Against All Odds- A SwaSan Four Shot - Page 12

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: medhasankar

Sheesh!!!

Poor thing...she was all wifey concern and that sentence stole my heart Shrutu,..'the person who usually woke her from her nightmares, was the one pushing her towards the monsters' 😕

Well, this was coming. Koi insaan kitna door tak bardaash kare?
Best part was..Swara certainly had no intention of ever going to Lakshya...and she was actually irritated that Sanskaar could come up with it.😃

Swara saw through Ragini...whew.I mean the amount of things that girl gets away with is astounding.🤢

The mandir scene was very well done. firecracker lobbed onto Swara...and of course...hero's entry.👏

I was blown away by the descriptions of Swara worrying over him...and fighting tooth and nail to return to her injured hubby. Later how DP had to re-question her to make sense, because she had been crying incoherently before. Very well sketched.👏

and the confession and its after effects. How he hmmm...
I love this Swara. She is gonna fight to be his wife. if necessary, she will fight against his sanskaariness to be his wife.😉
The small bit about him feeling her arm on his...well put.⭐️
and Sujata's description.😆seriously, how did she not wail?😆

I have a compliment beside excellent writing Shrutu...you type very fast.👏😉 and it never compromises on the quality

Love Ya,
Medha.


Medhu 🤗
Feeling rejuvenated reading your comments:) As you know from the dedication, if you don't like this one, I will be gutted so this made me relieved and happy. Glad you think its coming on ok. Now to tie it all in for Part 4- eeek, this is hard!
Excellent writing I don't know but typing- haha- yes, I can pretty much speed type. Can't quite keep up with my work PA but am not far behind. Practice from having to type long submissions for public inquiries and all and the essays some of my clients need on email too! 😆
Love you sis, might be PM'ing with confusion problems again 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: manasie23

Part3- The whole thing was so different to the original track and yet so similar... you really did redeem Swara's character in my eyes but she is still so naive no grasping the extent of danger lurking around her.
And Sanskaar ever so smart hubby did the right job of hiring a detective to keep tabs on his wifey... and the way he saved Swara felt happy and sad at the same time. Happy because he saved her and sad because he himseld got injured.
Also I felt that Sanskaar did the right thing by responding to her declaration there and then that person has been through so much he needs to be sure that swara is not making any decision hastily especially when she is distressed... update the fourth part soon will be waiting


Thank you Manu,
Glad you are finding Swara coming along well. Ah yes, see she will never lose all of that naive trust- that's what makes her who she is. I will try and explain in Part 4 through Sanskaar:)
Sanskaar is 😎 always.
Yes!! He must doubt such a declaration given how she is so mahaan so now she has to prove it. Will try to post 4 today:)
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: kulsum_5

shruti...🤗
wow part3 is awesome..!! hmm loved smart swara.
haye confession..😳
dono miya biwi bade besharam hai yaar...😆 both confessed their love in front of all family members..😉
thanks for including salman in your fic..
waiting for next part..😃


Kulsum 🤗
Thank you so much for liking it! 😆 besharam SwaSan is such a funny thought for the sanskaari couple. I couldn't resist playing in the film angle but without mad melodrama of Sallu giving advice on marriage which in itself is such a contradiction 😉 I'll start on Part 4 now. x
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Sanavi

This is the best chapter till nw. Loved Swara while talking to Ragini.

The temple sequence was also good. The way swara realise her love is great. Sanskaar is very protective of Swara nd his quick thinking helped in saving Swara.

Swara love confession was epic. Want such a confession in show also in front of family.

Laksh nd Ragini ka to pachka ho gaya. But Sanskaar ke last dialogue ne dil tod diya. Why did he do so?
U left it at such a point. Hw cruel of u... 😡

Continue soon.


Thanks Sanavi- glad you liked this one the most.

Yes, I was starting Swara off not the journey to break the poisonous bond with her mad sister. I so want a public confession too- I think we will get this.
I felt it too easy if she confessed and Sanskaar just took that at face value after all the confusion she has been giving off- Medha gave me that idea and I loved it hence some temporary torture for you guys, sorry! I'll try to please in Part 4 😉
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: iam-in-love

Part 3 is jst awsm...
whnevr Swara in danger , Sanskar is there to protect her...

Swara's confession... I loved it... But cnt evn blame Sanskar too... Bcoz he thought that wtevr she is sais jst bcoz of guilty . I loved dis Sanskar vry much...

Gud wrk dear... Waiting for nxt part...


Hey! Thanks for loving Part 3. Yes, Sanskaar's world revolves around Swara, which is why I guess we all love them.
Glad you liked the confession and slight twist there. I don't want an over mahaan Sanskaar so this was my way:) x
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: The-Heart

First of all thanks for the fast update

You almost redeemed swara character and her confession is superb😳 but because of her previous track record sanskar is not ready to believe her so soon😆
Swara need to work more hard to prove her love ( I wish CVs show this kind of scenes in show)

Below sentences are heart touching

"His wife stayed glued to his uninjured side, making implicitly clear to everyone that this was her place, and she would not relinquish it to anyone."
(Poor swara securing her place beside her husband)😳

"Swara felt like she had walked in to a nightmare. The only problem was the person who usually could be relied on to wake her from it, was the one pushing her towards the monsters."(Poor swara) 😭


Thanks again for yet more nice comments, appreciate this a lot. I see you like the idea of making Swara having to go a bit further to prove herself 😊. In the show- don't know what they want except for endless melodrama 😡. Thanks for appreciating those sentences. Will work on part 4 now.
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Sakura24

Shru🤗

If I said I loved the steely reality check Sanskar is bestowing upon his lovely wife would that make me a monster? Why, I must say I loved him saying probably Swara's confession was a result of her feeling sorry for him...she had that coming😈
And Swara...you wanted to know what I think about her now, right. Hmm...while she was coming in terms with her feelings I was going 🥳You have explored her wonderfully and she seems more mortal and less goddess unlike the show. I like this solid basis to her feelings you have given, like saying she is in love with Sanskar alright but afraid of losing him. A girl of her past experience would come to that. The way her insecurities broke is also my heart touched part here. I'm seriously afraid of fire crackers and reading this had made my fear increase ten folds. I would never watch one without remembering the image your words made in my mind of Sanskar with his hand alight!
So in 4th they'll sort everything out. I still think Swara would have to put a lot of effort in to making her hubby believe she actually loves him. Waiting for that. Update soon.😃


Saku 🤗
If you are a monster I am the queen of them 😆. Yes Mrs M needed the reality check right?! So happy you think I was able to get through the Swara I wanted by the end, and I am hoping I can complete her journey by the end of 4. I too am not a fan of crackers- I never hold them! Generally anyway, fire is frightening for me due to something that happened in our family a while ago . Need to crack on with 4! This weekend has literally been writing non stop 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

@Part 3:

Thanks for clearing up the Ram thing from the previous part.

I can understand why Sanskaar did what he did. Swara still thinks of him as her best friend but even then wants all the privileges of a wife. She wants the unquestioned, unwavering trust which is the privilege & right of a wife. And her own actions dont help her either. Going to meet Laksh in garden, his room, doing his marham patti, rushing to him as soon as he messages. She is sending wrong signals to not just Sanskaar but Laksh as well.

I loved that Sanskaar did not offer himself as a choice to her. He gives her two choices: Laksh or total freedom. If that doesn't tell you how genuine the guy is Swara, nothing will.

In the hospital I was expecting a owww gawdd moment 🤣 followed by the usual shocking HAHAHAHA copying me bro? me cut a vein, u burn a hand. u compete wid me bro & then maybe a sataccckkk zaapad from Swara & DP, one on each cheek I have still not forgotten that DP slapped Sanskaar😡 When will someone slap Laksh?

Good Sanskaar didnt accept her straight away. It is but natural that he is being careful. Kya pata abhi msg aya ya behen cheekhi toh ye firse bhaag jaaye waha se😛 Let her do some mehnat to win him now.


Shruti 🤗
I thought you might like making Swara sweat it a bit- we have similar views about how Madam needs to learn some hard lessons and the hard hitting truths only Sanskaar could tell her I thought were needed.
🤣 Oh Gawwwd and cha cha cha- I should have built in na?! Hmmm slap- I have an idea for one coming but let's see how I find it flowing in 4 to see who gets lucky 😆😉.
Thanks S, catch you soon, hopefully after 4 xoxo
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: maaneetfan

Part 3 read n i must say...swara is redeemed quite credibly. .. and i can even understand sanskaar's reluctance to accept swara's declaration at its face value. Sanskaar has gone thru so many tests fr his love...swara needs some anxiety in her life too...but m sure part 4 will make it all well...superb writing!


Glad you liked Swara coming through in 3 and the way the confession was left. Thanks so much for liking the writing 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
superb updates and story
update next part soon

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