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Posted: 9 years ago
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Saku Darling, you know my idiosyncrasies too well by now---I need time to greedily read and soak in your chapter, and comment in detail from my lappie. 🤗 🤗 Typing from phone just won't do it!

Love you loads for that dedication, it made my New Year very, very sweet! 2016 sure started on a marvelous note for me.

Rest when I un-res. 😊

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Saku my dear, sweet friend---One again, Thanks for that honor of dedicating this wonderful piece to me, amongst others. I am so very proud of being one of the "Winter Ladies" 🤗 🤗 You know how much I loved the IK/SQ/Winds of Winter saga. So now that we are delicately poised on the cusp between winter and spring, with the thaw well and truly setting in, but the sharp sting of the winter gales still around, this season is just my favorite. 🤗

This first chapter reminded me of the quote by Hal Borland "No winter lasts forever; no spring skips its turn". 😊 I just loved, loved, LOVED, the way you captured the cusp of change, Saku. The warmth and optimism of Sanskaar and Swara coming together; contrasted with the still--bitter feelings of Ragini and Lakshya, and the new Snow Queen/ Maleficent 😉 Vasundhara, and her son, not yet Chandragupta to her Chanakya! 👏 👏

There is something---for want of a better word---very allegorical, almost epic-like, in the feel of your writing. Especially for the Winter land saga. Each para, each sentence imbued with meaning, with a purpose higher than the mere words contained in each line. I love reading between the lines you write, Saku. 😊 I'm always on the lookout for deeper meanings, tantalizing nuggets you try to convey.

In this chapter, I just loved the way you've portrayed Ragini and Lakshya. Vanquished in battle, their minds and hearts have definitely not found equanimity and a resolution yet. The bitterness, and a large degree of spite, are very much in evidence, leading me to fear what malevolence they would visit upon Sanskaar and Swara, the couple for whom we wish nothing but the most balmy of springs!

I so loved this para you used to describe Ragini's frame of mind: "Torn between her desire to fight till she died, and to flee until her feet bled...It was too cold, she could no longer burn in peace". 👏 Brilliant! And that earlier line, about how Sanskaar's wrath was burning her, not with warmth, but with utter coldness, was a masterstroke.

Coming to Laksya---I know I should feel a fair degree of contempt for him, and I do. But I can, in an odd way, also understand, though not empathize, why he sent that wedding invite card to Ragini. Misery loves company, after all, isn't it? So astute of you, to have captured that schadenfreude, "The more pain you give others, the less it burns your own self". Chilling. Truly a Frost Knight!

The whole part about "Lotuses offered in Love" was so deeply moving, Saku. Swara insisting that Durga Prasad do her kanyadaan, not her sorry waste of a biological father/ (whom I consider no more than sperm donor to Shomi! 😛), was spot on. Those lines about how the lotus belongs not to the mud it is planted in, but rather to the water which raises it to the sun! 👏 Love you for that splendid imagery.

And that whole wedding sequence of SwaSan's---in the mingling of the flames and wind---was so poetic, so profound. I almost felt I was there, watching them take the saptapadi, solemnizing their bond. Several sentences here I found absolutely, tremendously moving. That one about how the best way to safeguard a dream, was to entrust it to a man who never dreamed, for who better to value it than he?

The way you detailed Swara's and Sanskaar's thoughts during the ceremony, their memories, so intertwined with each other, was fabulous. Sanskaar's thought, in particular, was so deeply touching---about how he had refused her years ago, thinking that she came with a crown he despised, not realizing how she was so very much a part of his very soul, with or without that crown. How he had unnecessarily feared the dynamics, that were never between them!

And Swara's thoughts---about how they were always meant to be, to be always together, hand in hand, to complete each other---if only they had not been so unseeing before, in their callow selves.

I just loved how even after the vows were taken, Sanskaar didn't let go of Swara's hand. The reason was so wonderful---the vows were only a reiteration after all, they had already made those promises of fidelity, constancy and love to each other long, long ago, though they had not known it then.

I guess I would go on and on Saku. 🤗 I just L.O.V.E.D your descriptive genius in this chapter. Can't wait to see what storm Vasundara is planning to unleash, to capture Chandra's empire as well---to make Ram (Sanskaar?) fight with Lakshman (Lucky...), and engineer a match for her son Adi, that will let her ride a Trojan horse right into her enemy's fortifications! Uttara, I presume, is the Queen she has in mind? Unless she is planning to make Adi marry Ragini (post her divorce from Lakshya)...but I don't think so. Would be Uttara.

Can I also just say, that this chapter has made me dislike Dadi and Shekar even more. 😆 Man, that brainless, spineless man is also shameless. He's just got proof as to what crimes one of his daughters committed against the other; has been confronted with incontrovertible evidence of her perfidy, and of his own blind support that enabled it. But still, all he can think of, is how Ragini can still plot and scheme to ensure that he does not suffer for her missteps! 🤢 With a father like this...

I am eagerly awaiting Chapter 2 now. Though I am extremely apprehensive of the Vasundara--Adi--Shekar--Ragini---Lakshya axis. May the sunshine and balmy breezes of spring vanquish the lingering chill of winter!

Loads of Love

----Viji

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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OMG Saku!!!
Happy New Year, Love! 🤗
So spring is Finally here! I cannot tell you how elated I was when I opened my PM box and saw 'Frost Knight' there! And OMG thanks so much for the dedication, it made my day and possible my whole year too! Yeah that's how much I love the WinterLand! This is the best NY gift! ❤️ I'm so excited I cant even express it properly
Will come read and un-res later tonight!


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Oh Saku! Before I start, Thank You so much once again for the dedication. Being one of your "Winter Ladies" is such a privilege and joy to me! 😳
Now for the first part, This was so beautiful, every part of it was so enchanting! You're so good with words, it all flowed seamlessly as One and carried me into this enchanting story you've woven! ❤️
Ragini and Laksh! The way you described them, their pain and feelings, Ragini's especially 👏, And Laksh empathizes with her somewhere, that was slightly shocking yet made a lot of sense. 👏 I never liked Laksh-Ragini much, could never relate to them but you made me feel for them, I could feel what they are in this part 👏
And who is this Vasundara? 😲 Chandaraj's sister? She has some strange power to her character, something intimidating yet regal. Looking forward to see how she shapes up and what her plans for Sanskaar are.
And Shekhar and Dadi disgust me, especially Shekhar! No comments on these two!
And now for my favorite part - SwaSan's wedding . I have no words, AT ALL. It is so beautifully written...so rich of emotions and so poignant! And the way you portrayed everyone's emotions..AHH! I've become a fan of yours all over again! ❤️ Loved the DP-Swara part AND that line talking about the lotus still belonging to the water but now at the feet of the deity for the next seven lives, the deity being Sanskaar, AH this line was So SO good, I had this strange giddy feeling when I read it! This has to be my most favorite line ❤️

And Sanskaar-Swara's thoughts during the wedding ceremony!
Wow, those lines from the previous parts..each line is so dear to me..each one is so significant to their story..it was so blissful to walk down memory lane again and it felt SO GOOD to have little pieces of IK, The Winds & SQ in this..just made it more beautiful to me! And the dialogues that caught on with me are 'Melt me' and when Sanskaar rejects Swara in The Winds. These two are major turning points in their story and Gosh they've come a really long way! I cant tell you how emotional and nostalgic these made me, I love you for this! 🤗
And the end, ah the past and the hopefully the last remnants of ice between them has melted away forever, paving way for a new beginning for them! You've written it so well I could see it all happening before my eyes and I almost felt as if i was there. ❤️
Looking forward to read more on the beautiful moments of this new Sanskaar-Swara from Springs! ❤️
Oh I loved this so much Saku, this is going to be one great journey! Eagerly waiting for your next part. do update soon! 😳


Love,
Yukthi.

Edited by .FairyDust. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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HAPPY NEW YEAR Shakura :) Wish you a prosperous year ahead with full of love, health-wealth & happiness.
What a new year gift you gave... Since your last SS I was waiting for your new story. Finally got it that too on a new year. Thank you for this :)
Your Ice King is one of my favorite & I'm glad that you are back with its sequel.
Lil busy that's why short comment Bt couldn't stop myself from reading your new Elixir (Your writing is Elixir for me) as soon as possible.
Once again, HAPPY NEW YEAR.
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Wow it was written so perfectly you are an amazing writer sakura and the way you have presented everyones emotions it is so heart touching well done looking forward for the next part of your winter tale
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Posted: 9 years ago
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When I came to the forum I saw your SS, it was like a New Year gift! Beautiful start!

Happy New Year dear,
May this year bring you immense joy and prosperity!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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sorry about the delay in the reply...started writing it them ran away to see the show. back now.
What a great way to start the new year! with a saku story. 🤗 And am so so touched by your dedication. Love you dearie 🤗 🤗 🤗
I am really glad you came back with the planned part 3!

You have such a way with words. I cannot express how beautifully you introduced Ragini and what she thought might be going on with Laksh. If that wasnt enough, I loved that entire kanya daan. The lotus analogy was wonderful, but your words sort of also brought a softness and gentle love to it.

it was interesting to see Laksh understanding ragini's position even as he was experiencing the repulsion towards warmth and engulfing the cold. may be there is chance for him to thaw along with ragini. after all, the ice king and queen needed each other to melt the cold in their hearts, they couldnt have done it alone. so the third amigo in the group, the one never meant to be the king, always a knight has now caught the frost himself.

Wow! so chandra's sister is vasudhara ... rising with knight of her own to counter her nephew...who i assume chandra had now left his wealth to. who are they targeting, uttara? she is going to use laksh to fight sanskar...gosh!

what a beautiful walk down the memory lane and soulful wedding. i hope there never comes a time when he does need to lay down his life for her. i am looking forward to your story unfold as always. i hope that now that they have realised they were always meant to be, they fight all the knights together and come out of it even stronger and more bonded together.




Edited by foresight - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: swa291

was waiting for your story dear

Thank you dear😊
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Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

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Saku Darling, you know my idiosyncrasies too well by now---I need time to greedily read and soak in your chapter, and comment in detail from my lappie. 🤗 🤗 Typing from phone just won't do it!

Love you loads for that dedication, it made my New Year very, very sweet! 2016 sure started on a marvelous note for me.

Rest when I un-res. 😊

Ha ha, the update is all yours Viji darling, you can read it as much as you want.
🤗
Waiting for your comment and I'm glad I could make your start of new year better😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: .FairyDust.

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OMG Saku!!!
Happy New Year, Love! 🤗
So spring is Finally here! I cannot tell you how elated I was when I opened my PM box and saw 'Frost Knight' there! And OMG thanks so much for the dedication, it made my day and possible my whole year too! Yeah that's how much I love the Winterland! This is the best NY gift! ❤️ I'm so excited I cant even express it properly
Will come read and un-res later tonight!


Happy new year Yukthi🤗
I can imagine the feeling dear, You're welcome, it was a totally deserved dedication, I couldn't disregard your love for the mix of spring and winter. Thank you so much, I am waiting to hear your thoughts on the first part😊

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nupur_5

HAPPY NEW YEAR Shakura :) Wish you a prosperous year ahead with full of love, health-wealth & happiness.

What a new year gift you gave... Since your last SS I was waiting for your new story. Finally got it that too on a new year. Thank you for this :)
Your Ice King is one of my favorite & I'm glad that you are back with its sequel.
Lil busy that's why short comment Bt couldn't stop myself from reading your new Elixir (Your writing is Elixir for me) as soon as possible.
Once again, HAPPY NEW YEAR.

Thanks Nupur, Happy new year to you and your family too😊
You're welcome dear, I'm glad you liked it😊

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