FF: An Innocent Vixen-Part 5A pg 24 - Page 8

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: sshriyaa84

sorry for th late reply

give ur hands dear honestly
this is one of the ffs which has managed to capture my imaginations so well i whole heartedly appreiaite it
and any gujrathi surname would be apt...and meeting would be like:
I dont know if u ahve other plans on this but my views ae
shaan sees thosa paintings learns from sunil about saraswati madam is impressed goes to the place finds saraswati madam copliments her but she says some one else painted and she says khanak and points out to her from distance
Khanak is looking at some other direction shaan knows it is khanak now wants her to come to office
great job so far..


thanks Shriya....

that is a huge compliment for a writer when they manage to create an imagination in someone's mind with their writing. and i am truly honored. but i think there are people who write better than me who are better able to create a much better work. thanks again

anyways as for ur suggestions: well u are sort of right about the prediction...i have something similar but a bit different in mind. u will soon see and what i write u will love it!

and thanks!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@ zennnn: Thanks hun...i will update the next part soon...
@bones88: Thanks for liking it so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. wait for their further interaction soon
@showgurl: Thanks so much for the compliment. It is an honor to be put in that category but i think she is a better writer than I am.
@krock: thanks and will update soon....
@ luveeduvee: Thanks so much for liking it. u will love the next part :P
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Rooj loved ur FF its quite intresting wating for ur next update.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#74
Thanks guys for the comments!

Like promised the next part is up!

There is one more part of part 2 and then we will move to part 3

I hope you like it as much as I loved it writing it.
Please forgive and ignore the mistakes

Rooj
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Part 2C

Khanak and Shaan (outside Sunil's room)

Khanak couldn't believe her eyes. She blinked many times. She stood there and starred at the stranger in front of her, laughing at her. She was shocked beyond belief at his behavior. A minute ago, he was giving her the most intense eyes and now he was laughing at her.

After the initial shock subsided, anger took over her. Apne app ko samajhta kya hai? He is laughing at me?! Me!? She thought to herself.

"Oye! App apne app ko samajthe kya ho? First you bump into me, I didn't say anything. Then you spill water on my dress, even then I didn't say anything. Now you are laughing at me! Main kya joker dikhti hoon ke app mere pe hans rahe ho?!" Khanak was appalled at him.

"Haha….nahi woh…haha….main…haha…main…" Shaan tried to tell her between his laugh.

"main, main kya laga rakhi hai?" Khanak was getting even angrier now.

Shaan looked at her and tried his best to compose himself but it was becoming a hard task. He finally managed to compose himself and decided to apologize to her but before he could do that Khanak beat him to it.

"Aap kya bakra ho jo sirf main main karta hai?" Khanak was so annoyed by now that she didn't even want to listen to his reasoning, "hato mare raaste se." She tried to pass Shaan to continue to her path.

Shaan, being the angry young man he was, never had someone call him a name, especially from a girl. He didn't like that a girl was calling him names. He being Shaan, didn't budge from her way and further blocked her way.

Khanak saw this and immediately tried going the other way, but she was blocked yet again. She tried again but the opposite way but again Shaan was there to stop her.

"Abb kya kar rahe ho?" annoyed Khanak asked, facing him, "Hansna koi kaam tha ka abb mere rasta bhi block kar rahe ho? You have already made fun of me; do you plan to continue more with your silly game? Move!" Khanak tried to push him out of her way. As soon as her hands touched Shaan's chest, she felt a jolt causing her to move back.

She immediately looked up to see if he had felt it too, and indeed he had felt it because he looked at her hands and then her eyes, showing complete shock. Khanak took this opportunity to escape from there before she felt more odd behaviors going through her body. But Shaan was too quick for her. He again was in front of her blocking her path.

"Oh! Hello! I'm not laughing at you ok!? I was only doing what I think was right! I—" Shaan again tried to explain but Khanak cut him through.

"Yea I see what was right, first spilling water on a stranger and then laughing at them. Great "right!" Must have taken you years to learn such manners!" Khanak smiled and clapped for him in a sarcastic manner.

Shaan was now fed up, "I was only trying to help you by wiping the paint off your cheeks!"

Khanak was completely taken back. She was initially shock.

"Now that I think about it, I shouldn't have done that! I don't know what caused me to do it in the first place!" Shaan continued, "Mujhe chahiye tha ke main tumhe aise hi cartoon ke tarah jane deta toh phir you wouldn't be yelling at me."

Khanak wanted to apologize for her hyper behavior, but the embarrassment and ego-tistic behavior caused her to continue with her blame game, "woh, woh…." She looked here and there with embarrassment.

"woh, woh kya? Bolti band ho gai na," Shaan was enjoying this moment now.

"Aapne mujhe Cartoon bola!? Main apko Cartoon jaisi dikhti hoon?" Khanak tried to fight with him again.

Shaan couldn't believe his ears, this girl was too much, he ran his hands in his hair, "Thank you karna ke bajaye mujhe hi suna rahi hai?" he asked himself looking the other way.

Khanak just looked at him babbling to himself. She tapped on his shoulder, "Hello, main appse baat kar rahi hoon! You called me cartoon?! You have to take it back! Warna…!"

"Warna Kya? Huh? Bolo!" Shaan turned towards her and pointed his finger at her.

"Warna…Main…woh…" Khanak thought of reasons to tell him, "Haan! Warna main appko chodungi nahi! Main apko iss building is nikalwa dungi! Koi appne guest se aise baat karta hai? Thero main abhi appke employee se baat karti hoon ke appko manners sikhaein!"

"WHAT?!" Shaan was baffled by this, "Do you even know who I am? Tum samajhti kya ho appne app ko? Ek toh maine tumhari madat ki. Thank you kehne ke bajaye tum mujhe ulta seedha bol rahi ho aur ab yeh? Who do you think you are? You don't know who you are talking to. Do you even know who I am? Hahaha. I'm Shaan—"

Khanak stopped him mid-sentence, "I don't know and I don't care! I don't think it will make a difference of who you are to me. I have wasted my time already, I have to go. Hato mere raaste se!" She pushed him aside and this time she ignored all the tingling sensation that earlier have stopped her from performing it.

Khanak pushed Shaan hard to move out of her way. When he didn't budge, she reached in her pocket to get the pepper spray, while looking him in the eyes, "Hato warna main—"

"Yeh kya ho raha hai?" Stern voice of Sunil, caused both Shaan and Khanak to look at him.

Sunil who was a silent observant of this whole fiasco from beginning till end, was very amused. He saw the sparks and tension between the two and he immediately had a thought but he brushed it and silently saw them fight. Although he should've stopped them but then he wouldn't have gotten the chance to see Shaan being a kid again, which he never did since he was 18. Sunil just smiled and laughed silently at them. He had no intentions of disturbing them but he had to now because he saw Khanak reaching for her pepper spray. He absent-mindedly applauded the girl for being clever but he didn't want his son to be the target of her cleverness, especially if in the near future they could be friends and maybe even more.

He put up a mock-angry face, "Maine pucha, yeh kya ho raha hai? Yeh office hai, koi kindergarten nahi." Sunil sent the office staff back to work and told the two people to come into his office.

Khanak immediately put the pepper spray back but while in the process she dropped something on the floor that no one noticed.

Before Shaan could explain what was happening, Khanak beat him to it. She complained about Shaan and Sunil just listened to her. Whenever Shaan tried to give his views, he was shut by Sunil.

Khanak had no idea who Shaan was or how he was related to Sunil so she just kept complaining about him thinking of him as an employee only.

Sunil was thoroughly enjoying someone complaining about Shaan without being scarred. He would smile from time to time when neither was looking at him. Sunil went along with Khanak's complain.

"Alright beta, you don't worry. I know how to deal with such incompetence in my company," Sunil looked at Shaan's confused and shocked face and ignored all his daggers. Shaan was getting ready to correct him but Sunil again beat him, "I will make sure that this never happens again. You don't worry; I know how to deal with him."

Sunil assured Khanak and smiled at her. He promised that he would take care of Shaan and apologized to her. He sent her back to her work.

As soon as Khanak left Sunil's cabin, he started laughing. Shaan, who had misery written all over his face was now mad at his dad, "Dad!? What was that? Why did you not tell her who I was? Moreover, why did you believe her over me? A stranger over your own son?"

Shaan had a horrible day and now his father made it worse for him. He couldn't believe it.

Sunil looked at Shaan, shrugged his shoulders, walked back to his seat and just smiled at him, "I don't know beta. It was just too funny to watch you get scolded by someone as small and sweet as her."

"Sweet?! Sweet, my foot!" Shaan didn't know what had gotten into his dad, "Per dad, why?!"

Sunil again gave him his playful smile, "Kyu ke beta, you were being a kid again and I couldn't let that opportunity go from my hand. Beside it's not like you will see her again. Abb jo ho gaya hai, so ho gaya. Forget her and look at this painting."

"Mujhe nahi dekhni, mujhe jana hai aur ek event planner aur interior designer to lana hai ajj aur mujhe pata nahi main kahan se itni jaldi se le aaon."

Sunil remembered Khanak telling him about her being one of the two and he was just about to tell Shaan but Shaan had already left his office.

Shaan stepped out of his office and tried to ignore everything that took place in the last half hour. He ran his hands through his hair in frustration, messing his hair in the process. He looked down and saw a card lying on the floor that caught his immediate attention.

He picked it up and saw what he couldn't believe he would find today, the day that has become a disaster for him.

A triumphant smile appeared on his face and he called his driver to take the car out once again.

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Happy Commenting!

Rooj

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Posted: 14 years ago
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lovely part dear.... hilarious tooo...... waiting for the next part
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Posted: 14 years ago
#76
Awesome...awesome.....👏........continue soon

cheers

Shai
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Posted: 14 years ago
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awsme.sunil enjoyed der fight hehe.gr8 update.plzzz cont soon.......
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Posted: 14 years ago
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v ery good to see sunil enjoying... Nice work so far keep it up...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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ROFL at Sunil having free entertainment at SHANAK's expense...Good he stopped the pepper spray fiasco....Hahaha !
Loved SHANAK's Khit-pits....Cant wait for Shaan to find out who the card belongs to....LOL.....She will surely accuse him of following/stalking her...LOL !!
Continue soon!!
Edited by togepe30 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks Guys for liking it so far!

I hope you love this one too!

Don't worry after this part, you will get more Shanak scenes!

This is my Christmas Present to you all!

Happy Holidays!

Rooj
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Part 2D

Khanak's bike-ride back to her shop


"Itna acha mera din ja raha tha, lekin uss monster ki wajah se sab kharab ho gaya!" Khanak furiously took her bike out of the stand outside the office.

"Uss namone ko ajj ka din hi mila tha mere se panga lene ka kya?" Khanak mounted her bike, thanked the valet for looking after it and started her journey back to her shop.

"Ajj toh itni achi sale bhi hui. Aur phir un uncle ko painting bhi bohat pasand ayi." A smiled appeared on her face as she dreamily thought of the day.

Suddenly her smile turned into a frown, "Aur phir woh idiot," she furiously cut through the road, making a sharp turn causing the bystander to jump on the side to save himself. He yelled after her, while she just continued on to her own thoughts, "Usne mera sara din kharab kar diya! Samajhta kya hai apne app ko?"

She took another sharp turn on the left, causing another innocent human being to save his life, "Oye! Dekh ke apni cycle chalao!" Again Khanak didn't pay attention and went on cycling through the traffic.

As she made another turn, she saw red light and stopped traffic in front of her. She brought her speedy cycle to an immediate stop to avoid collision.

"Kya zaroorat thi usko mere saath takrane ki? Aur pani girane ki?" She asked the empty wind.

Two seconds later, her expressions turned from mad to guilt, "Par usne sorry bhi toh bola tha. And you yelled at him, Khanak."

As the signal turned green, the traffic picked up and she started her journey again, "But then he was laughing at me! Laughing!"

She made another slight turn and again managed to doge another bystander, but this time she apologized for almost running him over.

"But Khanak," she started her conversation again, "he was only trying to remove that paint stain off your face. You yelled at him for helping. Instead of thanking him, you showed your anger at him."

"He was laughing at me and I felt embarrassed after he told me what he was doing and I didn't know how to thank him," she continued to reason with herself out loud.

"But still he helped you and you insulted him!" She made a slow right turn on her shop street.

"He called me Cartoon! Cartoon!" she tried again to talk to her subconscious mind aloud.

"That was just a joke, he didn't mean it!" Khanak frowned to herself as she knew her guilty mind was right.

She was almost there to her shop. "You know you were wrong, Khanak. You know what you have to do."

She halted in front of her shop, stood her bike in the stand and rushed inside the shop to tell Ruby of the whole office incident.

Shaan's car

Shaan looked at the card again. He smiled and flicked the card with his index finger for the umpteenth time and looked out the window again smiling.

Finally! I cannot believe me luck. I thought I wouldn't be able to find someone before night time, but here I am heading to my manzil. Shaan thought to himself and smiled again.

And to think my day would get worse…especially after meeting that, that…Ugh! I don't even know if I should call her a girl. Shaan was upset again thinking about the whole office fiasco.

I thought she would be quite and shy-types of girl. But no! I was wrong! Her innocent looks and initial behavior said it otherwise. And those eyes, Shaan's upset expressions changed into a smile as he imagined Khanak's smile, those eyes held such power in them. Chocolate brown, almond-shaped, as shiny as a diamond, gorgeous, seductive eyes with… His thoughts trailed off, "Wait a minute!"

Shaan's sudden yell caused Dharam to look back through his rear-view mirror and slammed on his breaks.

Shaan felt a strong jolt, sending him forward in his seat, "What the…? Dharam, yeh kya tha? Hum kyu ruk gaye?"

"Shaan baba, woh kya hai ne ke appne abhi toh bola tha gadi ko rokne ko toh main ruk gaya," Dharam turned around and explained to Shaan.

"Maine? Maine kab bola tha gadi rokne ko?" Shaan was confused.

"Abhi toh bola tha 'Wait a minute'" Dharam reasoned with him.

Shaan hissed out of frustration and threw his hands in the air, rolled his eyes and responded back to Dharam, "Dharam maine gadi rokne ko nahi bola tha. Woh toh main apne app se baat kar raha tha. Issiliye yeh kissa khatam karo, gadi start karo, aur chalo. Humey jaldi pohanchna hai wahan."

"Par Shaan baba, app agar itni zor se apne app se baatein kareinge toh mujhe kaise pata chalega ke app mujhse baat kar rahe hain ya apne app se? mujhe kaise pata chalega? Pucho kyu?"

Shaan sternly warned him, "Dharam…"

Dharam turned back around and obeyed Shaan because he knew right now arguing with Shaan meant trouble for himself.

Shaan went back to his thinking, I can't believe I was thinking like that…?! Aur upar se yeh Dharam bhi. Pata nahi dad ne isme kya dekha tha? Jab dekho falto ki baatein shuru kar deta hai aur koi kaam theke se nahi karta. Yeh sab uss, uss…ladki ki wajah se hua hai! Uski woh gol gol baatein, bilkul uske gol, bhole chehrey(face) ki tarah. Sweet, innocent, sed—….Ugh! Focus Shaan Focus! Shaan hit himself on the forehead again.

He had no idea what was going on with him and all through the way he was wondering the same.

K. Saraswati and Associates

Shaan and Dharam finally reached the shop. He stepped down and told Dharam to wait in the car as he went inside and talked to the owner.

He looked at the overhead sign and then stepped inside the shop. He immediately liked what he saw.

The inside of the shop was elegantly set up, he saw how the interior designer had creatively used the on-the-sale items to make it part of the shop. The color combination was superbly and smartly done. Shaan was impressed.

He saw unique items that he had never seen before. There was definitely different theme going on, on every corner of the shop. The best part of the place was the paintings. They caught his attention immediately. He had seen many paintings but these ones had something else to it. In each painting, he could feel the emotions coming out of them. He saw the jhalak of the artist in them.

As he moved deep into the shop, he saw a girl working in the counter, which was located in the middle of the shop. He approached her, "Excuse me! Kya app iss shop ki owner hain?"

The girl had light brown hair and she was deeply buried in her accounting stuff. Hearing a manly, sensual voice, she immediately looked up. She was initially shocked as she had never seen a young, dashing man and that too someone like Shaan stepping in their shop before.

She felt embarrassed as Shaan repeated his question because she was openly starring at him. She shook her head and reminded herself that she already was committed, "Yes! I mean no! I mean yes I am one of owners of this shop. I work with my partner, Khanak, in this shop. We both run it together."

Shaan was quite because he got another shock of the day. The name sounded vaguely familiar. He repeated the name to figure out where he had heard it before. He felt nice as the name rolled out of his mouth. It seemed to have fit his tongue too as he repeated the name the third time.

"Ji appko kya koi kaam hai? Koi painting khiridni (buy) hai? Ya phir order karni hai? Btw mera naam Ruby hai." Ruby asked him.

Shaan was brought back out of his day dream, "Nice to meet you Ruby. Nahi. Mujhe koi kaam nahi hai."

Ruby just gave him a weird and disappointed look.

Shaam cleared himself immediately, "Nahi, mera matlab hai ke mujhe koi aisa kaam nahi hai. I'm not here to buy the paintings or anything like that but I am here for another reason."

When he saw Ruby was still confused, he continued, "Mujhe interior designer aur event planner ki talash hai aur maine appka card padha toh maine socha ke main khud kyu nahi ajata."

Ruby, now understanding him, smiled at him and went on to explain Shaan of her and Khanak's job. She told him how Khanak designed the inside of the shop, which impressed him. She explained to him how Khanak do both jobs and how she helps her.

Shaan asked her few questions in regards to his project and then offered her to come and work for his company. Ruby immediately took up his offer and told him that she and Khanak will not disappoint him.

He explained her minor details and asked her to come to his office tomorrow to get major and thorough instruction. He also wanted them to meet his staff and the artist to get their perspective on how to work through this project.

Ruby thanked him and took his card to come to his office. She promised him and noted the time in her calendar.

Shaan thanked her as well and gave one last look around the shop before exiting it.

As Shaan was exiting the shop, he collided with someone again second time in a day. Unlike the last time, however, the collision was harder for him because the opposite person was, it seemed, rushing in his direction. This hard collision caused the stranger to bump into him and losing balance in the process.

Outside the K. Saraswati and Associates

As she was rushing in, she was looking through her purse to take out something. Due to her carelessness, second time in a day, she collided with a hard male figure. The collision was so hard, which caused her to lose her balance.

Before she could hit the ground she felt a pair of hands holding her from the back, breaking her fall before the fall.

She held on tight to the person's shoulder that was holding her. After the initial shock subsided within her, she slowly raised her eyes to look at the stranger who saved her from falling.

For the second time in a day, she felt herself losing again. She was starring, again, at the most gorgeous eyes.

Shaan was stunned because he didn't think he would be bumping into the same person twice in a day. He wanted to say something to her but he couldn't bring himself to say it because he felt himself giving away to the eyes staring back at him.

A strong hold was pulling both people towards each other. He felt his hands going tighter around her waist, as her hands dug deeper into his shoulders. He slowly brought her back to her feet, balancing her. She held him tighter. Not for a second, they took their eyes away from each other.

What felt like ages to them, it was only a mere second that went by and they were still being pulled towards each other. Shaan's left hand left the back of her waist and slowly rose to the side of her face, while holding her from the other hand.

As he was raising his hand, a passing car's loud honk brought them back from their revere. They both let of each other right away. While Shaan ran his hand through his hair, Khanak pushed her fallen hair back behind her ears. There was an awkward silence between them.

Once the initial embarrassment was broken between them, they both yelled at the same time, "You! What are you doing here? Are you following me?"

They both showed their frustration at each other and then just turned around.

Khanak was the first one to recover from the second silence, "Look I wanted to ap—"

Shaan stopped her before she could finish, "Look, I don't have time for this. We are going to fight again and I'm getting late for my meeting. It was nice meeting you! We will fight next time when we see each other," he shook hands with her in a hurry and walked to his car while talking to her, "I hope that never happens because I hope to never see you again! Ok bye!"

He almost jumped into his car and told his driver to quickly drive away from there because he was in no mood to talk to her again and start another fight where she will go and complain about him to his dad again.

Khanak was filibustered at his behavior. She was left there looking on. She didn't know how register what happened here. She closed her mouth and a small frown appeared on her face. She crossed her arms and stomped her foot. She turned around and walked inside the shop, vowing herself never, ever try to apologize her behavior to him ever again when she see him next time.

She went inside and told Ruby about everything that happened outside. Ruby didn't pay attention much to her and told her about the project offer from the K Company, which made Khanak very happy causing her to forget everything. She was oblivious to the fact that this project was with person she vowed not to see or talk to and that he was just outside her shop offering the project.

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I wanted to make Shaan and Khanak to be in their character a little. So i did my best.

forgive me if it is not up to your standard.

rooj

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