TS THE FOUR PART 6A : BEHIND ENEMY LINES BEGINNING PG 35 22/05 - Page 9

Shivam, what an update!!!😆

Originally posted by: Riya_16

Shivam, what an update!!!😆

Loved reading it. Yes it took me some time to get to the bottom of the update. But this is great.

Congratulations...plzzz continue writing

Wow, amazing story

Originally posted by: LakshMila

Hey Bhagwan!

Valmiki jii tussi chha gaye!

Thoko taali 👏

I died laughing at this part and my family is thinking that I've certainly got mad.🤪

No one can beat you!

Mandavi,haye re,Lanka me vacation!

And Kshat Kirti!! 🤣

Urmila seducing Laksh and the surprise was Laksh recovers on getting kisses by Mila ☺️

These eight are so much fun!but the glitters in this were BharMa and ShatKirti.

ROFL...ROFL...ROFL!

Loved the bond you showed between the brothers

Originally posted by: trina134

Loved the bond you showed between the brothers

Poor Mandavi , how she became bali ka bakara in the fight between LakshMila and that too not once but twice,

Shatrughan was so cute and naughty

But the best part was when Laksh recovered on getting kiss from Mila

Amazing👏👏

so, so wonderful! loved the way you developed the characters a lot!
do keep writing!

Originally posted by: shivam030291

Thank You Trina

I like showing Mandavi as the Bali ka Bakra😆😆

Shatrughan , lakshman and Urmila are my favourites , usually my plots revolve around them

Originally posted by: -GrilledCheese-

so, so wonderful! loved the way you developed the characters a lot!
do keep writing!

shivam...read all the four parts in one go...
loved them to the core and still laughing ...especially liked the characterization of lakshman and shatrughan as prankster, fun loving yet overprotective for their elder brothers and also urmila being chirpy ...but little disappointed with characterization of shuthkirti as a cry baby all the time...
thanks for pm ...and pls do write more in future