A SanLak OS: Brothers In Arms

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Viji 🤗

What a treat its recently been to log in amidst hectic days and find so many new pieces from you! Especially after the "drought" period where we were deprived but then these are all the more sweeter I guess for having missed you in action for some months 😃.

I already mentioned the soul connect yet again to you on our scrap exchange. I shouldn't have been surprised when the whole SanLak equation and potential there has been so much on my mind recently and then I saw you had written this 😳.

Really nice OS sis. I am so impressed with the way Laksh has actually shaped up recently that I have almost forgotten how there was that phase where I would have sworn I would NEVER like him. But now, he has really reclaimed himself and I love seeing SanLak scenes any day over the other fun torture they are regaling us with 😡.

Here, I loved how you depicted Laksh. Sanskaar too of course but that was a given for me. As ever, you always imbue your characters with the detailed understanding the show always lacks and even if the character is not in any way a "deep" character (as Laksh ofc isn't) you still infuse the depth a character needs to make a story gel. So it is here. You didn't gloss over any gaps in Laksh's psyche but you showed his strengths. My personal fave characteristic you highlighted was his lack of jealousy. That is indeed a difficult one for someone in the shadow of a brother like Sanskaar and this Laksh took me back to when I had just started developing an interest in the show to see a mad Sanskaar. That scene of Laksh hugging a mad and dirty Sanskaar with real affection and feeling- showed how close they had been and how much he must have hero worshipped him so here I saw that come to life and loved it.

There was then the really deft touch of Laksh's feelings of genuine pride and almost awe of Ragini. Laksh is I feel always a man who can be ... I am scrabbling for the right word.. as its not quite dominated but perhaps overshadowed in some way by a strong woman, but that doesn't have to eclipse him if she is right for him. And meaningful debates about other issues aside, Ragini is certainly Laksh's mate and the qualities she has infill the deficiencies he has and his simplicity is the foil for her more convoluted personality I feel. That came across here and I really liked how proud he was of her!

Then there was ofc Sanskaar. I liked that humour there (even if it was unintended but knowing you am sure it was not 😉) of Sanskaar's surprise that Laksh had figured it out and his sort of unspoken - "oh that makes sense" at being told it was Ragini 😆😆. Then of course Sanskaar's whole thought process and that incredible care and utter deeply devotional love that can never be measured, it's deeper than the oceans. And of course not to forget that link to the Mahabharata and the analogy drawn between the Agyaatvaas and how Sanskaar has linked it to his situation. A very unique take, wouldn't have drawn that parallel myself but gave me fodder to think- analogies are after all individual to each person's thought process and how they apply them to their situation so for me, I liked that more than the actual example if that makes sense? 😃

Another great piece to add to your impressive collection sis 👏👏👏.

Love you,
Shru xoxo
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Viji 🤗

So sorry for unreserving so late I completely forgot that I had yet to comment on this one

Lovely OS Viji. You know how much I love MBH & anything which has mentions of it makes it all the more special for me😳 I am very happy with the way they have been building up the bond between SanLak. It seems much more genuine than the much touted Swaragini nonsense🤢 It feels so nice to see Lakshya stand by Sanskaar in his time of need👏 The boy has come a far way from what he was in the beginning. Btw it was funny how Sanskaar is a little surprised that Lucky of all people found out the truth😆 ...and then Laksh feeling so proud of wifey dearest😉😆


Once again you have written Sanskaar perfectly. He has gone through a lot many things & has come out of them all. That is what makes him what he is today. And I love that man so much!


P.S.: The poem IF is a lovely one, isnt it?😳
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Shru...🤗🤗

So very happy that you're here first! Yay!!

The idea for this OS popped into my head during the wee hours of today morning. 😆 I just had to sit down and type it out. 😊

Truly touched by your laser fast res, even before my PM, dear Sis.
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Hey Lanny 🤗🤗

That was super quick, yaar. 😊 I'm still typing out PM's. 😆

Love ya,

---Viji
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Fabulous os Viji 😊
SanLak bonding is beautifully choreographed by your words in this os. Lakshya has improved as a brother and his bond with Sanskar is real and heart touching too. Thanks again, write more. Take care of your health 😳
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Viji dearest,

In the recent episodes I liked Lakshya (Far more than I usually would have, blinded by my Mr. Toad vision of him) in his title as Sanskar's brother. This guy really was there for his heartbroken bro, although he himself did not know what to do, to bring him some peace, at least he was there, every time Sanskar needed someone in his corner.

It is very sweet to have my thoughts reflected in another's writing, especially yours, who I have come to know share a heavy dose of similarities in tastes with me and is an exceptionally great writer as well...it sort of reassures you that you've not been the only one in the universe to feel something, the thought is quite thrilling.

So coming back to brothers, and their bond explained here. Lakshya is feeling rather put off at the beginning that his co-conspirator from childhood, sketched this big a plan but did not share it with him. In equal measure he is awed at Ragini's very much active intelligence that put to light the secrets his genius brother had been hiding. He is kind of cute there, accepting that he and his wife did a bit of detective work which had always been his cousin and his wife's forte and found out all about Sanskar / Kissan double life.

I'm sure Ragini guessed the truth some minutes in to it, with a canny brain like hers, and the obvious closeness she had to Sanskar's way of plotting, it's not that hard. What I liked here was Lakshya giving out his side of story and waiting his brother to share his secret, with no force from his side...that's very unheard of when it comes to Lakshya right?

He certainly has grown up quite a bit and is less annoying now. Truly, he has the potential of becoming a very reliable Lakshman to his brother.

Talking of Sanskar, as you said, every concept of fiction leaves me in awe at the intensity this man can feel...in any emotion to be honest. His love is, as you said, all consuming. He gives everything to any aspect he is expected to engage in. It's very, moving and at the same time adorable.

Lakshya is surely awed, he asks, more like muses out loud, how can he bear so much pain, as to have her and lose her at the same time, be near and far at the same time...it really must be driving Sanskar nuts right?

Then comes my favorite part. The Agyaan Vaas. For a sure Mahabarata craze like me, this is sure thing like sugar to an ant, calling me out. What a theory...I'm in awe now. It really is a sort of test to the character, where you can have what you want, but not in the way you want it. And you explained it so well. So Sanskar thinks, being Kissan and staying close to Swara see her smile, is his Agyaan Vaas, that was so...heart wrenching. I wonder perhaps he thinks it is his punishment for not saving her at the cliff all those days ago? And he has accepted it, like he always does with so much resolve and strength to hold on to in the maddening double edge this situation has. It's so...so..poignant! Only Sanskar and your writing would make me feel this.

Dare I imagine that this Agyaan vaas also might end in a war...presumably between Sanskar and Mr. Wood? Who most probably is now trying to unmask Kissan as Duryadana wanted to unmask the pandawas?

I think I have typed an easy almost in my crazy love for this one. Should stop now. Love you so much for the sheer brilliance you portray every time while penning something.

Loads of love,
Saku

PS: I think it was this Mahabharata analogy you wanted to talk about with me?
Edited by Sakura24 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Viji so sorry for this most late unres a very big sorry again 🤗


Such a superb os and a unique one also because in this forum i didn't see os on sanlak so congratulate for your first sanlak story 😆

I am very happy with the way they have been building up the bond between SanLak. It seems much more genuine than Swaragini. It feels so nice to see Lakshya stand by Sanskaar in his time of need.

That was very lovely part when lakshya was lost in thought of ragini and i really liking this mature lakshya no childish. I really love their bond in this os. Sanskar feeling was superbly written

One's again you have written it beautifully 👏

Do write more
Thanks for pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey Aparna 🤗 🤗

Thanks for the super fast Res. 😊 Let me know what you thought, after you read.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey Saku my dearest Kid Sis 🤗

So touched to see your super fast Res. Let me know what you thought of this one.

Loads of Love,

---Viji

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