SwaSan TS: Music of the Soul-The Agony & the Ecstasy-Completed - Page 21

Originally posted by: ishanita

that was a treat to read
loved it to d core
tnx for pm
ishanita

Originally posted by: soapbubble

Oh lovely part 2! Honey sweet...

Originally posted by: foresight

I loved ow you went into the intricacies of the rag. build a subtle bond between annapurna and sanskar through it and through who he is as a person. you beautifully put that he gave swara the power to hurt him, but trusted her not to. loved that line.

i really liked how sanskar here asked her why didnt she ask him straight of what he was going when he was burning the blanket rather than asking obtuse questions, i was always bothered by it in the show. i am so glad your brought it up here. i am glad this swara realises there was changing in the nature of their relationship 😃

i liked how you put that fate is based on decisions. i always felt that ragini was more perceptive than swara. swara is more naive and utopia despite having had a tougher life and being elder to ragini. you brought that really well in ragini's advice to swara.

woh!! swara has really studied sanskar's eyes...even sanskar couldnt miss reading that sign and kissed her 😳 😉 and what a kiss...

amazing part and amazing rang 👏 👏 👏

Originally posted by: luv_virmaan

Viji!

The 2nd part was awesome 👏

You have written it so beautifully and so poignantly that I could visualise all that you have written. And the way you have blended in music to the story, is amazing.

Loved loved loved the way you showed Swara craving and pining for Sanskaar's attention and his presence.

Ragini and Swara's convo was really good too! Just like you have showed in your story, I feel ultimately, its Ragini, who is going to be the one who will make Swara realise her feelings for Sanskaar or atleast give her the push to go and confess, if she has realised it already.

I have always love the sister bond and I really want it to be re-established it back on the show.. They make an adorable sisters pair.

And the SwaSan scene

She sings for him 😳 Their patchup and her description of his eyes was just WOW!

And then their kiss... *sigh*

They are just adorable! And finally their misunderstanding is cleared

Waiting for the second part! And thank you so much for the PM 😳

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

@Part 2:

Your command over language is so good. As you go on describing things, early mornings in MM, their routines etc everything plays out in front of my eyes when I read your descriptions. Cut to the last scene...when even that plays out... 😆☺️

While in the show we are just assuming that Swara has been developing feelings for Sanskaar over the past few days it was good to see things from her perspective here & have it confirmed that yes she does feel something for him & considers him more than a friend. But then her doubting him becomes all the more disappointing than it was in the show. There at least I convinced myself saying that she is only his friend...

Sanskaar loves music & then Swara using that as a means to break the ice...brilliant👏

And coming to my most favourite part: that description of Sanskaar's eyes☺️ That was a mix of so many things on her part, it was sweet & cute & at the same time a confirmation of a growing awareness she has of him, just too good Viji😳 Only someone who has been observing him for long will note all these things

Loved the Oscar Wilde quote, but then I love everything the man says! I think I am going to sit down with my diary, open all your FFs & jot down all the wonderful quotes you add in all your works. I know many of them but will never be able to use them at the correct place like you always manage to do👏

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

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Sorry I am late Vij! I have been struggling with workloads and other commitments and just got home - it's gone 10 pm! I didn't want to write a comment from the phone.

Beautiful! The descriptions you evoke are always so effective, you can literally transport the reader straight to the place you write of. I was lost in the majesty and grandeur of the MM and the way Annapurna was singing the Aarti and later Swara, I could actually hear it. Bhairav is my mum's favourite raga- she sings it very well too:). I also loved the connection drawn between the music and how Sanskaar's character is moulded. Like me, you have always seen the real connect he has with Annapurna.

The SwaSan reconciliation applied a balm to my heart. I loved the idea that Swara was working so hard on conveying her remorse and particularly loved that you used Ragini in the way you did. What I liked was you did it realistically, she is still not immediately reformed- we all know life doesn't work like serials- mad drama leading to big instant changes. I really liked the balance of her desire to change fighting against her deep seated feelings of frustrated anger and jealousy but finally, some goodness winning through and her telling Swara would of course be so effective. As it is we have doubts about Swara's real love in life being pyaari behena 😆. Seriously though, talking of the real love of ones life- I so enjoyed how Sanskaar finally melted with the message wifey sang out to him. Again, in real life we all know that over time and subject to amount of effort put in, anger can fade and when we love someone so much, at some point the softening is inevitable. And what a way you chose to get Swara to express her changed feelings! Ah- that description of Sanskaar's eyes and his reaction- ☺️ . That kiss and their love and passion for each other was so beautiful, I can sleep happy visualising 😳. Oh and before then- we saw the scene with Sanskaar angry and then upset and Swara devastated on screen but reading it like this brought all the power and feels of it back.

I am not sure I have told you before but Oscar Wilde is one of my favourite authors- I got record high marks in my literature paper on the essay I wrote on him. I devoured his work- his dry sarcastic wit and satire always right up my street. And of course Khalil Gibran ❤️

It'll be no surprise to you that like all your work, I was lapping this one up, ever hungry for more! Hope to read Part 3 soon.

The redemption of Laksh question is interesting. I am currently mulling over doing a piece where I wondered if I should try that but at the moment my anger levels re Laksh ji are so high, I couldn't decide 😆. I find it easier to just cut him out or make him the big bad but I know at some point, it would be good to somehow have him dealt with. I am not being much help but at the moment I enjoy reading him getting scalded, punched, scratched etc etc 😆 but if you do redeem him, I know you will do a fine job so either way is fine!

Sorry if my comments today are scrambled, they might resemble the state of my brain! Love you soul sis xoxo