PraNushka LS : Don't Love Me!/ Scene edits on PAGE 39/4th Sep - Page 25

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@Penfolk

Darling, considering the unique ending of this story, I had to add a few more things. One, do not get disheartened by the hate or negative comments that come your way. It takes courage besides effort and creativity to write a different kind of story. This one, is no less beautiful than a one with a happy ending. If you look at Baazigar, Titanic, Romeo & Juliet or even Baahubali (Amarasena), they had tragic endings, but that's one of the reasons why they are remembered even today.

Dear Kaushi

First of all, a big hug to you for creating one of the most wonderful fan fictions ever! Such intriguing characters and situations. I did not even have an IF account, two days ago I created one just to message you and let you know how awesome you are. But some error kept on creeping in,that did not let me post my reply. How I wish I did then!

The best part of your writing has always been the clarity in emotions, the balance of them and above all, THE PACE of the story. I know you are certainly not a writer who would force in gooey romantic scenes and cheesy dialogues just to get readers. Also not someone who would keep a story going for 100 chapters just for the sake of it. Which is how it should be. You're someone who portrays emotions in real sense, being fully just to them. And that exactly is the reason for my disappointment now.

I don't know if it's just me , but in the last two chapters you seemed to be in extreme hurry. The steady graph of their relationship saw a suddenly rise and drop in the last two chapters. Like jumps and fast forwards. At the pace you were progressing in the beginning, I really believed that you would take us through more of how Vivaan and Riha fell so deeply in love. What made Riha more special to him than anyone else. How she influenced his life in a way that people like Sruti couldn't. I was really surprised with the sudden decision of her marriage with someone else and extremely abrupt end. She kinda became yet another Sruti there.

I do support your idea about tragic endings. While I'm not really a fan of tragedies, I agree that such stories leave a greater impact. Unsaid feelings to be precise! Like how the character of Asin dies in Ghajini without knowing Suriya's truth. It made it painful but the love seemed more eternal. Though this story would have been better off with a happy ending, this isn't bad anyway.

But how I wish you had taken a little more time to explore their relationship! I guess the beautiful characters you created atleast deserved more time if not for a happy ending. I'm saying this only because I know you are very very very capable of doing it. You even made the lazy me create an IF account. I even had a movie made in my mind with your story and dialogues.

Anyway, thank you wonderful girl, for giving us these characters. Shall forever cherish them. And I will look forward to more of your writing!

Keep creating magic. God bless you !

PS : Someday if you could, share some moments from the period of their budding relation. This is a very personal request :) just like people accept alternate sequences to movies, they would love it for this story also!

Thanks for Update,Dear..😊

Oh girl.. I just read the two accidents and stopped reading further. 😕

Originally posted by: ratna.nanda

I can't help but say. ..this is one story that has disappointed me the most along with how ssr chose to kill amarendra bahubali ...this was even more brutal!

This ending may seem poignant to those who relish tragedies but for me this was very very brutal kaushi. I don't understand why people create beautiful characters and stories just to end that in a tragedy. ..making the earnest readers remember these characters with tears and haunted by them. ..the author does not suffer alone.

Your conscience may be satisfied dear author,but you have truly disappointed a reader who used to religiously read each update and enjoy it...

And on a final note, I will shudder. ..and think 100 times before reading another story from you @Penfolk. ..

Ratna.

I understand each and every word. And I can say nothing in my defence because I don't choose to. Of course it's your choice if you will read Penfolk ever again, but I thank you from the bottom of my heart for reading this. 😊