Once Upon In A Moonlit Night- A short story on alzia(final part @pg9) - Page 6

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Posted: 10 years ago
#51
Ria aap kyun aapne kambilyat pe bharosa nahin rakhti. Mash'allah aap ne doobara mujhe ussi duniya mein bhej diya jahan AlZia ki nighaein ek doorse se baatein karte hain.👏

Mirza's charm is in full force here and I was completely enjoying their flirty banter. It was very much like them. For every wise remark, he would have a amorous comeback, and Razia has to try hard to keep a poker face so as not to show his affect on her. Alas, it is a futile effort and Mirza can see through it and as always it encourages him to flirt more.

You have a knack for describing their emotions in a beautiful way, which conveys the myriad of feelings they experience upon staring deep into each other's eyes. The hypnotic trance they weave on each other, connecting their two souls.

Also, you emphasised the purity of their attraction in that he compared her to the 'looks' he got from other women, as he is aware of his handsome appeal, but she was the only one he truly craved for and whose attention can bind his free spirit. Amazing work there.😳👏

Your version of Razia is also much smarter. She recognised his eyes ergo his identity as the dupatta thief/champion of the subdaari fight. Great touch. It added depth to their meeting.👍🏼

Eager to know how they proceed from here...whether she leaves him high and dry or they continue to get lost in the moment.🤔

Once again, another awesome piece of fiction from you Ria!🤗 Thanks for updating.😃
Edited by bhabhijaan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#52
i love u ria 🤗and i love ur scene description⭐️ and mirza ki shayari was fab 👍🏼 mirza ko bht maza aya apna impact shehzadi pe dekh k😆
flirty mirza
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Posted: 10 years ago
#53
I am just silent reader of forum
but I couldn't stop myself from commenting
you have gem of ff here
Its was like reading some old vintage novel
pure masterpiece
mirza is treat to read :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
#54
Our flirty Mirza!!
His effect on Razia was ... Beyond words !
Jaldi jaldi update karo
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Posted: 10 years ago
#55
Just one word for this update.Wait!! Not one word,I have a lot to say.But kya karen shabd itne hain ki bayaan nahin karsakte👏
However,I loved each and every bit of it.You described the characters and the events so poignantly.👏👏

I like this smart Razia who recognized Mirza and Mirza,uske baare mein kya kehna?? Woh kisi bhi avatar mein awesome dikhega⭐️


And lastly,AFSAW AFSAW AFSAW till infinity👏👏👏
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Posted: 10 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: bhabhijaan

Ria aap kyun aapne kambilyat pe bharosa nahin rakhti. Mash'allah aap ne doobara mujhe ussi duniya mein bhej diya jahan AlZia ki nighaein ek doorse se baatein karte hain.👏

Mirza's charm is in full force here and I was completely enjoying their flirty banter. It was very much like them. For every wise remark, he would have a amorous comeback, and Razia has to try hard to keep a poker face so as not to show his affect on her. Alas, it is a futile effort and Mirza can see through it and as always it encourages him to flirt more.

You have a knack for describing their emotions in a beautiful way, which conveys the myriad of feelings they experience upon staring deep into each other's eyes. The hypnotic trance they weave on each other, connecting their two souls.

Also, you emphasised the purity of their attraction in that he compared her to the 'looks' he got from other women, as he is aware of his handsome appeal, but she was the only one he truly craved for and whose attention can bind his free spirit. Amazing work there.😳👏

Your version of Razia is also much smarter. She recognised his eyes ergo his identity as the dupatta thief/champion of the subdaari fight. Great touch. It added depth to their meeting.👍🏼

Eager to know how they proceed from here...whether she leaves him high and dry or they continue to get lost in the moment.🤔

Once again, another awesome piece of fiction from you Ria!🤗 Thanks for updating.😃


aww bhabijaan... i love you so much...🤗... ue each and every comment is just a mind booster to me may be its on this story or in my VM... u encourages me a lot...😳... u know what whenever i am sad somehow i come up and read this comment of urs and u know it gives me immense strength... i can't describe how special u are...
thanks for coming and being a part of my life...🤗... i hope our friendship stays forever❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
#57

Originally posted by: overactor

i love u ria 🤗and i love ur scene description⭐️ and mirza ki shayari was fab 👍🏼 mirza ko bht maza aya apna impact shehzadi pe dekh k😆

flirty mirza


i do miss my flirty mirza re😭... now days he is mostly confused and sad......
thaks for lovely comment... much love🤗
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Posted: 10 years ago
#58

Originally posted by: Dhani_

I am just silent reader of forum
but I couldn't stop myself from commenting
you have gem of ff here
Its was like reading some old vintage novel
pure masterpiece
mirza is treat to read :)


thanks a lot...😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
#59

Originally posted by: ..radiance...

Our flirty Mirza!!
His effect on Razia was ... Beyond words !
Jaldi jaldi update karo


thank you so much..
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Posted: 10 years ago
#60

Originally posted by: Astoria

Just one word for this update.Wait!! Not one word,I have a lot to say.But kya karen shabd itne hain ki bayaan nahin karsakte👏

However,I loved each and every bit of it.You described the characters and the events so poignantly.👏👏

I like this smart Razia who recognized Mirza and Mirza,uske baare mein kya kehna?? Woh kisi bhi avatar mein awesome dikhega⭐️


And lastly,AFSAW AFSAW AFSAW till infinity👏👏👏


aww ash ur AFSAW.. i just adore it so much😆🤗
u are one of the very special person i met in forum... talking to you always gives me a rare satisfaction... 😳... i always wait for ur AFSAW comment😆... without which my every chapter seemed unfinished...😛
thanks for such encouraging comments dear... love u a loads...🤗

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