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Hi guys! Here's the new chapter! I wanted to tell you that I almost finished writing this story on my laptop so I don't know yet if I would update more often 😕 But anyway,thank you for your comments and everything 😉

Asad's pov, three days later.

Zoya and I were in front of our house which was Tanveer's house. She grabbed my hand and we walked around the house. We entered the house from the back, but before entering the house, she kissed me and whispered:

"If something happen, just remember that I love you, right?"

"Same for you, Mrs Khan." We entered the house, using the secret path built by Zoya. Once we were into the house, Zoya put clothes similar to the ones she wore when Tanveer had attempted to kill us.

"Remember Mrs Khan, don't try something impressive."

"Asad, please, I won't try anything." We were in our room and seeing all the memories we shared burnt was heartbreaking. Zoya found her necklace hanging in a photo frame of us and put it in her pocket after looking at the photos of Sanam and Seher.

She kissed me one last time before leaving.

Zoya's pov.

I cautiously walked around the house, searching for Tanveer's room. Well it wasn't that difficult. It was the biggest room. I put my hand over my belly and exclaimed.

"Beta, please, help your Ammi!"

I entered the room and see the famous chair of the devil. The rocking chair. I sat on it and I started rocking myself. I heard some movements then her horrible voice echoed in the room.

"Who's there?" She asked. I smirked and I got up. I heard her gasp, so I turned around.

"What's happening Tannu? It seems like you have seen a ghost!" I began to laugh like a crazy girl as she was looking at me in a horror state. Good. That was my cue to leave. So I left her room, running away like a thief. As I assumed it, she tried to follow me but someone pulled me into a room. I realized that it was Asad.

"So how was it?" He asked.

"Seeing her frightened was the best sight I had to see despite yours and our children's face."

We laughed some more before leaving. Tanveer Beg, your fall was near!


Seher's pov.

I was sitting in front of Khala's house listening to the music box when something, or someone caught my eye. It was a man. He seemed very familiar. He had a smile plastered on his face as his dimple on his cheek was showing. Why did I have this feeling that I knew this man? Some hazy memories flew into my head..


Flashback.

"Seher! Come here! Ammi is looking for you!" Someone said and I couldn't manage to see his face as it was blurry.

End of flashback.

I closed the music box and I entered Khala's house. I went to my room and I sat in the corner of the room and I cried. It was so hard! Why? Why did my Badi Ammi had left me! Why? I was left all by myself, were they looking after me? Were they thinking that I was dead? Was Sanam aware of my existence? How would I find them?? Allah Miyaan! Why did I have to suffer like this!


Sanam's pov.

Shit! Aahil was outside waiting for me. He had flowers and I couldn't deny that he was very handsome with this suit...Allah Miyaan! What was wrong with me??

I opened the door and he smiled, well Mr Ibrahim you should erase this smile!

"What are you doing here?" I asked coldy.

"I..Remember, I said that I'd pick you up!" He said confused.

"Allah miyaan! What's wrong with you! Today, you almost killed my sister Haaya! What are you looking for? You want to kill all my family just for one slap? Mr Aahil Raza Ibrahim, you're disgusting!"

"But Sa.." He tried but I shouted:

"Enough! I forgave you when I almost died because of you but now you have crossed the line!" I was going to slap him but he caught my hand.

"If you're talking about the girl in the road this morning, I honked at her but she didn't even flinch!" He said.

"That's because she's deaf! If you weren't so occupied with this brat of yours, maybe you would at least questioned you about the reason why she wasn't moving from the road!" I shouted. Then I closed the front door and I went into Haaya's room. I hugged her tightly.

"I can't imagine what could've happen if I lose you or Badi Ammi." I said with signs.

"Shh, just forget about it." She answered with signs before kissing my forehead. "Go to sleep, you must be tired." She added and I kissed her cheek before going into my room.

"Sanam beta?" Badi Ammi called me and I turned around to look at her.

"Who was this man?" She asked. I couldn't say to her what Aahil did! She's very weak and I couldn't risk her life because of this bas***d.

"You know he was just someone I met on the road you know meeting him inspired of a poem 'He met me and keep following me, he met me and keep following me, allah miyaan, maybe I'm wrong but he must be under Sanam's spell!'" Thanks to my poem, Badi Ammi didn't ask too much questions!

Anyway I went to my room and I tried to sleep but it seemed like Aahil was even tormenting me in my sleep as I dreamt about him! Please Aahil Raza Ibrahim get out of my head!


Aahil's pov.

Why was it impossible for me to do things right? First her then her sister?? Aahil Raza Ibrahim, you're a loser! And she even saw me with Padma! I really messed things up this time! But I didn't even knew why I was so mesmerized by her! She was very beautiful that was true but I had seen a lot of beautiful women but no one had ever made me feel like this! Sanam Ahmed Khan.. Please get out of my head!


Seher's pov.

"Ammi, please, don't leave me! Abbu where are you?! Why am I all by myself!! Ammi, why did you leave me!"

"Safaa! Safaa beta, wake up! Oh my god, you have a high fever! Safaa, please don't close your eyes!"

My body was sore, I was cold and hot at the same time. I was shivering and I couldn't keep my eyes open.

"Meri Ammi..Meri Ammi.." I mumbled. I felt something cold on my forehead.

"Kyun? Don't go! Ammi, Abbu, don't go! I am Seher! I am your daughter Seher, please don't leave me!" I said. Khala tried to soothe me but she couldn't. She hugged me tightly and then I heard the music box.

"Ammi.." I said before drifting into a deep sleep.


I woke up next morning slightly tired by the events of the night before. I decided to go for a walk around the city with Khala. I was going to ask them if they knew something about my Badi Ammi. As usual, I brought my music box with me.


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Posted: 9 years ago
#42
Amazing chapter
Looking forward to know how the reunion happens
Please continue soon😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#43
Very nice
Love zoya scaring tanu
So sad for seher
Did she see Asad or just imagine him
Aww poor ahil can't do anything right
Sanam let him have it
Haha love her poem
Oh seher is sick
So what do u have for. This pregnancy
Continue
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Originally posted by: muskaan17rocks

Amazing chapter

Looking forward to know how the reunion happens
Please continue soon😊

Thank you! I'm going to update soon 😆
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Brilliantly written chapter. Hope reunion happens soon. Oh poor seher is sick. Thanks for the pm. Do pm me when u update next part.
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Originally posted by: anopama

Very nice

Love zoya scaring tanu
So sad for seher
Did she see Asad or just imagine him
Aww poor ahil can't do anything right
Sanam let him have it
Haha love her poem
Oh seher is sick
So what do u have for. This pregnancy
Continue

Well I know that Zoya scaring Tanveer was pretty funny but you will enjoy when it will be Asad's turn. Regarding Seher, I know she's always suffering and I'm feeling bad for her but I calm myself knowing that she will be happy at the end of the story. Regarding Aahil and Sanam, they won't be together yet but they sure will end up together. I'm bad at writing poems but hey I'm not perfect x) I think I may introduce Tanveer's daughter through this pregnancy..😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi guys! this the first part of my double update, the second part will come soon! Love you all! ❤️



~7~

Zoya's pov.

It was so cool that Asad didn't notice my pregnancy. And it seemed like the little one decided to help because I didn't have morning sickness! Anyway, I was preparing some breakfast for Asad when my phone rang. I answered it and it was Humeira!

"Bhaji?" She said.

"Humeira! How are you?"

"I'm fine and what about you? How is Antara and Asad?"

"We're fine. You know I miss you, Karan and Haider so much!"

"I miss you as well Zoe. Anyway, I called you because Karan is engaged!"

"Really?! I'm so happy for him! Who is your future daughter-in-law?"

"Her name is Pia. She's such a beauty! They're gonna marry in two years when they'll be twenty."

"Inchallah. Anyway, I need to hang up, meri Akdu is awake."

"Ji, call me whenever you want to Bhaji. I love you, bye!"

"Love you too, bye!" I smiled but I was surprised when Asad hugged me from behind.

"Who do you love Zoya Asad Ahmed Khan? I thought I was the only one!"

"Ha Mr Khan! You're jealous of my sister?"

I looked at him and he was blushing. I kissed his red cheek and I set the table.

"Let's eat, today I decided to make a salad of fruits!"

"Meri Jaan! You're finally eating healthy!" I laughed and he laughed as well then we started eating.

"Zoya, you know that a salad of fruits is incomplete without papaya."

Papaya? Why? I couldn't eat them! Shit he would discover everything! Think Zoya, think!

"Papaaya? I was so lazy that I didn't want to add papaya!" He laughed and I sighed with satisfaction. Mr Khan I'm very sorry but I had to do this!

Sanam's pov.

Allah miyaan! I was very sick! I couldn't help Badi Ammi! My body was so sore! And I was sad but I didn't know why..

"Sanam beta?" Badi Ammi said entering the room I was probably pale because she looked at me worried. "Sanam, kya hua? Are you okay?" I shook my head no and she hugged me. Then she kissed my forehead.

"Get some rest, Haaya and I will take are of the dhaba. Oh yes, I almost forgot, who gave you this dhaba? I need to meet him to thank him.."

"Nahin Badi Ammi, he used to eat at our dhaba before it got burnt so, because he missed the food I prepared he built it!" Sanam, stop lying I said to myself.

"What a nice man! I need to meet him!"

"Ji Badi Ammi." I said not knowing what to say any more.


Seher's pov.


Khala and I were just chilling around, I managed to make her wear sunglasses! We were going to buy pizzas before heading home. I would thank her forever for this day because she made me forget my sadness for a while. As I was entering the shop to buy pizzas, I slipped and I almost fell but someone caught me. He had beautiful brown eyes and a smirk on his plump pink lips... He helped me to get up and I smiled at him.

"Thank you. I'm Safaa by the way."

"Safaa? I'm Rehaan. I was sure that you were Sanam.." He mumbled the last part.

"Sanam? You know Sanam?"

"Ji..Actually not personally but my brother knows her." He said.

"Where is she? Please tell me!"

"She lives in Punjab. With her grandmother and sister."

He knew her..he knew Sanam..I hugged him and I gave him my phone number. Wait..I had another sister!?

"Thank you so much! This my phone number, please dial me if you get any information about Sanam." He nodded then I ran to khala and I said her the happy news! She was so happy just like me. I had to call Maya so I picked my phone from my purse and I called her.

"Maya? Guess what?!" I said happy.

"What's happening Saf'?"

"I found out where is my sister Sanam ! She lives in Punjab with our Badi Ammi and my sister. As soon as possible I'm gonna go there to meet them!"

"I...say..some..."

"Maya I can hear properly! I'm gonna hang up and I'll call you later." It seemed that she had something important to say.


Aahil's pov.


I went to Sanam's house, hoping that she was there. I needed to apologise to her. I brought roses. I knocked at the door and she opened it. She seemed sick.

"What are you doing here Mr Ibrahim?"

"I'm here to apologise for my behaviour. I know that I behaved rudely towards you and your family. And I'm really sorry for what I did yesterday and when I burnt your dhaba. Please accept my apology."

I got in my knees in front of her and I held my ears in signs of apology. I felt her look upon me and then she helped me to get up. I gave her the flowers.

"I accept your apology in one condition." I nodded to incite her to continue.

"I want you to prove to me that you're truly sorry for your attitude." She said.

"Ok, I'll do as you want." I said then I kissed her on the cheek before leaving.

TBC.

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I think this part will be loved by all of you^^


~8~

Seher's pov, two weeks later.

My heart was beating really fast. Rehaan had given me Sanam's address and everything. In few hours, I would meet my sister Sanam.. I was very stressed! I couldn't say how would I behave, what would I say.. but I needed this. I needed to find answers about my past. I picked my bag and I left the train.


Sanam's pov.

This day, I felt weirdly relieved. I felt that something important would happen ..

Anyway, I was in a car with Aahil and he was driving somewhere, he didn't want to say where though. Those past few days were magic. I learnt things from Aahil that I couldn't imagine. He was very caring and I was happy to have given him a second chance.

"We are here Sanam, you can open your eyes." I opened my eyes and I was greeted with a beautiful sight. Were were in a park and there was a lake. It was very beautiful.

"Wow! Aahil that's amazing!"

"Not as amazing as you." He said and I blushed. We sat on a blanket and there was a basket of food. I opened it and there was toasts with chocolate. I smiled and I picked one and made him eat it.

"Thank you Aahil. You're not as selfish as I thought." I said. He just smiled and I stared into his beautiful orbs. Then everything went very quickly, we were staring at each other then we just kissed. His lips were very soft and it tasted like chocolate... wow I was melting into this kiss and I didn't regret it.


Seher's pov.

That was it. I was here, in front of the house. I walked to the front door and I knocked. A woman opened the door and she smiled, then she gestured me to enter. I looked around the house and there was a photo of a woman looking just like me and another woman and man. The woman who looked like me was holding a music box similar to mine.

Another woman came into the room and she looked at me disappointed.

"Sanam! Where were you? And what are those clothes?" She said referring to my tank top and my short shorts.

"I'm not Sanam. I'm Safaa...or I better say Seher."

She put her hands on her mouth in shock. I smiled at her with eyes full of tears.

"Seher!" She hugged me and I hugged her back.

"Seher, meri beti hai! I'm so sorry! Please forgive me! Forgive your Badi ammi! I didn't want to leave you!" She cried. I patted her back until she calmed down. Then we sat on an armchair and she looked at me smiling.

"Tell me more about you Seher, were have you been, where do you live, how did you find me, why did you leave, I looked for you for years, I never stopped. I always got the feeling that somehow you'd come back.

"Badi Ammi, l lived in the road for a year before Mr and Mrs Omarjee adopted me and when we went in England a month after they adopted me, they died in a car crash 3 months after we got there and since then my governess has taken care of me. I came here to look for my parents but a man said that they had been killed seventeen years ago."

"Actually, this man is right but I'll tell you all the story when Sanam will come back because she doesn't know about this. She just knows that your parents died. Go get some rest in her room. You must be tired." I jut nodded and the woman who opened the door led me to Sanam's room after Badi Ammi gestured her to do so. I went to Sanam's room and I lied on her bed. That was it, Ammi, I was near my sister. 'Meri Ammi, I don't even remember how was your voice, or your attitude, I miss you and Abbu so much. I did this to find you but you're no more. You left me in a world which can't have any sense without you."

Sanam's pov.

"Thanks Aahil. I spent a very good time with you." I said kissing Aahil's cheek hesitantly.

"I'm the one who has to thank you. You're amazing Sanam." I blushed and he chuckled.

Then I left his car and I walked towards my home while he left. I entered the house and I knew something was wrong when I saw Badi Ammi crying in the living room.

"Kya hua Badi Ammi?" I said, kneeling in front of her. She hugged me and I didn't understand why she was acting like this. She gestured to Haaya to go to my room and when Haaya came back, she was with someone who just looked like me.

"Sanam, this is your twin sister, Seher."

TBC.


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Very nice double updates
So finally the twins r face to face
So seher met Rehan and he pointed her to sanam direction
Omg Sahil already they kissed
I thought u say they will take time
So haira son Karan is engaged to Pia
Who is she hope not tanveer daughter as u said u may introduce tanveer daughter in this chappy
So love Asya they still rule the world for me
And love their kind of love
Zoya keeping her pregnancy a secret is not nice
She should tell him
How many times will she be able to make excuses
So now dilshad will tell the girls how their parents die
So I guess all will be out for tanveer a blood 😃
Continue soon
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Originally posted by: anopama

Very nice double updates

So finally the twins r face to face
So seher met Rehan and he pointed her to sanam direction
Omg Sahil already they kissed
I thought u say they will take time
So haira son Karan is engaged to Pia
Who is she hope not tanveer daughter as u said u may introduce tanveer daughter in this chappy
So love Asya they still rule the world for me
And love their kind of love
Zoya keeping her pregnancy a secret is not nice
She should tell him
How many times will she be able to make excuses
So now dilshad will tell the girls how their parents die
So I guess all will be out for tanveer a blood 😃
Continue soon

Yep! Seher and Sanam are finally together! They kissed but that didn't mean that they are together. Don't worry, Pia isn't Tanveer's daughter and I had said that Tanveer's daughter will appear thanks to Zoya's pregnancy...😆 Sorry if I had said something wrong it was very late when I answered your comment so I have probably written something not right. And when he'll discover her pregnancy he won't take it bad don't worry 😊

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