*Zehenaseeb* A SwaSan OS - Page 8

Originally posted by: sarra0

Shonaaa mein aage...dhere aaye dhrust aaye...i kept my promise 🤗

Sanskaar and his dupatte waali dost brought back nice memories shame in the show they r all cancelled out...yep sanskaar rqgani have come full circle from where they started teaming up to destroy swara laksh to now teaming up to save her and destroy enemy...i liked hat here u made him cautous in trustingragani, like she had to work for it...intellignt sanskaar wud need to b convinced its not another trap...

U protrayed swara and sanskaar emotions so well...she was in jail and she lost hope for a bit, that feeling of having hope and losing it, having it and losing it again will so emotionally draining and a month in jail it is bound to have an effect and nice to c that and her working through that with sanskaar at her side rather then it having no effect on her...she went through a life changing experience... and he gives her the strenght and courage to carry on...to continue to fight...

I absolutely loved the paragraph about destiny and her doubting hers and whether it wud let her b happy...everything she has gone through her whole life wud lead anyone to question fate,destiny, life, and whereas the show just ignored this aspectvi am glad u touched on it...

Aw shomi trust and faith in sanskaar as strong as ever...they have such a wonderful bond..

Swara and sanskaar can get each other thru anything, they just need each other and it was beautifully written, her breakdown, her tears, her outpouring wud have been cathartic and helped the healing process..and sanskaar the ever ready supportive friend and love...

The cnversation at the end was so cute...

Originally posted by: .IamShonali.

Haha, Hi Sarra, yup you kept your promise!!!😆

Thank you so much for leaving such an awesome comment!!!

Yup!! You got it right!! It is indeed the full circle scenario!! They had initially joined hands to destroy her and now to save her!! And yup, Sanskaar had to be cautious. Just because Swara keeps trusting Ragini, doesn't mean Sanskaar would do the same. He is more cautious then Swara!!

Swara was traumatized. And it has to happen. You just cannot remain strong in such scenarios. It is bound to break you. As I said in my earlier comments, the life in jail is at two extremes. Either it keeps you the same criminal that you are or just breaks you like no other!!! She had no hopes left. All she trusted was Sanskaar and his love for her!!

Destiny has been cruel to her always. And now she was losing that hope from there!! I think after Swara, it will be Shomi who trust Sanskaar with Swara's life!! She knows he loves her and will go to any extent to keep her happy and safe!!

It was Swara who had healed him earlier!! And now it was Sanskaar's turn to heal her and get his Swara!!

Thank you so much for reading and commenting Sarra!!!

love you loads

Awww...sooo awusm yaar...loved it..LOVED da Way U Showed Sanskaar as a Loving m caring Soul Mate..Swara's Pain was soo Clearly shown..awsum...loved it...

Finally finally finally!!

Yes finally idiot me read this amazing OS which I was literally begging for. I should have been the first one to do so but as always, late lateef me 🤔 Okay firstly, thank you so much for the dedication of this beautiful OS to me & I can't tell you how big of a grin I have on my face currently. I am so so soo glad that you finally decided to put this idea into action & wrote a story over it despite the horrendous track & the way the makers are handling such a sensitive issue. This was absolute perfection girl!

Hey, why did you make Ragini partly responsible for proving Swara's innocence? Okay in the plot it actually makes sense to see Ragini trap Kavita by acting to be in cahoots with her so yeah 😆 But I am glad that in the show it's gonna be SwaSan's show heck yeah 😎 let's move on to my other favorite parts.

Okay Swara's reaction after being declared innocent, so damn REALISTIC. This is how a person who's faced the trauma of being in jail would behave. Her scared reactions over her own people touching her, her flinching at the slightest of touches & sounds, her almost nil excitement at the discussion over her own wedding with her soulmate, one she was sooo desperately waiting for but not anymore because of the personal hell she's faced, OMG my poor poor girl, I felt so bad for her, could actually imagine the trauma she went through. You showed it amazingly, I could actually feel Swara's pain & felt choked at some places.

And then, our brilliant, sensitive, amazingly intuitive when it comes to Swara, Sanskaar ❤️ He's truly the best partner Swara could have ever hoped & prayed for. The way he understands her emotions, fears, apprehensions, it's mindblowing seriously. It's actually true when he says, main tumhe tumse behtar samajhta hoon - He truly does. Nobody gets Swara, the way Sanskaar does, not even Shomi I say. He truly could read her eyes, he read her fears & didn't try to touch her until it was only the two of them & until he felt, she was ready. The way he reacts to her confessions, at the trauma she faced in that hell of a jail, how she was beaten up & thrown around like a toy, seriously along with Sanskaar, even I felt like killing that woman who behaved in such inhumane manner towards her. Her experiences in that one month time period seriously made me feel so much anger towards all those people & made me choke a bit imagining the trauma she went through, Sanskaar obviously felt the pain 100x more & I can so imagine his anger & the way he'd make sure all those people who made HIS Swara suffer so much, will suffer 10x more pain.

That little SwaSan scene where Sanskaar goes to meet her & sees her injured & Swara slowly but determinedly asks him to give up on her & move on and he's baffled at it and cannot believe what she just said- absolute masterpiece! I am sooo craving for a scene like this in the show. Swara would TOTALLY behave like this if the jail stay was extended & Sanskaar would totally react in the same vein, trying to give her all his love and strenght & making her believe in them again, how he'll change destiny if it has to come to that. Pure brilliance this was ❤️ It's gonna stay in my mind for the longest time now!

The way Sanskaar understood that he needs to bring HIS Swara back, he took her to the same place where he built his inner demons, which pushed him to the pits of dark revenge, made him lose the Sanskaar for a long time if not kill him completely & then came this sunshine named Swara Bose in his life, who filled his life with light, happiness & love again, who was successful in bringing the old Sanskaar back which was so well symbolised by the dark space that was filled with lights & candles around <3 The way he assured her of his undying love for her by his subtle touches & soothing words & how she completely melts into his embrace, finally breaking the walls & accepting all her fears in front of him, sharing those horrible experiences she faced in the past one month. This was so poignant, so touching & sooo SwaSan ❤️ That hugging each other tightly, those kisses as if he's literally sharing the pain she's going through, her sleeping in his arms & him sleeping back in hers while thanking almighty for sending this princess in his life only for HIM GAAAHHH my feels here! Magical Shona, absolutely magical Their exchange at the end was so good! Bharosa karti ho? Khudse zyada. Pyaar karti ho? Tumse zyada - OMG WOW! This was I don't have words... They truly are each other's Zehnaseeb ❤️😳

Shomi was awesome here. So much more relatable than the one in the show right now. Loved her 😳

Thank you for writing this brilliant OS Shona 🤗 SO glad that you finally penned it down. Amazingly written 😳

Love,
Kavya 🤗

Dearest Shona...

Originally posted by: Goldie93

Awww...sooo awusm yaar...loved it..LOVED da Way U Showed Sanskaar as a Loving m caring Soul Mate..Swara's Pain was soo Clearly shown..awsum...loved it...

Originally posted by: .Sarcasmazing.

Finally finally finally!!

Yes finally idiot me read this amazing OS which I was literally begging for. I should have been the first one to do so but as always, late lateef me 🤔 Okay firstly, thank you so much for the dedication of this beautiful OS to me & I can't tell you how big of a grin I have on my face currently. I am so so soo glad that you finally decided to put this idea into action & wrote a story over it despite the horrendous track & the way the makers are handling such a sensitive issue. This was absolute perfection girl!

Hey, why did you make Ragini partly responsible for proving Swara's innocence? Okay in the plot it actually makes sense to see Ragini trap Kavita by acting to be in cahoots with her so yeah 😆 But I am glad that in the show it's gonna be SwaSan's show heck yeah 😎 let's move on to my other favorite parts.

Okay Swara's reaction after being declared innocent, so damn REALISTIC. This is how a person who's faced the trauma of being in jail would behave. Her scared reactions over her own people touching her, her flinching at the slightest of touches & sounds, her almost nil excitement at the discussion over her own wedding with her soulmate, one she was sooo desperately waiting for but not anymore because of the personal hell she's faced, OMG my poor poor girl, I felt so bad for her, could actually imagine the trauma she went through. You showed it amazingly, I could actually feel Swara's pain & felt choked at some places.

And then, our brilliant, sensitive, amazingly intuitive when it comes to Swara, Sanskaar ❤️ He's truly the best partner Swara could have ever hoped & prayed for. The way he understands her emotions, fears, apprehensions, it's mindblowing seriously. It's actually true when he says, main tumhe tumse behtar samajhta hoon - He truly does. Nobody gets Swara, the way Sanskaar does, not even Shomi I say. He truly could read her eyes, he read her fears & didn't try to touch her until it was only the two of them & until he felt, she was ready. The way he reacts to her confessions, at the trauma she faced in that hell of a jail, how she was beaten up & thrown around like a toy, seriously along with Sanskaar, even I felt like killing that woman who behaved in such inhumane manner towards her. Her experiences in that one month time period seriously made me feel so much anger towards all those people & made me choke a bit imagining the trauma she went through, Sanskaar obviously felt the pain 100x more & I can so imagine his anger & the way he'd make sure all those people who made HIS Swara suffer so much, will suffer 10x more pain.

That little SwaSan scene where Sanskaar goes to meet her & sees her injured & Swara slowly but determinedly asks him to give up on her & move on and he's baffled at it and cannot believe what she just said- absolute masterpiece! I am sooo craving for a scene like this in the show. Swara would TOTALLY behave like this if the jail stay was extended & Sanskaar would totally react in the same vein, trying to give her all his love and strenght & making her believe in them again, how he'll change destiny if it has to come to that. Pure brilliance this was ❤️ It's gonna stay in my mind for the longest time now!

The way Sanskaar understood that he needs to bring HIS Swara back, he took her to the same place where he built his inner demons, which pushed him to the pits of dark revenge, made him lose the Sanskaar for a long time if not kill him completely & then came this sunshine named Swara Bose in his life, who filled his life with light, happiness & love again, who was successful in bringing the old Sanskaar back which was so well symbolised by the dark space that was filled with lights & candles around <3 The way he assured her of his undying love for her by his subtle touches & soothing words & how she completely melts into his embrace, finally breaking the walls & accepting all her fears in front of him, sharing those horrible experiences she faced in the past one month. This was so poignant, so touching & sooo SwaSan ❤️ That hugging each other tightly, those kisses as if he's literally sharing the pain she's going through, her sleeping in his arms & him sleeping back in hers while thanking almighty for sending this princess in his life only for HIM GAAAHHH my feels here! Magical Shona, absolutely magical Their exchange at the end was so good! Bharosa karti ho? Khudse zyada. Pyaar karti ho? Tumse zyada - OMG WOW! This was I don't have words... They truly are each other's Zehnaseeb ❤️😳

Shomi was awesome here. So much more relatable than the one in the show right now. Loved her 😳

Thank you for writing this brilliant OS Shona 🤗 SO glad that you finally penned it down. Amazingly written 😳

Love,
Kavya 🤗

Originally posted by: coolgal270

Dearest Shona...

I wish i would have read it before, u did actually PM me but i couldnt read it then...and now i am thinking why the heck did i miss it...

Ok, coming to this OS, its absolutely beautiful...the way u have described the characters is amazing...even the small role of ragini and laksh, well defined

I loved the fact that this Sanskar is sceptical initially to trust ragini, i wish it could have been like that in d show...i would ve craved atleast 1 such scene between them wherr sanskar tells ragini that its not easy to trust her again and he is putting his faith in her at last, so not to break his trust again...

Then the way u described sanskar immediately understanding swara's plight and not saying anything in front of anyone else, as if to protect her...he only tells it to shomi, the only person other than sanskar who loves swara unconditionally and will surely understand her condition well ...

I want to hug you for the way you have written the 2 half. He takes her to the place which represented d darkest and greyest of his character...he left that place to enter the light which was shown by his swara...and now he takes her there to give her strength and get his swara back from the darkness that haunts her...wao wao!!

Loved how u showed swara's plight...so relatable and heart touching...

And yes, now that I have read this i can say too that yestderday's epi seems inspired by this..what you have written here, i saw that on screen! Bravo girl!!

Loved swasan convo, the emotions pouring out of them and that soul-deep love...

Can i just say i fell in love with Sanskar & Swara once again after reading your OS.

It is amazing Shona! I am so gonna wait for the next one to come!!

Ps: loved the title... Reminds me if the song from d film hasi to phasi...zehnaseeb, zehnaseeb, tujhe chahun betahasha zehnaseeb... So apt !

Lots of love, sumi

Shonali,
Beautiful OS with some intense and heartwarming emotions. Oh. And loads of logic.! 😛
Your character portrayal was amazing. Absolutely loved Sanskaar.! The whole Swara-jail experience was heart wrenching. I definitely enjoyed her healing process and the ending dialogues! Very well written. :)
Keep writing :)

-V
P.S.: Please PM me for any of your future works? Would really appreciate it. :)

Originally posted by: bwvianna

Shonali,
Beautiful OS with some intense and heartwarming emotions. Oh. And loads of logic.! 😛
Your character portrayal was amazing. Absolutely loved Sanskaar.! The whole Swara-jail experience was heart wrenching. I definitely enjoyed her healing process and the ending dialogues! Very well written. :)
Keep writing :)

-V
P.S.: Please PM me for any of your future works? Would really appreciate it. :)