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Posted: 8 years ago
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Dear Dyuti,
Chapter 7 was amazing and the amount of research you have put in is quite commendable. It was really a breeze to read it - the reveal of Sanskaar as a special agent, Swara's regret that even she had not realised how much her mentor loved her and that now she would never have a chance to call him "Baba"

Surprisingly, Ragini for all the venom and hatred she carries, is quite perspective, especially when she is wistful that even Laksh had never cared for her much, not even a fraction of the concern that Sanskaar displays for Swara.

And the creation of the Black Wolves (the name is intriguing and quite suitable for their agenda)

Chapter 8 - short but quite revealing - Sanskaar's dedication to his mission in in conflict with Swara's sense of duty. Though the conflict which they displayed was more on account of the emotional turmoil they are facing, I guess. They both are attracted but somehow, Sanskaar realises how dangerous it could be to give into such attraction, especially considering the situation they are in.

Both were lovely to read. And though it is disheartening when readers do not respond, please do not be discouraged. It is not because we are not interested, at times office and life bogs us down.

Keep writing.

Best,
Nyna
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nynaeve

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Dear Dyuti,</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Chapter 7 was amazing and the amount of research you have put in is quite commendable. It was really a breeze to read it - the reveal of Sanskaar as a special agent, Swara's regret that even she had not realised how much her mentor loved her and that now she would never have a chance to call him "Baba"</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Surprisingly, Ragini for all the venom and hatred she carries, is quite perspective, especially when she is wistful that even Laksh had never cared for her much, not even a fraction of the concern that Sanskaar displays for Swara.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">And the creation of the Black Wolves (the name is intriguing and quite suitable for their agenda)</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Chapter 8 - short but quite revealing - Sanskaar's dedication to his mission in in conflict with Swara's sense of duty. Though the conflict which they displayed was more on account of the emotional turmoil they are facing, I guess. They both are attracted but somehow, Sanskaar realises how dangerous it could be to give into such attraction, especially considering the situation they are in.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Both were lovely to read. And though it is disheartening when readers do not respond, please do not be discouraged. It is not because we are not interested, at times office and life bogs us down.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Keep writing.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Best,</font>
<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Nyna</font>



Dear Nyna,

You're fire girl! Raining streams of updates recently. Yet you gave such a great analysis. When I was typing, those exact feelings played on my mind. I literally researched on interpol, trackers,helicopter models. There's an organisation too named grey wolves. I'm a doc but not in surgical field so extra work there too. In future maybe will work on weapons and fighting techniques. Thanks a lot. This reply motivated me immensely.

Now I'm going to read your amaranthine. I waited it to be completed.wanted to read at a go 😊

Love l
Dyuti
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: blindassassin

Dyuti,

Both the chapters were interesting. It's really fast paced and you are not keeping us waiting. Waiting anxiously for the romance to unfold.
Veena.




Veena,

Remember the song?"Dheere dheere me mere zindagi mein ana?"

Romance will come, dheere dheere. 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#64

Originally posted by: kojagorimalik

Heyyy me first ...yipeee ...awesome chappy dyuti...ohh swasan kinda tashan ...uff mardala yaar...the story was beautiful but too short but don't get disheartened at all okkk...keep writing...
Love
Moumita



Dear Moumita, you're a kojagori in the true sense, at least for me. While writing this part, I remembered the scene of Sanskar strangling Ragini, Swara's scolding him, then drunk Sanskar's 'l love you Swara!'
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Will update quickly.This chappy really needed to end here.
Loads of love,
Dyuti
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I appreciate your feedback buddy. 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Dyuti dear...
Sorry could not comment on chapter 7...but chspter 7 n 8 both were fabulous...soo enjoying this pace...lakshya got scolding..yapiee...sanky outrage was awesome...swara did not realise his increasing concern for her...overall amaxing dear...

Talia
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: krishuuu

Dyuti dear...

Sorry could not comment on chapter 7...but chspter 7 n 8 both were fabulous...soo enjoying this pace...lakshya got scolding..yapiee...sanky outrage was awesome...swara did not realise his increasing concern for her...overall amaxing dear...

Talia



Dear Talia,

I'm feeling like a crybaby now 😳 . But in my defence, you ppl commented na? I'm very greedy in that case 😉 . Coming to ff, the situation is tense, chaotic, so everyone is confused.

Thanks for reading my story.

Love,
Dyuti
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Dearest Dyuti,

Sorry for being late.. Just read both chapters and loved it both.. Please don't feel disheartened.. It not that long update makes us not want to read.. I love long updates and I love short update as well.. It just we all bit busy that we couldn't read as soon as you post it.. And even if I make time to read soon.. I still take my sweet time to comment on it.. As my reader friends would know about it.. So I do apologize for the delay in my comments.. But believe me when I say loved both the chapter and really really am invested in this story..


I do know the struggle and hours that go into an update.. So I do appreciate your efforts.. And I really loved the chapters.. All characters are interesting.. And I am really curious to know of what happens next.. I also admire your efforts to try to explain everything as logical course of events.. Even to the point of lux entered with the weapons and all.. I know making it logical is quite hard and so far you did amazing job at it.. Especially the way you explained how Sanskaar did try to stop them from boarding the plane.. He did try to save Swara chief.. I really admire you trying to explain all the facts dear..


Can't wait to read the next update..


Love

Nita
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: NitaReid

Dearest Dyuti,

Sorry for being late.. Just read both chapters and loved it both.. Please don't feel disheartened.. It not that long update makes us not want to read.. I love long updates and I love short update as well.. It just we all bit busy that we couldn't read as soon as you post it.. And even if I make time to read soon.. I still take my sweet time to comment on it.. As my reader friends would know about it.. So I do apologize for the delay in my comments.. But believe me when I say loved both the chapter and really really am invested in this story..


I do know the struggle and hours that go into an update.. So I do appreciate your efforts.. And I really loved the chapters.. All characters are interesting.. And I am really curious to know of what happens next.. I also admire your efforts to try to explain everything as logical course of events.. Even to the point of lux entered with the weapons and all.. I know making it logical is quite hard and so far you did amazing job at it.. Especially the way you explained how Sanskaar did try to stop them from boarding the plane.. He did try to save Swara chief.. I really admire you trying to explain all the facts dear..


Can't wait to read the next update..


Love

Nita



Hi Nita dear!

I was wondering if going into logic would kill the magic? Personally I'm an unromantic practical person. My romantic heart only beats in literature, music, TV and movies. I'm trying hard in balancing b/w emotional turmoil and light vs darkness conflicts. I read your updates too. 10 posts per day rule is makin it so hard to comment. 😡

U ppl are free during weekends? I try to plan updated around them .

With hugs,
Dyuti ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Here I come, with chapter 7. I'm happy as I got some comments and yippee! I'm groupbie now!!!


CHAPTER 7




Ragini noticed Swara coming out of the tent with a grim face. Strange! That Swara looks kind of offended after Laksh's attack. I thought she would be scaredy cat! Ye ladki meri Samajh ki bahar hai!'

Swara approached to Agni who looked relieved to see her in senses. He said," Thank god you are fine. Otherwise we couldn't get a replacement so early. Make sure that-'

Swara didn't let him to complete his words,"I know, I know... You ALL need me to save chief... I'm going to post operative. Tell any of your member to stay with me for help, of course after getting a shower...And...as usual don't allow anyone else there" she chanted ruefully.

" What about Dr Oberoi?"

"His work is done now. No need to trouble him anymore. Let him rest."

Ragini willingly accompanied Swara, After all she had promised Laksh to look after him. She couldn't bear to see him break down...

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Sanskar hit his fist on table in rage. ... He was maddened beyond limits...at circumstances. .. at that filthy Laksh... at painfully truthful Swara... last but not the least... at himself...

The girl who unveiled her myriad of emotions and willfully befriended him last night, that very girl turned in a rock hard idol of ice by his wrongly chosen set of words.
"What were thinking Ha? How could you shout at her like that?She looked so hurt!"He chided himself," What ARE you thinking now, Sanskar? Tu, the great, ruthless, Sanskar Singh Rathore... kab se kisiko feelings ki fikr karne lage? Khas kar ladkiyo ko ki?Ha, kuch galat nahi kiya maine! Ekdam sahi kaha! Mere mission hi mere liye important, koi aur nehi!"

Thus he battled in his head, battering every untoward emotions like remorse, empathy or something those were out of his comprehension.

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On the other hand Swara was fighting two battles... One battle was with angel of the death, here she fought to guard a devil named Nakshatra the chief... Another one was with her inner demons, the unsurpassable sense of being the most pitiful person of the existence.

What has become of her life! The Swara Bose was always immensely loved by family, her otherwise serious mentor cocooned her with unmeasurable affection. The opposite sex coveted for crumbs of her attention, the patients gratefully prayed for her long life...But now those prayers are far away, instead it is remodelled as demand.

"Swara dekh! Kitne log Chahe ki tu jiye!Teri jaan kitni keemti dekh! Kyu? Kisiko replacement nehi milega! kisiko mission adhura reh jayega!" She laughed at herself in her mind," Dr great Swara Bose, who lived all her life on her own accord, never been under anyone's control... Now is a mere pawn, the one that is used by both side.."


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Sanskar was furious. No one, not even him was allowed in postoperative. Agni had relayed him Swara's instructions. His service was not needed at the moment . She wanted him to rest'.

He whispered, the ring wearing hand rested under his chin.
" What the hell Swara? Why you didn't allow me near Chief? What's this avoidance game now?"

His hand now ran through his hair , waiting for answer. But only silence prevailed. He again called, Swara!'

Ragini, make arrangements for warm water. We've to change the dressing every few hours. I'll do the follow up while you get everything ready, then dressing. I hope you are not getting exhausted.We have to stay here till he gains consciousness. I.'Swara told Ragini

Don't act all concerned for me Swara! When you are no longer needed, my hands wouldn't shake a bit to shoot you. Keep this bullsh*t to yourself.'' Ragini tauntingly replied.

Hadd hai!', Sanskar was annoyed. Indirectly Ice queen had declared that...she didn't want to see his face.


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The black wolves were anxious regarding their Chief's condition, since Swara declared looming possibility of his unwanted demise. The anxiousness was not out of fondness... Black wolves don't harbour any warm compassionate feeling in their heart... Excluding one...

Laksh came into Black Wolves' camp when he was 15.He had lost his mom at the age of 5. His dad worked in an underworld gang. One day Laksh was kidnapped by a rival gang and Nakshatra was forced to betray his leader to save his son... His years of loyalty was futile, they had their own gang members after their lives... Black wolves then became their new shelter... Laksh had never forgotten , his dad chose him over his loyalty and destroyed his reputation... So he promised the chief of that time, he would never give his father a chance to do this anymore.

Since then he vowed to make himself his Father's strength, not weakness. Father and son soon shined out in the pack... Father established as an impeccable strategist, son's shooting got better and better. After two years, they were christened properly. Father became Naksh and son, became Laksh.

Their hearts were steeled, but Laksh's armour had a breach, his dad.

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Agni was still slightly tensed. Chief's injury made the team's spirit a bit scattered.It's time to prepare someone to follow Chief's steps in future.

He thought about the ace members of this camp.

Shamsher: Jallad would also be an appropriate name for him. Any thing with a sharp cutting edge is lethal in his hand.Expert in sword fighting... can stab anyone from a considerable amount of distance by throwing knife.

Kal: Player of time... He works on time bombs, frenzy ideas how to detonate them.


Ariel and Salil: Great swimmers and diver. They usually sabotages ships and other water bodies or act as a spy underwater.

Naina and Vikash: They handles the IT related works like background check of the targets, xhacking websites or security systems. They were the one who found about Abhinash and Swara, their seminar, flight info in fact everything.

Nirav and Pawan: they are the best spies... literally works in shadows...

Anuva(Lightning) and Vidyut: Plays with the circuits and gadgets effortlessly... skilled in causing blackouts and short circuit borne accidents in largest malls, convention centres...

Hades, Yudh : The most ruthless of the lot. They are assigned for hostage situations or mass killing, when no survivors are desired.

Apsara and Urvashi are lethal distraction.. epitome of sexual appeal... radiates aura of seduction and allure... They attract targets like fire draws moths and, back stab the preys...

Ragini and Shaptak... The performers in high class bars.They enter as background artists award functions, big events, international shows. They collect A to Z insider informations during rehearsals,and Black wolves make their way.

Laksh and Arjun are the hawk eyes... Never they had failed a bullet hitting bull's eye. They are the best assassins of Black wolves, most reliable soldiers in gun fights.. More to his assassin self Laksh had additional goals... He aspired to reach the same heights as his father...

Laksh could be a good choice for future, Agni thought. But his hot blood and wearing his heart at sleeves could be a problem. He needed to become black wolf first, not grey one...


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Sanskar didn't want to waste his day by sulking and getting terribly annoyed. He decided to wander around the camp. He observed the members, gathered information, clicked pictures with the spy cam of his watch. Prithviraj(DCS) would be very pleased indeed !


Sanskar's momentary satisfaction evaporated as the day light was shown door by twilight..then twilight gracefully left it's space in the sky to the moon and stars. She was not seen out of that room even for a minute, didn't eat anything except some bread. "Doctor Swara Bose is a doctorate in avoidance too. Ice queen! Ziddi!" He brooded grumpily

At midnight Sanskar could hear Ragini happily saying to Laksh," Chief khatre se bahar hai Laksh... He opened his eyes!"

"Ragini, please tell Swara to rest now. Ab to Chief ko bhi hosh aya hai. Agar aisa chalte rahe to kal tak nehi tik payegi woh. Fir kaise kam karegi? Send her to sleep. Rat ko jarurat pare to utha de na." He nearly ordered her, passed a blazing look at Laksh, then left to the kitchen.


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He peeked in the their tent, his annoyance was now shooting sky high. The gall of that girl! Watching from far he knew, she had come out. He himself couldn't eat properly because of restlessness , so he had both their dinner in his hands." Kaha chhupi hai ye ladki? Uff... Ye toh mission se bhi jyada khatarnak nikli! Kaha dhundu aab?'He wondered,'Aur to aur, ye mouna vrat! "

He kept the plates on table and commenced his search. Salil, Arjun and 3 normal members were strolling for patrol. Sanskar asked them Swara's whereabouts.
"Had fight again ,Dr Oberoi?" Arjun jeered," She went that way." He pointed direction.

Sanskar had been walking following his direction, until Swara's petite features came into his vision... his legs got fixed to the ground... He could not stir anymore...



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Edited by iamreader - 8 years ago

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