SwaSan Spectrum - OS Series - Page 5

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Sharon,

Read your comment last night itself, read it again in the morning. I am now dreaming, convinced I can write very well.

Will get back with revert at the earliest, after I finish reading your PKR.

Best,

Nyna

Originally posted by: Sparkler8

Hi Nyna,

I know I had said I will read on Sunday morning but that didn't happen, and I chose to update my FF before updating my comment here.

And that was a very good thing, I did write on your thread as to what a marvellous "pick me up" that chapter was😊

The first time I read it, Sunday evening, I was lost in that scene. No words came to my mind. So I read it again now, in the hope to leave a detailed comment. I am not sure how detailed it will be. But here are my thoughts..

Pretty detailed..😳

I look forward to this series of SwaSan Spectrum.

Love compared with a butterfly that can warm up a cold heart, could there be better way to portray your Amaranthine SwaSan? You know I love your quotes collection, but I might be starting to be envious of it. Just kidding dear, hope to see many more.

I love collecting quotes among a lot of others, I think I am a collector of things (which needs to be pruned on regular basis or else it turns to clutter) but ever since I started writing, I simply stepped up on collecting them.

Reminds me of a particular Deepika Padukone and Ranveer Singh banter between SwaSan that I think Shru or Viji had penned. But the risqu factor is notched up with Sunny Leone. That was a fun scene, and that's about it. For the rest of the piece, only 3 words play in my mind - hot, steamy and sexy.

I think that would be Viji, so I cannot recall the exact OS. Well, it had to be someone with ample assets and no one fits the curves like Sunny Leone does. And yes, the scene was for fun, so it is nice to know that it came across exactly as intended. The rest - well I take is as a compliment😳😳😳

What I find particularly commendable is language. You start the scene backward, and that actually did the trick of an erotica piece on simply language, and Nyna, that's by no means an easy feat.. A standing ovation to you for that.
You have selected the vocabulary that have over-the-surface meanings for PG audience, yet if you have read enough romance novels, that's not where your imagination takes you.

Starting the scene backwards, was more to prolong the suspense as to what exactly happened, but after I read your take and I went back to read my tale, I got your point, it does heat it up. The language - two reasons, I am still not very confident about writing love making scenes and secondly, I hoped that the implied visual speaks out. Guess it did.😳

I have previously confessed to you, I need visual while read even the most academic papers. So just imagine where this took me. I will make it easy for you and confess. I was bracing myself for a strip tease.

That was my first thought - but then it would not be in sync with Swara's character - she is a mathematician who is learning to be romantic, so a strip tease would be a little extreme. The other options were a lap dance or a pole dance, which again are quite "in your face" rather than a soft seductive / suggestive number. But then, it did end up as a strip tease of sort, Swara teased and stripped Sanskaar😉

Dance is something very close to my heart and I feel when you have the moves, words are not required, or rather not enough. I am stunned to see Swara, a mathematics genius, convinced to take up dance lessons for.. I don't know what to call that. Say a patch up between the couple.

Ragini is quite persuasive and she did hit the nail on the head when she said that Swara had to be convinced that Sanskaar would never look at any woman, and she did feel silly, I guess, at the way she was upset with him. So that was her way of making up to him. And I agree with what you say about dance and also know that it takes a lot of courage to let yourself go, to be able to dance. So here it was very courageous of Swara to start learning to dance.

Coming to the song selection, I was also thinking of Zara zara from Rehna hai Tere dil Mein. Also my favourite bg for these kind of scenes is Chupke se. I haven't written anything on them but I felt they might go well here. Nevertheless Raat Akeli was an excellent choice.

I am a firm Rafi/Asha fan - though I do love some songs of Lata/Manna de/Kishore. I rarely listen to the new /newer ones and even if do, they do not register. Old songs, I rarely forget. And as I mentioned in the FnR, "Raat akeli hai" - topmost in my list of seducing songs.

As for writing style, there goes the clichd saying, once bitten twice shy. However in writing, it goes the other way. My first such challenge was writing an epilogue on my first FF with double SR for SwaSan and RagLak. I had been too careful about many things. However when I wrote for its sequel, by popular demand, I had to write 3-4 such scenes which took much lesser subconscious doubt than the first.

I think I will agree, for Sweet Deals, I got stuck at the kissing scenes, for Amaranthine it was a little easier, but this was far more suggestive than that so I was pretty apprehensive. So let me see how far I can go for Forgotten Memories.😉

As I always say, Keep writing.

Hopefully, I will.

Cheers
Sharon

Originally posted by: Rockingbhardwaj

This is pure bliss to read..
Loved it
Thanks