Rectified- Part 2, The Restitution Series - Page 6

Originally posted by: maaneetfan

Shruti...i am sooo glad u took out time frm your holiday to write the 2nd part to your awesome 4S...i am going to call it ur 4 shot coz m hoping n hoping fr getting full LONG beautiful 4 parts to this lovely swasan story.

If part 1 was beautiful then part 2 is no less...the depth with which u hv described sanskaar's emotional trauma and self loathing at his actions especially during his bonding time with Laksh is so powerful. ...i could literally feel his pain and couldn't even feel angry at him...just sad tht these young lovers were suffering soo much at the hands of these unknown enemies.

I like the way u hv kept it all a suspense...as to who the real perpetrators are...i guess you want to develop it simultaneously and in sync with the show

And the swara sanskaar meeting ... wowww ... it was a lovely scene full of raw passion and emotion and so much suppressed love of Sanskaar...whereas swara since she has realised her love cant hide it frm him under any circumstance...i can imagine how much joy it brings to sanskaar all the time and yet the pain tht he must keep her away even tho they now hv all the right reasons to be together. ...and also his realisation finally tht earlier it had been just a lapse and she truly trusts him fully n completely tht makes him share his full knowledge with her.

I would also like to say tht SanLak scene with the brothers initial verbal sparring and subsequent bonding was quite heartwarming and i so would like to see tht happening in the show too...sigh!!

Shruti...u havr spoiled me even fr the show...nowadays i just survive on ff's like urs and barring a few scenes hv stopped watching the show...i only stalk this forum and pounce on each new ff written. ... especially wait fr something written by u. . Thts how crazy i am!!

Still wishing u a beautiful happy enjoyable vacation and i knw swasan wont keep u away frm us too long so now EAGERLY AWAITING parts 3 and 4!!!

Love Tas

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Tas sweetie 🤗

I was waiting to hear your take; you were partly responsible for the continuation after all:). You seriously made my X-mas special with your lovely words! Thank you sooo much for liking this and giving me such a wonderful response. Our hearts truly break for SwaSan don't they?! 😭 So much pathos and constant obstacles. When will we get happy times we can enjoy?! 😭

Oh about the suspense- well, no I don't intend to rely on the show track and without being insulting, it's way too erratic and illogical for me. I know what I want to do with the villains here, and in fact the vague plan was to reveal that here but the part was too long as I wanted to develop the changed SanLak equation and then ensure Sanskaar made sure Swara didn't collapse from the repeated traumas. As you know, I can't rush the scenes through so it was too long and thus that has to come in the next part:). Just hope I can do justice to it.

So glad you like the SwaSan scene 😳. They both are really caught in a vicious web and only by relying on each other and their love can they get through I think so that's what I wanted to try to do. Relieved it seems to have been well received.

Your comments are so approached and am both embarrassed but seriously chuffed 😳, thanks so much! Thanks for the well wishes, I'll try and update soon, you know how obsessed I am!

Lots of love xoxo

Originally posted by: Sree...

Res

Unreserved

Firstly, I'm so glad you decided to write a continuation to your OS. Although, you didn';t leave us hanging, i did feel there was so much that needed to be dealt including Ragini's defeat and SwaSan reconciliation.

Coming to the OS itself. Wow Di. You outdo yourself every time and I love reading your pieces.

Beginning with your description of Sanskar's feeling of hurt, and helplessness was so touching. The way he spend so much time outside, and then coming back to the Maheshwari House, I didn't feel like calling it a home, and avoiding their room altogether was beautifully portrayed.

I loved the SanLak conversation. Although I personally don't favour Laksh as a character because of the lack of depth and understanding in the way the CV's have scripted it, SanLak is one place where i will wholeheartedly welcome him. And since Laksh has become a SwaSan shipper i must say he has gained some respect from me. Haha drunk Laksh is sensible laksh, I like that. There conversation and later plotting was wonderful.

i know the hero of your OS series was initially Sanskar, but I must say, Swara stole the limelight in this one. I loved your portrayal of her sadness and realisation. And how the sight of sanskar itself is enough to put life and soul back into her.

I loved their confrontation, was needed and i think that confrontation is what fuelled the later passion into them. The way Sanskar's resistance starts to crack and then finally breaking till they aare consumed by the overcoming love was so beautifully expressed that I could imagine it in front of my eyes. Wow. I'm so glad that they cleared the misunderstandings and now Sanskar has the support of both his childhood friend and love of his life. I'm pretty sure he is invincible now.

Can't wait for the next part.

Wishing you and your family a Merry Christmas.

XOXO
Sree

Originally posted by: medhasankar

Shrutu🤗

oh and an extra 🤗🤗--because I missed you so much😭.

I have not yet read the first part I am afraid--its christmas eve--and I have an off-day tomorrow..so I am totally online😃

Been watching the swasan scenes..the departure made me cry.😭

Coming to this----

wow Laksh😆..he was pretending to be inebriated..just so he could eavesdrop😉...isse kehte hain--where elephants and horses cannot do anything..a mosquito is sometimes enough😆

The brothers ka convo😃---its wonderful. and all in hindi.😳

The way Sanskaar rushed to see her..you know it reminded me of a quote from sound of music sis----

where the baroness is telling maria"" there is nothing more irresistable to a man than a woman who is in love with him""

the helpless longing..the bitter separation when both the hearts are so bruised...and the way they succumb to the fact that they are no longer happy without each other...its your forte after all.

Love ya sis---

Happiest new year to you..and a very merry christmas😃

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

Nice! 👍🏼

Originally posted by: Miss-swasan

Oh my goodness that was a very intense yet very emotional swasan story

It was perfect as ever

Wait just a question was the "moth drawn to a flame" a SHAWN MENDES quote from his song stitches because if it is than i love you even more yaar

It's perfect

Originally posted by: indrani7495

First of all thankew so much for the pm!!

it was an amazing read...loved the san-lak convo...finally laksh turning positive and understanding things!!

But the d best part was swasan faceoff...swara getting angry...poor girl she couldnot take the indifference nemre!!! :'( Love d way u potray emotions so well!! Eagerly waiting for the next parts!!🤗

Originally posted by: --Anna--

--Unreserved--

Shru! 🤗

Absolutely hate working on Christmas, so I am doing the best thing that is there for me to do, comment on your brilliant TS! 😉 I have already told you how I feel about this Series but here is a long detailed comment. 😛😆

I loved 'Resolved - Part 1' of this series and Rectified - Part 2 is just as brilliant if not more. So part 1 made me cry and I had written to you that if you are making me emotional, you are doing a fabulous job! 👏👏 This one made me smile in the first half and emotional in the second so this too was brilliant work! 👏⭐️

I love the quotes - they are very apt. I actually have started keeping a word document, keeping the quotes that I read in your, Vijis and Saku's works. They are phenomenal. Infact my sister has also started hearing about your works lately. 😆

I loved the SanLak scene. When I started reading it, I remembered one of the discussions on Viji's stories about Laksh comparing himself with Sanskaar and I wondered if he was still being the jerk and taunting Sanskaar about his indifference but you surprised me. A drunk Laksh, especially a reformed one, makes me super happy. So I loved when Laksh gave Sanskaar the much needed push to think about Swara and his behaviour with her. I also like how Sanskaar was initially cautious and tested the waters before divulging anything at all to Laksh. Well described. 👏👏 I love SanLak together and I see it growing soon.

I think most of us want Shomi to call Sanskaar and make her meet Swara. I was floating the same idea around the group yesterday that maybe Swara stops eating and stuff and Sanskaar can go meet her and feed her and I now realise subconsciously, I was quoting your OS. 😆 See the impact? 😛 So I loved the SwaSan scene here and I would love to see a Swara who would for a change NOT concentrate on MM people and only miss Sanskaar and her life with him. Also, loved their conversation, the part where Swara asks him that why she cannot be his strength instead of being his weakness is my favourite. I think Lann and I are on the same page here, even if Sanskaar is acting, he needs to not think of Swara as his weakness but confide in her because she is his strength. So fingers crossed for that. Love the passion with which Swara loves in this part - because I still want to see that in the show. Sanskaar's suppressed love and his feelings, very well described. I could imagine Varun's expressions of the second back hug scene when he met Swara. 😳

Loved the kiss. Love Love Loved it!! 😳😳😳 I know this is not probable in the show, but reading it being described so beautifully, is enough. 😉

Enough said about how beautiful this part is! I am hoping there is a part 3 to follow too? 😉

Sorry for the delay in response - I am super busy, super lazy and its super cold here. 🥱

Love

Anna