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Aishwarya

@Aish002

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Posted: 11 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: _SenbonZakura_

By any chance, are you gonna write her side as well? How she feels when he comes on the phatphatiya to take her back?

choti...^ this is what I wanted to hint at when I commented that I wonder what Paro is feeling at the other end..any chance of this OS getting a 2nd part with Paro's POV...please...😊

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niyoti

@niyoti

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Posted: 11 years ago

#32

Anky go fashtly and read Peccatum by Choti. 😃

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MissAsian

@MissAsian

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Posted: 11 years ago

#33

Omg u must continue this. We need a part 2!

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Ankita

@_SenbonZakura_

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Posted: 11 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: niyoti
Anky go fashtly and read Peccatum by Choti. 😃

Kal office mei baithke I am going to stalk all the writers of Navrasas!! 😆

Abhi I have duties to fulfill on another forum. :D

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peppygeek

@peppygeek

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#35

A beautiful tale of anguish.

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Maya

@What_the

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Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Big 🤗

So nice to see another gem of a story from you!!

Loved the way you describe this ominous silence that haunts him...her absence means the absence of her gentle laughter, her tinkling anklets, her affectionate reprimands, her phone calls...and he just cannot bear this silence...

Everything reminds her of him...starting with his own shirt...and he misses so many little things about her...even the scent of the detergent she used...that was so sweet,,,lovely touch!!

The first few sentences...where he unconsciously reaches for her hand...and touches nothing but air...

He squeezed his eyes shut and reached over with his other hand, slipping his own fingers into the gaping holes in a sorry attempt to fill them in.

That was such a heart-breakingly tender moment...

So glad that he decided to go to her at the end...

All i could do was grin knowingly...Rudra just cant stay away from Paro, can he? And most definitely not in our imagination...

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would like to keep it personal.. :P ;)

@CandYlicious_S

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#37

This was SO SO beautifully written. . I could actually feel his loneliness in your OS

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Tannu

@Tannakstar

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Posted: 11 years ago

#38

I've got a lotta love for you and your work, my friend! And thank you so much for posting this on a Sunday; no PaRud over the weekend really takes its toll on me.

Of course this OS is amazing, I love love love that Rudra is finally realising how much he needs and misses Paro, it's about time he figured it out. And I also liked the fact that as soon as he realised that he missed her, he just made his way to his motorbike to bring her back (I'm assuming) - it was very much in tune with his character.

This nearly broke my heart " He squeezed his eyes shut and reached over with his other hand, slipping his own fingers into the gaping holes in a sorry attempt to fill them in. ". I thought this was wonderfully written; I can see this becoming a potential scene on RR once Paro leaves.

I can't express how much I enjoy reading your work, needless to say, a whole load of your stories are favourited and bookmarked for me to read when I need a Rangrasiya fix.

Keep spinning those tales dude :)

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javeria

@Javeria3991

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#39

This one shot is beautifully written

The title said all.

Parvati when left him by obeying the only command which wasn't meant to obey, took with her his din and raat chein and sakoon and now it's getting hard to breath.

The emotions of Rudra are depicted beautifully and very deeply.

Love it

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SherryGS

@SherryGS

Navigator

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Posted: 11 years ago

#40

Beautiful. Ah what a nice way to end the weekend. For some reason I find pieces written from Rudra's POV always so enticing. I think I am more fascinated at the way his mind works and what others think is going on in that complicated mind of his. He is man of such stark contrasts. Anyway, loved it as usual and I look forward to all the great pieces of work that will be coming soon. ⭐️

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