*Rabir FF: True Love...Note, Chap 55 @ pg 143, 145 (2/1)

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Aarti.1

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1071

Ooh the nerve of that boy to say such horrendous things! He rightly deserved the beating that he got. It was nice to see Rachna comfort Kabir for a change and for him to show his vulnerable side. I do wonder what the next update is all about since its the first one that has a title and that too called "A Night to Remember." Is it going to be some romance? I guess I should just read to find out right? Oh by the way, I convinced my husband to read a few parts and he didn't care too much for the characters or the story line but he appreciated how well written it was so I couldn't help but share that with you. He only agreed to read two parts so I showed him the one with the diary entries and also the one where Kabir revealed his emotional turmoil. He found both of those parts to be very well worded.

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Aarti

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Posted: 10 years ago

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So I started blushing a bit as I read your disclaimer since I have never read an FF before so I had absolutely no idea what to expect and your disclaimer only scared me about how explicit you would get. Boy was it explicit, a bit too much I honestly thought. I think you write the subtle nuances of holding hands and hidden glances so well that you didn't need to go so much into detail. Of course those are just my own thoughts. Who am I to say what you should and shouldn't post? I do hope that there aren't any more chapters like this because it kind of sickens me a bit to read such stuff. Sorry for such a strong review, but I feel that I should be honest with you since you have so much potential in writing a sweet meaning romance rather than a hot trashy one. You don't need to give into B-grade stuff to gain readership. Your strong point is your writing and your shouldn't resort to cheap descriptions of sex because I think that takes away from the beauty of the other parts and leaves a bad taste in people's mouth (at least it did for me). Sorry if you felt bad reading these words but good also comes with bad and I couldn't sugar-coat the words to only shower praises on something that I didn't necessarily like.

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Aarti

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Aarti.1

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1073

You thankfully pulled that off as a dream and I wish that had been true of me reading the last part as well, but this chapter made up for the disappointment that the last one was. Whatever happened to Rachna seems terrible, but clearly the mystery assaulter knows her very well and seems to somehow be involved with the accident too since he said something about "legal troubles with the accident case." I'm intrigued to see how everything moves forward.

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Aarti

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Aarti.1

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1074

That was an intelligent update. I gather from what Sneha said that she is some sort of psychiatrist that specializes with rape victims. It was very interesting to read about the science behind all this, so I gather that you are well-versed in this topic? I do like that Rachna reached out for Kabir this time and that she was able to trust him this time around. I'm too eager to read what will happen next so I won't ramble on in this part.

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Aarti

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Aarti.1

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Posted: 10 years ago

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I gathered this time from your note that you are in school, so I presume you are studying some sort of medicinal science since all your related chapters about the science have been such well researched and thoroughly informative posts. I have to say that I loved the re-emergence of the flashback in this chapter. I think you write those really well and you should use that technique more often. The entire situation with Rachna still has me confused, but I guess you are going to run this track simultaneously with Gunjan's track. It was nice to see Kabir talking with Sneha and showing her the mirror about how Gunjan and Rachna's actions were not too different from each other. It seems to me that Sneha is most likely going to call Gunjan back home now and rectify the situation.

Best,

Aarti

PS: I got the dreaded note about not being able to make more than 10 posts in 24 hours so I have to stop here tonight (though again I was able to make 11 posts, so go figure).

PPS: The review that I wrote for the last part I read.

Wow, what a twist you put in? Firstly I loved the entire part about Gunjan reuniting with her family. She seems to have really missed out on a lot in these past few months that she has been away. Now as for the surprising revelation that Mayank assaulted Rachna, I don't know if I am ready to believe that. After all, Gunjan has been living with Mayank for the past few months and she seems quite happy in her own marriage so it makes me think that perhaps Rachna has some sort of misunderstanding. Or of course Mayank could be the true evil here and Gunjan might actually be hiding her misery. I am looking forward to reading about the sisters' reunion since Sneha has called Rachna and Kabir for a surprise lunch. Also, I wonder if it was just a filler bit when you threw in the part about Karan and Rhea or if that has any significance to the overall plot.

Best,

Aarti

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1076

Originally posted by: RaBir
What. Just. Happen. 😲

First part I read to happy that Rachna okay. She angry at him for what he do to distract but he care for her realize she no eat so he give juice to her. Good hubby he is understanding how to melt away anger wife.
Then she start talk about miscarriage and I sad feel bad for her but I no expect fight to happen. What he say correct but it still difficult to read. I no want Rabir to fight Nivs. End fight and make happy again. Let them enjoy wedding at least.

Thanks for writing even busy after college. Focus on study and write in free time. Will wait for update. Try and do fast. 😊

Good job with part. Fight but still I like way you wrote.

Hi Poonam! Thank you so much!

I know it was hard to read about the fight, but they both can't always be so understanding to each other. Every couple fights and with everything that Kabir has gone through in the past few days, you can't expect him to only think about Rachna. She of course is feeling bad about the miscarriage because she can't give him the happiness of a child, but he is frustrated that he has already addressed that issue with her multiple times and she is still not getting it. Him losing his temper and saying all that was only natural, was it not?

The fight will definitely end, but they both have to deal with their issues first and you can definitely expect a happy wedding. 😊

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1077

Originally posted by: meenu_taarey
It was amazing
Rachna is in pain
Kabir there for her
Update soon n pm me
Take care

Thank you Meenu! Glad you enjoyed the update. 😊

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1078

Originally posted by: Nuritzur
Sound like Rachna and Kabir take all they angry out. all the worries all the thinking that they keep in side. poor Rachna She right I did feel like this before but I believe she will keep her hope that every thing can change.
Kabir also keep his worried in side about all what he pass in the last days.
It ok that they get they worries out but I was not enjoy KT Angry but I am understand him.
any way lovely update

Yes, you got it right that they have both taken their anger and worries out to put them into the open.

I know you didn't enjoy Kabir getting angry, but I'm glad you understood why he did.

Thank you for commenting! Glad you enjoyed it. 😊

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1079

Originally posted by: sb1410
Wow a fight now that everything came out hope they resolve everything and move on to have a happy wedding. By the way I think they both need to communicate and clear all inner turmoil.

Thanks Sharlene! A happy wedding is certainly on the cards, though they first have some issues to deal with individually. You definitely suggested correctly that they need to communicate and clear their inner turmoil, which is what I plan to do of course, but with my own little twist. 😉😆

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1080

Originally posted by: Aarti.1
Hi Nivi (can I call you that?)
I was recommended to this story by one of my friends who also follows it (she told me not to say her name). I started reading and had to create an IF account just so I could comment. I watched SSLK in its entirety (didn't even miss one single episode) and I loved Mayan and Rabir jodis a lot. The ending of the show disappointed me a lot so I was asking my friend to recommend some other show that I could start watching, but she instead told me to come read your story. I have never read an FF before (I stick to reading books whenever I have free time), but I have to say that within the first few chapters of your story, I became quite interested to read further. You write very well and the flashbacks are really intriguing.

I will try my best to catch up as fast as I can, but you have a lot of chapters written already. LOL

Best,
Aarti :)

Hi Aarti! Yes you can call me Nivi; everyone on here does. 😆

Welcome to IF and thank you so much for joining just to comment on my story! That means so much! 😃 I'm intrigued to know who recommended this story to you, but if they wish to remain anonymous, that's fine as well; 😛I just didn't know that I actually had any marketers who were spreading the word around about this FF.

I can't say that I myself was such an ardent fan of SSLK as I stopped watching many times and only resumed for Rabir. I am with you on the disappointing ending to the show, as are most SSLK fans, but I've channeled my frustration into this story so hopefully you enjoy the more recent updates once you catch up.

Thank you so much for the compliments...it really does mean a lot to read such encouraging words. 😳

*Edit*

I see that you have commented on quite a few parts and I would love to read and respond to all of your comments but I am kind of busy juggling school, this story, and other personal things so I might not be able to respond right away. I will definitely return to read and respond at a later time once things settle down a bit, so please don't feel like I'm deliberately ignoring your posts because I'm not.

Edited by nividances - 10 years ago

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