One Last Dance SaHil TS Part 2 updated

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Esha

@Raingoddess

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Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: mahwash22
O M G !!

This is so precious! ❤️

Eshaaa.. You so need to post the first part of this. So happy to know that you decided to put this awesome idea into words.

I'm eagerly waiting for the First Part. It's already looking so great. :)

The preview is Gold! So damn excited. ❤️

And that song is the most apt toward SaHil.. I've been listening to it non-stop 😳

Thank u so much 🤗 I just posted part 1! Hope u like it! Your feedback n compliments always make me super happy 😳 ❤️ Thanks to u guys for helping me come up with these ideas! It would not have been possible without u! I agree, I love that song too!!

Edited by Raingoddess - 10 years ago

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Esha

@Raingoddess

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Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: siyasharma94
Beautiful preview.
Waiting for the update

Thank u so much! I posted part 1! Hope u like it!

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Esha

@Raingoddess

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: Junoon-e-SaHil
Thanks for mentioning us! 😆 It feels so greeatt!! 😆
Can't wait Esha! I mean LITERALLY can't wait! I think I need to watch that scene now...😭

Your welcome 😉😆 But seriously I would not have come up with this idea without u guys 🤗 So thank u! I posted part 1! Hope u like it! But part two is where the actual scene comes in 😉😆 Yes nothing beats the NL scene! That was class apart! 😳

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JShukla

@JShukla

Inactive

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Grrr... all these people did not even clicked 'like' for the update. I am a good girl though. I 'LIKED'😃

this is so beautiful.

I am sure Jannat's confusion will not be shown. her turmoil will be brushed under the carpet...And we'll never get to see Aahil and Shad at loggerheads like this.

I loved the thoughts running in Sahil's mind.

I loved the lack of thoughts with regards to Shad miyaan.. really that guy is tough to understand😕😆

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Pragya

@Ms.Sherlocked

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

Eshaa!!! Whatt whattt whattt?!!😭😭 WHAT. INDEED. 😭😭 THIS IS TOO PAINFUL. AND GORGEOUS. PAINFULLY GORGEOUS. GORGEOUSLY PAINFUL.

??!!?? TOO MANY EMOTIONS!! No no no! 😭 I have already read it 4 times! This is WOW! OMG! I am crying so much here! Wonder what would I do when I'll read "the dance" 😭

I can't bring myself to put in words how and HOW wonderful this was! I need to learn some good synonyms 😕😆

My my! The starting itself was too PAINFUL!! I don't even know where to start and where to end..its all so..EVERY PART OF THIS was so beautifully written! ❤️

From - When he stepped back. When she said most heartbreaking words to him. When he just let her go. When he whispered her name and she din't look at him. 😭

To - her restlessness. Her overwhelming feelings around him. Her heartbeats and breaths around him. Her getting lost in his deep painful eyes..❤️

From - Her confused feelings, being in a denial still realising. To him believing in what belongs to him always and forever, still letting her go...💔

From when he was packing and to that breaking down on his knees hugging her photo and whispering silently with tears. 😭 CAN I JUST SAY THIS WAS MY FAVORITE PART!

And there is one another favorite! I would just quote that whole line itself! It WAS SO GORGEOUS! :'))

"He would never take advantage of her! He was just too... Pure! "

THIS! This Esha! THIS line! I had to stop there for a moment or two to read this over and over. This is just too beautiful to describe! I felt so warm and fuzzy in the insides..This is WOW! :')) This is such a simple line, but I LOVED this SO SO MUCH!!

And then that memory flash! OMG! So many OMG moments in this 😆 That was amazing! I almost thought HE actually said that from behind "Agar main itna hi bura lagta hoon toh chhod kyun nahi deti!" It had such striking resemblance to the situation. HOW beautifully you have written this! ⭐️

And about the "face off" thingi! 😆 AWESOMENESS!! Damn! I so loved that ARI and Shady that time! 😆 I was so excited during whole convo, just like he was incredulous and fisting his hands I was too! 😆 I LOVED how it ended though! HAHA HIS SMIRK!! OMG!! 😆 IN YOUR FACE SHADY!! 😆

And then the last part! Their prayers for each other! ❤️

AND FINALLY!! Saving the best for the last! THE LAST DANCE!! Oh Esha! This is going to be SO DAMN HEARTBREAKING! AND PAINFUL. AND TEARY, AND..😭😭

I can't wait for that man! You ended at JUST THE RIGHT TIME! God this was so so beautiful! And you were stuck in between, I am glad you were, it wouldn't have come out THIS way otherwise! ❤️

Damn! I ranted so much for this! And it still feels like there is SO MUCH MORE! 😆

Esha! Hands down for this AMAZINGLY WONDERFUL piece! 👏👏 I am in awe of this and you too! 🤗

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zynia890

@zynia890

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

Nice ts...I already hate shad and the way you presented him in this ts I hate him more...and sanam is feeling the Aahil...and aahil raza Ibrahim gave good to shaad...that he would live with hope while that liar would with fear...and nice play ahil...dance... let's see what happens...give it a happy ending plzzz...

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Sumi Roy

@LoveSonu2408

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#17

wow!part1,fantastic well written...👏

bt u made me cry with ahil's emotion..😭.its hurting....

shaad u...🤬.

sanam's emotion,actually she behaving lk sanam👍🏼,nt cv's jannat..👎🏼

i blv u dnt gv sad ending..😊..

so wating 4 nxt chap...🤗

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Mandy

@MrDarcyfan

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#18

Esha my girl that was fantaboulous! I always wanted to write something on the current track, but had too much anger in me for the injustice done to Sanam to be able to express my emotions about it. I almost wrote something and then stopped. They could have made this track SO intense, even before Aahil came, with Sanam struggling to reconcile her feelings of unease! Not this nonsense "detective" bakawas they are showing!

But your piece is just fabulous! It shows the harm that lies can do, and how true love never gives up and true love never "grabs" and "entraps", but lets go! Shaad is just a selfish criminal, who only cares about himself. But Aahil loves Sanam and wants her to be happy! THAT is true love! Thanks for this and await the next update!

Hey BTW I have updated Aashiq Banaya. Do check it out if you get the time. I didn't PM anyone this time!

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Rashmi

@Intuitive

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#19

🤗Hugs for u Esha for this fantastic part. It was so intense. You made me cry by the pain they went through especially Aahil. So beautiful writing. Loved it. I wanted to read more n more of it n wanted it to never end, but at the same time I longed for the dance.

This was just sooo beautiful that I can't even tell yaar. It was nice that u stuck up and came up with such a painful yet beautiful part.

The way Sanam looked away and said Aahil to go away- it was so so painful.

Then the packing scene when ARI says( I thought he really said for a moment)- Agar mein tumhe itna hi bura lagta hu to chod kyu nahi deti. Loved how u incorporated that into this scene.

Then Shayar n Aahil- at last Aahil had a smirk- it would be a huge blow to the selfish obsessed irritating Shaad.

The night of confusions for sanam and how they prayed- I totally loved it- it showed the strength of their love.

Then when he asked for the last dance I was. Waiting so so so eagerly for the next part.

The way Aahil felt was just so deep n intense.

"Do you really want me to leave?" His voice shook even though he tried hard to compose himself.

I felt so bad for Aahil then. He loves Sanam so much.

"Kyun... Kyun na bulao tumhe Sanam? Tum Sanam ho! Meri Sanam! Tumhe kuch bhi yaad nahi yeh manne ke liye main tayaar nahi hoon! I can see it in your eyes Sanam! Tumhare hoonth kuch keh rahe hai aur aankhen kuch aur! I still see something in them Sanam! A flicker of recognition which still gives me hope! That you will remember me Sanam! One day you will. You will remember our love! The journey that we have lived together! Dont deny it! Fine tell me that you feel nothing when I call you Sanam!" Aahil said as he moved closer to her.

This was the junooni Aahil. I remembered the scene in which when Sanam remembered nothing about the graveyard night and Aahil was questioning her.

"Shaad, I will live with the hope that one day she will remember her past and come back home to me! But you will have to live with the fear that one fine day she will remember everything and hate you!"

I was like yes, no matter what Sanam is only Aahil's- His Begum Jaan and no one can change that and she will return to him.

"I will always love you Sanam." His body trembled slightly as the intensity of the pain spread throughout his body. The realization that he was leaving her behind broke him completely. His heart wept as the tears poured out of hie eyes. "But how will I live without you..."

I felt so- painful umm words are not there. This one made me cry.

"For no reason?!! You know what, leave it Shaad, you really don't understand!"

"I am not Jannat!!!"

I felt Sanam back. I felt so bad for the confusing state she was in. I so badly wanted to see this in the track even if Aahil hadn't yet arrived. But all they did was show that nonsense SK drama.

I loved the face-off and the packing scene was too beautiful.

No words for Shaad. He is really disgusting and so selfish. I loved that Aahil wanted to punch him. U know Aahil's kick should be so hard that he should go back to his office-no he doesn't deserve it, jail or fall down from the cliff and go in his dreamland of SK obession and plan how to kill her.

He seemed... Real!- I loved this line in the whole part. Summarized everything Sanam was feeling.

Loved the song.

This part was beautifully😭. Next part would be beautifully

Again🤗for this part. Can't wait for the next part

Edited by darlingpinks - 10 years ago