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manali

@Revolutionbreez

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Posted: 15 years ago

#421

EMERALD AND DIAMOND :

Very well written...

The confusion and helplessness of the girl when she is not too sure about getting into the relationship was very well shown.

And finally she realised they are meant for each other...

Very nice poem.

WHAT CAN I SAY?

Well I can say only one thing....that you have very beautifully depicted a very pathetic and sad situation..

hats off to you !!!⭐️

Keep it up!

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ssh57

@ssh57

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Posted: 15 years ago

#422

Emarld & Diamond

In this poem you have expressed the other side of the story. The feelings of the person who doesn't accept someone's love. normally everyone sympathizes with the person who is rejected but its nice to view things from the other side for a change.But this time you have ended it on a very positive note. Very nice. Love ssh57.

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ssh57

@ssh57

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Posted: 15 years ago

#423

What Can I say?

Though the heroine sounds very sad the end is again very positive.I believe its pointless torturing yourself about someone who doesn't reciprocate your feelings. love sssh57

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#424

Originally posted by: sri_4
hey bhoomi
wow!!2 poems at once its just so good..
one shows out the emotions between a girl who doesnt love n guy who loves so deeply her...

loved theses lines..
Emarld & Diamond

and see i found u today and why r u wearing green and i wonder why am dressed in white, are we destined to sink together in life path, as u n me ..in a ring.. our heart linked besides?

and other shows abt a wife whose husband dont care abt her n now shes walking alone to find herself again..

What Can I say?

Want to go and shout at you , want to some how show my pain to u, but u no longer care for me, Alone walking let me search for ME...

great !!! 👏
good wishes
sri:-)

Hi Sri,

yup two poems as i felt both had a certain difference of perspective pain and feelings.. glad u liked the emotions of both the poems dear.

Emerald and Diamond.. glad u liked the concept of this poem.. its a bit story kind and felt the feelings i was tryign ot brign out..

Another poem also u liked how a woman who cared so mcuh for her husband, he no longer wants her so she is thinkign what can i say... there is nothign fro her to say now but to move on..

feels ncie that u appreciated both my work with such a warmth feelings. thanks dear when it comes to these bits of poem which had written randomly In IF make u all feel emotiosn i feel very glad.. i will surely try to improve myself and post much better poems.. thanks for ur support truly.. tc

luvu

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#425

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Emrald n Diamod:

Now its a very crucial situation I guess....sumtyms ujust donno wat to say....a yes seems very hurried n a no means all vanished....uff....such a tough situation yaar!!! And the last bit....one dressed in green n the other in white....I loved the way u left it wid a question....coz I think lyf is always a question...its actually never ending n none knws wat will happen next. So it was definitely very nice.

Wat can I say:

Well...wat can I Say?? Meri dost ho achhi to zarur likhogi....ryt? Lolz!!! But the situation is very painful n pathetic...doing so many things for one person n getting this kinda behaviour in return....its terrible...it wud be betterto get nothing in return at all.....but at the end she was ryt in searching fr herself...coz at the end of the day....its always ur own self that will be always wid u....so it was definitely nice!!

And dear....i love replying to each of ur poems....coz they all hav different things to convey n I hav got diff feelings reading them....so just like to let u knw..I knw its a pleasant feeling when ur thoughts r appreciated. So I just try to return u a smile as u always bring one to my lips.

Hi Sumaiya,

So u read both the poems.. u liked them.. thanks for likign the conpet of the whole story and ya u felt the meotiosn i felt while writign this down.. though this ws written On IF itself for a antakshri cotnet in just few moments this poem was made.. i stil wonder from where did the story unfold inside me. heheh😆 emerald green n white dress but i felt the story somehwo came from nowhere... so its weird but special na. and u felt he meotion of the girls guilt.. and the question in the end too. so nice to knwo that dear.. glad that it amde it a nice reading..

the other poem abotu the woman whom husbadn left she is wonderign what all she coudl say but knows there is no point in sayignign and is searchign her own self now...

Haan tum meri dost ho..aur mujhe achaa likhna to padega hi..warna log tumharey baaremey kya kahengey😆😆😆dear even i love readign ur comments.. mostly the thoughts we hare and the way u support u encoruage its urely make me feel special and achaa lagata hai.. many feelings r felt in the same way.. so its very very sweet.. for sure.. tc luv u

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#426

Originally posted by: monikaseth
wow bhoomi awesome poem .👏. poem on a great occassion😊
😊I feel proud to be an Indian👏.👏.👏.👏.👏.

Thank you this beautiful poem....👏.👏.👏.👏.👏.👏.

Hi Monika dear... so many applause for Mera Bharat Mahan.. aww that sweet... its all u all here who motivated me to write that day.. espcially Mahak she asked for it and i felt i shoudl and thankfully had mood with me so wrote and posted and it feels good when u have someone aroudn to share ur work dear..

thanks a ton Monika for always been there to share my work support me with ur warmth and love and truly make me feel i am no less . am blesed ot have u all around.. thanks for been so sweet dear.luv u as walways.. tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#427

Originally posted by: Revolutionbreez
EMERALD AND DIAMOND :
Very well written...

The confusion and helplessness of the girl when she is not too sure about getting into the relationship was very well shown.

And finally she realised they are meant for each other...

Very nice poem.

WHAT CAN I SAY?

Well I can say only one thing....that you have very beautifully depicted a very pathetic and sad situation..

hats off to you !!!⭐️

Keep it up!

Hi dear,

u felt it was well written.. hope my thoughts an d feelings were felt that makes me very happy.. i am not that good i know..just trygin to improve all ur words of encoruagment surely lift my spirit thanks for been so sweet.. u liked the poem and felt the meotion of the girl make me very pleased.. i tried a little wit this poem.. hope my next poems dotn bore u .. as i only want u all to enjoy ur time readign my work.. nothing morei expect..

glad hat the other peom also u liked rading and felt the pain of the woman .. thanks for ur lovely set of comments.. tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#428

Originally posted by: ssh57
Emarld & Diamond

In this poem you have expressed the other side of the story. The feelings of the person who doesn't accept someone's love. normally everyone sympathizes with the person who is rejected but its nice to view things from the other side for a change.But this time you have ended it on a very positive note. Very nice. Love ssh57.

Hi Shardha,

Yes , tried to show how the one who rejects can also go thorguh emotional phase and I am glad u coudl feel that and u appreciated the thoguhts which are most important for me in my poem.. thast what my poems are all about my thoughts which i tried to pen down.. I always feel like when i right anything it shoudlbe on a positve note..but sometimes reality touch also u have to give na... 😉😆...

glad dear even thought my poems have their set of errors u appreciate the thoguths behidn and read and comments.. hope to improve my work and write better ..

luv u

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: ssh57
What Can I say?

Though the heroine sounds very sad the end is again very positive.I believe its pointless torturing yourself about someone who doesn't reciprocate your feelings. love sssh57

Hi shardha,

U felt the end was positve i think u are lookgin at the whole thing maturly .. i guess it was all abotu she realising there is nothign more to say to the man, when he doestn care for her anymore.. she has to move on in life and try and discover herself .. to move on and do somethign for her .. Glad that u liked the thought behind the poem .. thanks for commenting, encoruaging me .. tc

Luv

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 15 years ago

#429

Life

Life Pages are full of good and bad,
some may make u happy some make u sad,
Its not a question of how many pages are there,
Its a question of how much u want to read and feel not to tear,
Remember never to forget what good happened,
Remember never to forget what bad phase meant,
Go through them wanting to face everything that comes,
Make ur self strong, face the storm u will surely overcome...
Every moment has its glory,
Every time has its destination,
Life gives u moments sweet or bitter,
Learn from it and make ur future best or better,
Happiness isnt in the outer world or in costly things,
Happiness is an internal blessings which makes u sing,
U feel peaceful within and joy is boundless,
U feel content even in little and never feel restless,
Spirituality is the light that awakens the soul,
Its the happiness which is actually life's goal,
We dont need to be saints or a religious leader,
we only need to be true in charcter and bring goodness near....
Life is a perfect game,
One who reads it properly can gain,
Happiness , success and love is what one likes,
But many complimentary things ignite,
jealousy, insecurity, fear and pain,
The winner is the one who still sustains,
He wins when he doesnt loose hope and doesnt ever doubt,
He wins the game if he wants to fight it out,
He wins if he is positive and focused to do better,
He wins already if he wants to try again but never give up life ever...