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Posted: 9 years ago

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Res 😊

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Shru, first of all big 🤗 🤗 for that dedication. I was after you to write more, since I badly need solace from the not-so-thrilling track we're being shown in the serial. 😊

You know from our discussions how upset I am with Swara being literally thown out of Maheshwari house, with her signature being obtained on those blasted divorce papers with stratagem. The agony both Sanskaar and Swara are undergoing is terrible to see-- all the more so since they are not clearly showing us why Sanskaar is letting this happen. I truly believe it is not just disbelief whether Swara truly loves him or not---that might be a part of his insecurity, in not knowing how much she really values him, but there has to be something more.

And what I really liked in this series, is that you are giving us that reason, that motive for Sanskaar. I would still much rather have them battle Ragini together, as we had discussed the other day, but if Sanskaar is getting Swara out to keep her safe, since any harm to her would literally annihilate him, well, that works too. 😃 😉

The "Shru brand" of intensity was there in this one, too. 😊 I've got used to expecting this forceful, passionate writing from you, as I never tire telling you, the emotions literally jump out to me from the screen!

Everything was so well portrayed: Swara's agony, her sheer desolation at being apart from Sanskaar; Sanskaar's hurt at being separated from her, the memory of her dejected face literally tearing his insides to shreds. And yes, his rage and fury against Ragini, his resolve to make her pay, to find out who else has been helping her in this conniving. That was Sanskaar all the way--the master strategist!

Shru, I have to hand it to you on the SanLak convo--you actually made me feel a weak kind of liking, or at least, a temporary suspension of my dislike for Lakshya. You know well how much I love to hate the guy, so its your writing that made me feel that way. 😉 I can't promise to not revert back to my usual estimation of him, though! 😆

Loved Shomi's deep concern for Swara here--and she's right, there's only so much even the strongest person can take before being shattered irrevocably. Loved her conversation with Sanskaar---where she says, she knows he's doing this with some objective in mind; but what's the point if he loses Swara irretrievably? The fact that she's taken such an emotional hit, her physical health is in question, was, I think, a massive blow to Sanskaar.

The SwaSan convo was amazing. "Shru intense" 😉 as always. The way Swara asks him if he's come to take her back, and when he says that's not possible, the mix of anger and disappointment with which she speaks to him, was awesome. I particularly loved the dialogue asking him if he's just come to enquire after her health, is he planning to be her nurse? 😆 And the "tumhe kya faraq padega" made me all tingly, reminding me of Arnav--Khushi's epic "aapko kya faraq padta hai"

And well, our Golden couple convey their feelings to each other in the best possible way. Isn't there a quote that a kiss is worth a thousand words? No? Well, then let's invent that quote, shall we? 😆 😳

What I really liked, was Swara's unconditional reposing of trust in Sanskaar, accepting that he has a plan, and not even insisting that he share everything with her. She just says, that she would like to become his strength, not his weakness, and if he feels she could support him, stand with him in any way, she would want to do so. I think that would have reassured Sanskaar tremendously, that she trusts him implicitly now; and that she is "Sanskaar driven", no longer "mission driven". 😆

Looking forward to Part 3. Will that be Realization? The Restitution series has a nice ring to it BTW. Resolved---Rectified---? ----?. Do let me know. 😊

Loads of Love

----Viji

Vij my love 🤗 x 10

The dedication to you guys is entirely deserved, honestly some of you keep me going. Mmmwah.

We are all joint sufferers in the current rubbish being shown which literally yo-yos all over the place. I think the next one I write might be totally off show script as it is so tiring to reconcile all that they mess up .

The whole separation track is heartbreaking; it actually personally pains me beyond the level a show should for a variety of reasons and the torture and humiliation being inflicted on Swara is truly too much to bear. I now need to see it cleared that Sanskaar is acting and give us hope, let alone Swara. I fear it otherwise kills the essence of what SwaSan are.

I am so glad this works for you, it's my humble way to try to make sense of what could potentially be the reason(s) and I hope in the coming part the plot will become clearer and be something readers can relate to and be realistic at the same time. There is a lot to cover as there is too many loose ends on the show and you know how I have a lawyer's dislike of lack of logic! Yes, Sanskaar has his reasons for trying to keep Swara away and the chief of those is for her own good, as she does have the knack for getting in harm's way each time. I am not sure he can entirely prevent her 😆.

It made me truly glad to read how you felt in reading this. I am humbled that a writer of your caliber finds my writing worthy of such comments 😳. As for intensity- ah well, I guess it is something that sort of innately comes when you pour your heart out and that in itself comes from the way you see the characters before you.

SanLak 😆. You need not promise- heck, even I cannot promise not to revert to my dislike of him after writing this series. I just felt that enough was enough. SwaSan have wayyy too much negativity and if we have a new villain thrown in the mix too, I could not bear to have a negative Lakshya too. Sanskaar deserves to be cut some slack, especially as I can no longer make use of Durga Prasad as the staunchest of SwaSan allies. I hope I have made the Lakshya angle realistic. I tried to show that it was not a magical "serial world" transformation overnight. He is battling his own demons and no matter how flawed, he should be able to see that Swara has suffered enough, a lot at his own hands, so I wanted to give him the opportunity to do something useful in that sense. I was not a regular watcher of the show before Sanskaar but Lakshya whilst insipid, was not evil, so this felt like it could work. I also deliberately worked in that the current partnership is born to fight a common enemy and still remains to be tested to see if it will break again.

I am so impressed with Shomi at the moment and have been thinking for days to pass on Durga Prasad's previous mantle to her. I know some others like Shruti (Lannister), Anna and Nitzy also feel that something needs to be done to make Sanskaar understand that he needs to throw Swara some lifeline, and who else can help at this point but Shomi!

Really thrilled you liked the SwaSan confrontation/ aftermath scene 😳. When we were sending scraps, you know I was working on it and it took me even longer than I thought in the end! I literally felt drained after. I was an ArShi fan too 😃. I like that invented quote- if it works for a picture a kiss has to be more powerful?! 😉

I so wanted Swara to actually prove her words of trust and I have to try to develop that in the coming part too. Shruti (Lannister) and I had that convo re wanting to see a Swara that is Sanskaar's strength not weakness so without making her the "do-er" of things like in the show, I felt she could help by simply being there for him and supporting him?

Aha- part 3- hmm, the idea is to title that Recompensed and if there is a Part 4 (seems likely even if an epilogue!) to term that Rewarded! I will explain further in the intro to those parts but there will be a layered meaning behind the titles 😃.

I keep saying it but am was so thrilled with these lovely comments like always, means a huge lot to me! Love you loads xoxo

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 9 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Hey! 🤗
This is such a nice comment and its brevity doesn't detract in any way from how happy it made me feel! So glad you have read the other work too and thanks so much for your kindness and support! You might have told me your name before but I cannot recall it, would you mind sharing so I can addres your properly when replying? 😳

You can call me Nyna!

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

You can call me Nyna!

Great to "meet" you Nyna! Hope to interact more:)

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#45

Shru...😊

Sorry for the late comment dear, I seriously wanted to write something lengthy and worthwhile so I had to write it in peace...which I found just now, with fifteen minutes to midnight

Okay, I wonder whether you have a vocabulary or an armoury...such powerful words you have. They leave mark upon the soul of the reader. And the intensity...pain...so deeply heart felt.⭐️

Last time, when I was commenting on Resolved I told you how I see Sanskar behaving exactly like this and how powerfully you conveyed his love and pain to me...now I have to say, I felt the same thing for Swara here.😊

Sanskar's love was very manly and strong and intensified...like roaring flames... Swara's love is much milder and warmer and deeper...ocean like deep...so womanly and so heartfelt. When she loves she loves with all she has...that's why she doesn't love or confess easily. Her love is too valuable...too sacred. Just so...overwhelming. Her love is her life...it was so, beautifully portrayed.⭐️⭐️

Sanskar's concern..another gem here. He had do come, no matter what his plans what his strategy was...he had to bow down. She would come first always... Their interaction...pure gold again! Too good that I don't have the perfect word for it...but I just felt the same level of relief Swara might have when he stood in her room. The golden moment!😳

Lakshya...well I can hardly trust him in the show, but he seems very human here. I feel like trusting him despite my better judgement. I just hope I won't be eating my words on this...because when it comes to Lakshya I love to hate him.

Can't wait for the third part. I know you must be busy so won't irk you by saying continue soon. I would say...I'd be waiting instead!😳😳

Loads of love🤗

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: Sakura24
Shru...😊

Sorry for the late comment dear, I seriously wanted to write something lengthy and worthwhile so I had to write it in peace...which I found just now, with fifteen minutes to midnight

Okay, I wonder whether you have a vocabulary or an armoury...such powerful words you have. They leave mark upon the soul of the reader. And the intensity...pain...so deeply heart felt.⭐️

Last time, when I was commenting on Resolved I told you how I see Sanskar behaving exactly like this and how powerfully you conveyed his love and pain to me...now I have to say, I felt the same thing for Swara here.😊

Sanskar's love was very manly and strong and intensified...like roaring flames... Swara's love is much milder and warmer and deeper...ocean like deep...so womanly and so heartfelt. When she loves she loves with all she has...that's why she doesn't love or confess easily. Her love is too valuable...too sacred. Just so...overwhelming. Her love is her life...it was so, beautifully portrayed.⭐️⭐️

Sanskar's concern..another gem here. He had do come, no matter what his plans what his strategy was...he had to bow down. She would come first always... Their interaction...pure gold again! Too good that I don't have the perfect word for it...but I just felt the same level of relief Swara might have when he stood in her room. The golden moment!😳

Lakshya...well I can hardly trust him in the show, but he seems very human here. I feel like trusting him despite my better judgement. I just hope I won't be eating my words on this...because when it comes to Lakshya I love to hate him.

Can't wait for the third part. I know you must be busy so won't irk you by saying continue soon. I would say...I'd be waiting instead!😳😳

Loads of love🤗

Saku dear...sorry to butt in...but as regards Lakshya...I told Shru the exact same thing 😆 that I love to hate him, and how only in this piece, I kind of suspended my dislike for him. 😆 But I can't promise to continue to feel this way...I can already feel the dislike returning. 😉

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Saku dear...sorry to butt in...but as regards Lakshya...I told Shru the exact same thing 😆 that I love to hate him, and how only in this piece, I kind of suspended my dislike for him. 😆 But I can't promise to continue to feel this way...I can already feel the dislike returning. 😉

Viji yaar I was thinking about you when I wrote this... 🤗

How you me and Lakshya's hate triangle has shaped up and how both of us can't give up on hating him😆 True my dislike has already returned even before Shru replied to my changed emotions 😆

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ZAINAB

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Posted: 9 years ago

#48

Oh my goodness that was a very intense yet very emotional swasan story

It was perfect as ever

Wait just a question was the "moth drawn to a flame" a SHAWN MENDES quote from his song stitches because if it is than i love you even more yaar

It's perfect

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: The.Lannister
hamare ghar ke sab mardo mein kuch ajeeb khoobiya hai 🤣 x 10 Shru that sounds so wrong 🤣

maybe laksh should drink more often, he manages to talk sense when he is drunk😲 iske saath sab kuch aisa ulta kyun hai😆 Laksh should wear a dhoti & dance to " chalak chalak" from devdas...anyways he is in devdas's town 🤣

Smart boy Sunny😎 testing Laksh before trusting him👏 But doesnt he realize his increasing bhaichara with Laksh will warn Ragini that something is cooking between the two of them😕

What is AA's name Shru?😉

Excellent confrontation between SwaSan. Shomi really needs to call him or the mule will never come on his ownHe really needs to understand that Swara needs some sort of assurance. And after reading this part I want him to convey everything to her via a kiss (I know thats almost impossible in a hindi show, but well...). nothing could speak better than a perfect kiss which soothes & calms them both even while making them burn for more.

P.S.:Tell me something. How do you & Viji come up with such perfect quotes everywhere? Do you have it like sorted under various labels? I know almost half the quotes you people use but I cannot recollect them when I need to use them

Shruti 🤗

😆 Trust you to find the accidental humour first! Sometimes I can't straightaway tell whether you like the piece or not, the suspense has to be broken by reading the full thing 😆. But seriously don't you think they all have serious khoobiyan in the most sarcastic sense possible, even Sanskaar in his own way?! 😆

It was a struggle to make Lakshya talk sense and do something useful! You don't know how much thinking this took! Omg! I am rofl at the thought of Lakshya Ji as devdas- a character that I totslly detest and so see the same self pitying, dissipatory tendencies in both 👏

I think Sanskaar will be careful not to let pyaari bhabhi/ behena cotton on to the plan, hence the meeting took place in the "man cave" 😉.

I'm thinking of AA Aunty's name since yesterday. I have a few options as my AA is going to be somewhat different from what I am sure they'll show on the show but who knows what we will get there I guess!

Thank you! Am so pleased to read your comments about the SwaSan scene! And hope you spotted the strains of our convos on the Swara being dealt with too much without a sign from Sanskaar? A kiss on Indian tv without perhaps a "suhaag raat" drama would be only in our dreams and fictions I guess but as you described, it would solve so much so well no? But no, we get forced MUs and other such rubbish.

Ah the quotes? It's a real pot luck thing. I have a collection, most of it stored in memory and even if I can't remember the exact words, it gives me enough to to then find it on the net. Other times, I just go back to my favourite books and there, there is so much treasure to dig through. Sometimes too, just random browsing does it. The remembering snatches of what I want to use comes possibly from my days of loving and studying literature and then of course there's always much to remember when studying law so practice possibly. Glad you like them!

Lots of love xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#50

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Shruti🤗, my jaan, what you've written is one of the most beautifully painful yet lovely and elegant fan fictions I've ever read.👏

Starting with the SanLak conversation, that was so awesome. Loved Lakshya in this. The way he made Sanskaar face the truth that the latter's committing the same mistake which he had done. He's loosing his brain while he's supposed to have it intact and be with Swara. I wish we get this sort conversation in the show, it is much needed for Sanskaar's monologue.

Swara's pain was so well written. Quite able to bring tears in the reader's eyes.😭 How much she craved Sanskaar's love, trust and affection and how much she was yearning for him, which was resulting in deteriorating her health and making deep holes in her psyche and heart was so evident.😳😔

Then, the sudden joy that she felt on seeing Sanskaar was so cute and lovely. It lit my face with a smile😊.

Finally the SwaSan confrontation. THE BEST PART of this part2, Rectified. The title literally suits this part. The clearing of all misunderstandings and pain. All mistakes rectified.

Swara's retort was expected. Her hopes had been dashed and so she'll definitely shout. That is again something I'm expecting in the show. And finally like before her words melted the stone of his heart. He again realised how much pained she was and her tears flooded his heart with an ache only curable by her.

The beauty of SwaSan is that both are the cure to each others sores, whether physical or emotional. Their passionate interaction was a treat to read and it was clear that Swara is not gonna commit the same mistake that's punishing her so badly, even by mistake now. 😳

Back is the SwaSan relationship, trust and faith and it all was a treat for me. Very beautiful and thnx a lot for this one. Enjoy ur trip and try to update soon. Will be eagerly waiting😊👏

Sakshi sweetheart 🤗

I so look forward to your comments and you never disappoint, a huge thank you for this detailed and lovely reply. You seriously made my xmas with your words 😳. You liked it that much? Happy, happy!

As you know I am far from a Lakshya fan, the new forum rules on nicknames caused me much issue! But seriously too many people are now negative and I am in desperate need of relief. It sort of felt sensibile that Lakshya who I didn't see as evil, just weak, would finally introspect in his own way but still manage to get through to Sanskaar's currently thick skull! Glad you liked it!

Poor Swara :(, usually I don't give her much sympathy but this time, my heart does bleed for her. Both our babies are in serious pain and therefore so are we 😭. It makes me very relieved seeing the comments that what I wanted to convey with that scene seems to have been perfectly interpreted, phew! Difficult to sometimes judge when your the one writing! I thought of various options for the titles and this one seemed to fit 😳. As you'll have noticed I like my letter themes, the Comprehensions Series had titles for the parts all from U and this one is all R based, childish but I like it!

I need to thank you for your kindless and support in fact and you made me very happy:). Lots of love always xoxo