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Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
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Hope you are having a lovely time in the mountain cabin. 🤗
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Shru, what an intense piece, with your customary power, the naked and hard hitting emotions literally coming off the computer screen.
Man, Shru...I have to tell you...reading some of your pieces like this is an exercise for the heart, the lungs, the tear ducts...😊 I mean that in the best possible sense, Sis. You made my heart pound in restless distress, feeling Swara's pain and sense of desolation; Sanskaar's sheer agony at having to play along in the charade and not clasp her tight to him and yell at Ragini about where she could get off! I was breathing probably as if I'd run a marathon, or at least, running after Swara to stop her from going. And Shru, why, why did you make me cry on a Sunday re? With the Frozen theme X mas party a few hours away. 😆 But jokes apart, it was very, very powerful.
I'm frankly not looking forward to the upcoming track too much. You know, we discussed this, how much we wanted Swara to pine for Sunny boy, to assuage his pain and woo him back. But I never wanted her to beg on bended knee...that's way too harsh, way too demeaning to her self respect, her essence as a person, a woman.
Mind you, I'm not blaming Sansku in the least bit here. I'm 150% 😉 certain, that its all a plan of his, to teach Ragini such a lesson, she'll never dare trouble Swara or their family again (most important for Sanskaar being Swara's safety, of course). But beats me, why he can't tell Swara, take her into confidence beforehand. These CVs will do anything for melodrama and unnecessary rona dhona!! 😡
But I liked that subtle twist you gave, about Sanskaar following Swara back all the way to the baadi, and the sheer agonized way he thinks about her, yearns for her, comes through in that soul bond they share. Swara senses it, turns back, and sees him. At least she's registered that he cares, he's going through as much pain as she is. Some hope that she'll understand very well, he isn't forsaking her.
I dearly hope and pray the actual scene plays out something along these lines, with Swara at least coming to know that this is Sanskaar's plan; if not outright being told so by him.
I'm off for my vitamins. 😉 I need them after getting this solid emotional workout from this piece. Kudos for your forceful writing sis.
And last of all---Enjoy the mountain cabin! As an aside, tell me something, doesn't what you write affect your moods a bit? Especially when you pour your heart and soul into it? I remember feeling so drained emotionally after I wrote "Old Sins...", so I do hope you are able to compartmentalize. Of course, selfishly, I still yearn for your writing. 😕 Sorry about that! But I do want you to have a lovely, relaxed vacation too.. Here's wishing you the best of both!
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I am awake before anyone else stirs and settled down to find this lovely comment waiting for me, a sure fire way to set an excellent tone for the rest of my day! As you know there are some on this forum that are almost my yard sticks to measure whether my work has passed muster or not and you are certainly one of those for me so it gives me immense pleasure to read that you received it the way you did. I know I am sounding sadistic and that's not what I meant, I don't mean it made me happy to think of you getting an "emotional workout", especially in terms of exercise to the tear ducts 😆 but I mean as a writer it's a soothing balm to know that an angsty piece did its job but in a "good" way.
I am seriously upset with the present track. I was up in arms about the absolute lack of logic as soon as the nonsense with the dayaans started and hoped it was temporary and then we got whacked with the property drama. As you know from my writing, I have an almost obsessive need to ensure at least reasonable logic is maintained no matter how high the drama quotient. That's why I often cannot read some work, if there is a total deviation from what I think is humanly possible, be that through plot action or character behaviour, it sort of immediately causes me to disconnect and with the way they have shown the property drama, my mind boggles at the stupidity. Gaping holes so big the whole Maheshwari family can jointly pass through!
And yes, we were totally in the "team" wanting a seriously pining Swara, we even structured all work at that time around it but not like this as you say. That scene in that clip was causing me trauma, hence I had to get this down. I am sort of addressing comments in the wrong order now but this is the answer to what you asked about being affected by what I write, I very much do, I live and breathe a story as it takes shape so yes, when I wrote this I was rather disturbed. But by the same token, I had to let it out, otherwise it would spoil my time of relaxation (which is thankfully entirely unaffected). The only way I could let my sleep come peacefully is if I wrote out the tumult and then inserted some hope for SwaSan within the piece, which is what I tried to do. Today I feel the urge to see if I can get some more angst out as I suspect we will get more pain with today's epi! In some ways this the best setting to write, absolute stillness and cold air, a hot drink by a blazing fire- I wish I could work on the book I want to write somewhere like here; it would get written quicker I suspect!
Like you and as I tried to get across here, I feel Sanskaar's anger at Swara was justified, the dam had burst and the flood was bound to be as powerful as the feelings that he had been forced to bottle up, plus she didn't leave much in hurting him (however unintentionally) before so it was almost inevitable that that happened but the total pretend indifference now cannot be for real. If this is not a plan and we are expected to believe this is all Sanskaar's genuine continued MU, especially after Swara falls to his knees, I am seriously fearful for my continued watching, I may not be able to. If the journey of my ship is ruined like this, their eventual destination is somewhat academic to me. Let's hope for the best!
I get Sanskaar not confiding in Swara fully. As I said in this OS, without using the words, she can be super daft! I love the girl but she is totally clueless most times and whilst my real desire is to see a joint SwaSan effort if she was told too soon, she could endanger the whole thing. But yes in the show I so hope we see her offered some lifeline as otherwise like Shruti (Lannister) says, how can she not have a breakdown with this much? And it is totally unpalatable to me that Sanskaar would do this to her of all people. I see in a video of where Swara is leaving a glimpse of a blue jacket on the stairs anyone and I suspect that is Sanskaar watching her so I am hoping the CVs won't ruin this whole thing entirely.
Love you loads for these comments and well otherwise in any case too 😆. I am keeping sanity by writing, engaging with some friends here and reading works like you write! Talk to you soon sis, have a lovely week, mmmwah
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