Dearest Nynu 🤗Late as I am, I have caught up with all parts until Chapter 4 posted and I cannot waste time on the usual apologies for being late and the rest as I am too affected and moved by the reading so have to launch straight in. I hope you will forgive what will be an unashamed session of rambling (yours and others' posts will suffer for it- sorry!) and as I am so behind, I am simply going to comment all at once as if I read or rather watched a poignant and beautiful tale until its interval. It feels like an interval, where I have stopped although I know that given how many parts you have said where the story is, its beyond that. But I like to think this is just their painful interval which they will overcome 😭. Anyway here goes.
The whole concept as is ever with your work, benefits from the gift you have to recount things with simplicity and yet packed with effective power. Before I forget the title itself was so compelling- Amaranthine. I know you said it was the reference to the colour but again, more layers built in there as they did with the story you began to unfold. I was enthralled- at the first meeting, for a few moments I was at risk of getting irritated by the huge boulder Swara had on her shoulder 😕- sorry but am being brutally honest of that momentary first impression which started with "ah a cute Swara with specs and a bluestocking" and then went to mild irrigation at her for the way she was condescendingly expressing herself to Sanskaar but that really made it for me as it then unlocked her deep pain and the false bravado she was using as a facade. 👏 Then I proceeded to fall in love with them. Their quirky interactions- you chose a coffee shop again for their story to find its "world" and I fully applaud- I said it on Sweet Deals that that setting is so tempting for a couple such as this. I liked the reversing of the stereotype of making Swara the maths genius and getting Sanskaar to try to understand romance but making clear he IS a die-hard romantic. It was a tricky balance I felt- for a man that can sometimes descend into effeminate territory and sexist as that sounds, it destroys any romance for me but of course with you that wasn't going to happen 😊 and we have the perfect balance of macho with sensitive- Sanskaar down to a T. Enhanced I should have said but those poetic overtones not only he has but he recognises in his Swara, despite her attempts to mask them so well 😉. And again totally out of sequence but that letter Sanskaar wrote 😭👏❤️.
I have said it before and will do so again- you always manage to find such seemingly small but entirely meaningful scenes at the glorious "falling in love" phase - it really hooks the reader in and the flow is so fluid. What I also always like is how you keep it "real"- despite any necessary drama quotient (without which frankly what is the point of really recounting a fiction of this sort), it's never overdone. There is logical explanation given as on the medical front- you said you weren't intending for that to be too minutely examined but it is more than plausible to me. Without dwelling on it too much, my own mum has a condition very similar - a brain lesion of sorts which is if you like "frozen" in place as medication managed to control it although it still exists- anyway I digress but basically the explanation given seems perfectly reasonable, if tragic in the context of the story.
I adored the way the whole tale devolved with the open frankness with which Sanskaar admitted his connection to Lakshya (digressing again but that made me really fear a Pride & Prejudice MU for a tense moment 😆), and the way they both agreed to the "help win back Kaali Billi- sorry!!! Kavi" and "Convince Swara" missions. As if the first one was going to work- haha! But so nice to think useless Kavita managed to play Cupid in her absence. Also the way you wove in the RagLak angle without making it focal at all was perfect 👏👏- they both came across so well and Ragini gave me such good feels with her concern for Swara and her desire to be selfless and sacrifice her love for her sister- sighhh. I am in the minority but I do like reading those plots where there is a believably positive Ragini so thank you!
You mentioned in your intro how you would build in scenes/ dialogues from the show into your tale and you did that so so well. The whole sequence concerning the proposal in particular was masterful. I loved that it began from a convo where Sanskaar tried to establish what she would love and how her admission was an inadvertent confession too. The sealing of that beautiful moment with those kisses was truly dreamy and lovely. And then you recreated the Gerua sequence for us with such grace and so seamlessly- I was sighing in pleasure throughout.
It was all too good to not be impacted no? 😭. You had already foreshadowed that through the nice touch of how the photographer saw them and the "warning" you put there but when disaster came it still hurt. The whole thing was managed with finesse. All those symbolic moments and gestures, all coming together to allow them those hugely significant moment spent before the operation and I just knew of course that Sanskaar would lose his memory after that. And he did but the whole remembering Kavita and forgetting his real love was such a wrench and you portrayed Swara ever so wonderfully there- you should take an ovation Nynu. Her pain and her anguish was heartbreaking but the way she stood tall and did the right thing (as she saw it), again showing self respect and strength. It made me have so much hope- such a love cannot of course end like that. That "last" conversation by the way was a really nice touch too!
And so we come to that dreaded juncture for every SwaSan fan- angst and separation- each moment of their pain becomes a knife wound for us especially when reading penned by certain authors 😊. But as I said, I have hope, lots of it and so I will wait- I know there will be more downs to read of before the ups return but as that is part of their amazing journey that too will only enhance their tale of love spanning infinity and having no end and lasting beyond forever:)
Sorry about the fractured nature of my comments Nyna but I hope this conveys that despite being late, how much I loved the story.
Love always,
Shru xoxo
Edited by tootiefrootie11 - 8 years ago
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