I was one of the first people to read this and yet I am one of the last ones to comment. And for good reasons. I didn't know what to say after I read it. I still don't. But I'm going to try anyway.
First of all the ambience. The descriptive and crisp language. I feel what she feels, trapped and thirsty as she is. I love how you just use enough words, the right words and leave it. Guide us and then let us imagine and feel, just enough of a nudge. I feel the sense of betrayal that courses through her, feel as helpless and broken.
Then the memories - the flashbacks. I don't think I can ever fully tell you how lethally you have used snippets of their previous conversations in the most bang on manner.
Third, the dialogues - you have gotten the characters, language, lehja - just right. I can imagine them saying these things, hear their voice in my head.
Fourth, Rudra.
Strange. His eyes were wild, reminding Tejawat of the aghori he had come across when he had gone to Haridwar.
The madness, the bloodlust, everything was there.
But his voice... His voice didn't express any of that.
His control, desperation and most of all his anger and fear. This is just how it ought to be. It just NEEDS to be. This white rage that's frozen lava. I don't know how you did it, but this IS Rudra. You have not only managed to perfectly capture him, you have gone ahead and added an extension to him that hasn't even been explored yet. And I say extension but that's how well you have gotten him in accordance with the show. This is just how he will behave. It's canon.
Oh and did I mention how I absolutely loved the way you compared Rudra's obsession with Paro's safety to Thakur's reverance and obsession with his ancestral history and legacy. Thakur's entire life is devoted to that and the haveli was the perfect motif for it and to have Rudra as an equally formidable force holding Paro's in that same regard just shows just how deep that connection runs.
Her eyes squinted with the sudden onslaught of light, and her lungs opened at the fresh air.
But more than anything, she knew.
She knew it was his presence that was bringing her back to life.
Once in a while, you read something that can't be described aptly in words. That words can just malign the essence of. Those lines I quoted above are one of them.
And I want to end with two more of my most favourite bits:
She was crying into his chest now, and for some reason, he felt his soul was breaking too.
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"Tu theek hai?"
He heard her intake a gush of breath, and he shivered at the proximity she was in.
"Ab theek hu..." She replied.
Thank you for this. I'm sooo very glad you've finally decided to write on RR. You've more than done justice to it and I can't wait to read more from you. And don't you ever dare call me biased. I know you better than you think! Now you need to write more, and SOON!
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