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Flashback: NA is blackmailing Preeto about Ishu's marriage. Preeto refuses to marry anyone other than Rajbeer. Simmi is blindly in love with Rajbeer. Sunny tring to impress Preeto.
Preeto was on her way back from the Cafe to her house. Her luna broke down, so she dropped in Mickey's garage. She was walking and thinking about what NA had said. Suddenly out of no where a car comes and crushes Preeto. Instead of looking back at what happened, the driver just drived away. People were gathered up.
Dhillon house...
Everyone is gathered, including Sunny, Pankaj, Dhruv, Ishu, NA, Simmi and Rajbeer. The phone rings, Bani goes and picks up the phone, after like 30 sec.
Bani- BJ! and starts crying. Everyone stops and starts looking at her.
Bj- Bani puttar kya hua.
Bani- woh... kisne Preeto di ko
Papaji- kya hua hai Preeto ko
Bani- kisne Preeto di ka accident kardiya
Everyone is shocked.
Simmi- kaha hain Preeto, kisne kaha tumse
Bani- woh hospital se phone aya.
Everyone quickly gets out of the house. Rajbeer is so worried, but is about to break down any second. When they get to the hospital, Ishu- doctor, yaha pe ek ladki ka acciendent wala case aya hai?
Doctor- hai, ek ladki ka hain. Kisne bahaut beramhe se accident kiya hai. Ap log abhi ward number 4 ke bhar jaiye.
Bj, and all the sisters are crying outside the ward. Everyone was depressed except NA. NA in her mind said- mere beti ki khushiyan liyna chahate thi, dekho meine tumse sirf tumhara pyaar hi nahi balki tumhare zindagi bhi liyli.
Doctors come out and say- patient bahaut critical hain unki surgery karne pade gi. unka blood group A positive hai. Humare hospital mein woh blood nahi hain aur patient ko bahaut ziyada blood loss hai. Agar hume blood nahi mila toh phir hum unhe nahi bacha paingay. Ap mein kise ka blood group hain A positive?
No one had that kind of blood and all Rajbeer could do was cry. He finally broke down. He looks at the picture of Babaji and thinks about Preeto smiling. His Preeto, how needed blood seriously and he couldn't help. His Preeto, who lived and fought for others, today is lying helpless on the bed and is loosing her own battle. His Preeto who was the sun of his life, infact was his life. But then he decided he wasn't going to let her loose. He was going to find blood for her, even if he had go around entire Amritsar.
Rajbeer wiping his tear- Bj, Papaji mein Preeto ki liye blood dondne gata hoon.
Dhruv- wait, mein bhi
Rajbeer and Dhruv go of in search of blood, they couldn't find it easily because the blood group was rare.
Dhruv- mujhe nahi lagta ki hume Preeto ko bacha paiengay.
Rajbeer- agar tumhe madat nahi karne toh maat karo lekin mere Preeto ko mein kise bhi hal mein bachaonga.
Dhruv- yaar, mera matlab woh nahi tha
Meanwhile his phone rings, Ishu called.
Ishu- kya blood mila,
Dhruv- nahi, ab bas ek hi hospital bacha hai pure Amritsar mein.
After Ishu heard Dhruv, she just dropped her phone. And began to cry as usual. Ishu- Dhruv keh rahe hai ki blood nahi mila.
The situation just got worse. The doctor came by- blood mila.
Papaji- nahi
Doctor- jaldi kariyan, patient ke pas waqt zida nahi ha. Hume zida se zida patient ko blood ke bina 20 minute tak zinda kar sakte hai.
Bj was so scared, for the first time in her life. She was seeing her little daughter who was the brightness of the house in the mouth of death.
She takes NA's phone dials Rajbeer number. Rajbeer picks it up,- hello
Bj- puttar tu jaldi aja, Doctors key rahe hain ki Preeto ke pas sirf 20 minute hai.
Rajbeer- ap chinta maat karo, mujhe khoon milagaya hai. Sirf dus minute mein a raha hoon.
Bj- tera lakh lakh sukar hai puttar, mere bachi ko moth ke moo se nekal ne ke liye.
After hearing Bj say that, NA is shocked how she Preeto gonna survive she wondered.
Rajbeer and Dhurv arrive at the hospital, Rajbeer carrying 3 bags of blood. Dhruv spotts the doctor.
Dhruv- Doctor, hum patient ke liye khoon le aya.
Doctor- good, agar 5 min aur dir hojati toh phir hum patient ko bacha ne ki umed bhi nahi kar sakte the.
Papaji- doctor, meri Preeto bach toh jayegi na.
Doctor- dekhiyan, hum full garanty nahi de sakte. Patient just might not make it. Hum puri kosh karengay.
The surgery begans, Bj is praying to Babaji for her daughter's life.
Meeta- patta nahi kiski nazar lagae. Ag subha hi toh puri tarase tekh thi. Aur ab moth aur zindagi ke bich main jole rahe hai mere choti behen.
The surgery took about 6-7 hours. Then operation light turned off, the doors opened. Everyone was hoping for good news. For Rajbeer it was the matter of life and death. Life would be Preeto and death would be Preeto's death.
Sonu- Doctor mere di zinda toh hain na.
Doctor- puri tara se nahi beta, tumhare di puri tara se zinda nahi hai.
Ishu screamed- TOH PHIR KYA HUA HAI USE!
Dhruv- Ishu relax
Ishu- relax, agar tumhare behen Simran waha hoti toh kya tum relax karte.
Rajbeer- Doctor please tell me, Preeto zinda hai
Doctor- woh, woh actually puri tara se nahi. Woh coma mein hai. Isse cases mein agar patient coma mein se 2,3 ganto mein bahar nahi aya toh phir woh technically sirf ek laas hai.
Rajbeer broked down.
Simmi- Rajbeer, tumhe toh strong hona chahiye.
Rajbeer- kise strong rahon, meri zindagi ka fesla sirf 3-4 ganto mein ho na.
Simran was confused wheather Rajbeer was in love with her or Preeto. She didn't ask anything more.
Preeto was on a stitcher and was shifted to a room. Rajbeer was looking at his life, half dead and half alive. He was broken when he saw Preeto living on the support of wire attached to her body. He went inside and held her hand and just started crying. Papaji was about to go inside but Bj stopped him by his arm.
Bj- Preeto ko uske saath rahen do jo use iss doniya mein sabse siyada pyaar karta hai.
Ishu- Bj ap kya bol rahe hoon
Bj narrates everything that she read in Preeto's note to Rajbeer (her living for her family) and then agreeing to marry him. Then suddenly saying no to his proposal.
2-3 HOURS LATER...
Preeto still hadn't come out of coma. Everyone is present in Preeto's room with a depressed look. Other than NA how just had a depressed mask. Rajbeer finally decided to say something.
Rajbeer still holding her hand- Preeto, tumhe wapas ana padiga. Tumhare bina mera kya hoga yeh socha tha tumne. Mere liye nahi toh phir apne family ke liye. please wapas ao.
Simran was looking at Rajbeer pour his heart out from the door way. Dhruv was shocked when Rajbeer started talking.
Rajbeer- maine tumhe khabhi apne family ko support karne se nahi roka. Lekin mujhe kise aur ka nahi sirf tumhara support chahiye. Yeh maat bholo Preeto ke bina Rajbeer bikol athora hai.
NA was now angry at Rajbeer and Preeto. She thought even in this state Preeto managed to hurt Simran.
NA- Rajbeer beta, ap kya bol rahe ho? Preeto se siyada achi ladki ap ko mil sakte hai.
Rajbeer- nahi mil sakti, kyunki Preeto se siyada acha iss dooniya mein nahi hai.
NA- Rajbeer, Preeto sirf apki zid hai. Simran hai woh jo ap se actually pyaar karti hai.
Rajbeer was now even more shocked and same with everyone else. Rajbeer looked at Simran than back at NA.
Rajbeer- Neelam Aunty, agar Preeto mere zid hai toh zid hai. Lekin agar mujhe mere zid nahi mile toh mein kuch bhi kar sakta ho. Kuch bhi ka matlab patta hai na apko, sucide bhi.
NA- don't be silly. She's not worth of committing sucide.
Rajbeer- mujhe ap se koi baat nahi karne.
Bani walked over to Preeto and held her other hand.
Bani- di, agar mujhe iss duniya main kyo bhi ap se siyada pyaar nahi karta. Please di, apne pyaar, Bj Papaji aur apne beheno ke liye wapas aja.
Just when Bani finished talking, a tear rolled down Rajbeer's eye. It landed on Preeto's hand. Rajbeer was looking at the part where the tear was then something unexpected happened.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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my god what a story !! i loved it !! i get so emotionnal, ur dialoges are breathtaking !
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Wow what a ff. You are very talented. I am reading this with tears in my eyes. 😭 Very emotional dialogues. Keep up the good work. Waiting for the next part. 👏
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Guys, if u want a happy story line then u could check my other ff 'Preeto personal track'. It is about NA and RajPreet wedding. But, in this ff its about NA but RajPreet wedding isn't going to take place easily.
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Part 2...

There was a movement in Preeto's fingers but Rajbeer thought he was dreaming. Then her hand moved and now Rajbeer was sure she was coming out of coma, a smile appeared on his face. Her other hand soon after started moving too. Bani was now smiling too.
Bani- Bj, di ko hosh a raha hai.
Bj and everyone gathered around Preeto. Slowly Preeto started to open her eyes. She left so weak but when she saw her family and Rajbeer happy she somehow managed to hide the pain.
Bj- dhruv, ja doctor ko bola la
Dhruv left and came back with the doctor.
Doctor- please, ap bhar jaeya.
Everyone left the room and it was just Preeto and the doctor in the room.
Doctor- Preeto ab isse koi jaaga hai jo tum feel nahi kar sakte.
Preeto- woh actually mere pair feel nahi kar sakti.
Doctor took x-rays of her legs and then studied them.
Doctor- i'm sorry. Tumhare pair paralyzed hain.
Preeto was shattered after hearing that, tears started coming out of her eyes. The doctor left the room and went outside.
Papaji- kya hua doctor.
Doctor- i'm sorry. Preeto ko jab admit kiya gaya tha tab logo ne kaha tha ki car completly Preeto ki body upar se gaye thi. I think ke uske pairon mein jo paralyzation hain woh car ki waja se hain. Lekin yeh temporary hain yeh sayad permanent bhi ho sakta hai. Abhi main yeh keh sakta hoon ki woh kuch time tak normally nahi chal sakige.
Rajbeer's happiness was half stolen again. The good news was that his Preeto was back but the bad news was that she was a handicap.
Rajbeer- iss paralyzation se chotkara pane ki liye koi toh treatment ya theoraphy hogi.
Doctor- the best treatment for her is to try walking. Thats the only solution here.
NA- Maine un goons ko Preeto ko maar dal ne ke paise diye the. But unhone sirf use handicap.
Dhruv was angry at his mom and he turned around. NA then realized what she had just said.
Dhruv- how could mom. Apne issa kyu kiya?
NA- Woh meine Simran ki khushi ke liye kiya.
Simran- Just stop it. Bhai just call the cops. Its a attempt of murder. Aaj mujhe sharam ati hai ki meine iss aurat ki kouk se janam liya.
Dhruv calls the cops.
Bj- tujh jaise aurat toh thuk ne ke layak bhi nahi hai. Tu ne apni beti ki khushi ke liye mere beti ki zindagi le na chaha.
Then cops arrive after some time and one of the cops holds on to NA's hand.
NA- LET ME GO! Dhruv tum ek ladki key liye apne maa ko jail karogay.
Dhruv- woh ek ladki nahi mere saali hai.
NA- Preeto tumne mujhe jail karae. Kise behen ho tum, Ishmeet ki shaadi key liye Rajbeer ko nahi chod sakte. Tumne Rajbeer ko choda lekin wwoh tumse dur nahi gaya. Toh meine tumhe apaej bana diya. Ab dekti hoon, ke Rajbeer ki apaej ladki se kaise shaadi karta hai?
The cops take NA to jail.
Doctor- Hum Preeto ko 2 din baad discharge karengay.
2 Day Later...
Preeto was sitting on her bed at the hospital. She was thinking that this accident has brought her to know that Rajbeer was the person who cares about the most. In the past 2 days, Rajbeer came to visit her the most often. Even her own parents didn't visit her as much. He would have his breakfast with her, he would leave the Air Force Camp at lunch so he could have his lunch with her. He even had dinner with her. Today she was going to be discharged. Preeto was very eager to go home and see her sisters. She also wanted to know if her sisters thought that she was a burden on them or not.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow its getting exciting but poor preeto paralyzed 😕, hope you continue soon..great writing 😛
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Wonderfully written. 👏👏 Keep writing.
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waw BRAVO dear keep going very goood job
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Part 3...
Rajbeer came to pick her up. In the hospital parking lot. Rajbeer picked her up in his arms and they had little eye lock and then Rajbeer's phone rang. That broke their eye lock and they Rajbeer carefully placed Preeto in the car. Rajbeer folded her wheelchair and then put it in the car.
Dhillon house...
When RajPreet got there, Meeta was arguing with Bj.
Meeta- kay Bj, ab Preeto ki waja se mujhe opar wali kamro mein rahena padega. Us din diyan de ke nahi chal satki thi kya, mere room bhi mujhse le liya.
Bj- tera kamra gaya uska apsos hai lekin Preeto Ishmeet ke liye apne zindagi bhi dine ja rahe the woh nazar nahi aya. Tere shaadi ka karcha, Ishu ki shaadi ka karcha woh sab Preeto ne kud samhala tha.
Ishu- kisne use nahi kaha tha woh sab karne ke liye. Waise woh sab chud, chal hum shopping karne jate hain.
Meeta- ana toh hai lekin us Preeto ke waja se hum kya ja sakengaye. Kud toh chal nahi sakte aur saath mein humara bhar jana bhi rok diya hai.
Bani- aj di ko wheelchair ke zaroot padrahe hai lekin iss ghar mein ap sab ka boj akele leti ae ha. Ap yeh sab keh rahe hai Meeta di. Toh iss ghar pe tere mote pan ki waja se boj hai. Aur ap Ishu di, apki waja se humesha Preeto di taklef pe taklef saiti ae hai. Ap toh behen key ne key layak bhi nahi hon.
Preeto- Bani, bas kar. Agar mein chal phir nahi sakti toh phir mein hi toh hon iss ghar ka boj.
Sonu- boj ap nahi ho di. Apko chalne ke liye ek wheelchair ki zaroot hai lekin ek pahad jelne ki takat hai ap mein.
Bj- woh sab chud. Rajbeer puttar use Meeta ke room mein leja.
2 MONTHS LATER...
Preeto is dieing from the inside. She hurt Rajbeer countless times but his love was never less. Her sister, for whom she hurt Rajbeer left her helpless. Only Bani, Sonu, her parents and Rajbeer cared about her. Rajbeer made her walk on the help of crutches. She would fall at first but Rajbeer was always behind her to help her up. Then when she was okay with the crutches, Rajbeer toke one of the crutches away. He took her hand and helped her walk. Now that was very difficult for her. But she eventually learned how to handle it with Rajbeer's help. One day, after the walking practice the lights went off. Moonlight was present, Rajbeer - main candle leke ata hon.
Before Rajbeer left Preeto - Rajbeer yaha pe ruko na please. Mujhe apse kuch baat karne hai.
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Part 4...
Preeto- Rajbeer mujhe apse baat karne hai
Rajbeer- kya
Preeto- pehle darwasa baand karo
Rajbeer goes and locks the doors and then comes and then sits next to Preeto.
Rajbeer- kya baat hai Preeto
Preeto- paata nahi chalta ke apke dil mein mere liye itna pyaar kaise ho sakta hai. Maine apko itna hurt, apne beheno ka balha karnegae toh phir apke saath bora kiya.
Rajbeer- Preeto tum kya kehna chaheti ho
Preeto- main bas apse yeh kehna chateti mein apse... main apse bhaut pyaar karti ho. Bj sahi thi, jab mein kamsur padongi tab mere behene nahi ap mere madat karongay. Lekin apko poora hak hai ek normal jeevan saathi chuneka. Agar ap chahate ho toh phir ap ek isse ladki se shaadi kar sakte ho jo apse kadam mila ke chal sake.
Rajbeer- mein dekh raha ho ke iss ek accident ki waja se tumne apne dil ke baat sune. Agar tum mere pas iss accident ki waja se ae ho toh phir yeh shayad pehle hoona chahiye tha. Aur sawal raha mere shaadi ka toh phir woh toh mein tumse hi karonga. Jo tumne pechle 8 maheno mein kiya woh mere poore zindagi mein koi aur nahi kar sakta. Jeevan ka matlab tum ho. Mein indera ho aur tum ogala.
Preeto- mujhme sirf indera hi hai. Aur indere se humesha chot lagte hai. Mere behene hi mujhe boj samhej ti hai toh phir main appe boj nahi ho iske toh mein umed bhi nahi kar sakte.
Rajbeer- agar yeh sab tum tumhare beheno ki waja se keh rahe ho toh aur mujhe bhaut ifsos hai unke liye. Kyunki unhe indere mein aur ujale ka fark nahi patta.
Preeto- ap itne acche kaise ho sakte ho
Rajbeer- mujhe accha tumne banaya hai aur ag main bhi tumse kuch kehna chahata hon
Preeto- kya
Rajbeer- kya tum mujse shaadi karogi. Main tumhare na ke baad yeh nahi suna chahata ke tum ek normal insaan ki waja se nahi chal sakte. Kyunki meine pyaar tumse, tumhare achaeo se aur tumhare dil se kiya hai tumhare pysical features se nahi. Miss Manpreet Dhillon kya tum Mrs. Manpreet Rajbeer Signh banogi. Iss janam aur har janam mein mera saath dogi.
Preeto- ha, lekin sirf iss janam ki garantee hai. Har janam ke liye kuch extra efforts karne padengay-
Rajbeer- tumhe thoda extra pyaar karna paadega aur tumhare extra nikre jelne padengay yahe na. Main tumhe thodi nahi bhaut zayad extra pyaar karonga aur tumhare har nekre jelhoga.
Rajbeer opens his arms wide open for Preeto and they hug. Preeto looks up to him smiling and says- aur une ke saath mujhe pora hak hai ke main upko poore zindagi sata sakte hon?
Rajbeer- hold on. Toh phir mein bhi tumse ladhonga, tumhe jussa dila sakta hon. Kyunki jab tum jussa hoti ho na toh phir tumhare nak laal hoti hai.
Rajbeer touches her nose with his finger while saying that. Preeto leaves his embrace.
Preeto- kya nak laal hoti hai.
Rajbeer- ha aur mein woh laal nak poori zindagi dekh na chahata hon. Aur phir uske liye tumhe poori zindagi mere saath rah na padega. Tum poori zindagi mere saath raho gi na.
Preeto pretends to think hard just to irritate Rajbeer.
Preeto- soch ke baatongi.
Rajbeer- nahi abhi baatao.
Preeto has a smile on her face that yes but just to tease Rajbeer she says no.
Rajbeer- Bas pori zindagi isshe mere saath rahena. Kabhi rut jana, kabhi pyaar karna, kabhi jussa karna toh phir kabhi...
The lights come back and then Preeto looks at the clock.
Preeto- Haye raba, itna late hogaya. Ab jao warna late hogaoge kal subha.
Rajbeer smiles and then leaves.
3 WEEKS LATER...
Now Preeto can finally walk on her own. She goes to the kitchen to get something to eat.
Preeto- Bj mujhe bouk laje hai please kuch kehne dona.
Meeta- kuch kehne ko nahi milega. Aise bhi 3-4 months se koi bhi kam toh karti nahi hai. Bas moft ki rotiya todte hai.
Bj- yeh le Preeto. Sabzi aur roti makhan laja ke.
Preeto- nahi Bj buk nahi hai.
Meeta- aur nahi toh kya. Na ghar ka kam karti hain nahi bahar ka.
Bj- Meeta beshram tu toh isse bol rahe hai jise toh bhaut kam karti hai. 2 waqt ki pehle roti kamana sik isse. Bachpan mein kitne sare raat boukhi soi hai lekin tere haathi jaise paat barke.
Meeta- Bj, ap ko patta hai ke meine apne shaadi postpone karadi iske chakar mein. 4 months se mein ghar chala rahe hon.
Bj- 4 months se ghar chala rahe hai toh phir itna suna rahe hai. Preeto ne 4 saal yeh ghar chalya tab toh isse kuch nahi kaha.
Ishu- toh phir kya humpe ihesaan kiya hai.
Bj- jo behen ghar chala te hai na use bhai kehte hai aur bhai toh door ke baat behen hone ka hak bhi nahi dite use.
Preeto- Bj ap sant hojao. Mein apne room mein jati hon.
Ishu- oh hello madam. Jab pair thik hogaye hai toh phir Meeta di ki shaadi ke liye paise ighate kar ja.
Preeto- ha di. Woh mein paise ka intazam karti hon.
Bj- Ruk Preeto. Are patta nahi kya paap kiye the pichle janam mein jo tum donu jaise olade mile. Ek woh hai jo thik thoti hi Meeta ki shaadi ke liye paise jod rahe hai. Aur ek yeh duno hai. Aur tu Ishmeet yeh jo zewar aur saari pehne hai na tu ne. Woh sab Preeto ke khoon pasene ki badalt hai. Yaha tek ke tere jote bhi use laake diye hai.
Meeta- ap humesha hum donu ko kya bolte ho Bj. Preeto ko bhi kuch bolo.
Bj- Agar tum donu chodelo mein se kisne bhi mere bachi ki taraf dekha bhi toh phir mein deke markar iss ghar se inkal dongi. Manhus ho tum donu. Mere bachi tum donu ki waja se chen ke neend bhi nahi soti.
Sonu- ha Bj mein toh kehte hon ke Preeto di ki shaadi Rajbeer bhaiya se kardo.
Bani- bilkul sahi bol rahe hai tu Sonu. Rajbeer bhaiya di ko khushiya denya unlike Ishmeet di and Meeta di Preeto di ki khushiya lengay nahi.
Ishmeet- Basharam.
She goes to slap Bani on the face but someone holds her hand. She thought it was Bj but when she looked it was Preeto.
Preeto- di apko koi hak nahi hai ke ap mere choti behen par haath oatae.
Ishu- dekha ap ne Bj mere haath rok liya iss ne. Baado ke koi issat nahi hai isse.
Bj remains silent and watches whats going on.
Preeto turns to Bani- Bani tu Sonu ko leke upar ja.
Bani aur Sonu go upstairs. Preeto lets go of Ishmeet's hand.
Preeto- agar ap ki jaga Bj hote na toh bhi mein unka haath ruk ti. Mere sirf 2 behene hai Bani aur Sonu. Haar inch unpe ane se pehle mujhse ho gusrehgi.
Edited by unknownunknown - 13 years ago

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