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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey Guys!!
It's Hinal, again!

This week has been an emotional roller-coaster, and I was so overwhelmed by all these emotions that I had to pen something out to maintain my sanity.

This is just a random drabble. But one thing to note: There's no fluff, so if that's what you're expecting, please stop right here. Consider yourself warned 😆
Hope you like it! :)

Wrote it very quickly, and didn't really proof-read. So kindly do ignore the small mistakes 😛


Broken - Drabble

Maybe I wasn't meant for love.

Perhaps my life was always meant to be like this.

Empty. Insignificant.

But mostly, desolate.

No, my parents aren't dead. No, I do have friends. No, I have loved. I loved her. I love her.

Every time. Every. Single. Time.

Every time I let someone come close to me, they leave me more broken than before.

I've had enough now.

I picked up the pieces once again - now for one last time, taped them together, and locked it safe.

I wasn't going to let anyone in.

I was losing the pieces, running out of tape, and forgetting to shut the safe.

Not anymore.

I was going to live the life I was destined to live.

Alone, but safe.

Present, but invisible.

Broken, but alive.

It was instinctive - the choice to isolate myself.

To remove her from my life.

I couldn't bear another betrayal.

Another pinch of salt, to my already exhausted wound.

She made me love again.

Yet she made me hate as well.

This time, I have a choice.

Choice - a luxury that couldn't always be afforded.

I was left with no options before.

But this time, I have a say. I can choose. Choose to protect myself.

And that, I shall.

Because in the end, if she chooses to walk away, I would be the one left with the irreparable heart. Not her.

Because regardless of what happens, I would be the one broken, not her.



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Soo. How did you guys find it?
Feedback is always appreciated so don't hesitate to like/comment :)

Love,
Hinal 🤗

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey! Hinal
lovely, lovely, lovely, lovely, lovely,
lovely, lovely, lovely, lovely, lovely,
lovely, lovely drabble😳😳
Lovely, nicely and beautifully written👏👏
love it to the core❤️

Very well you've described the scenario⭐️⭐️
lovely you've pinned the emotions👏⭐️
Nicely you've described each n every point👏⭐️
Really it touch my heart...
A big round of plague👏👏 👏👏 👏👏 👏👏
for writing such a lovely drabble
Ur an amazing, fantastic writer👏👏
U knew Very well how to pinned emotions😉😃

Keep it up👍🏼
Do write more
Love to read ur work
Love
Bushra🤗
Edited by Param_love - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey hinal

The drabble was so beautifully written

U portrayed rd emtns so well
Yes he so broken n shattered now he has no entry to be broke again

Bt i m sure in serial sanyu will again mend his broken pieces Bcz his real happiness is wid only her

Rite now they both r fighting under their ego once everything sorted they will be inseparable

Bt yaa dear hatts off 👏 👏

U write fab aese hi likhti raho r Hume entertain krti rho 😉

Keep smiling dear 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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awww.. poor randhir!!! i so love him. uss sanyukta ko chodkar mere paas ajao.. :P 😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
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oh my!
this is exquisite !

painfully perfect :D

keep writing ,
preeti <3 :*
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This is so Perfect!
You wrote all the emotions so well. I could feel them so well. Its one of the best Drabble's I've ever come across.
My poor Randhir he's so broken. I wish I could help him.
Hinalll
You write amazingly!! I loved it to the core. Its so beautifully written. I felt the pain.
Keep Writing and Keep Smiling!!
You are a future writer. You might just give competition to Durjoy Dutta. Oh My God! His Dimples. <3
I'll stop here. Byee!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Sorry for the delay!

I loved this! :)
It was emotional and really touching.
And I loved how the whole thing was so poetic. Its so different and refreshing to read you know.
And I really like the choice of words too. The sentences conveyed the emotions subtly and in an understated manner, which made it even better. Because with monologues, emotions have to make a connection with the reader.
And that's what you did here.
Great job! :)
Love
Somya
Edited by Na1na - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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very nicely written. his emotions were penned beautifully
Posted: 10 years ago
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It is really very beautifully presented. ...loved it. ...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Amazing Drabble dude it ws awsm d way u portrayed d emotions ws beautiful ..keep it up..nd pm me ur other works too

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