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Autumn_Hue

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Posted: 9 years ago

#81

Originally posted by: jess_27

Ya please update soon...
My name is Jessica...

Nice knowing you Jessica.. Shall update it soon.. 😃

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Posted: 9 years ago

#82

Hi Jessica

U portray swara pain and sanskar love and care so beautifully I don't have any words to say thanks for writing such a beautiful story for SWASAN fans.

Do update soon. Eagerly waiting

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Autumn_Hue

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Posted: 9 years ago

#83

Originally posted by: ANNU30
Hi Jessica
U portray swara pain and sanskar love and care so beautifully I don't have any words to say thanks for writing such a beautiful story for SWASAN fans.

Do update soon. Eagerly waiting

Hey dear it's Kashmi, Jessica is a fellow reader's name.. 😊

Thank you so very much for your feedback I truly feel happy..

Please don't thank me for this story I'm more than happy that you liked it and it's been a pleasant read for you that's more than enough for me.. Thank you for lending your support to this story and continue lending it that's it.. 😳

Love,

Kashmi 😃

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Autumn_Hue

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Posted: 9 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: sneharay
Nice update..👍🏼

Thank you dear.. 😊

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Hey Kashmi! I knew when we interacted earlier on my OS that you would be a good writer, you can always tell from the way people communicate I think 😳 and I am so glad you mentioned you'd written something on SwaSan. I managed to stalk it out and read and boy am I glad I did!

Firstly, I think you deserve applause for choosing such a brave plot line. The start to your story was so brutal but frighteningly powerful and I think you did it full justice! Hats off got that 👏. The description of disgusting laksh's actions was so painful to read but you did it with real finesse, something so difficult for a writer to do I think. Also I like the way you kept whole thing realistic in terms of how Laksh fell so low, in terms of getting him drunk. I know that was no excuse whatsoever and you make that more than clear especially in part 4 but what I mean is no matter hope disgusting he is, he'd never dare this much whilst totslly sober I think.

My personal favourite from all the parts was the incredible scene where Sanskaar takes control to offer heart rending comfort and succour to his shattered Swara. He went through the whole traumatic experience with her including reliving the terrible moments despite not being there when she had to suffer that most awful of ordeals 😭. The whole scene in the shower and his gentle kisses to rewrite the memories of the assault for her was a thing of true beauty for me, I will be re-reading that many times! I can't describe how much I loved that 👏👏.

At the moment I am back to seriously detesting Ragini but I like that she got redeemed here although I have little hope of seeing this in the show; more chance of seeing laksh redeemed it seems. Whichever way, one of them had to take a total irretrievable fall and here words cannot describe how despicable Laksh is so I like that you did it in way that leaves no avenue ever for Swara ever trusting Laksh again. Glad Durga prasad stood true even if his pathetic wife tried to defend her potential rapist son!

Overall, I am happy I read 4 parts together, I savoured this and am so looking forward to the further update. Once again, for what it's worth, I think you've done a truly amazing job!

Lots of love,

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Posted: 9 years ago

#86

Hey 😳

I'm so happy with the decision Durga Prasad has taken. Jail as well as much needed assessment on his mental health 🤪 is exactly what he deserves. The guy has no shame. 🤢

Annapurna. 😡 I don't understand her so called motherly instincts at all. Covering up your son's dirty work & spoon feeding him to such an extent where he takes no responsibility for anything at all is what mothering is in her dictionary. She needs to be human before she can be a "mother".

Yaay Ragini dumped Laksh. 🥳 Glad she realised that she was losing herself in her "love" for him & completely destroying people who really cared for her. It was nice to Swaragini reunited..I really hope they help & heal each other.

SwaSan standing together & fighting together is the best thing! ⭐️ I really loved how Sanskaar stood infront of her like a shield & later Swara stepped forward with her body armour in front of her to face her battles.

Looks like next chapter will be a Swasanlicious one? I can't wait to know Swara's thoughts & her coming convo with Sanskaar. 😃

Just a suggestion, this update was really dialogue heavy, so it would've been good to see descriptions on what the characters were feeling at certain instances. Eg: What Swasan felt when they were coming down the stairs & saw Laksh. You don't have to pay heed to it, I can't write to save my life, so I'm not the best critique. 😆 You're doing a fab job anyways & go for SS! Thank you for mentioning me in your post ☺️, it's a pleasure to comment on your work!

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Autumn_Hue

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Posted: 9 years ago

#87

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11
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Hey Kashmi! I knew when we interacted earlier on my OS that you would be a good writer, you can always tell from the way people communicate I think 😳 and I am so glad you mentioned you'd written something on SwaSan. I managed to stalk it out and read and boy am I glad I did!
Firstly, I think you deserve applause for choosing such a brave plot line. The start to your story was so brutal but frighteningly powerful and I think you did it full justice! Hats off got that 👏. The description of disgusting laksh's actions was so painful to read but you did it with real finesse, something so difficult for a writer to do I think. Also I like the way you kept whole thing realistic in terms of how Laksh fell so low, in terms of getting him drunk. I know that was no excuse whatsoever and you make that more than clear especially in part 4 but what I mean is no matter hope disgusting he is, he'd never dare this much whilst totslly sober I think.
My personal favourite from all the parts was the incredible scene where Sanskaar takes control to offer heart rending comfort and succour to his shattered Swara. He went through the whole traumatic experience with her including reliving the terrible moments despite not being there when she had to suffer that most awful of ordeals 😭. The whole scene in the shower and his gentle kisses to rewrite the memories of the assault for her was a thing of true beauty for me, I will be re-reading that many times! I can't describe how much I loved that 👏👏.
At the moment I am back to seriously detesting Ragini but I like that she got redeemed here although I have little hope of seeing this in the show; more chance of seeing laksh redeemed it seems. Whichever way, one of them had to take a total irretrievable fall and here words cannot describe how despicable Laksh is so I like that you did it in way that leaves no avenue ever for Swara ever trusting Laksh again. Glad Durga prasad stood true even if his pathetic wife tried to defend her potential rapist son!
Overall, I am happy I read 4 parts together, I savoured this and am so looking forward to the further update. Once again, for what it's worth, I think you've done a truly amazing job!

Lots of love,

S

Here's my favorite writer commenting on my work wow how amazing does it sound to me.. That is very sweet of you to write something like that Shruti, believe me if I'd say I'm very happy you read what I've written and you liked it that gives the writer in me immense pleasure.. 😃😳

I know it was a bold move and I was very apprehensive about posting the first part initially but I went ahead and took the leap of faith and the response has been overwhelming like seriously..

Though people found the part brutal and abusive but they've stuck to my story in the hope of reading something different and new and I'm just going to give them that.. The brutality had to be portrayed to set base for the upcoming parts and I'm just happy that I could do justice to the storyline and you guys as readers.

Well Laksh if you see is one character who doesn't have a mind of his own, he is manipulated very easily and mostly by Ragini who is successful in doing it time and again.. And his obsession for Swara well is very pathetic in the show yet it hasn't fortunately gone to the stage it went to in my story..

The shower scene and the flashback before the shower scene are my personal favorites too where one shows purity of love the other portrays happy times and I'm so happy that you loved that particular sequence of my story Shru.. 😊

Annapurna is a mother too blinded by the love for her child.. She refuses to see the evil in her son to such an extent that she forgot her responsibility as a human towards Swara before being a mother or Badi maa and Durga Prasad being the ever just person strikes a balance there by always siding with what is just and correct.. In the show too Annapurna doesn't let Laksh grow up and shoulder the burden of his responsibilities and wrong doings and the same is her character in my story I didn't change the essence there..

As for Ragini I think she deserves to be pulled back from the brink of falling off before she completely loses herself in Laksh's love. So this was her redemption and her thoughts about this entire debacle and her moment of epiphany was granted in the story her realization that she was loving the wrong man, that she deserved someone better for real..

I'm happy beyond words to convey that you've liked this story so far Shruti hope you like the upcoming parts too and you continue lending your support to my story, just thanks a lot girlfriend 😃😳

Loads of love,

Kashmi 😃

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Autumn_Hue

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Posted: 9 years ago

#88

Originally posted by: -Ros-
Hey 😳
I'm so happy with the decision Durga Prasad has taken. Jail as well as much needed assessment on his mental health 🤪 is exactly what he deserves. The guy has no shame. 🤢
Annapurna. 😡 I don't understand her so called motherly instincts at all. Covering up your son's dirty work & spoon feeding him to such an extent where he takes no responsibility for anything at all is what mothering is in her dictionary. She needs to be human before she can be a "mother".

Yaay Ragini dumped Laksh. 🥳 Glad she realised that she was losing herself in her "love" for him & completely destroying people who really cared for her. It was nice to Swaragini reunited..I really hope they help & heal each other.
SwaSan standing together & fighting together is the best thing! ⭐️ I really loved how Sanskaar stood infront of her like a shield & later Swara stepped forward with her body armour in front of her to face her battles.
Looks like next chapter will be a Swasanlicious one? I can't wait to know Swara's thoughts & her coming convo with Sanskaar. 😃

Just a suggestion, this update was really dialogue heavy, so it would've been good to see descriptions on what the characters were feeling at certain instances. Eg: What Swasan felt when they were coming down the stairs & saw Laksh. You don't have to pay heed to it, I can't write to save my life, so I'm not the best critique. 😆 You're doing a fab job anyways & go for SS! Thank you for mentioning me in your post ☺️, it's a pleasure to comment on your work!

Hey first things first thank you so much for taking time out and typing such a nice lovely and long comment over my story it touches me to know that you liked reading this one too..

Laksh deserves nothing less and probably more after everything he has done to Swara and yes jail and some mental assessment was the perfect punishment he deserved.

Annapurna is a lady who is blinded by love for her child she knows her son is wrong but she doesn't have it in her to see him punish for the crimes he committed no matter how gruesome and bad they are and that is where she err's even as a mother, her job as a mother is to bring her son on the right path and not support him for his misdeeds and give him indirect encouragement. Thus she forgot her humanity and asked for something which she shouldn't have, freedom for her son..

Yes I agree this update was very dialogue heavy and there was less scope for depicting what the characters felt at that moment coz things kept unfolding one after the other so the story took a forefront and the emotional conveying a backfront. I can't undo what I've written but yes this much I can promise that I'll make it a good read for you I'll try not to disappoint again.. 😊

That day was to come someday so why not today by uniting the Swar and the Rag and make it Swaragini.. This was the moment where Ragini could have had her realization because if not now then she would have been equally delusional and blind as Laksh and Annapurna. And we have to give this much that Ragini is smarter than the two of them ehh?? 😆

Sanskaar and Swara will be there for each other to pick up each other's fights when the other has given up and to shield each other from the world well the latter applies much more to Swara as she needs much more protection from the world as compared to our hero. 😆

I wouldn't break the suspense wait till I update the story is all I'd say.. And it's a pleasure reading your comments Ros it brightens up my day seriously.. So thank you for supporting my story dear.. 😃

P.S - my I know your real name??

Love,

Kashmi 😳