Vajra : An elven tale SwaSan chapter 13 page 52 Updated 21/5/16

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#41

A very intriguing start, Saku. 🤗 🤗

I just loved the references to the setting, poetic and vivid as always with you. The burning, blazing white sun, and the whipping hot breeze, the battlefield filled with sand that has been soaked with blood spilled over centuries; and yet, in one of the protagonists' mind, is captured the image, or is the memory? of snow. Far away from the scorching sand and blazing heat and the metallic smell of blood...

If I were to hazard a guess, the characters, in respective order of introduction, are Swara, Lakshya, Sanskaar and Ragini. You will tell me if am I am right, I hope. 😊

You know that I am a massive LOTR/ Hobbit fan. Its the only thing that trumps my Harry Potter mania. This whole setting reminds me of the Battle Of Helm's Deep, or the Battle of Pellenor Fields; or perhaps the Battle of the 5 Armies. The setting is simply epic, grand and breath taking.

And the title---Vajra. My God. What a wonderful one you have there--- it fascinated me at the word go, for you know how interested I am in Indian Mythos. I just can't wait to see the parallels of the Indra--Vritra story being drawn here.

Loads of Love,

---Viji

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manishasatpathy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#42

hey!! another story i am so excited :), the opening was amazing though i couldn't make heads or tails abt what was going on :D still it seemed beautiful so plzz update soon
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Sanya17

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Posted: 9 years ago

#43

Wow u r back with a bang 😃😃whenever I see any new story of urs I feel really happy and excited happy to know that I will be able to read a new amazing story excited to read a new thrilling and suspencefull story so its time for us to guess the mystery from the clues u will leave for us as a crazy fan of ur stories i know u r really good in building suspense let's see if we will be able to catch the clues n guess the mystery

Vajra from the name n prolouge is it a historical story u told that its a fantasy so is it a historical story? From prologue the description of sand and sword I think it is a historical story but those words could be symbolic too it is not necessary that sword will always have to be real sword sometimes we use the word sword to mean that we know how to attack our enemy its not necessary that the attack will have to be physical a heart without love can be described as dessert too so it could be based on present time too so I can't be sure if its historical or present time or will it be an incomplete love story which is waiting to get completed from centuries

U have a way to attract readers n make them keep guessing just with a prologue

If possible pls pm me when u update, update soon really excited to read more

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1005068

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Posted: 9 years ago

#44

seems very interesting, continue soon😊

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Prabhleen Arora

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Posted: 9 years ago

#45

Interesting Prologue
Loved it
Continue Soon
Thanks for the PM

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Juanita

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Posted: 9 years ago

#46

Awesome prologue saku. Cant wait to read the upcoming updates.

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Shivangee

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Posted: 9 years ago

#47

Sakura Back with SwaSan SS
Then it is time For "Party Hard"🥳
Silent reader of every single piece written by you is here becoz you have asked for our view
Hey plz go Ahead
You are brilliant at everything whenever you came up with new plot 🤗
I am sure you will nail it.
Amazing prologue
Blood relation vs. love
Well I m simply waiting for part 1.

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11
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Dearest Saku

Yayyy- another masterpiece coming our way! As you probably know, I have a HUGE LoTR/ Hobbit obsession. The elves have always been my favourite as soon as I read Elven I was lost in raptures! The Prologue is awesome- I think I have spotted the 4- SwaSan and RagYa respectively and cannot wait to see how this unfolds. The battle between the two brothers as the start with the relevant Queens (in their own ways whilst only one is called that openly) arrayed- all hint at the sort of fantasy fiction that is unashamedly my favourite genre. Cannot wait to read 🤗

Shru my dearest,🤗

It was you with your DK who gave me the idea that something far beyond the lines set by the serial can work well on SwaSan, so the credit of my inspiration here goes to you. Oh, nice to meet you on that note, I'm a huge, lunatic, LOTR/Hobbit nut too.😃 I did put that elven reference in the title in hope of that effort my dear. Oh, yes when you read between the lines the four are recognizable aren't they?😉 I hope I will be able to keep your interest up with the next chapters.

Love you loads,

Saku

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: foresight
Res... Brilliant intro. Will comment more when in front of my comp
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only you know how to weave so much suspence in an intro with prologue yet to come. well you have my interest piqued. i am going to hazard a wild wild guess which knowing you is going to be off the mark. these are swara, laksh, sanskar and ragini in each of the paras...in that order. ragini clearly in love with laksh but he love swara. sanskar misses his part but has now found love in swara. swara herself probably doesnt love either but her curse of love had made them love her and now she had to bear the burden of one of them dying because of that love while one survives. she is the foreteller so she knows what the destiny had planned. yet why do i feel that sanskar could change the destiny. laksh the one supposed to the be the winner already feels he had lost everything. and sanskar who is bearing the burden of what the destiny had foretold had still be able to find something in the shadows of gloom.

amazing intro. waiting for your prologue and your story. write soon.

varjra obviously being sanskar who doesnt give up even in the fate of destiny?

Dearest Sapna,

When you say you're interested, I feel like dancing

You my friend as I have said countless times before are so good with your foresight, and need I say, most of your guesses are pure gold here. Just for the sake of managing suspense I will not tell you which ones.

Gosh! How on earth did you guess that VAJRA can refer to a person? I'm so amazed, so so very amazed!

Thank you so much, your views matter a lot to me. I hope you will keep sharing them here and I hope to keep your interest up with the coming chapters. Thanks again!

Loads of love,

Sakura

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#50

Originally posted by: raaz19
Amazing start to a interesting concept...seriously loved it and must say I wonder what will happen throughout there journey...The start has already told me that it will be a battle to the very end...
Nice my written and the feeling of having lost something can be truly felt...

Thanks for the pm and I look forward to reading more soon..

Till them I shall be waiting...

Raz

Hi Raz,

I'm so happy to read your comment, it gives me so much of courage to continue writing. Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it and I hope to keep your interest up with the next chapters. I hope you will keep sharing your view on them with me.

You're welcome about the PM.

Will update soon, hope to hear more from you.

Love,

Sakura