PraNushka LS : Don't Love Me!/ Scene edits on PAGE 39/4th Sep - Page 27

Originally posted by: sarcasticme

Dear Kaushi

First of all, a big hug to you for creating one of the most wonderful fan fictions ever! Such intriguing characters and situations. I did not even have an IF account, two days ago I created one just to message you and let you know how awesome you are. But some error kept on creeping in,that did not let me post my reply. How I wish I did then!

The best part of your writing has always been the clarity in emotions, the balance of them and above all, THE PACE of the story. I know you are certainly not a writer who would force in gooey romantic scenes and cheesy dialogues just to get readers. Also not someone who would keep a story going for 100 chapters just for the sake of it. Which is how it should be. You're someone who portrays emotions in real sense, being fully just to them. And that exactly is the reason for my disappointment now.

I don't know if it's just me , but in the last two chapters you seemed to be in extreme hurry. The steady graph of their relationship saw a suddenly rise and drop in the last two chapters. Like jumps and fast forwards. At the pace you were progressing in the beginning, I really believed that you would take us through more of how Vivaan and Riha fell so deeply in love. What made Riha more special to him than anyone else. How she influenced his life in a way that people like Sruti couldn't. I was really surprised with the sudden decision of her marriage with someone else and extremely abrupt end. She kinda became yet another Sruti there.

I do support your idea about tragic endings. While I'm not really a fan of tragedies, I agree that such stories leave a greater impact. Unsaid feelings to be precise! Like how the character of Asin dies in Ghajini without knowing Suriya's truth. It made it painful but the love seemed more eternal. Though this story would have been better off with a happy ending, this isn't bad anyway.

But how I wish you had taken a little more time to explore their relationship! I guess the beautiful characters you created atleast deserved more time if not for a happy ending. I'm saying this only because I know you are very very very capable of doing it. You even made the lazy me create an IF account. I even had a movie made in my mind with your story and dialogues.

Anyway, thank you wonderful girl, for giving us these characters. Shall forever cherish them. And I will look forward to more of your writing!

Keep creating magic. God bless you !

PS : Someday if you could, share some moments from the period of their budding relation. This is a very personal request :) just like people accept alternate sequences to movies, they would love it for this story also!

Originally posted by: hasi.83

Aiyoo Kaushi why

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Yesterday I had a bad feeling this going to end up in some tragedy... Didn't expect it... I m shaking right now... And I have to drive.. 😭 😭 😭

Originally posted by: Bangaram35

@Penfolk

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Eventhough I am not a fan of tragedies, I felt the ending to be fitting because in my opinion if Vivaan and Riha did get married, Vivaan might constantly have been on edge thinking what might happen to

Riha.. It would have taken a great deal of coping on his part to justify his characterisation.

Kudos for the great writing. Story could have been a bit better though😉

I am glad you finished the story because in a way I was not able to bear Vivaan's suffering( your writing was that good).

Keep up the good work and awaiting for more exciting writing from you.

Originally posted by: sram21

I came to thread just to challenge myself and to see you updated your story or not :), You did:). . ! I loved your story from beginning to ending. every bit and part of it.. I am not thinking abt their end,, I am thinking they are together.. finally happily.ever after... :) keep writing.. ! thanks for the amazing story!

Originally posted by: bahubalifan

I should have known this 😭

Kaushi ji, I didn't like the ending one bit !! I understand life isn't fair to all but we already see so much of tragic in our everyday lives atleast this story could have ended positively by the reunion of Riha-Vivaan and them living happily ever after, giving the message that no matter how bad it is don't lose hope you will see the light at the end of the tunnel some day. Hmm..

But I must say you are one fabulous writer ! Each update was intriguing kept me asking for more. All came on fine until this tragic ending Bb2 was too much for me to take and now this... ok leave it...

Thank you so much for this story. Pls do write more and give us a happy ending next time. Thank you ! 🤗

Originally posted by: RyReyFics

@bold red - Hey darling, this is a wonderful suggestion! Thank you so much for coming up with this idea. To be honest, I really haven't had enough of Vivaan and Riha.

Can you do that Kaushi? Write a couple of one shots? So dying to see more. I'm sure there could have been more wonderful moments between Vivaan and Riha that made their bond so strong!

P.S. It can even be a scene from their afterlife! 😃

Originally posted by: emerald39

Dear oh dear Lord. Kaushi. I was a little wrapped up in my work for two days and come back to read these two chapters, and just. Gahhh.

Okay, now that I have gotten my short ramble out of the way: Girl, the last chapter was so, bloody, haunting. Yes, I am sad that Vivaan and Riha's time has come to an end on Earth. Yes, I wanted Riha to hear Vivaan's confession for herself. But you know what makes a good writer? When there comes a twist so unexpected, you take the readers' breath away. So, for that, Kaushi, you are a brilliant, brilliant writer/storyteller. Because I had no inkling that this was coming my way! At all!

More than that, it's the format in which you presented this. With the date and the time stamp, you described the scene instead of blatantly saying "they died". It just added to the overall effect of the message. And then you explained why this ending came about, and it was like a cherry on top of a cake for me. Especially the fact that this love was so different from the rest Vivaan had had, because he chose to go along. And I think this is the greatest gift Vivaan could've ever received: to wrap up his time on Earth just as Riha did, because in afterlife, he needn't be worried about death anymore. So, despite me being exceptionally sad right now, I will think of it as a happily ever after for Vivaan and Riha, minus all the angst and fear that there would've been if they were to be together, alive.

Also, finally, I have got to say this: evoking emotions in readers/audience is what storytellers live for. Good or bad, if the reaction is there, that's what they lap up happily. So, in that sense, you have grown to be quite the talented storyteller. Well done! Keep writing, on Pranuska-based character or on Amarsena. And always, always PM me when you do.

Much love,

Anu.