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Posted: 14 years ago
#51

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Posted: 14 years ago
#52

Part III


When the secretary buzzs saying Shaan is here to meet him, Akshay is surprised but extremely glad to see his brother out of the house after 2 weeks or so. He cannot wait to hold him by the ear and ship him off to get Khanak; so shock is his reaction when Shaan says counter-sue:

Akki: Kya??

Shaan: yes, Bhaiya, counter-sue, Mai Rahul ko counter-sue karna chahta hoon. Usne meri Khanak ke saath itna bada khel khela, aur main chup nahin baith sakta, use bhi pata ho ki Khanak aur mere saath panga lene ka parinaam

Akki: pari koun?

Shaan: Come one Bhaiyaa…parinaam…result?!! Aap bhi na…

Akki: (with a small smile): But why counter-sue

Shaan: Because I just told him he can shove his music contract, iska matlab ki woh definitely mujhe adaalat leke jayega, lekin usse pehle hum ussse notice bhej denge

Akki: Kis baat pe notice

Shaan: I don't know yaar,. woh sab mujhe pata nahin, kuch tho hoga, please bhaiya, you have got to help me, Choksiji se baat kijiye, woh lawyer ke saat appointment karwa denge

Akki: Theek hai, main abhi Choksi ko bulata hoon, tu baith tho ja, tujhe dekhke bahut din hogaye, Chotey.

Shaan: (rubbing the back of his neck and smiles): Okay, baithta hoon. Lekin Choksi ko abhi bulayiye.

Akki: Haan baba..

"Haan baba, haan.." yells Khanak shutting her ears with a wide grin, the kids around her are yelling for more paint. She laughs, this brings her immense happiness.,., teaching the kids to paint. She has taken up a job as an art teacher in the local school and is surprised how she had an answer for Gopi when she asked;

Gopi: Kya??? tu iskool mein chitrakaari padhayegee?

Khanak: iskool nahin…skool..haan, mujhe kalakaari bahut pasand hai aur

Gopi: (rolling her eyes) Lekin jab Shantanu Bha aayenge tujhe lene tab bachon ka kya hoga?

Khanak: Arrey maine bade masterjee ke saath baat kar lee hai, main har saal do mahine ke liye aaongee bachon ko chitrakaari seekhane ke liye

Gopi: Tho Shaantanu bha do mahine baad aane wale hai kya tujhe lene?

Khanak: (quietens down and then smiles again): Haan, maine tujhe bataya nahin?

Gopi: (looks at her suspiciously): Nahin tho… pata nahin Khanak mujhe aisa kyun lag raha hai ki tu mujhse kuch chupa rahee hai

Khanak: (drags her by hand and smiles at her): Arrey baba, yeh sab chod, bol chachee kya keh rahee thee tere shaadi ke baare mein??

Gopi: Chup kar, meri shaadi nahin, woh meri saheli hai na, uskee shaadi hai.

They reach Khanak's house while Gopi is relating the story..

Gopi: Aur pata hain, uskee shaadi Dhanna kaka ke yahaan jo kaam karta hai, uske saath hone waali hai

Khanak: KYA?!

Gopi: Haan, (suddenly hitting her forehead): arrey baap re, main tho ma ki saadi Durga Chaachee ke yahan bhool aayee hoon, main chaltee hoon

Khanak: Haan, ja ..

Khanak shuts the door, mutters to herself..

"Uski shaadi mithai kumar se hone waali hai",.,…and suddenly starts laughing so hard that she ends up sitting on the floor sobbing to her hearts content and mutters 'Aap aa rahe ho na do mahine mein?'

She recollects her breakdown and looks back at the kids, and realizes she should know more than anyone else she needs to live for today and should not care how Shaantanu feels or whether he is even thinking about her. He is, she knows, but how can that help the betrayal she feels?

For the past few days, Shaan has been pouring over papers and books that the lawyer has given him to help make a strong case against Rahul. He thinks he is making some headway and gets up to talk to his brother about it. He sees his brother and Choksi talking animatedly through the glass doors and walls. Seems serious, he thinks, maybe they need another head, if not maybe someone to blame it all on, smiling he enters;


Akki: Aaja chotey, teri hi kami thi..

Choksi: Main chalta hoon

Shaan: Nahin, Choksiji aap rukiye, boliye kya baatein chal rahee thee

Akki: Chod Chotey,

Choksi: Woh actually, jo cloth mill ka project tha, usmein bahut saare problems aa gaye hai

Shaan: Acha, mujhe file dijiye, main dekhta hoon..

Akki: Are you sure?

Shaan: Of course! Choksiji, aap mere saath kal theek dus baje milne aajayiye, tab tak main file bhi padh loonga, okay?

Shaan takes the file, steps back into his office, shuts the door and shuts his eyes..

Khanak: Matlab ke agar ek aisi machine banne jis par kapde pe ek nahin par ek saath teen rang aa jaye tho baat hi kuch aur hogee na..

Shaan: Hmmm..tum kapdon ke baare mein kuch jyaada hi jaanti ho..

Khanak: Woh tho hai! Main sab kuch jaantee hoon!!

Shaan: (holding her): agar sab kuch jaantee ho,.,. tho batao, ab main kya soch raha hoon?

Khanak: (with a mocking smile): Aaap kya soch rahe honge? Bhook lag rahee hogi aur kya?

Shaan: (with a naughty smile and a soft voice): Woh tho lag rahee hai Khanak.,.

Khanak: Maine Kheer banayee hai, leke aaon..

Shaan: (whispers near her ear): Bhook uss type meethe ke liye nahin lag rahee Khanak..,.

Khanak: uss type..iss type…kitne saare meethai ki jaankaari hai aapko?

Shaan: (smiles into her lips): Akhir Mithai Kumar kaun hai??

Khanak: (laughs): Mere pati…

Shaan looks up from his reverie, collects the files and books and sets to go home. He sees his dad enter Akshay's room, his father has not spoken to him for days, he has no time now to correct that, needs to rush on things.

Sunil and Akshay enter home happily smiling away; Sunil sees Madhavi and says;

Sunil: Tumhara ladlaa kahaan hai, Madhavi?

Mad: Dekhiye, aap usse aaj kuch mat kahiye, woh bechara bahut thakka hua lag raha tha, seedhe upar chala gaya aur Harilal uska khaana upar leke jaa raha hai


Sunil sees Harilal going upstairs

Sunil: Harilal, tum Shaan ko khana leke jaarahe ho, ..,

Harilal: Woh chote baba ne kahaa ki aaj khana nahin khayenge

Mad: Kya? Kab?!

Harilal: Woh jab maine unko dhulwaadi se aaya hua packet diya, tab woh kholke, hass pade aur phir kahaa, mera dil aur pet bhar gaya, aaj no khana!

Mad, Akki and Sunil look at each other, Harilal leaves,

Mad: Ab?!

Sunil: Let it be, Madhavi. I am sure ki everything is okay.

Akki: Is Khusboo ko bhi ladies week out ke liye yahee week mila, she would know what to do..

Sunil (with a laugh): Koun? Khusboo??

Mad (glares at Sunil): Oh, Akshay, tum usse miss kar rahe ho na, don't worry, woh next week aajayegee. Pata nahin mere dono beton ki biwiyaan ghar chod ke jaane ke liye hamesha tayaar rehtee hai..

Sunil: (laughs): Jaisi saas, waisi bahu…

Mad: (cheekily): Haan, bilkul, pata nahin, meri saas ghar wapas kab aayegee??!!

Sunil: (small smile): chalo, ab khaana khale.

Akshay holds his mother by her shoulders and mouths 'good one'.

After dinner, Madhavi cannot help peep into her son's room. She goes in to see Shaan fast asleep clutching two flat pieces of wood, she is surprised and confused. She tries to pull them from his arms, cannot, then switches on the bed light to see two pieces of a 12 inch ruler, confuses her even more. But the thing that makes her happy is Shaan's smiling face and the way he has held on to those two pieces of wood, like his life depends on them. He seems so secure, which mother would pull them away.

Dil behel tho jayegaa iss khayal se

Haal mil gaya tumhara, apne haal se

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Posted: 14 years ago
#53

sazzzy ... i can see ur heart pouring out here..

all the incomplete tracks are on the table... loved it... from rahul.. choksi.... the cloth mill to daadii..
lol.. she broke the ruler into two pieces and sent it...and he s hugging it.. too cute....
Edited by priya_cool_123 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#54
Mithai Kumar !!!!! Saaazzzzy you just made me think of our most precious and wonderful Golden RBO once again !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Dil Khuuusssh Kardiyaaa !!!!!
Loveeeeeeeee you lots for this!!!! For Bringing back all the memories !!!!!!
Reallly Gurl ..... RBO team needs your ideas / your writing !!!!! You would have made RBO so beautiful once again !!!!!!!!
Khooop Khooooop Chaaan - Hope you understand Marathi !!!!!!
Ruler and the two Pieces !!! - Fantastic ... Amazingly Used and perfect words followed with the Shayaari !!!
Perfect Perfect Perfect Lines !!!!!
Dil behel tho jayegaa iss khayal se

Haal mil gaya tumhara, apne haal se

Edited by rbo_d_best - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#55
Oh wow............the only words that could come out when I was reading it !!
thanks saaaz..............
for bringing back that old world feel to the whole of the plot.........
wow......the ruler........and how she broke it in two pieces .......and how he is happy and clutching it !!!
loved it totally !!!
Mithaaiii Kumar reference.............too cute and when you incorporated it in the conversation hinting romance......
everything was soooo coooolll !!! and loved SunAvi covo tooo !!!
next part when???.......... *watches expectantly at saaz*
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Posted: 14 years ago
#56
Is it weird that this part made me teary eyed
And nostalgic
And happy
And warm
And satisfied

I wish you were in front of me so I could thank you for such a wonderful piece of writing
And I was serious about that job application.

🤗

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Posted: 14 years ago
#57
Hey dear saaz
thanx for the two pms 😃
sorry I missed the earleir part two
But now read both 😊Loved both yaar👏
seriously u are a good writer good enough to be a CV😃
and khanak becoming a arts teacher really a nice idea 😊
Hope Cvs do something for Khanak getting employed in the next track 😃
Edited by sshriyaa84 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#58
Saaz,

Wonderful!

No words.

When is next part?
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Posted: 14 years ago
#59
i read 3 parts at a time rocking yaar....Saaz ur sweetheart dear loved the way u started SS ...u reminded me of cute paathsaala scenes of shanak.....shaan envelope me ruler bheja...😆😆.....the way shaan imagining khanak was very awsome....beautiful lines by u in all 3 parts.....Jaisi saas, waisi bahu…hahaha.....and akki is so sweet like always.....khanak-gopi convo toooo guddd....awwww mithai kumar that was soooo cuteeee line...romantic shanak.....
fantastic SS Saaz very well written....the way u involve all rbo cast is the best...👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
waiting for the next update......😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
#60
Oye Bhudtal...why end it like that?😆

Neways I'm not going to go through Saazy's torment this time around so I'll just 🤣🤣🤣🤣 away...🤣🤣🤣

I'm glad you like my 🤣 so much!

neways Loved the update...it was rather cute...so shaan is happy that Khanak sent the ruler(s) back and probably wrote something on it too

I loved the fact that you are showing them giving space to each other and as for Rahul...i gotta say if u bring a strong case then im up for it!

and Tormentor Saazy...u shud be renamed Hitler Saazy🤣🤣🤣🤣

Torment karna bas kar warna hawa utha ke le jayegi tujhe🤣🤣🤣🤣

i don't even know what bakwas i'm doing🤣🤣🤣

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