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Ria aap kyun aapne kambilyat pe bharosa nahin rakhti. Mash'allah aap ne doobara mujhe ussi duniya mein bhej diya jahan AlZia ki nighaein ek doorse se baatein karte hain.👏
Mirza's charm is in full force here and I was completely enjoying their flirty banter. It was very much like them. For every wise remark, he would have a amorous comeback, and Razia has to try hard to keep a poker face so as not to show his affect on her. Alas, it is a futile effort and Mirza can see through it and as always it encourages him to flirt more.
You have a knack for describing their emotions in a beautiful way, which conveys the myriad of feelings they experience upon staring deep into each other's eyes. The hypnotic trance they weave on each other, connecting their two souls.
Also, you emphasised the purity of their attraction in that he compared her to the 'looks' he got from other women, as he is aware of his handsome appeal, but she was the only one he truly craved for and whose attention can bind his free spirit. Amazing work there.😳👏
Your version of Razia is also much smarter. She recognised his eyes ergo his identity as the dupatta thief/champion of the subdaari fight. Great touch. It added depth to their meeting.👍🏼
Eager to know how they proceed from here...whether she leaves him high and dry or they continue to get lost in the moment.🤔
Once again, another awesome piece of fiction from you Ria!🤗 Thanks for updating.😃
Anupamaa
