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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: lucky.m

❤️Dakshna honeymoon continution❤️

Iss tarah shower sse saath mein bahar aane ke baad..naina in arms of daksh😍..both lost in each other.Daksh slowly takes up naina's face into his arms..naina ke chehre pe kahi kahi paani ke boonde hain..😳tho daksh ne unhe hatane ka responsibility liya.
😆.
He starts taking them away with his lips...☺️slowly kisses naina on her fore head , then eyes..then cheeks...then.about to kiss her ..☺️
Phone baja..phone baja....😕
Daksh is not in a mood to pick up the( busy jo hai), 😆

Naina; daksh tumhara phone..( jaise usse pata nahi)😆

Daksh; bajane dona.aur tum mujhe disturb mat karo...aur phir se pane kaam mein lag jaata hein😉

Lekin phone bandh hona ka naam nahi le raha hain...naina asks daksh to pick attend the call first

Naina; daksh dekhona..kuch jaroori call hoga..warna itni baar call nahi karte..javo syaing this she puhses him way slowly😕
Daksh ; kya naina? acha mood kharab kar diya😕...iss phone ko tho😡...he starts going towards his phone which is on table..then he turns back and says; tum ye mat sochna ki tun bach gayi aur maine tumhe chod diya...😆

Naina; gives cute smile 😛and says aur mein bachna bhi nahi chahthi😍..mr.daksh patwardan...saying this.she starts wiping her hair

..Daksh picks up the phone, sits on bed and looks at calls..naina comes and sits besides him and asks..
Nains;kiska phone hein??😲
Daksh ; ghar se ayi ka..😛
Naina; ayi ka? tho call karona..mein baat karungi pehle..she snatches phone away from daksh and calls PH number aur loud speaker pe lagati hein😊

Ayi picks the call

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Can't say in my words sooo goood...
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: lucky.m

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Naina; ayi aap kaise ho? hum..teek hain ayi..yaha pe sab kuch teek hein..
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Hamra dakshu silent betne walo mein se nahi hein.he comes and hugs naina from back.and phir se kaam mein lag gaya😉...😆naina finding hard to concentrate.😉.

Ayi; chintu kaha hein?❓
Daksh ayi; mein yahi par hoon..ghar pe sab kaise hain?😲
Ayi; hum sab bhi teek hain..tho tum log wapas kab aarahe ho?

Dakshna look at each other..naina smiles and gives an expression batavo?

Daksh; ayi mein kab se keh raha hoon ghar chalte hein..lekin aapki bahu.😆..ghar wapas aanae ka naam nahi leti..😆...kehti hain ye jagah bahut acha hein aur..😆

Naina ; nahi ayi..daksh joot keh raha hein..jhoota..saying this takes a piloow and hits him

Daksh( acting); ahhh😛 naina.kya kar rahi ho? chodo mujhe, kuch dher bhi wait nahi karsakthi.😳.thoda sabr karo😉 winks at her 😆with naughty smile)😊

Naina opens her mouth looking at daksh..( saara iljam uss par jo laga raha hein)😉

Ayi understands the situation and asks them to take care and disconnects call

Naina..mrs kp look ke saath dakshu ko dekh rahi hein.😡

Daksh; aise kyu dekh raho?mujhe bahut darr lag raha hain.😆.saying this he falls on bed and starts laughing😃.Naina sits on bed and starts hitting him with pillows

,daksh; arey naina..naina..lag jayega..

Naina; tumne ayi se jhoot kyu kaha? maine kya kiya?pata nahi ayi mere baare mein kya soch rahi hogi?

Daksh; arey tumhe boora laga..tho ek kaam karte hein..pulls naina towards him..(daksh neeche pillow in b/w aur uske upar naina)..jhoot ko sach mein badlte. hain.kuch karne se maine tumhe rokha tho nahi.😳..saying this he takes of pillow b/w them😍😍
An intense eye lock..❤️.naina sharamake;😳 aaj kal bilkul besharam hote jaa rahe ho? kuch tho sharam karo

Daksh gets up sits on bed and says; excuse me ;sharmana tho tum ladkiyon ka kaam.jaise kuch dher pehle tum sharmarahithi..agar dono sharmate rahenge..tho honey moon kaisa hoga..😉

Naina; stands up( puts a hand on her waist) ; acha.tum tho aise baat kar rahe ho jaise tum kabhi sharmate nahi..
Daksh; main? aur sharmana? kabhi nahi?😆(jhoota)

Naina slowly gets onto the bed..comes closer to daksh aur daksh ko bed par giarti hain.daksh surprised at naina's behaviour

Naina( in very romantic way)❤️..😉oh daksh..tumhe pata hain..tum bina shirt ke kitna hot lag rahe ho😆,,tumhe aise dekh kar mere dil mein kuch kuch ho raha hein😆😆

Daksh ek dum se cute cute pink KP banjaata hein😳☺️..aur sharmaane lagata hain☺️

Naina sees at his face and starts laughing😆; ab dekho..tumhara chehra...kaise sharmarahe ho continues to have fun..

Daksh lil angry., gets up;.; acha ,tho ye sab kuch apne point prove karne ke liye kiya..

Naina; haan aur nahi tho kya? lekin tum sachmuch hot lagrahe ho..kyu tumhe nahi lagta? saying this she gets up

Daksh; pulls naina to bed..comes closer to naina and says;muje lagta hain mein hot tab ban jaato hoon jab tum mere saath hote ho...😉

Phir se dono khogaye..lekin ab position change..naina neeche, daksh upar😍

Naina; daksh ..aaj hamara bahar jaane ka programme?😲..they take turn on bed

Daksh; programme cancel😆kyunki mujhe kaam adhoora chodne ki aadat nahi hey...comes closer to naina...scene fades...😉

PS; Sunday jo aagaya..DDLJ khatam hogaya..was feeling lil bored..so thought of this..hope u will like this😉



I can bet u can try as a CV in any of the serials bcoz we enjoy alot
soo good Please write like this aur likhna aisahi kushiyo se bhare naina aur Daksh ki kahani...

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Posted: 14 years ago

I absolutely loved it, love ur dialogues and the whole scene, so creative, esp Naina Daksh se bachna hi nahi chahti, daksh acting , sharmana ka kam ladkiyon ki hoti hai and then Naina making Daksh blush.

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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: storytellerSSBN

I absolutely loved it, love ur dialogues and the whole scene, so creative, esp Naina Daksh se bachna hi nahi chahti, daksh acting , sharmana ka kam ladkiyon ki hoti hai and then Naina making Daksh blush.



Thanks yaar..😊..I am just trying to make u ppl happy and bring few smiles on ur face😃
as real SSBn is bent upon spoiling the happiness😕...really happy that u all liked this part
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Posted: 14 years ago
@sousou

I can bet u can try as a CV in any of the serials bcoz we enjoy alot
soo good Please write like this aur likhna aisahi kushiyo se bhare naina aur Daksh ki kahani...

Wow...thats really a very big compliment..thanks bud..but u know what, even If want to try as CV these tv channels will not let me because,I dnt have basic qualities required for daily soap CV's.😆.neither can I drag them so..much nor use same routine formulas.., wamps..shad yantr..etc etc...😆

If I were CV..I want Daily soap to be realistic where ppl act normal with common sense.. and it should be like beautiful painting..😍which ppl love to see again and again..agar itne boore qualities he tho cv ka job koi dega nahi naa..😆

And hamare saare FF's writers isi category mein aate hain.tho kisi ko bhi CV ka job milna mush kil hain..kyu?iss liye hum tho forum se hi khush hain😊

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Posted: 14 years ago
Honey moon continution

❤️Ek khoobsurat shyam, dakshna ke naam❤️

Evening...( Noon mein kya hua mujhe pata nahi..dakshna ne bataya nahi..busy honge iss liye)😉

Naina getting ready.daksh just comes in from balcony after attending a call
Naina; kiska phone hain
Daksh; ek client ka..tum tayar ho tho chale
Naina;lekin hum jaa kaha rahe hain daksh??kab se pooch rahi hoon..batate kyu nahi?
Daksh; surprise hain!😍

Naina comes near daksh and starts palying with his shirt buttons;😳 pls batavona..mujhe nahi batavogi( bechara..ishq ka mara..aur kya kar sakta hein)..😆

Daksh; puts hands around her; agar tum aisa poochge tho...teek hain..dinner per jaa rahehain..ek dum romantic candle light dinner par...😍
Naina excited with all smiles; sach..😛
Daksh ; much( cute head butt)( aish tera formula copy karli)😉
Naina;.oh daksh..u are so sweet and kisses him on cheek😳
Daksh;pulls her closer; looks into her eyes and says( soft tone); phir se programme cancel karvane ka irada tho nahi..😆
Naina; bilkul nahi.hum dinner par jayenge..bas..pushes him away
Daksh;sits on bed..streches him arms laziliy; pata nahi kyu jaane ka mood nahi hein😆..
Naina; teek hain mat avo, yahi bete raho..( lil angry)😕
Daksh; gets up comes near naina; gussa hamesha naq par chada rehta hain mere pyare biwi ko(pulls the nose).😊..mein tho mazaq kar rahata..naina..ab jaise hi mam ka mood teek hojayega..chalenge😛
Naina; smiles teek hogaya..chale..stands up
Daksh; haan chalo..lekin jaane se pehle kuch tho dena padega..😉
Naina comes near him kisses his both cheeks; ab chalona..baaki wapas aane ke baad..
Daksh; promise
Naina; haan baba..promise..and gives him one more kiss😳..dakshu khush hogaya aur apne pyare biwi ke saath dinner ke liye nikalgaya...

contd...

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Posted: 14 years ago
Contd...

Both reach the venue.They go inside ..
Daksh; to manager; hai; mein daksh patwardan..after noon ko mein call kiya tha..
Mainager; ek min..oh..ok mr and mrs patwardan..welcome sir..iss taraf...

He leads dakshna to their table...which is farway from other common tables..a place specially resrved for couples...

Table tayar hain..candles..flowers...ke saath.❤️..romatic slow music.bajaa rahe hain..music band waale.😍..manager leaves them and tells them that all arrangements are done..once they finish their dinner, cake and champange will be on its way...levaes from there

Daksh looks at naina, naina ka dil kushi se khood raha hain..😃its evident from her face and eyes,..and daksh becomesextremely happy😛 looking at her

Daksh; tho mam..acha laga?
Naina' looks at daksh; acha? bahut acha laga?😃
Daksh ; tho betiye( he pulls chair for naina)..naina sits on the chair; thank u
Daksh ; ur welcome and sits in his chair...dakshna F2F...😍
Dakshna (aankhoki gustakiyaan ...maaf ho)..;😆
Daksh; tho batayiye..kya khayengi aap;
naina; kuch bhi chalega daksh...
Daksh; ok...bolkar he orders all naina 's fav dishes( how sweet)
Naina; sab kuch mere pasand ki, aur tumhare?
Daksh; mera fav dish ..yaha nahi milta...😲
Naina; acha...looks in menu card..yaha par tumhare saare fav dishes hain..mujhe pata nahi aisa kaun sa dish hain?

Daksh puts his hand on naina's hand and says; mera sabse fav hain naina patwardan.❤️.aur yaha se waps jaane ke baad.😉.mujhe khane ko milega...😆
Naina sharmagayi☺️..aur ek cute sa smile deti hain😛...naina gets up from there and sits besides daksh .dakshu ki ek dum kareeb..😍
dakshu holds her hand and aur kiss karta hain, looking into her eyes;; i love u naina
Naina; luv u too daksh...😍😍

Phir khana aagaya..dinner khatam hogaya..haan ek doosre ko khilaya dono ne..champenge bhi aagaya..cake bhi katdiya..dakshna ek doosre ko cake khila rahe hein..lights chale gaye😲
Contd...
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Posted: 14 years ago

I LOVE IT LUCKY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!🤗🤗👍🏼

and we want mooore!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
very nice lucky... i loved it..
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Hey evryone🤗...yaha pe net down tha, or i'd hv put dis up earlier...here's 2de's dose f meetha 4 y'all frm me😉...
Everyone has left for some function [kisi relativ ka obv, dat 2 distant place], ghar pe sirf Naina he [KP on his way, don wori😉].

She's in the kitchen, takin care f d dinr thingy jus in case the othrs return early...[poocho mat yar kya kya bana rahi he...my culinary skills r umm, rudimentary😆]

Daksh meanwhile has let himself in quietly, nd s tiptoeing around. He sees her busy in the kitchen; apparently she hasnt noticed him yet. She turns to the shelf to get something, and KP decides to surprise her...So he walks up, is about to reach out for her-

N : Aa gaye vakil saheb [turns and smiles]

D : [deflated expresn] Ha. To tumne dekh liya tha.

N : [laughs] Nahi. Par tum pas ate ho na, [pulls his cheek] to pata chal jata hai.[another smile, turns to the stove]

D : Acha? [smiles] Kaise?

N : [nahi, romantic dialog nahi, pehle tang kheechegi😆] Tumne shoes nahi uthare.

D : Really.

N : Really. [bright smile] Coffee?

D : [Semi-KP mode] Me le lunga.

He sits on the counter with his mug of coffee, and she asks him about the day; he starts answering her, phir beech me ruk jata he...

She turns. "Kya hua?"

D : Acha to tum sun rahi thi? Mujhe to laga me hava se bate kar raha hu.

N : [thodi confused] Matlab?

D : Matlab ye, ki tum us- us saucepan ko jitna attention de rahi ho na, uska adha mujhe deti to bat karne ka man karta.

She smiles, goes upto him and kisses him on the cheek. "Meri sari attention tum par hi he."

D : [takes her hand] Pan pe nahi?

N : Custard bana rahi hu.[pinches his nose] Tumhare liye. [guys i kno she made t 4 him onc, so gues its a safe idea😆]

D : Agar me kahu [pulls her in] ki mujhe usse bhi meetha kuch chahiye, to...? [i kno u guys kno ki dakshu kya kehne ki koshish kar raha he😛]

N : [cute pink😳] Tho...

D : [leans in] Tho...?

N : [softly] To me tumse ek minute rukne ko kahungi... [he starts to protest, she cuts him off apologeticali] Nahi to wo custard nahi, kuch aur ho jayegi...[gives him another peck on the cheek and goes back to the stove.]

D : Naina...

N : Meri itni der ki mehnat he Daksh, samaj lo na...

D : [half to himself] Meri bhi. [bechara😆]

N : Hmm?

D : [determined] Kuch nahi. [gets off the counter] Tum custard bana lo.

N : Daksh, ayi ne ab tak phon nahi kiya...

He comes up behind her. "Kar legi, don wori." puts his arms about her.

N : [smiles] Kp...

D : Hmm? [takes the ladle from her and stirs it]

N : Tum kya kar rahe ho...

D : Tumhe samaj me nahi aa raha...[light squeeze] Ek-do clues aur deta hu...😳

N : Daksh...

D : Mujhe pata hai. Kitchen he.

N : [nods] Ha, hai.

D : Par madam, mera point ye hai ki ghar pe koi nahi he...

N : [laughs gently] Point noted, lekin tum meri point miss kar rahe ho...[takes the spoon thing back from him]

D : [goes on, without noticing the last part] vaise bhi koi der rat tak ane nahi wala, mere hisab se to aj wo ane wale he hi nai, to kya farak padta he Naina kitchen ho ya...

Naina doesnt answer; she continues stirring the dish, smiling.

D : Ek minute...Mene kaun si point miss ki...?

His phone rings jus den...

N : [almost laughing] Phone.

D : [still thinking] Hmm?

N : Tumhari phone. Baj rahi he.

He pulls it out, keeping one arm around her.

D : Ha ayi...Acha theek he, ap log subhe nikal jana phir...[Naina looks up, and he tells her its nothing; eye-speak, guys😛]..Ha, me ghar aa gaya hu, Naina yahi he...[laughs] Tu fikar mat kar, me teri bahu ka ache se khyal rakhunga [drops a kiss on her cheek saying this]...Ha. good night.

N : Kya hua?

D : Kuch nahi, bas waha mausam kuch theek nahi he..barish bahot ho rahi he, aur itni der ho gayi to wo subhe niklenge waha se...

N : [amused] Tumhe kisne mausam ka hal bataya?

D : Abhi abhi to ayi ne kaha...

N : Tum pehle jo keh rahe the ki aj rat wo nahi ayenge...

D : Wo...ayi ne ab tak phon nahi kiya tha, matlab wo waha se nikle nahi the.Wo sab chodo. [puts both arms around her and holds her close] Hum kaha the?

N : Apne point mis ki thi,vakil saheb.

D : Oh, point.

N : Ha.

D : Theek he, tum bata do, muje yad nahi aa rahi he...

N : [laughs] mene mana nahi kiya tha...

He turns the stove off, and she puts a lid on the dish.

D : Acha. Mana nahi kiya...[turns her around] To phir kya keh rehi thi tum...

N : [laughs] Me ye keh rahi thi ki lag jayegi. Pan garam tha.

D : Kise? Mujhe?

She just smiles.

D : Ya phir tumhe? [she smiles some more] Tumhe lagta he ki me tumhe kuch hone dunga?

She shakes her head; he runs his hands through her hair once.

D : Pata hai Naina, [strokes her cheek] muje kabhi kabhi lagta he ki meri competition he har cheez se, tum jo bhi weddings plan karti ho, unse, custard se, ayi se bhi...

N : [amused] Ayi se bhi? [he nods] Kis liye...

D : [smiling] Tumhare liye...

She starts laughing now.

N : Ab ye idea kaha se aya...

D : [softly] Lekin jo bhi ho, meri Naina sabse pehle meri hai [pulls her ekdam close😍] Sirf meri...[eyes closed, all; its dessert tim 4 dakshu nw😆😆😆]

Ohk...kya hai na, kal ke topics padke phir se emo dept kholne ka man kar raha tha😛...phir socha, y not sumthin meetha 4 evryone instead😊...

emo wil come up again dependin on 2de's dhamaka😊...mujhe video nahi dekhni, isse pehle ki i giv in 2 d temptatn, read odr topics nd meri BP bad jaye [ya phir i'd writ some mega emo stuff again], smebdy PM me yar ki acha hua ya bura..

wil get bak 2 y'all with the nxt one asap [diff version f kitchen-me-romanc, ya phir...suspens..muje ek-do ideas aur mile hai😉]

luv ya guys🤗..
aish

ps : waise custard banne me kitna tim lagta hai😛..d only desserrts i've evr tried making r halva nd jam😆😆...

pps : i've yet 2 read 2de's dose f lucky's potion, hop dis was "meetha" enf 😛...
oh.nd muje pata chala ki Naina bohot bura custd banati hai😛sry guys par by then it ws 2 late in d day 2 change t😆😆😆agli bar usse kya banvau?u tel me😊...
Edited by sweetaish - 14 years ago

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