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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#111

Originally posted by: Meself
Main saari jaan laga doongi,
Main sabko dikha doongi...

COME ON!!!! I CAN DO THIS!!!!😆

Shivi 😆 You have me in stitches with this 😆

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Mallika-E-Zain

@Mallika-E-Zain

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Posted: 9 years ago

#112

Reserved

Unresing

Coming to chapter 9

This was a totally SwaSan chapter. Yayy!! Only and only SwaSan. Poor Swara. How tired she must have been. Mere bechare SwaSan!! Ok, before I start my rant on how bechare my SwaSan are, I'll come back to the topic. That Haveli was so magnificent. Just by reading it I could imagine it and even I felt my jaw drop! (no exaggeration here).

Dude, Sanskaar openly says that he's not gonna harass her dignity in any way and I'm like Yo Sanskaar!! You rock baby<3 That key was amazing. Sanskaar each action is full of planning. Me impressed!

Sanskaar was so carefree with his horse. How droolsome na? Me gonna go mad seriously!! His smile must have fluttered her heart I'm sure. Zyaada ho rha hai? OK, coming back again. Is Swara mad. She was about to escape with the help of a knife!*scoff* She's mad. Poor Sanskaar, how much would it have hurt him! L

Will Swara stop trying to escape. That horse episode was amazing!! I loved it

Finally the emotional ending! Atleast he made her realsie who her real enemy was! That she was safe with him. Shru, by the next update SwaSan must fall for each other. This is not a suggestion but a threat! Lol.. just kidding. But loved the update and please do update soon!

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#113

Originally posted by: sujoyricky
Awesome update shruti 👏 👏
Loved it
Update soon please

Thank you Sujay:). An update by Friday is planned, would love to sooner but work schedule makes it rather difficult at the moment especially with the things I like to cover in each chapter:)

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#114

Originally posted by: PRINCESS_ALISHA
hey sweety

i loved your chapter and the old man too

i fall short of words when it comes to praisig you.

waiting for your next chapter

Love

Alisha

Thank you so much Alisha! Glad your reading and liking this:) Will try to update soon X

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#115

Originally posted by: Red.orchid
Nice update loved it
Loved swara's antics😆

Thank you Sadhana, glad you enjoyed it :) xoxo

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NITI VYAS

@nut-kut-86

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Posted: 9 years ago

#116

Ache se 5 baar padhke bahutt hi socha hua cumnt pg22 pe hai.

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shamina

@Sakkiyah

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Posted: 9 years ago

#117

Nice update

It was a swasan centric update.

Sanskar wanted to find the real traitor. And he had a group.

But in this update, I felt bad for swara. Because she was innocent. But her sister snatch her happiness. She became characterless for family. For a girl, who always wanted her family's happiness it is hard to face such a situation.

In the update a new character is introduced. But he is sincere to his prince.

And the escaping plans of swara failed twice in a day.

But in this update we got a new sanskar. Who really care for his friend. He was worried for her life.

And you beautifully described the journey in the desert. And the palace in the moon light.

Veer, the horse of sanskar was also a important character in this update.

Waiting for your next update

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Sajiie

@Sajiie

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Posted: 9 years ago

#118

Hi Shruti , how r u ? I thought u were busy in ur work as I hardly see u in main forum nowadays ..but now only I knew this dark knight is keeping u busy 😊.

I rarely read the stories in IF as I don't know why most of the times I can't connect with it ..but urs and viji s work is different ..I think I read ur resolved and did leave a comment there too when u were in vacation ..I chanced upon this yesterday only .i read everything in one go .and ended up with neck pain Shruti 😆 it is an amazing piece of work Shruti and left me with wanting more .i really don't have words to express how much I liked ur work set in historical era ..

It's going to a long post and please bear with me ..Read it when u have time ..

The torture Sanskar had to endure was painfull..happy the torment ended when Annapurna came to his rescue ..

The connection swara and Sanskar felt was adorable ..telepathic connection. Immediately he knew she is somebody who should be kept at a distance 😆.he knew she has the capability to foil his plans can make inroad in his heart ...swara was eager to meet him after all the tales she heard about him. Ragini the same but a lot more cunning ..

I don't know why I felt Kavita was no match to Sanskar eventhough u showed only glimpse of her ..she appeared quite childish considering the mature Sanskar ..why oh why he chose her ..looks like I am possessive here for my swasan as nothing appears perfect other than them ..but that childishness saved his life ..Kaveri has a much in depth role to play as I felt she is part of conspiracy ..that made him a traitor in his own country .

I really loved that Sanskar has a friend pawan who stood by him and the time he spent in palace he used it for his planning ..want to see a determined Sanskar who will restore his lost glory and save his country too..u have kept the surprise element fairly intact all through the narration while we will keep guessing to see the actual conspirator behind all this ..

I liked how u kept swara away from Laksh after engagement 😆 By keeping her in company with Sanskar .swara had her doubts regarding him but he was so masterful in keeping it away from her .i am glad that they were able to spent some time as it would help in the long run ..and Sanskar is already too much caring towards her .the way u explained the changing feelings in him was brilliant ..

Ragini carefully weaved all the stories about swara and played the friend part real well with Laksh ..

I loved it when Sanskar was suspicious of ragini and became the knight in shining at our for swara and rescued her from that monster ..and here u surprised me he killed that man who dared to touch her ..wow .he must have known by then she is really imp for him ..

Chapter 7 was brilliant with it twists and turns ..ragini did play a master stroke but he caught on to it at the right time. his decision to take swara with him was sudden and he knew she will die if she stays there ..she was shocked after the events eventhough her spirits were intact .i do hope to see her as a strong character Shruti , one who is perfect match to Prince Sanskar .i hope when situation arises she will show her worth .

She already is in confusion searching for the real prince behind all the facade ..hope she sees the real him sooner as she was perfect in reading his eyes while he saved her .

I loved chapter nine too as it was the first one which was swasan centric and really loved it .the attempts she makes to break free is cute . His horse also have a soft corner for her as horse knows his master really well ..hope he saves pawan too in time .eagerky waiting for the mysteries to unfold .along with progress in Sanskar and swara relation.,

Waiting for the next chapter .no pressure take ur time ..😊

Saji

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dilwali

@dilwali

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Posted: 9 years ago

#119

a long update it was u must hv worked hard on it hats off to u
now coming to dis update i totally loved it n i wanted an entire chapter on their bond n love n i know i ll get more in future n i m luking forward to dat wid excitement n i loved how u portray i was literally imagining all expressions as u wrote. u r such a mind blowinng writer
thanks dear

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Sanya17

@Sanya17

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Posted: 9 years ago

#120

in this prt i wanna mntn veer especially d horse is soo cute 😃 he is so like sanskar kept all shouting jumping scaring bt didnt dropped her in floor as far as i knw horses dont like if sm1 other thn their ownr sits on them bt looks like sanskars horse too likes swara 😉
i felt so bad for swara mentalwashewris n gadodias bhvng like brainles puppet undr raginis spell as expctd
i lvd d end scn swara any1 in her place wd hv tried to run away bt she didnt thought about d danger she will face frm her sister nagini if she goes bckragini bein nagini didnt left any option fr her good dat sanskar politely md her understood dis lvd der intrctn d mnsn dey r stayng its sanskar own right d one he wntd to stay bfr all dis hpnd

i hp pawan is a positive chrctr i dnt wnt him to be ngtv he sounds much more brav n intelligent thn mntlwshwris hp he is ok real criminal is dfntly mor thn 1 prsn its impsbl to do all dis alone
hp u will gt tym to update soon i lv dis story so mch its hrd too wait u knw 😉

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