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Posted: 16 years ago
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Dude, come on...too much suspense...update soon please! Great writing, by the way.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wahi to!!!! itni jaldi cinema hall mein picture rok di! audience to anxious hogi na!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#73
Sorry yaar kya kare pichle do din main bahut hi busy thi....

So....

Double Update Coming Up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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14. THE FIRST BLOOD

3:00 AM



Rituparna's boat moved forward.
Rituparna's boat inched closer to the second boat. With every second their seemed to be a flurry of activity and muffled splashing sounds could be heard.
The customs officer realized what they were doing and he motioned to Rituparna...
Rituparna too understood what was going on...

The crew was dumping the contraband into the sea.

Rituparna was beyond himself at this point.

When the boats had barely five feet between them, he jumped into the second boat. The divers quickly plunged into the sea.

Deepika cocked her pistol, worried about Rituparna. When their boat was close enough, she too, jumped.

Immediately there was a shot.

One of the smugglers had fallen dead, killed, presumably by Rituparna.

Deepika shot the hand of a man who was attempting to shoot at Rituparna.

Three smugglers were down now. Eight more to go.

There was another shot and a grunt.

To her horror Deepika realized, a customs officer had been shot in the leg. His colleague pushed him out of harm's way.

Rituparna had eradicated one more smuggler. Deepika took down one.

Shekhar, a customs officer shot another two.

Angad, his colleague killed two more.

There was another shot as a smuggler fired at Shekhar. He fell on the spot.

A bullet wizzed past Deepika and she felt Rituparna crash on her, protecting her, keeping her out of harm's way.

He shot one of the remaining smugglers.

The last one tried to shoot Rituparna, but Angad lifted his revolver and shot him, before he could react.

Rituparna stood up cautiously.

A shot wizzed over his head.He ducked instinctively.

A shot rang out, and was followed by silence.
Rituparna looked up.

Deepika had her gun trained on the man who had fired at him.

Rituparna looked at her and she stared back, challengingly.
She put her gun in the back of her jeans and rushed towards Shekhar.
Rituparna stared unbelieveingly at her back.

She had saved his life.



15. EUPHORIA


TWO HOURS LATER
ABROAD TEAM A CRAFT



The paramedic team had arrived with haste.

Shekhar had been moved to a hospital, but he had been announced DOA.

Veer was being treated for his leg injury.
Angad had escaped with a few scratches.

Rituparna had a long gash on his palm and face injuries.

Deepika too had some face injuries and there was a long slash on her knee.

Rituparna's walky talky buzzed.

It was Parth.

Deepika hurriedly approached Rituparna.

'Target achieved. Six hostiles dead. Three captured.'

Rituparna spoke, 'Target achieved all hostiles dead.'

Parth gave their coordinates.

Soon, Deepika could make out the figure of a boat on their right.

Parth's boat came closer to their boat. Rituparna and Deepika rushed towards the deck.

Deepika saw all the members of Special Squad on the opposite boat and heaved a sigh of relief. She smiled at them and at Parth.

They looked at each other over the water, all traces of misunderstandings gone.

Parth too smiled at her.

Deepika looked towards the east, over the water, at the rising sun.

The golden rays crept over the water setting it ablaze.

Deepika looked to her side.

Rituparna was standing beside her.

He looked at her and smiled.
She looked into his eyes, all doubts assuaged, she reciprocated with a smile.

She felt the sweet success tinged with the bitter pain of loss...

He was confused by the expression in her eyes... it made him feel intensly happy... he felt as though his stomach was doing push-ups without his knowledge...(please do not attribute this to sea sickness 😆)

They both turned their gaze towards the glorious rising sun, with a new confidence in their hearts, minds at peace.

Two figures outlined by the splendid rays of the glowing ball of fire.
Parth wiped the blood from Junhui's arm and looked into her eyes.

She nodded and took her arm away.
They too looked at the rising sun.

The rest of the day all they had to do was cast a look back at the moment and the elation filled their hearts'
And the rest of the day there was alos why'why'why' in their minds.




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Posted: 16 years ago
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Enjoy!!!!!!!!!!

M getting really very generous 2day so hv another update....

Edited by Pooj@ - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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16. THE TIP OF THE ICEBERG

Special Squad Office

9:00 AM




The whole team sat near the discussion table...

They were mourning for Shekhar, who had lost his life in the shootout.
But they had to move on... the essentiality of the mission called for it.

Parth's face was grim.

He was not displeased with the way the raid had turned out but they had lost one fourth of the whole contraband and had one casualty.

But the bright side was that three smugglers had been captured alive and as they were speaking the men were being grilled by the Police.

Parth heaved a sigh.

He looked at the troop of the battered officers surrounding him. They had been up the whole night and deserved a good break.

Parth smiled at them.

"We have done a good job. You all deserve a well earned rest. Please report tomorrow at eight am sharp."

He nodded at them.

Without pausing to look at the jubilation on the faces of the team, Parth got up and left the place.

Deepika was surprised to see Parth's downcast face.
Bracing herself for a talk with him, she entered the cabin.

"Khush nahi hue?" she asked.

Parthlooked at her from his desk. It was littered with numerous notes, diagrams and maps.

She pulled a chair from Aaryan's desk and sat opposite to him.

He silently went on with his work.
There was the sound of feet behind her.
It was Rituparna. His face too, was ashen.

Unable to resist, she finally asked,
"Tum dono ko ho kya gaya hai?"

Rituparna gave a weary sigh.
"Deepika aaj humara ek customs ka saathidaar mara gaya hai."

Deepika nodded solemnly.

He continued. "Hum abhi yahan aane se pehle uske family se milne gaye the."

Deepika looked at him, alert.
"Apparently, Shekhar was the sole breadwinner of the family. It was really very disturbing."

Deepika turned silent.

She thought of all the emotions connected with a death of a loved one... It uprooted the ones near the departed, completely.
"Police Department aur sarkar ki taraf se unhe kuch compensation milega. His mother... she just said a single sentence...Do you want to know what she said?"

Deepika nodded her assent.

"Mera beta anmol tha is compensation se uski kimat nahi chukka payenge aap par mujhe khushi hai ki woh desh ke kaam aaya..."

Parth said, "In logon ki wajah se kai parivaar ujde hai... kai logon ko chot pahunchi hai... but I promise... main is organization ko jad se ukhad ne me poori jaan laga doonga."

Deepika said,
"I agree... Hum sab tumhare saath hai Parth. Aaj pehli raid hui hai... and it was successful... at least we have something to be happy about..."

Parth held a wan smile on his face. He handed her a paper detailing the contraband that was seized...
She started examining the paper and a satisfied smile appeared on her face.

"I think I should tell you one thing...This," he said. "Is the tip of the iceberg."

Deepika put down the paper in surprise.

"Matlab?"

"Isi waqt humare saath pure desh main Sahil Pawar ke khilaf sabot ikattha kiye jaa rahe hai... "
Rituparna smiled. "Yeah. Parth theek keh raha hai... Yeh kaam actually pichle 23 mahinon se chal raha hai... Hum pichle mahine hi is poore mission me shamil hue."

Deepika was shocked. She had no idea that the case they were dealing with was being worked on in the country's extensive and important intelligence and forensic centres.

She studied the papers on Parth's desk and was shellshocked when she learned the depth of the mission'
She wildly buried herself, examining the illegal jaunts of Sahil Pawar.

He had stopped at nothing. Drugs, Arms, Smuggling, Armed Robbery, Forgery, Pimping, connections to Mafia, Contract killings .......anything ......everything
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Edited by Pooj@ - 16 years ago
maisoon thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
#77
👏brillint pooja briliant
i was waiting for this the moment i have read that boat part
it was so dark!!!!!silent grim
and i can even feel the sun rising after reading its was literally europhia i felt😍
mission accompished⭐️
and meee soooo happy dipika ne rituparnam ki jan bachi😉
hmm ab to ussay mana he ho ga that she is tough😳



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Posted: 16 years ago
#78
😆 you know thats a great combination....... a fantastic writer and very generous too
specially for the reader..😉
hmm to pichele mahene se is mission per kaam chal raha hai😉
i just wish ke humara hero is sahil pawar per ke bar haath zaroor saf kare

by the way i loved the line when rituparnam felt that is stomach is doing push ups😆 😆
just imagine


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Posted: 16 years ago
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Imagine and imagine is what I did reading the update.... As Amna said it was Euphoria reading the whole boat attacks!!!! 👏 I still can imagine it... Four heads.... Rituparna's above Dipika's.... Parth's above Junhui's.... Oie hoie! 😳
And and and..... Rituparna and Dipika is a known fact.... But Parth and Junhui?!??! 😉
And Pooja in the update where our officers feel about the officers I got really reminded of the grim Mumbai Attacks..... I think you must too have got reminded while writing it... How true to the core each and every words was!
As usual great writing and I like the headings you give each of your updates! 👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
#80
Thank you for your generous comments... it makes one go on, you know... Parth aur Junhui ek naya matter hai... aayega woh bhi saamne... Ab Rituparna kya karega... humari Deepika itni tough hai, usne socha bhi nahi hoga!!!!!

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