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Posted: 19 years ago
#31

o m g..i read it right now and i was thinkin wow...if this is wat she writes wen she says she cant write then wat will she write if she said i can write????

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Exactly fate!!! dats wat evn i wanted to say!!!!😛Aparna its too good yaar!!!!👏.....come on how many more of ur talents r u hiding....out wid it......😉

Btw...all the best 4 ur exams.....😊

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Posted: 19 years ago
#32
Thank you all so much! Now I understand the value of seeing comments after u post fan fics.....rikzik, mads, fate, lalit, sayeri....and all others who have written. It is really encouraging.


I'll try posting soon as i know most people are/will be off on vacation and exams soon.
thanks!
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Posted: 19 years ago
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U r most welcum aparna......just continue fast........

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Posted: 19 years ago
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PART 8

The next morning was unusually foggy. The servants advised Ranveer & Yuvi not to leave the gardens, for in this thick fog, they could easily lose their way.
The two of them trudged down a stone path that led to an empty horse shed. This place had given birth to many a melodious tune…..now popular all over the country.
Settling down on some odd tree trunk or a pile of wood, the two began to contemplate the theme for their next album. The fog had drifted into the shed too, as a result of which, Yuvi & Ranveer who were seated just 5-6 feet apart were finding it difficult to share eye contact while in conversation.

Y: Take A minor…...and keep the pace slow!
As Ranveer began to strum his guitar, Yuvi started to conjure up different notes, putting them together, increasing & decreasing the note, the pace and trying to find a rhythm. Ranveer closed his eyes, intently listening to Yuvi's attempts at creating a new tune. He often managed to fill in perfectly whenever Yuvi was stuck on a note and didn't know how to proceed. Yuvi too was engrossed in his creation. Neither of them realized that the wind had slightly picked up speed and the shutters of the shed were rattling lightly. The fog that enveloped the shed had grown thicker!

At the other end of the path, far from the shed, inside the guest house, the cook was smiling to herself as she gazed outside to see the fog clearing up. Now she could get to the market in time!

PART 9 A

It had become quite chilly all of a sudden and Ranveer felt the sting in his cold fingers every time he strummed the guitar. He opened his eyes….only to find himself alone. He couldn't see Yuvi. The fog was too thick. Ranveer moved forward, remembering that Yuvi was sitting just a few feet straight ahead. "Yuvi…..Yuvi….kahaan ho tum? Please kuch bolo….so that I can locate you!"
But there was no reply from the other end. Only silence……and the soft whispering of the fog as it floated through the shed.
Ranveer whizzed around….he had felt something or someone brush past him. But all he could see was white fog. "Yuvi, don't act smart ok. I don't like it. Please stop playing the fool". No reply.
"Fine, then I'm going back to the house, you can dance around here….for all I care"
With that, Ranveer turned to leave….but stopped short. 'Which way??? I can't see anything'. So he tried feeling his way through the shed, almost tripping on something or the other. He was just getting more confused. "Yuvi….please banna, now see…..I'm totally lost. I want to go back. Come, lets go"
Ranveer waited for Yuvi's reply….but nothing came. So he stood there, trying to listen…maybe catch Yuvi sneaking up behind him. But no! It was completely silent.
An eerie sense of solitude filled Ranveer. Instantly he knew ……..Yuvi was not in the shed. Logic told him there was no reason to panic, but his heart knew something that his mind had tried to ignore. Yuvi was not in the shed….but Ranveer was not alone.

PART 9 B

It had become quite chilly all of a sudden and Yuvi found it difficult to hear his own voice. The cold air in his ears drowned the tunes. The notes from Ranveer's guitar too seemed to be rather muffled. He opened his eyes……………………… and there she was. Eyes staring straight at him. This time they were trying to say something to Yuvi. He was spellbound by those mystical eyes. They were slightly frosty but reflected a fire so bright! Completely oblivious to his environs, Yuvi just followed those beautiful eyes. He left the shed, walking towards those enchanting eyes….but as he moved closer, the farther they seemed.
Then like from nowhere out of the smoke….she appeared! 'A devil woman'….Yuvi thought. She was not beautiful in the popular sense….but something strange & unearthly about her lean face & shining eyes had Yuvi mystified. He just walked…..mesmerized. He had left the shed, left his music, left Ranveer far behind.
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Posted: 19 years ago
#35
u gave me gooooose bumps
i am really exicted
its awesum
fab
so niceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
wunnfullllllllllllllllll
keep writing back
i am eagerly waiting
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Posted: 19 years ago
#36
Thanks,

well I guess I'm fulfilling all my childhood dreams of telling ghost stories which flopped very badly then!

I am trying to extend this story by maybe 2-3 posts more as most of you requested. Originally planned to end it today, but I'm hopin that by stretching the story, you all wont fal dead with boredom!
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Posted: 19 years ago
#37
gr8 workkkkk........all i can say is 👏 ....plz cont soon(mom 😆 )
esha
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Posted: 19 years ago
#38
wow!!ur explanations reminds me of ruskin bonds.the frosty fog..loved that.
it is really different and interesting.
well i was studying and was bored and knew u would have put up ur story.........really refreshing aparna.
👏 👏
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Posted: 19 years ago
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nice one aparna 👏 .....i have a strong suspicion that tia is the cook......who is ashi...i mean the devil woman...have u made her the maid or something cleaning the shed....??

realllllllllllllllllllly amazing..........plllllllllllllllllllll write sooon
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Posted: 19 years ago
#40

no words to describe how good it is aparna....waiting eagerly for the next part

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