...loved her gesture to help a stranger shows how much she cares for others and like you said she doesn't measure relationship though wealth or status...

Best part was the end twist I see the director has landed and the twist is about to happen..so will swara be the lady to help sanskaar achieve his dream. ..? Seems like it...which makes me more curious to know what will happen down the line...update soon. ...

P's missed sanky...but enjoyed the new entries...

Take care

Raz
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Posted: 8 years ago
#24

Thanks for your love and support dear friends. Here is the next part I hope each one of u would enjoy reading it.

Very soon I would be introducing some twists in this FF. The twists might be beautiful but very soon it will take an emotional turn. I would just like to say one thing START PREPARING YOURSELF TO HATE Sanskar

There is also a Sight Change in a Character Sketch. Do bear with that.😉

Chapter: 6

Sanskar: Samjhtha kya hai wo apne aap ko? [What does he think about himself?]

Swara: Tum kiski baat kar rahe ho Sanskar? [Who r u referring to Sanskar?]

Sanskar: Woh useless Director mujhe SK ko 5 minute ka role de raha tha uski khud ki aukaad nahi hai aur mujhe apni aukaad bata raha tha [That useless Director was offering me a role of 5 minutes he does not stand a chance to stand in front of me and he was trying to show me my status]

Swara: Chodo na Sanskar filhaal hum struggling actors hai kuch time toh lagegana khud ko establish karne k liye [Forget it Sanskar right now we are struggling actors it will take us some time to proove ourselves]

Sanskar: (angry) Struggling actor main nahi tum ho Swara kum se kum maine ek movie ki hai bhale hi wo movie flop ho gayi ho phir bhi mujhe tum se zyada experience hai tum toh har din bus thokre khathi rehti ho aaj tak tumhe kisisne koi mauka nahi diya par maine khud ko ek baar prove kar diya hai [I am not a struggling actor Swara let me remind u I have already done one movie; it is true that the movie was a flop but I feel that I have already proven my worth. I am much more experienced than u; it might be a daily routine for u to get rejected as no one has given u a single chance till date but this is not the case with me]

Sanskar: Tumhe shayad aise chothe mothe role suit hothe honge par mera naam superstars k category mein hi achha lagta hai waise bhi Swara tum mein wo baat nahi jo ek achhi actress mein honi chahiye iss liye galti se bhi khud ko mere acting capabilities k saath compare mat karna tum ek struggling actress ho sakthi aur shayad umr bhar struggle karti bhi raho mujhe isse koi farak nahi padtha par dubara kabhi bhi SK ko ek struggling actor bulane ki galti mat karna warna main ye bhool jaayunga k tum meri best friend ho aur shayad mere muh se tumhare khilaf kuch galat nikal jaaye jisse shayad tumhe bura feel ho [Such ordinary roles might suit u Swara but SK's name sounds good only in the category of superstars; to be frank personally I don't think that u have the quality to be a successful actress and hence u can't compare my acting capabilities with the ordinary acting skills of yours. U may be a struggling actress and it is quite possible that u continue to struggle throughout ur life that's none of my buisness but next time if u dare to call SK a struggling actor then I might forget that u r my best friend I might utter some harsh words which may break ur heart]

Swara : (thinking) Ab aur kehne ko baaki bacha bhi kya hai Sanskar sab kuch toh tumne keh diya [What else do u want to say Sanskar u have told everything today]

Sanskar : Kya soch rahi ho? Itna bhi mat socho jab main ek established actor bun jaayunga toh tumhe bhi koi chotha motha role dilwadunga waise bhi tumhare liye koi humare ghar tak chalkar toh aanewala hai nahi iss liye dua karo k mera career chal pade [There is no need to think so much Swara don't worry once I get famous I will surely try and grab some small roles for u as it is no one is going to come to ur doorstep to offer u the role of the leading actress of a film so just pray to God that my career reaches its peak very soon]

Sanskar was removing his frustration on Swara but he was not caring about the feelings of his best friend

Swara could do anything for his happiness but she was not immune; her heart was extremely sensitive and today knowingly or unknowingly Sanskar had stabbed her innocent heart with his harsh and extremely rude words

He had openly confessed that she would no longer be a part of his life once he gets established as a star

Swara was already aware of this fact but she felt bad not because Sanskar would go away from her oneday but the actual reason for her grief was that Sanskar had termed her a REJECTED GIRL and he was sure that she will never taste success in her life

Sanskar gets up and goes to the kitchen; he didn't even think twice that he had broken her heart in the process of removing his frustration

Swara was still lost in her own world; Sanskar's words were haunting her but God had different plans for Swara

Swara goes to the washroom to wash her face as she was sure that this time she won't be able to control her emotions

Sanskar comes out with and exactly at that point of time the doorbell rings

Sanskar opens the door and he was surprised to see his college friend Adi standing in front of his eyes

Adi was about to hug Sanskar when Sanskar forwarded his right hand in front of him

Sanskar thought that Adi was also struggling to make his mark and he did not like to be with any ordinary person

Sanskar: Are Adi tu yaha Mumbai mein kya kar raha hai? [Aditya what r u doing in Mumbai?]

Adi did not expect this question from Sanskar after all they were meeting after such a long time

Sanskar: (thinking) I hope ye Adi yaha ghar dhungne ya kaam maange k liye nahi aaya hai main khud ka intezaam abhi tak nahi kar paaya toh iski madat kaise karu. mujhe jald hi isse yaha se bhagana hoga [I hope Adi is not looking for some house or some job; it is getting difficult for me to establish myself why should I help someone else unnecessarily I need to get rid of him soon]

Swara: Aditya what a pleasant surprise

She immediately goes and hugs him

Sanskar: Ye Swara bhina isse bhi abhi aana tha? [What a bad timing of Swara?]

Sanskar goes and sits on the sofa

Adi: Kaisi hai meri cute si behen? [How r u my sweet little sis?]

Swara: Ye baat tum andar aakar bhi puch sakthe ho [ U can ask this question after coming inside]

Adi: Tum nahi bhi bolti tab bhi poore haq se tere ghar mein dhaakil ho jaata [I would have entered ur house even without ur invitation I do have this right]

Sanskar takes a newspaper and pretends reading it

Sanskar: (thinking) Zabardasti gale padne ki koshish kar raha hai chahe jobhi ho main toh Adi se saaf saaf keh dunga k wo Pune wapas chala jaaye main uski koi madat nahi kar saktha[ He is unnecesarilly trying to get close whatever the case I will tell me straightaway that I can't help him and it's better if he goes back to Pune]

Swara was about to close the door

Adi: Swara darwaza band mat kar mera ek dost bhi hain mere saath wo bus apni gaadi park karke aatha hi hoga [Swara don't close the door my friend would be coming within few minutes after parking his vehicle]

Sanskar: (thinking) Toh strugglers ki fauz lekar aaya hai [It seems that he has got a whole army of strugglers with him]

Swara: Kaun hai wo? Kya main usse janti hoon [ Who is your friend do I know him?]

Sanskar: (thinking) Hoga koi aira gaira [Might be some useless fellow]

Aditya: Tumhara toh pata nahi par duniya k liye wo India ka sabse bada buisness tycoon hai Prem Singhania [I am not sure about u but the world knows him as the most successful business tycoon of India he is Prem Singhania]

Sanskar keeps the newspaper on the chair; he was surprised to hear Prem's name from Aditya's mouth

Prem: Main duniya ko toh nahi jaanta par Swara ko kabhi bhula nahi paayunga [I don't want to know about this world but I will never be able to forget Swara]

Sanskar gets up from his chair and goes to greet Prem

Sanskar: Hi Prem main SK Aditya k college ka dost [ Hi Prem this is SK college friend of Aditya]

Swara: Aap? [U?]

Prem: Aaj agar khuda se kuch aur bhi maang letha toh shayad meri saari tamanna aaj puri ho jaati [If I had wished for something else today then maybe God would have blessed me by fulfilling all those wishes]

Adi: Tu Swara ko pehchanta hai? [Do u know Swara?]

Prem: Jo ek baar inn aakhon ko dekh le wo kabhi bhi uss malikka ko bhul nahi paayega jo inn aakhon ki maalikin hai [There is not a single person in this world who will forget the owner of these beautiful eyes]

Sanskar: Aisi kya khaas baat hai Swara ki aakhon mein; kitni saadaran hia iski aakhein [There is nothing special in her eyes they r so ordinary]

Swara felt hurt by his words; Sanskar had once again rejected her and that too in front of a stranger

Prem looks at Sanskar for a second and then he moves his gaze back to the magical eyes of Swara

Prem: Main batatha hoon k mujhe inki aakhon mein kya nazar aa raha hai [I will tell u what can I read in her eyes]

PRECAP 1: Prem defines the beauty of Swara's eyes

PRECAP 2: Aditya offers Sanskar and Swara the movie

Okay guys I know it was a super short update but I will update this FF on Sunday again and I would update my remaining FFs

Edited by kashaf789 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Want swara successful more than sanskaar
Lovely update
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Hi yasmin...
Thanks for the lovely update ...so I see the worning above has already taken effect and that the twist is already bring introduced...

Nice update loved the dark shade in sanskaar character felt like I was watching a continuation of a episode...very dramatic...

One thing is for sure his words during her birthday were all empty promises for him he regards his fame and desires above all else and this is nothing that he has in common with naintara...Both there ego are big and wealth matters...what made me sad to read was that he never dared to dream big for her like she does for him...and this was shown again when he met his friend adi...He just judged him at the first meet without a words...

Poor swara I felt really sad for her as her worst fear has come true already she can see that she is going to mode her friend home she loves deeply...did he not see her pain as he was speaking...? And what made mad annoyed was she just stood there listening...okay I know she loves him but she could have walked away...?

Anyway I look forward to reading what will sanskaar reaction be when he is all alone and finds swara secret diary ..For I am sure once he realises his mistake he will repent but it will be too late...but before that I see that this film will change the destiny and destination of both that will leaf one in the arm of naintara and the other will be left on there own...

Hope swara becomes equally powerful...and successful but I see that this will not matter to sanskaar as he already believes that she doesn't match his standards...

Loving prem in the story a lot why do I feel he is swara secret guardian angel...love the way he can see swara and read her real worth...look forward to the development of there bond and sanskaar reaction to this..?

Wonder when we will meet his fianc...I see that is part of the future plot...nice touch...

But the biggest part I look forward to read is the reaction that swasan will have when they get offered the film...I so hope swara doesn't walk away from it...or why do I sense that sanskaar will not be happy about working with her as he feels he knows what is best...

God so many mystery...but liking the development already and look forward to reading more about sanskaar and his mind frame as one thing is for sure he will have to repent for what he has lost but he won't realise it till she is no longer there...

P's do share the character chafe update...live to know whom boi you have changed...

Otherwise I loved the whole chappy even if I felt like killing sanky for a brief second...

Waiting for Sunday already...

Take care...

Razia
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Posted: 8 years ago
#27

Some of u r thinking that Sanskar might get jealous because of Prem sorry to disappoint u guys this story is different Sanskar won't get jealous as he does not have any feelings for Swara. There r many unexpected elements that r hidden in this story Prem has a very crucial role in this FF.

Here is the next part I am glad that each one of u are enjoy reading it

*The Change of Character is from Naina Malik to Sanjana Malik the Role will be played by Drashti Dhami She will be the Secretary and Great Friend of Swara and also the Love interest of Prem.

Chapter:7

Sanskar: Aisi kya khaas baat hai Swara ki aakhon mein; kitni saadaran hai iski aakhein [There is nothing special in her eyes they look so ordinary]

Swara felt hurt by his words; Sanskar had once again rejected her and that too in front of a stranger

Prem looks at Sanskar for a second and then moves his gaze back to the magical eyes of Swara

Prem: Main batatha hoon k mujhe inki aakhon mein kya nazar aa raha hai [Let me tell u what can I read in her eyes]

Prem: Hasseno ki kami nahi hai iss duniya mein par unn karodo haseeno k paas bhi aisi ruhani aakhein nahi hongi [There r many beauties in this world but none of them r blessed with the such divine and soulful eyes]

Prem: Jee toh karta hai k bina palke jhapkaye inn pyari nighahon ka deedar main karta rahu kyunki inki aakhein bina kisi swarth k har anjaan ya jaanepechane insaan par bus pyar hi barsathi hai [My heart wishes to keep looking at these magical eyes as they are so selfless that they go on spilling love on everyone be it a stranger or a known person]

Swara raised her eyes; as this simple statement of Prem healed some wounds of her heart

Prem smiled as he could see a blend of emotions in her eyes

Prem: Haan ratthi bhar bhi swarth nahi hai inki nighahon mein bhale hi koi inka dil tod de ye aakhein uss shaks k liye phir bhi dua hi maangengi[There is not even a small place of selfishness in her eyes; it doesn't matter if asomeone has stabbed her heart these eyes will always pray for the wellbeing of that person]

Swara was surprised Prem understood her heart's condition just by looking at her eyes

Prem: Maasyumiyat se bhari inki aakhon ko kudrat ne kuch iss tarah tarasha hai k sajawat ki har ek cheez inki saadgi k saamne pheeki pad jaaye [Nature has decorated these innocent eyes so beautifully that every artificial means of beauty fails to mark its place in front of her simplicity]

Prem: Hoor bhi inki matbhari nighayon ko dekhar sharma jaaye kyunki shayad hoor mein koi milawat ko sakthi hai par Swara ki aakhon mein uske sacche dil ki parchayi nazar aathi hai aur saccha dil khuda ki tasveer ko jhalatha hai; duniya mein koi aisa shaks nahi jo khuda ki aakhon mein aakhein daalkar khada reh sake [The fairies shy away from her angelic eyes as there r chances that there might be some default in those fairies but Swara 's eyes reflect the beauty of her true heart and each reflection depicts the face of God in it; there is no one in this world who has the courage to look directly into the eyes of the almighty]

Prem immediately lowered his gaze as if trying to make her understand the depth of his words

Prem: Aaakhein hai k dariyaan ye main nahi jaanta par itna samaj chuka hoon k inn jheel si gehri aakhon mein ek sapna chupa hua hai; ye sapna chand taro ko chune ka nahi balki kisi apne ka saath paane ki tamanna ko jhalka raha hai [Her eyes r like a river and I can see a hidden dream in the deep waters of her eyes, they r not dreaming to touch the moon and the stars they r dreaming to find someone who would be belong to her by all means]

Prem:

"Teri dil ki kahani bayan kar rahi hai teri aakhein

Zubaan par aa na saki wo daastan bayan kar rahi hai teri aakhein

Khuda ki parchayi hai tu tere ankhahe dard ko chupne na degi teri ye aakhein

Khoobsurati ka aaiyna hai tu suraj ki chamak se bhi chamkeli hai teri ye aakhein

Falak se vishal hai tu kudrat ka karishma hai teri ye aakhein"

[Your eyes are reading out the story of your heart

Words which failed to reach your lips are getting communicated through your eyes

U r the shadow of the almighty your eyes won't allow u to hide your sorrows

U r a beautiful mirror the glow of your eyes are more radiant than the sunbeams

Ur folds r much wider than the sky your eyes are the most magical blessing of this nature]

Prem: Inke aakhon ki khoobsurati ko koi kaise jhutla saktha hai? [How can someone fail to notice the beauty of her eyes?]

Prem looked at Sanskar

Prem: SACH KAHU TOH JIS SHAKS KO Swara KI AAKHEIN SAADHARAN NAZAR AA RAHI HAI MUJHE TOH LAGTA HAI K WO SHAKS HI NAHI BALKI USS SHAKS KI SOCH BHI SAADHARAN HAI [TO BE FRANK ENOUGH THE PERSON WHO THINKS THAT Swara 'S EYES R ORDINARY MUST HIMSELF BE AN ORDINARY INDIVIDUAL WITH A VERY CHEAP MIND]

Sanskar felt as if someone had slapped him on his face.

Swara: Prem aap toh... [Prem u r ...]

Prem: Swara main aapse tabtak baat nahi karunga jabtak aap apna vaada pura nahi karti [Swara I won't talk to u until and unless u fulfill ur promise]

Swara: Kaunsa vaada? [Which Promise?]

Prem: Yaad hai maine aapse kaha tha k agar humari dubara mulakat ho jaathi hai toh main aapke haath ki coffee zarur peeyunga [Remember I had told u that if at all we meet again then I will surely have the coffee that u would make with your hands]

Swara: Aap baithiye main bus abhi coffee lekar aathi hoon [Have a seat I will just get your coffee]

Prem: Waiting; your time starts now

Swara started laughing she didn't even realize that Prem had successfully managed to bring her out from her grief just by his sweet talks

Sanskar wanted to grab the attention of Prem but Prem was ignoring him completly

Swara comes out with the coffee

Adi: Chalo ab main jis kaam k liye yaha aaya hoon wo kaam kar lethe hai [Ok guys let me tell u the reason for my arrival]

Swara: Adi bhaiya aap yaha mujhse milne nahi aaye kisi kaam se aaye hai jaayiye main aapse baat nahi karti [Adi u r here for some work I thought u came to meet me go I won't talk to u]

Prem: Main bhi tumhare saath hoon Swara itne din se janab ko keh raha tha k ek baar Mumbai aa jaa mujhse milne k liye magar nahi kabhi meri baat nahi sunni [I completly agree with u Swara so many times I told him to give me a simple visit but he never agreed]

Adi: Oye hello ye tum dono mujhe emotional baato se darau mat [Hello stop blackmailing me with your emotional talks]

Swara: Aur agar bannd nahi karu toh kya karoge aap bataiye [If I continue blackmailing u then what will u do answer me]

Adi: Meri matthi maari gayi hai jo main tujhse panga lu [I am not mad to mess with u]

Sanskar: (thinking) Ye log kya faltu baate lekar baith gaye hai [Why r they getting involved in such stupid talks]

Sanskar: Adi tu kuch kaam ki baat kar raha tha [Adi I guess u were going to tell us something important regarding work]

Adi: Are haan toh suno main ek movie bana raha hoon iss movie ko Prem produce karega aur main chahtha hoon k iss movie mein leading actor... [O yes listen guys I am making a movie and Prem is going to produce it and as leading actors I would love to have...]

Sanskar: Bus main samaj gaya tu yahi chahtha haina k main SK tumhare movie mein lead actor ka kaam karu toh tere khush hone ka time aa gaya hai kyunki mujhe tera ye offer manzoor hai [I got it u want me; SK to be the lead actor of ur movie well then there is a good news for u I agree to be a part of ur movie]

Adi and Prem were somewhat surprised

Adi: Haan tu thik bol raha hai par... [Yes u r right but..]

Sanskar: Dekha Swara mere liye ghar tak offers aa rahe hai mujhe STRUGGLE karne ki koi zarurat nahi hai [Look Swara offers are knocking on my doorstep there is no need for me to STRUGGLE]

Swara understood the hidden meaning behind his words

Prem saw her smile fading from her face and somehow managed to understand that this statement of Sanskar was not as simple as it appeared it was more of a taunt

Prem: Adi Sanskar ko actress ka naam nahi batauge? [Adi won't u tell Maan aboutthe leading lady of the movie?]

Sanskar: Kahi Naintara toh nahi? [Is it Naintara?]

Adi could also sense some taunt in Sanskar's words so he decided to give him a taste of his own medicine indirectly

Adi: Ye story maine ek ladki ko dimag mein rakhkar likhi hai aur wahi mere movie ki actress banegi agar usne inkaar kar diya toh main movie hi nahi banaunga; main kisis aur ko hero ka role shayad de du par mere movie ki actress bus ek hi hogi aur wo hai Swara sirf Swara [I have written this story by imagining one girl in my mind and she will only be the leading actress of my film; I can change the leading actor of the movie but if the girl does not accept my offer then I will never do this film. There can be only one girl who can do justice with this role and its Swara only Swara]

Sanskar felt rejected with Aditya's talk

Adi: Swara apne bhai k movie mein kaam karogina? [Swara will u work with me in my movie?]

Swara: Ek sharth par [On one condition]

Adi: Kya? [What?]

Swara: Main ye movie free of cost karungi [I won't charge a single penny for this movie]

Sanskar: (thinking) Ye kya keh rahi hai Swara agar paise nahi mile toh kaam karke kya fayda [What is talking if we don't get money then what's teh use of working?]

Prem: Par iski kya zarurat hai Swara? [But what's the need of this?]

Swara: Prem main chahthi hoon k jo bhi amount aap apni leading actress ko denewale the wo amount aap ek old age house ko donate kar dijiye mere liye ye sabse badi baat hogi k meri pehli kamayi kisi nek kaam mein utilize ho [Prem whatever amount u had decided to pay to ur leading lady I would request u to donate that amount to an old age home it would be a very big thing for me that my first salary is been utilized for a good cause]

Prem: Aapka chehra jitna khoobsurat hai usse kayi zyada khoobsurat aapka dil hai [Ur heart is more beautiful than ur face]

Adi: Wo toh hai aakhir behen kiski hai waise Sanskar kya tum ye movie karne mein interested ho agar tumhe manzoor nahi hai toh main kisi aur se baat karta hoon [Yes u r right, by the way Sanskar r u interested to do the movie if u r not free then I will consider someone else for the role]

This was one of the biggest insults of Sanskar but since Adi was Prem Singhania's friend a rich and powerful man he decided to keep his mouth shut

Sanskar: Teri movie hai yaar off course karunga [It's ur movie dude count me in]

Adi: Okay guys baaki ki baate kal Prem k office mein milkar karte hai abhi mujhe kuch aur logo se bhi milna hai [ Okay guys we will discuss the other details tomorrow in Prem's office I need to go now as I have to meet some other people as well]

Prem and Adi get up. Swara hugs Aditya and Sanskar was just about to take him in his embrace when Aditya forwarded his hand

Adi: Bye Sanskar

Sanskar: Bye

Swara: Chaliye main aap dono ko neeche tak chod aathi hoon [I will come with u downstairs to see u off]

3 off them walk out of the apartment

PRECAP 1: Naintara: "Prem Singhania ki pehli movie aur usmein Naintara ka naam shamil nahi hai aisa kaise ho gaya?" [Prem Singhania's first movie and it does not include Naintara's name in it how is this possible?]

PRECAP 2: Prem: "Kitni ajeeb baat hai Sanskar jo tumhare paas hai uski tumhare nazro mein koi kadar nahi aur jo tumhare paas nahi hai tum usse sar ka taz banaye baithe ho" [It's quite strange Sanskar u don't care about the precious thing that is within your reach but u do care for someone who is not even a part of ur life]

Edited by kashaf789 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice update yasmin...
Loved it all especially prem and adi how they put sk attitude in place...seems they share a nice bond with swara...wow so the movie had been cast and there is a twist at the end that naintara wishes to be part of it...liking the plot a lot...

Seems like we will see the darker sides of both people sooner then expected as sk and naintara are more alive then I thought. .

Why is sk ego so big...does he real not see that his words or actions hurt others?

As for your statement I never believed swara and prem will become a couple but I do believe they will become great friends and this friendship will take swara to new hights I hope...

But this does leave me wondering how will sk realise that she is a true friend and a well wisher...? For me there bond of friendship is more important than the likelihood of there love which I know will happen later on in the future after a lot of twist...

Already excited to meet prem fiance...update soon...and the description of swara and her eyes was beautifully conveyed :)

Take care

Raz
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Posted: 8 years ago
#29

Thanks for your love and support dear friends. Here is the next part I hope you Enjoy it.

I am happy that all the confusions regarding Sanskar's character has been solved if at all any one has any queries then do let me know I will surely clarify ur doubt

*This Special Episode is Dedicate to My Dear Friend Razia (raaz19) who is very much in love with this FF. So razia this one is for you.

Chapter:8

Sanskar was feeling restless something was bothering him he was not able to decide what was the actual reason that was troubling him

It was late night Swara was standing near the window looking at the moon

She was sharing her grief her sorrows with her loyal friend the moon

Moon: Tum Sanskar ki zindagi ka hissa nahi ho Swara WO bus tumhare jasbaat k saath khel raha hai [U r not a part of Sanskar's life Swara he is just playing with ur emotions]

Swara: Shayad tumhari baat sach ho par maine Sanskar ko wo haq diya hai unhe mere jasbaato ki izzat karne ka ya unhe tukhra dene ka pura haq hai issmein unki koi galti nahi unhone mujhe aaj tak uss nazariye se kabhi dekha hi nahi main hi bus unse pyar kar baithi [U might be speaking the truth but I have given him this authority he can respect my feelings as well as he can be unaffected by them I will never blame him as it was me who fell in love with him he never showed any emotions towards me]

Moon: Iska matlab tum uski har galat baat sar jhuka kar maan logi uski har zyathi ko sehthi rahogi woh tumhe apna best friend kehtha hai kya sachhe dost yun kisi ka dil todthe hai? [Does that mean u will never oppose him u will continue to tolerate his injustice? He calls u his best friend do true friends break the heart so ruthlessly?]

Swara: Unka pyar shayad meri kismat mein na ho par unki berukhi mein hi main unke pyar ko talashthi hoon main aur waise bhi main kyun kisi aise cheez k peeche bhagu jo mujhe kabhi mil hi nahi saktha najaane wo mere saath kal ho na ho par iska matlab ye nahi k main kal k darr se apne aaj ko jeena chod du [I may not be lucky enough to get a taste of his love but I try to search his love in his rude behaviourand why should I run behind something which will never be mine it is true that tomorrow Sanskar might not be there with me but that doesn't mean that I should stop living the present in the fear of tomorrow]

Moon: Kis mitti ki bani ho Swara? Tum ek heera ho karodo chahnewale mil jaayenge tumhe kyun iss pathar se apna sar takrane ki koshish kar rahi ho? [What r u made of Swara? U r a diamond and I am sure u will get crores of people who will keep u as a treasure why r u trying to injure ur head by hitting it against a stone?]

Swara: Ek baat puchu chand sach sach jawab doge? [Can I ask u something O moon would u answer me truthfully?]

Moon: Pucho Swara [Go ahead Swara?]

Swara: Agar chakor ne tumse muh pher liya toh kya tum uske bagair reh payoge? Kya tum uski jagah apni zindagi mein kisi aur ko de paayoge? [If the partridge ignores u completly would u be able to survive without it? Would u be able to give someone else the place that it harbours in ur heart?]

Moon was speechless

Swara: Tumhare khamoshine mere sawal ka jawab de diya hai chand kuch kehne ki zarurat nahi hai tumhe [Ur silence has answered my question o moon u need not give me a reply now]

Swara: Tum dono ka milan toh kabhi ho hi nahi saktha phir bhi pyar ka rishtha aaj bhi tum dono k beech hai mere aur Sanskar ki kahani thodi alag hai humari kahani mein bus main unse pyar karti hoon unhone toh mujhe koi sapne nahi dhikaye aur na hi koi umeed di toh phir main kyun unse naaraz rahu sach kahu toh unhe mere jaise laakho mil jaayenge par main unki jagah kisi aur ko nahi de paayungi [Both of u can never meet but still the love is present in between the 2 of u in my love story there is a slight difference I am the one who loves Sanskar he never promised me anything then why should I blame him unnecessarily? To be frank enough he will get lakhs of better options than me but I would never b able to give someone else the place that he holds in my life]

The moon was trying to understand the divinity of her love by reading her face when all of a sudden he could see a strange emotion in her eyes

Swara: Wo aa rahe hai [He is coming]

She was right Sanskar entered her room

He placed his hand on her shoulder Swara closed her eyes immediately to engrave his touch in her heart

Sanskar: Swara mujhe maaf kar doh [I am sorry Swara]

Swara turned to face him

Swara: Kya hua Sanskar tum mujhse maafi kyun maang rahe ho? [What's the matter Sanskar why r u apologizing?]

Sanskar took her hand in his and bowed down his head

Sanskar:

POEM BY RITUJA.

"Dosti toh tumne humesha nibhayi hai maine hi har baar tumhe takleef di hai

Tumne toh humesha mera saath diya hai maine hi har baar tumhare saath ko dhikaara hai

Mera gussa humesha dosti par haawi ho jaata hai aur phir meri har baat tumhe takleef de jaata hai

Main har baar aisa karke tumhara dil dhukata hoon par ye bhi sach hai k ye main jaanbushkar nahi karta hoon

Mujhe maafi maagne ka haq toh nahi iss galti k baad par phir ek baar maaf kardoh iss dost ko aap

Maaf kardoh mujhe dekho kaan padatha hoon main

Iss dost ko gale laga lo gusarish karta hoon main"

[ U have always been a true friend but it is me who always ends up hurting u

U have always stood by my side it was me who always left u all alone

My anger overpowers our friendship and I always end up hurting u

I always end up breaking ur heart but this is also true that I never do this intentionally

I don't have the right to ask for forgiveness but if it possible then do give another chance to ur friend

Forgive me pls I am ready to hold my ears give me a friendly hug this is a request of mine to u]

Swara had tears in her eyes she immediately hugged him

Sanskar: Main jaanta hoon maine tumhara dil thoda hai Swara par main kya karu uss waqt main gusse mein tha aur mera gussa tumse badkar aur kaun samjsaktha hai tum jaanti hona gusse mein main kuch bhi galat bol detha hoon bus issi wajah se maine tumse wo galat lafz kahe [I broke ur heart Swara pls forgive me but I was not in my senses my anger was so dominant that I just went on talking rubbish u know na I am a completly different person when i get angry]

Swara: Pehchanthi hoon main tumhe Sanskar aur waise bhi hum dost hai aur dosti sirf khushiyaan batne k liye nahi gum aur ek dusre ka frustration nikalne ka bhi naam hai [I know u very well Sanskar and let me remind u we r friends and in friendship is meant not only to share ur happiness but also to share ur sorrows and frustration]

Sanskar: Tum kafi special ho Swara aur main bhi kafi lucky hoon jo tum meri friend ho [U r indeed very special Swara and I am really lucky to have u as my friend]

He separated her from him and placed a kiss on her forehead

Sanskar: Good night Swara

Swara: Good night

Sanskar goes to his room but Swara was really happy this was the first kiss that Sanskar had gifted her

Swara : Jo zakhm aapne iss dil par lagaye the uspar itna pyara malham agar aap de jaayenge toh zindagibhar inn zakhmo ka intezaar rahega mujhe [If u continue to heal my woundsin such a beautiful way then I would always wait for the gift of pain from u]

She smiled at her own thought and drifted off to sleep

Next day

Shikha: Suna hai Prem Singhania apni pehli movie launch karne jaa raha hai [Prem Singhania is launching is first movie]

Naintara: Tab toh woh zarur humare ghar k chakar katenge sab kaan kholkar sun lijiye Prem Singhania ek bade hi raiyees buisnessman hai unke khatir mein koi kami nahi honi chahiye hume ye movie har haal mein sign karni hai [I am sure he will come to meet me very soon listen everyone Prem Singhania is a rich buisnessman he should be given a royal treatment I want to bag this movie at any cost]

Shikha: Par movie ki actress already finalize ho chuki hai [But the actress has been fianlized already]

Naintara: Prem Singhania ki pehli movie aur usmein Bollywood queen Naintara ka naam shamil nahi hai aisa kaise ho saktha hai? [Prem Singhania's first movie and it does not have Bollywood Queen Naintara's name how is it possible?]

Shikha was silent

Naintara: Hum kuch nahi jaante tum jaakar khud Prem se baat karo aur unse kaho k Naintara ka naam bhi agar movie mein aa gaya toh movie khudbkhud hit ho jaayegi kuch bhi karo par hume ye movie har haal mein chahiye [I don't want any excuses go and meet Prem and convince him that if Naintara's name is included in his movie then automatically the movie would b a hit I want this movie at any cost did u get it?]

Shikha : Yes Mam

PRECAP 1: Prem: Kitni ajeeb baat hai na Sanskar jo tumhare paas hai uski tumhare nazro mein koi keemat nahi aur jo tumhare paas nahi hai usse tum apne sar ka taaz banakar baithe ho [It's quite strange Sanskar u r least bothered about the precious thing that is within ur reach and u running behind something which is not even a part of ur life]

PRECAP 2: Shooting begins

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Dear yasmin what a surprise a day what can I say bit thank you so much for the dedication...really touched by it and the friendship :)
But the truth is you deserve all the regonition you get for this story as it's one complex and difficult story full of meaning and longing testing only the boundaries of desire and love but also the very definition of true friendship which make this take a pleasure to read with each chapter update...

Just loved the simplicity of the poem on friendship and the way that sk admitted that his ego gets heavy over his judgement and even hurts the one he cares...its seems this ego is going to teach him a lot as he progress through this new venture and what makes me curious is how will his friends fare...I fear this will be lost in his longing to be with the woman of his dream...its was a very nice touch to this hour ney so far...what makes me more curious is what happens to there family is this why they both are so opposite to each other ? Have they been hurt by there own families?

One thing is for sure the beat part has to be the comparison between the moon and swara what a simplistic way of showing ones longing in the mystic nights for he is the one companion that knows all our desires and all our wishes of only he could.make them come true...This made me really happy because it's showed how much she cherish her love and regonises that the love is one sides...

Although have to say the sweet gesture of the kiss between sk and swara was cute ;) even though it was not a romantic gesture it took me back to the good old swasan days... :)

As always a beautiful written update and must say ecited about the next part already...update soon. ..

P's when do we get to meet prem fianc? Love to she her friendsship with swara..? And curious to know if naintara will be part of prem movie...see that the roller coaster ride has already begun...

I say bring it one...

Take care. ...

Razia

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