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Posted: 9 years ago

#61

Originally posted by: harshitaloomba1
Really nice and emotional I was teary eyed when I read this os

Thank you so much for reading and commenting😃

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Posted: 9 years ago

#62

Originally posted by: Tapathi
hai...shonali...😊1stly iam sorry i got ur pm very long back but i was bit busy soo iam replying very lately...it was simply superb...fantastic...👏i want this jail wala track end as soon as possible in this u gave one month and u knw serials ki duniya may one month means how many days...i cant even see kavitha i cant even bear her presence...lite...u presented it is very neatly...very very nice...😊

Hey Tapathi,

I know the jail track is getting on my nerves as well. So I just showed my and a little realistic version of it. No one is able to bear Kavita around. its pukey.

But I am glad you liked my work.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting

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Posted: 9 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: mystery75
awesome
it was so realistic
so logical everyone is unlike in SR
it shows that swara is an actual human who is not just mahhan but can be vulnerable can had enough of having a brave face can be frightened
ans sanskaar should be the one to tend her to support her to nurture her back to her old self
i cuold just feel the emotions of swara and sanskar throughout the OS
and ohh i just love shomi here too❤️

lovely portrayal of swasan's emotions although we all would crave to see something close to this happening in the serial but alas our luck and the cv's of SR😆

Hi girl,

I am glad you found this realistic. That was my goal. Don't even get me started on how much I louuu the current track. its just getting on my nerves now!!

Yup.. Swara is a human and she can also be broken if situation are such. And thats what I wanted to show. When Swara's selfless nature was able to heal Sanskaar, it will be Sanskaar's selfless love that will heal Swara!! I just wanted to show this circle in this OS.

I am glad you were able to connect with all the emotions.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting.

Love,

Shonali

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Posted: 9 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: raaz19
Beautiful

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Posted: 9 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: Kamala05
I read this yesterday night . Oh it was intense . What I liked most is Swara and almost every character behaves like normal human being .It is realistic. Great work Writer Ji 😃

Thank you so much Kamala for reading and commenting. I am so glad you liked it.

Well, if you found all the characters and their emotions realistic, my job is done!! That was my goal. Thank you once again

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Posted: 9 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: pearl.16
Beautiful !! Emotions were beautifully expressed and the bond was elegantly shown... Their understanding was amazing !! Loved it...

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Posted: 9 years ago

#67

Originally posted by: rana.
Lovely..

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Posted: 9 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: anu012
Superb ... beautifully written every moment ... loved it
keep writting

Thank you so much anu for reading and commenting

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Posted: 9 years ago

#69

Originally posted by: Nupur_5
Waitinggg...

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Posted: 9 years ago

#70

Shonaaa mein aage...dhere aaye dhrust aaye...i kept my promise 🤗

Sanskaar and his dupatte waali dost brought back nice memories shame in the show they r all cancelled out...yep sanskaar rqgani have come full circle from where they started teaming up to destroy swara laksh to now teaming up to save her and destroy enemy...i liked hat here u made him cautous in trustingragani, like she had to work for it...intellignt sanskaar wud need to b convinced its not another trap...

U protrayed swara and sanskaar emotions so well...she was in jail and she lost hope for a bit, that feeling of having hope and losing it, having it and losing it again will so emotionally draining and a month in jail it is bound to have an effect and nice to c that and her working through that with sanskaar at her side rather then it having no effect on her...she went through a life changing experience... and he gives her the strenght and courage to carry on...to continue to fight...

I absolutely loved the paragraph about destiny and her doubting hers and whether it wud let her b happy...everything she has gone through her whole life wud lead anyone to question fate,destiny, life, and whereas the show just ignored this aspectvi am glad u touched on it...

Aw shomi trust and faith in sanskaar as strong as ever...they have such a wonderful bond..

Swara and sanskaar can get each other thru anything, they just need each other and it was beautifully written, her breakdown, her tears, her outpouring wud have been cathartic and helped the healing process..and sanskaar the ever ready supportive friend and love...

The cnversation at the end was so cute...