Sanctified- A SwaSan TS- Final Parts Updated

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JazzyM

@JazzyM

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Posted: 9 years ago

#121

Shru...🤗 Feel like giving you a hug..

It's past 7 pm here, left office early...instead of reading my paperwork, I decided to give my brains a little 'fun' time... Cut my apples for munching and now my pieces of apple look all browned up. Yuks! I got so immersed in reading your tale, forgot to to eat!

Part 1 : The power of Sorry...

Sanskar has always been the silent types...he evokes so much of emotions, it's a wonder why his fans following just increases in bus loads and you my lady...just add on to his charm...he alienates his feelings but Swara opened the floodgates...beautifully worded...loved the whole para...the way you brought it out - love, every layman could related to the feeling.

You stated that it had been ages since you wrote in Hindi...my dear, the letter was ...👏 Swara's torment and Sanskar agony...the play of emotions told all the untold stories of their relationship...

Part 2 : Reflections and mirages.

You are absolutely right...Sanskar, has less screen time compared to Swara and Ragini but the depth in his character is easily depicted. Where else, with Swara, her emotions are not shallow but she has been shown as not 'caring' towards Sanksar, the emotions of the person who has done, sacrificed so much for her...

The way you have brought the light out of Swara's feelings, made 200% sense... a person cannot jump from the friendship wagon to 'love' in a jiffy...If she had blurted out her love during Sanskar's outburst, it will look imprudent...so, her agony was justified...beautiful soul search!

The last portion...Sanskar has always had her back...👏

Now...what am I to do with my 'brown apples''? 😕

Edited by JazzyM - 9 years ago

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kritz4ever

@kritz4ever

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#122

Loved it

Hope cvs take your ideas

It will be more fun to watch

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#123

Originally posted by: JazzyM
Shru...🤗 Feel like giving you a hug..
It's past 7 pm here, left office early...instead of reading my paperwork, I decided to give my brains a little 'fun' time... Cut my apples for munching and now my pieces of apple look all browned up. Yuks! I got so immersed in reading your tale, forgot to to eat!

Part 1 : The power of Sorry...

Sanskar has always been the silent types...he evokes so much of emotions, it's a wonder why his fans following just increases in bus loads and you my lady...just add on to his charm...he alienates his feelings but Swara opened the floodgates...beautifully worded...loved the whole para...the way you brought it out - love, every layman could related to the feeling.

You stated that it had been ages since you wrote in Hindi...my dear, the letter was ...👏 Swara's torment and Sanskar agony...the play of emotions told all the untold stories of their relationship...

Part 2 : Reflections and mirages.

You are absolutely right...Sanskar, has less screen time compared to Swara and Ragini but the depth in his character is easily depicted. Where else, with Swara, her emotions are not shallow but she has been shown as not 'caring' towards Sanksar, the emotions of the person who has done, sacrificed so much for her...

The way you have brought the light out of Swara's feelings, made 200% sense... a person cannot jump from the friendship wagon to 'love' in a jiffy...If she had blurted out her love during Sanskar's outburst, it will look imprudent...so, her agony was justified...beautiful soul search!

The last portion...Sanskar has always had her back...👏

Now...what am I to do with my 'brown apples''? 😕

Jazz 🤗 I love hugs from my SwaSan family so thanks for that and for these lovely comments! First as I feel guilty about the apples let me address that! See I am sorry they suffered that fate but you could offer them in prasad to Kala Bhooth Ji- he is Pataali Devi's husband (Jwala discovered this not me btw!) 🤣 and as ardent fans of Lakshya Ji- we can give this as bhog! Perfect solution na? 😆

Seriously though- couldn't agree more about Sanskaar- I personally find it easy to write Sanskaar as he almost literally always calls to me at every level.

Oh re the Hindi- I can't write in hindi script. I have taught myself to painstakingly read it but see as an NRI born and brought up in Africa, we spoke English, Swahili and Gujarati from day 1 and then we had Kutchi neighbours so have always been fluent in that too. But languages like Hindi, Urdu and Punjabi I entirely self taught myself, hence the hesitation in writing in Hindi. I can very fluently speak it and think in it when writing dialogues too but have never before attempted a letter in it so ... Happy you liked it!

Totally spot on about Swara- if we had been shown Swara logically we would not be so upset with her I think. She went through hell and back in a fundamental way, each of her main relations especially with any male figure have been severely tested and except for Sanskaar all the men she has known have let her down big time so it isn't any wonder that it would take her time to transition to love. This is how I see Swara- her not understanding what real love is first led to her relationship with Lakshya being thought of by her as love and then all that happened after. No wonder she was "dense" in that sense about Sanskaar. I am feeling glad that most who are reading this seem to be getting that feel which was my main reason to write this, as without this, i haven't done any major plot building in this like Trial by Fire or Against the Odds etc. It is simply a piece about deciphering feelings and TALKING them out to make sense of them.

Hope you feel better about the apples 😆

Lots of love to you xoxo

PS: Left you a comment on your OS- you are a real "chuppa rustom" but I am not surprised as the way people comment etc you can always tell the ones who will be able to write well 😃

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#124

Originally posted by: kritz4ever
Loved it
Hope cvs take your ideas
It will be more fun to watch

Hey! Thank you so much for this! I think you are a new reader to my work? Am so pleased to see your comment 😃

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misaki

@misaki

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#125

I am seriously late on this one huh?😔

13-14 hours work days and terrible cold really doesn't leave you with time to do anything else in your life and that is what has been happening to me this entire week.

I just got a break from coding and I got the chance to read this. I'm so glad that I did Shru. Need I say how much I absolutely love reading your works?😃 Loved it. Read both the parts and it was such a treat. Especially after reading posts that talk about Swara confessing her feelings to Shomi(guess that means we will have to wait forever for an actual confession but hey that's what we ae here for.. to crib and complain and finally celebrate when it actually happens😆) Ohh and I LOVE the fact that divorce track is actually happening! Yass! Go Sansku🥳

Anyhow before I get too distracted 😆, I'm coming back to what I'm actually supposed to be doing.

Part1 - This is the first time you have decided to talk about Swara more than Sanskaar and I guess it wazs a little experimental for you as you said but you managed to perform and clear it with flying colors as cliched as that sounds😆 Letter from Swara and in Hindi too. I loved how you got her to realize and confess as to how she was being so completely selfish when it came to Sanskaar and how he had always seen it yet allowed her to have her way. It was so good to hear her admitting to it and regretting it as well. I also love how you got her to take a stand after all the crap that was dished out to her by dumber and dumbest. I had always wished that she would leave the place. Any girl with some self-respect would have left after everything that she had to hear, but of course since when do CVs ever ever take the logical route ?😵 So to see that here she leaves albeit it was after Laksh's revelation is still better than nothing. *sigh* It's true , her failed relationships and the examples that she has for couples really do nothing to help her cause (esp with the stupid brain of hers.)*Double facepalm*

Of course my favorite part of the letter was when she realizes how she understands that she really is undeserving of Sanskaar's love. The lengths to which he has gone only for her, felt good that she is not blind to all of that. So when I read her sorry to Sanskaar it wasn't all that difficult for me to see a girl that indeed was foolish to not see what she was doing with her life and how stupid she had been when it came to Sanskaar. Forgiveness might not come so easily but it's definitely a start. I don't know if we get something as detailed as that on the show but even 20% of that and I will be super happy. It was truly a lovely letter Shru. 🤗

Part 2 -

I especially enjoyed reading this part Shru for the obvious reasons that it had more happening in it when compared to the previous one. Swara admitting how no one understood her the way Sanskaar did and the fact that she now craved his company and no one else's. The way she confesses that though her feelings were not as intense as Sanskaar's feelings for hers obviously were, she had started to already walk down that path towards it. The pain that you go through when the other person doesn't understand what you feel for them is what Sanskaar had to suffer for a long time now she at least knows how it feels.(My sadist heart is happy😃)I loved how you got your Sanskaar to put his foot down and disagree to play "just friends" anymore. I love Sanskaar's dialogues on that day "bina barose ka rishta nahin chanhiye" or something along those lines! ❤️ Loved it. That quote you have included there is so fitting."A good act does not wash out the bad nor a bad act the good " - how true is that in anyone's case. A sorry is definitely due but repentance never makes what you did go away.Very very nice Shru. Also love that part where Swara remembers Sanskaar's promise to her when she had initially planned to visit Varanasi. I could almost imagine the turmoil that she was going through when I read that. I am a sucker for happy stories but I also crave some angst and torture. I mean what's an epic story without some angst and tears? 😳

Of course the last part with Sanskaar was icing on the cake. 😃 I am selfish like that , just can't get enough of him.😆 As usual thoroughly enjoyed reading it Shru. The fact that you obviously wove your story around the show yet tried to make is as sensible as you can made it definitely more interesting. Can't wait to read the next one! especially with how you ended this one!😭😆

Edited by misaki - 9 years ago

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#126

Hey all,

I have updated and posted the final Part 3 as well as a short Epilogue! Hope you like it and please let me know if you do, or even if you don't!

Lots of love and thanks!

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Sakura24

@Sakura24

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#127

Thank you Shru...you did keep your Thursday wala promise! I'm glad it finished this way and god...what a spinning ride it had been.

Emotionally this TS had been the heights of success, it managed to reduce me in to tears which is something.

Their conversation in the last part was too moving, too deep and too true! I practically gasped at some places, had tears in my eyes at others.

Epilogue is sweet too, a perfectly fitting ending to a perfect piece.

PS: I'm glad they exited the mad house, letting the crazy couple dance their discos in peace. I would never have such a bliss on show, thank you separately for that!

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dilwali

@dilwali

Navigator

Posted: 9 years ago

#128

yar Shru u mk me speechless as alwz. I want to say so much n praise u but i literally hv no words to explain. Its beyond words. all i can say is its breathtakingly beautifully written. As i alwz say u must try to think seriously abt writing books.

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Anglaise

@Anglaise

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#129

Hi.. Just went through both part3 and eplongue.. Splended one.. Awesome Update.. Finally everything cleared.. It was so Natural..! Loved it to core!
TC 🤗

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The.Lannister

@The.Lannister

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 9 years ago

#130

@Part 3:

This part was magical. I loved it. Loved that analogy involving the empty space on the divorce paper & Swara's once empty heart filled up with love for Sanskaar. It was all too beautifully written. I also liked that there was no long drawn out explanations or dialogues involved. Isn't that how it happens between loved ones? Sometimes a hug or a smile conveys more than a thousand words. That feeling of togetherness which they must have experienced at Assi ghat, that had more power to get them together than any words could ever have.

@Epilogue:

So glad that Sanskaar left that Mad Mansion😆 Ofc will never see such a thing in the show but who cares🥱

This line ---> She melted into him as effortlessly as a swathe of silk flowing across a smooth surface ☺️ ☺️ ☺️