Will you... I will - JAi/Vennala OS Page 3

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi All,
For the first time I am writing OS on Jai/Vennala. I am really huge fan of Prabhas and Anushka and loved all their movies specially Mirchi and Baahubali

Here is my token for them.

I loved their chemistry in Mirchi- Jai/Vennala is just superb.

I hope I could able to make justice to it


Thanks

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Posted: 8 years ago
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This OS is mostly on Jai's POV (Point of view)


Giving you all synopsis, this the time when Jai is living in the rival village and and there was an attack on his family and he protects his family and warns the villain on phone that his family was safe.

Jai's POV


I warned him that my family is safe and threatened him to think twice before making any action against my family. I just hope he understands and stops all this, I just want to go back to my family to my baba, chachu and my Vennala

Third Person

His heart thud a beat and a small tear escaped from his left eye when he utter her name from his lips.

Jai's POV

It's been 3 years since I have ever seen her or any member from family. And today all of them are in front of me in danger, I can just save them until I can bring peace between the two villages but I can't meet them or hug them.

Third Person

He thrash his hand which was carrying the sword and bursting his frustration, anger and emotions. He moved a bit ahead and saw their cars were stopped to the nearby clinic.

Jai' POV

Mene to puri koshish ki thi kisi ko koi bhi kuch nuksaan na pahuch sake, but it seems I was not doing my duty rightfully. I know I can't go infront of them but at least I can watch from a distance.

Third Person

He moved ahead and saw everyone taking treatment from doctor and he was watching all of them via a window shield. At that time point he was so in pain, his family was right infront of his eyes yet he cannot move ahead and hug them all and cried out that how much he has missed each and every person, he cannot break the promise he made to his father, he simply cannot. He can't go back them until he bring peace between the two villages and moreover until his father forgive him he can't come infront of him.

Jai's POV

Controlling myself I was just looking all of them how everyone was taking care of each other, doing dressing. I shifted my gaze towards a side and seeing the scene over their my eyes brim with tears again. The love of my life, my heart, my life, my everything she was looking immensely beautiful.


She was equally terrified with the incident but doing her best to control her emotions and attend everyone. Not sure what bond she shares with my father, he really treats her like a daughter and to admit he loves her more than me.

Initially I used to be so jealous of this but now I am really happy. Atleast he has her that could fill every void of their life. I was getting pulled up towards her again, gosh she always to this.


Suddenly I saw a red line was tracking her arm length. It takes me a bit time that she hurt and blood was oozing slowly from her shoulder and here she was busy attending all but not taking care of herself. I wanted to shout her name, want to take her to doctor but my throat was all soaked up. I can't, I can't I just can't. For the first time in these 3 years I am feeling all this helpless, It all happened because of me. But I can't let her blood ooze out like this I have to do something, the girl who has sacrificed so much just for me and what I am doing looking her getting hurt, that's it. This my love for her.


I feel so small today infront of her, she always been queen of my heart but today I realized she is not just queen of my heart, she is queen of our house our family, she is queen of all their hearts and she is queen by heart. Today I felt so happy and so proud that she loves me.


Vennala I promise, I sort out all these things I am sure baba will forgive me by then and then I promise I'll treat you like queen, I won't leave you forever, I'll shower all my love that has been in void for last 3 years on you.

Third Person

With her each passing trail of blood line tears were falling from his eyes, but he was crying from inside his heart was aching seeing her in pain. There Vennala though in pain was still curing his father who was equally hurt. Before Jai could let doctor know about her injury Deva, Jai's father saw her hand and immediately told Doctor to attend Deva.

Jai' POV

Mene sahi kaha tha.. kuch special bond hai tumhara aur baba ka Vennala...unhone bhi tumhari takleef to dekh liya. Per aaj tumhara Jai tumse promise karta hai I'll all this fight soon and will come back to you.

Third Person


He promised with himself and moved from there. Vennala felt his presence rushed towards the exit door, she looked here and there her heart was saying that Jai did visited her.


She just kept looking left right when she saw a retreating figure in white going out. Her heart already sensed that it Jai but yet she was bound not to call him but deep down she knew he'll come back and she'll wait for his arrival the day when he'll show up in front of all and she will cried all her heart out on his shoulder.

Hope you like it
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This so nice. I have always admired and loved Jai and Vennela and reading about them is such a pleasure.
Loved the emotions you portrayed and the way they were keyed onto each other.

True love indeed.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: poetic

This so nice. I have always admired and loved Jai and Vennela and reading about them is such a pleasure.

Loved the emotions you portrayed and the way they were keyed onto each other.

True love indeed.


Thank you..really thanks a lot

This is my first attempt on Jai/Vennela and all these words really matter to me.

Thanks a lot
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Posted: 8 years ago
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My heart broke to pieces with the last statement. How helpless we get indeed when we know our loved one is around but we are not allowed to call his name or hug him tight.
Beautiful. I suppose you are a northy too who watched Khatarnaak Khiladi. I may be wrong though. I too am.
Edited by Penfolk - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi Shafy,
So glad you chose to write on this scene.
In fact I had been searching for Vennela in the scene when they show his family in car.
Chalo I'll stop my bak-bak and straight away go and read the OS, I'm already very late.
Res⭐️

~~~~~~

Unres😃

"I warned him that my family is safe and threatened him to think twice before making any action against my family. I just hope he understands and stops all this, I just want to go back to my family to my baba, chachu and my Vennala"

He must have been really frustrated dealing with that thick-skulled man who didn't what to change.

My Vennela! Ah!

"His heart thud a beat and a small tear escaped from his left eye when he utter her name from his lips."

😭

"It's been 3 years since I have ever seen her or any member from family. And today all of them are in front of me in danger, I can just save them until I can bring peace between the two villages but I can't meet them or hug them."

Almost like an angel would do! Jai was one intense man.

The urge to be close to his loved ones must have killed him.

But how could he show his face to his father before he could show him that he no longer was that monster who loved bloodshed.

"He moved ahead and saw everyone taking treatment from doctor and he was watching all of them via a window shield. At that time point he was so in pain, his family was right infront of his eyes yet he cannot move ahead and hug them all and cried out that how much he has missed each and every person, he cannot break the promise he made to his father, he simply cannot. He can't go back them until he bring peace between the two villages and moreover until his father forgive him he can't come infront of him."

Can feel him so badly. Soon after he'd lost his mother he had lost his father too along with the only woman he'd ever loved! At that time he must've felt the longing for a soothing caress on his head, a comforting hug for him to face the ugly truth. But he'd lost his mother alone but his entire family.

"Jai's POV

Controlling myself I was just looking all of them how everyone was taking care of each other, doing dressing. I shifted my gaze towards a side and seeing the scene over their my eyes brim with tears again. The love of my life, my heart, my life, my everything she was looking immensely beautiful.

She was equally terrified with the incident but doing her best to control her emotions and attend everyone. Not sure what bond she shares with my father, he really treats her like a daughter and to admit he loves her more than me.

Initially I used to be so jealous of this but now I am really happy. Atleast he has her that could fill every void of their life. I was getting pulled up towards her again, gosh she always to this."

He always used to admire her for the love and care she used to give to his family members. There was something in the way she showed care.


"Suddenly I saw a red line was tracking her arm length. It takes me a bit time that she hurt and blood was oozing slowly from her shoulder and here she was busy attending all but not taking care of herself. I wanted to shout her name, want to take her to doctor but my throat was all soaked up. I can't, I can't I just can't. For the first time in these 3 years I am feeling all this helpless, It all happened because of me. But I can't let her blood ooze out like this I have to do something, the girl who has sacrificed so much just for me and what I am doing looking her getting hurt, that's it. This my love for her."

Oh Jai!

"He promised with himself and moved from there. Vennala felt his presence rushed towards the exit door, she looked here and there her heart was saying that Jai did visited her."

Telepathy! Language of hearts😳


😳


Loved reading it!

Do write more on them!

Love,

Swarnima.

Edited by Swarn283 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Swarn283

Hi Shafy,

So glad you chose to write on this scene.
In fact I had been searching for Vennela in the scene when they show his family in car.
Chalo I'll stop my bak-bak and straight away go and read the OS, I'm already very late.
Res⭐️

~~~~~~

Unres😃

"I warned him that my family is safe and threatened him to think twice before making any action against my family. I just hope he understands and stops all this, I just want to go back to my family to my baba, chachu and my Vennala"

He must have been really frustrated dealing with that thick-skulled man who didn't what to change.

My Vennela! Ah!

"His heart thud a beat and a small tear escaped from his left eye when he utter her name from his lips."

😭

"It's been 3 years since I have ever seen her or any member from family. And today all of them are in front of me in danger, I can just save them until I can bring peace between the two villages but I can't meet them or hug them."

Almost like an angel would do! Jai was one intense man.

The urge to be close to his loved ones must have killed him.

But how could he show his face to his father before he could show him that he no longer was that monster who loved bloodshed.

"He moved ahead and saw everyone taking treatment from doctor and he was watching all of them via a window shield. At that time point he was so in pain, his family was right infront of his eyes yet he cannot move ahead and hug them all and cried out that how much he has missed each and every person, he cannot break the promise he made to his father, he simply cannot. He can't go back them until he bring peace between the two villages and moreover until his father forgive him he can't come infront of him."

Can feel him so badly. Soon after he'd lost his mother he had lost his father too along with the only woman he'd ever loved! At that time he must've felt the longing for a soothing caress on his head, a comforting hug for him to face the ugly truth. But he'd lost his mother alone but his entire family.

"Jai's POV

Controlling myself I was just looking all of them how everyone was taking care of each other, doing dressing. I shifted my gaze towards a side and seeing the scene over their my eyes brim with tears again. The love of my life, my heart, my life, my everything she was looking immensely beautiful.

She was equally terrified with the incident but doing her best to control her emotions and attend everyone. Not sure what bond she shares with my father, he really treats her like a daughter and to admit he loves her more than me.

Initially I used to be so jealous of this but now I am really happy. Atleast he has her that could fill every void of their life. I was getting pulled up towards her again, gosh she always to this."

He always used to admire her for the love and care she used to give to his family members. There was something in the way she showed care.


"Suddenly I saw a red line was tracking her arm length. It takes me a bit time that she hurt and blood was oozing slowly from her shoulder and here she was busy attending all but not taking care of herself. I wanted to shout her name, want to take her to doctor but my throat was all soaked up. I can't, I can't I just can't. For the first time in these 3 years I am feeling all this helpless, It all happened because of me. But I can't let her blood ooze out like this I have to do something, the girl who has sacrificed so much just for me and what I am doing looking her getting hurt, that's it. This my love for her."

Oh Jai!

"He promised with himself and moved from there. Vennala felt his presence rushed towards the exit door, she looked here and there her heart was saying that Jai did visited her."

Telepathy! Language of hearts😳


😳


Loved reading it!

Do write more on them!

Love,

Swarnima.


Thank you ..thank you..
So much
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This is so nice..
Plzz plzz update some more parts also
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: haya_gorgeous

This is so nice..

Plzz plzz update some more parts also


Next Part is on way...will update tomorrow.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Here I am with my another OS

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