SP Fanfic: Dostana - part 12 on p17 {10.05.09} - Page 12

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: g_spice

This is my first time reading a SP FF. I read all parts today and I must say I truly enjoyed it, job well done. Love how you sketch and shape each character and settings of the story. I love Nahar, he's so in awe of Saloni, and Neel he just needs to take his player ways elsewhere. Do continue soon.

Awww you made me speechless dear...
Thank u so much for the wonderful comments
It means a lot for me..yeah..Nahar is such a sweetheart 😳😳
I will update very soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
Hi Reena,
Your story is progressing very well and I must say your writing is really good. I think as a writer your next step should be to write a couple of short stories and submit it to magazines. I feel very sad reading your story because of the current plot of SP - it remind me of what was lost..
Take care....
Judy
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: judyp

Hi Reena,

Your story is progressing very well and I must say your writing is really good. I think as a writer your next step should be to write a couple of short stories and submit it to magazines. I feel very sad reading your story because of the current plot of SP - it remind me of what was lost..
Take care....
Judy

Awww Judy...you made me speechless...
Thank u so much for your lovely and very sweet comments. It means a lot for me.
This is one of the most sweetest comments I ever received...you are such a sweetheart dear !!!
I will think about it dear..and when I will write some short stories I will will send it to you so that you can give me your comments
I have to say that I totally agree with you dear...when I wrote this part and actually when I write each new part I'm feeling very sad..because it remind me of what we have lost in the serial
Take care..will update very soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG! this is prob. one of my favorites! it was so cute, and the friendship between all three is amazing! I love the way you have so much detail!
It was really beyond amazing! Meri pyaar Behan
you did a great job like always! Two thumbs up!
i'm just..its..so..WOW!
I'm speechless!
Great Job
This part is special for my sweet Nazia di..you always help and support me with everything..I really love you.
awww thank you reena!
I love you too!
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: _Naz_

OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG! this is prob. one of my favorites! it was so cute, and the friendship between all three is amazing! I love the way you have so much detail!

It was really beyond amazing! Meri pyaar Behan
you did a great job like always! Two thumbs up!
i'm just..its..so..WOW!
I'm speechless!
Great Job
This part is special for my sweet Nazia di..you always help and support me with everything..I really love you.
awww thank you reena!
I love you too !

Awww Nazia di..thank u soooooo much...It means a lot for me.
To tell u the truth..when I was wrote this part and read it when it was finished I also liked it.
Yeah they are such great friends...and now they will feel something...and that makes them all three thinks..is this still friendship or something else 😳😳
It's all because of your love and support that I can write this fanfics...you are really very important for me !!!
and ofcourse it's because of Raksha di and Swati and a great friend Judy
Love you very much...will update very soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
I'm working right now at the new part.
Will update this week
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Posted: 16 years ago
oh so cute. first the water fight and then ice cream I wonder who will saloni choose. of course it has to be Nahar, But then poor Neel.
Again great part keep it up.
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Posted: 16 years ago
I will post the next part tomorrow
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Posted: 16 years ago
Part 11
Nahar and Saloni were walking at the beach...Saloni was talking about the photoshoot..Nahar was just shaking his head sometimes...he was just looking at her. She was so beautiful...suddenly he stop walking and took Saloni's hand. She asked him what he was doing but Nahar put his hand for her mouth. He came close to her and gave her a soft kiss on her forehead. She looked up and was shocked...but she didn't move away. Now Nahar came more close and he just wanted to kiss her on her lips when he heard his name...not once but many times.
He opened his eyes and saw Saloni in front of him..he looked confused and than he smiled. He realised that he was dreaming...she asked him why he was smiling. Nahar started to blush and tried to change the subject. He said that after two hours the second photoshoot will take place so he had to take a shower now. When he was by the door he turned around and looked how Saloni was doing her hair...he smiled and went away.
In the evening the three friends went to the Palazzo Corsini Museum for the last photoshoot in Rome. Tomorrow they would leave and go to Spain...but first they had to complete the last photoshoot here. When they arrived at the beautiful Museum Saloni went to the dressing trailer. Nahar and Neel were looking if everything was perfect at the locations where the photoshoot will take place.
After some minutes Saloni came in a beautiful red dress...with golden long earring and open hair. Both guys were looking at her like they hadn't seen a girl before..she was smiling and started to blush a little bit. Nahar took her hand and took her to some beautiful arts where they would take some photos. Neel was already sketching some beautiful sketches of Saloni with the art at the background. Some beautiful photos came out and Saloni had much fun...Nahar was looking at her and thought about his dream while Neel was sketching some great skecthes of Saloni and felt also something in his heart.
After the last few photos Saloni asked to Nahar if they could take some photos of them together...Nahar couldn't believe his ears. He told Saloni that he doesn't look good at all but Saloni took his hand and pulled him close to herself. They looked in each other eyes...the photographer has started already to take some nice photo of them. Everyone could see that something was happening with their boss. They took different poses and the photos were beautiful...and than Saloni took also Neel's hand and the photographer took also some photos of the three friends together.
When they arrived at their hotel in the evening they eat together at the restaurant. They were talking about the last two days in Rome. During the diner Nahar was looking the whole time at Saloni...while Neel was talking with her about his sketches and about his painting project. They had a great diner and they enjoyed a lot.
The next morning Saloni was packing her stuff...Nahar and Neel were still sleeping. Suddenly she saw some papers in Neel's hand..she went to him and took the papers gently. She saw some sketches of her..she looked from the skecthes to Neel's face. She was confused but after a minute she thought that maybe he fell in sleep last night with the sketches in his hands. She went to her bag and put her other clothes also in the bag. After a minute Neel woke up and looked at Saloni...he saw that the sketches was now on the table. He went to Saloni and gave her a dress which was on the ground...she looked at him and smiled. Neel told her that he will take a shower and when Nahar will wake up they can have together breakfast.
When Neel went to the bathroom Saloni went to Nahar and looked at him...he was sleeping so peacefully and was looking so cute and innocent. She was sitting on her knees and saw that his hair was fell in his eyes..she came close to his face and blow gentle his hair from his eyes. Suddenly he made his eyes open and saw Saloni so close..Saloni wanted to go but he hold her hand and told her that this time he wouldn't let her go so easily. She was confused...this time..Nahar had pulled her more close...Saloni saw a glass of water on the table and took it and threw the water in his face.
He was shocked...he looked at Saloni who started to laugh. He realised that this time he wasn't dreaming about Saloni but it happen real. He started to say sorry to her but Saloni couldn't stop laughing...so he took a pillow and throw it to Saloni. They had so much fun...Neel came inside the room and saw the pillow fight between his two best friends. He had never seen Nahar so happy...he smiled and left the room.
After a hour when everyone was ready and all the stuff was packed they had breakfast together. They went to some stores after the breakfast...they had a great time together..they laughed together. They forget the world around them..the only thing what was important for them was their friendship.
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To be continues
This part is special for my sweet Nazia di who is very special for me...and for my Raksha di, great friend Judy and cute little sister Swati.
And ofcourse for all the SP lovers
Hope you like it...
Edited by jaanlover - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
fantastic part di. you know when i read your fanfic part i can imagine the whole part. really keep it up di. i really like the friendship between neel nahar and saloni.😛

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