*Rang De Tu Mohe Gerua* SwaSan Two-Shot Part 2 (Final) Page 1

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kaku17

@kaku17

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#81

This was way too beautiful dear...

This "Swara" is my dream as in how I want my "Swara" to be, with whom I can happily fall in love and dance with her in happiness and cry with her when her heart is breaking...sadly the show's swara has not yet touched that chord in my heart...well may be after yest maha episode I did feel a bit of tugging in my heart for her and I do believe that in due course the show's swara will make me root for her as well...amen to that...and that day isn't far...

Swara felt each and every pain, her realisation what sanskaar might have gone through when she was at her stupid, nave, illogical best...and she reeling with that pain was stupendous...she with her quiet dignity telling sanskaar not to term her love as guilt and sympathy was brilliant...this is the swara I want to watch on the show...

and yes I did her somersault when swara showed the mirror to both ragini and lakshya...gosh how I wish we would be treated to that on screen as well...

the story was brilliantly executed...the right mix of everything...lovely...do write more...

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Sumi Roy

@LoveSonu2408

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Posted: 9 years ago

#82

part2

😭👏

its very beautifully written.

the pain of both of thm portreyed very well.thy r in so much love also so much in pain.

swara said all those her feelings & sanskar...wht to say,i love him.

oh yes!i so wanted tht in serial also swara thnk ragini to get marraied with laksh & let swasan marraid...😆

aww!i want my personal sanskar now,why z he so much understndng,careing,how much he love swara..

sanskar tk cr of swara...thn thr mutual confessn..oh!parte parte kab khatam ho gaya pata hi nehi chala.i wnted more..it likes a dream..

cherry on the cake was thr sweet & loving kiss...

i love love love love it...⭐️

now greedy me,want another piece of swasan 4m u...😛

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akanksha

@luvakanksha

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#83

Beautifully concluded

Loved sanskar's care for swara especially the dialogue "no one has the right to hurt my swara not even you"

Loved it 👏

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Rumadiv

@Rumadiv

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Posted: 9 years ago

#84

Awesome yarrr in serial we knw tat we ll not such stories si easily n reading ure os we get satisfied n joying it... continue it if possible

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Zaalima_5

@Zaalima_5

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#85

wow Shonali...amazing..👏

sorry to say.. but i loved part 2 more than part 1...😉

swara's confession to sanskaar was the best part..😊

loved loved it..😃

kisne kaha that you r not good in writing.. you r fab.. continue..😳

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maaneetfan

@maaneetfan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#86

Such angst between swasan!!! Felt sooo bad fr both of them but i guess it was necessary to get it out of their systems...

Ugh this laksh ragini duo r sooo disgusting! !! They dont see day or night aur bas tapak jate hai to drive poor swara nuts...glad sanskaar was around to hear it all but laksh was lucky he didn't get bashed by sanskaar. ...!!!

Aur poor swara ...itna dil pe liya ke beemar but after all apna very own sanskaar was thr to nurse her back!!

Loved the conclusion! ! It was a beautiful story...thnx so much for the pm dear

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sana2c

@sana2c

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Posted: 9 years ago

#87

It's superb. ..
i wish the CV'S learn sumthing from ur story nd do it in d show..

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#88

Wow Shonali...

What a fabulous, moving, emotional chapter yaar. It had everything--the angst and pain of the confrontation between Swara & Sanskaar, the intense romance of Swara's confession, their happy tears at their mutual love having come to light, as well as tears of sorrow for the pain they caused each other; and finally, the bliss and peace of two souls having found each other. It made for very lovely reading.

I want to highlight some sentences which I found really moving:

""Dil hamari nahi sunta, hume hi dil ki sunni padti hai. Aur pyaar ek essa ehsaas hai, jo paaani ki tarah, kahi se bhi apna rasta banakar, apni sahi jagah pohoch hi jata. Tumhara pyaar kab mere dil ki deewaro ko lang kar mere dil main bas gaya, pata hi nahi chala"

and "'Tum mano ya na mano, hamare dil ek saath dhakte hai. Hamara maan aur hamari atma bohot pehle se ek hogayi thi. Hum dard ke saathi hai Sanskaar. Aur yeh sach koi nahin badal sakta!!. Aur yeh bhi, ke jo main tumhare liye mehsoos karti hoon, woh main kabhi kisi ke liye nahin kiya"

These sentences were just so amazing. 👏 👏

I liked the way Swara told Sanskaar, just as he had told her not to question or insult her love; he also needn't accept her love if he didn't want to, but he should not insult it by calling it sympathy or guilt. That was a very apt dialogue by Swara.

Lakshya and Ragini--I have no words. 🤢 They are just bent upon causing pain and mayhem, having no consideration to the consequences of their actions. Loved the response Swara gave them--to the point, absolutely firm and sarcastic. And when Sanskaar realized that the extreme stress had made Swara run a high temperature, his anger against RagYa was wonderful to read about! 😊

The way Sanskaar told Swara he can't forgive her for putting her health at risk, that he cannot bear anyone, even Swara herself, endangering the person most valuable to him; was so very, very touching. This is how a Husband reacts when his wife falls unwell---the first reaction is a possessive anger "How could you do this to yourself and make me mad with worry like this!" 😆 I have seen this reaction from my hubby several times, and I was grinning to myself, when I read this part of your chapter.

And the lovely way they find peace and solace in each other's arms, that romantic kiss, so full of pure and divine love...😳 I have no further words.

Great first Fic, Shonali. Looking forward to more from you. 😊

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago

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SIMI

@simsen23

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Posted: 9 years ago

#89

Nice one dear...yes true love always wins...lovely description of emotion...keep writing
love
simi

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Sakura24

@Sakura24

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+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#90

Hey Shonali...

Really, you are one Rumpelstiltskin with the ability to spin gold from the hay of the current track. (Let's forget for a moment he was an ugly man, I was talking about the power only...)

Really...this is too good!

Now coming to part one, bitter and painful, like the darkest hours of night. But some times the purest of gold is extracted by melting on high flames right? This was needed...much much needed, for their bond to find its steely end result.

I hate Sujata, she's just eating his head! No idea how a mother can be so blind towards a child's happiness. Maybe...there are certain types of mothers, who have less brain and too little of heart. Anyways, let's leave her at that.

I love Uttara, the sweet sister-in-law conversation, is too good. This was more of what I want her to be...she is disappointing me day by day in the serial, no wonder when she would match up to my expectations there.

Then, Sanskar, of cause he's fed up, poor soul...but he should at least listen to her a bit.

On Lakshya...no comments, this comment might get deleted if I vent my exact feelings here!!

Swara, oh my baby! I feel for her...but this is the result of your own actions darling so go on, chase him a bit more!!

Coming to part two...Awesome, would be the word!

Again on RagYa, I'm glad Swara said most of the things I wanted her to. These two needs to get a life, I mean who cares actually what they does.

Her conversation with Sanskar was pure, utter gold, what else would I say?

Then the fever...oh, poor girl, she feels too deep and too hard when she does right? Sanskar's broken to a edge he almost cut my heart too...I had tears in my eyes in these paras.

Of how he thought he would lose his love again. God, I don't think he would even survive the thought, let along the actual experience!

Loved the ending, cute!

All around, good work... Enjoyed it a lot. Keep it up!

-Love Sakura

PS; I actually read this earlier, but then I wasn't home and I didn't want to write a short comment from my phone. It wouldn't have been justice to this. Then when I came back I had some other tasks at hand and completely forgot this. Thanks for the PM, and forgive the delay!