Originally posted by: mahwash22
Okay! Whaaat! I need a moment to get over the emotional stress I'm feeling.. A Very long one of that!I actually shed a few tears after reading it. *cries.*Aww Mahwash 🤗 I didnt want to make u cry! Actually I cried myself as well 😭 I felt so bad for Aahil! I almost wanted to stop the torture, but then the writer inside of me had to continue! But your comment ❤️ One of my best and most encouraging readers! Love u so much and cant thank u enuf for all ur support!
First of all kudos to the awesome piece of writing! You sure got me hooked on a few tissues while reading.. And top it with that beautiful song! *Snif!*Aww stop it! You make me blush 😳 But then all this awesome feedback makes me so proud as well! As for the song, I love that song so much and it reminds me of SaHil each time I hear it!
God! It was such a sentimental touch to it - which I absolutely loved. I could feel the despair and pain of Aahil going through this. It was beyond heartbreaking! Eshaaa...I love your style of writing and teh way you capture just the right essence of words and atmosphere. I want to give you a huge hug, girl! You're wonderful and awesome. 😆 😉
Let me give u one first 🤗😆 Ur equally awesome girl 😉
"The vulnerability and confusion he saw in them broke his heart. He didn't want to hurt her! He could never imagine doing that! He just wanted his Sanam back! He wanted her to know that Jannat was a figment of someone else's imagination! That she was Sanam Aahil Raza Ibrahim... His Begum Jaan! But he took a step back."
But Sanam still remembers him subconsciously. He is your soulmate, Sanam. He has marked his way up to your heart and you shall soon remember who you really belong to.
"But she would not lie, the man came in her dreams almost every njght. From day one she felt a strange attraction to him. She pushed it off considering he was good looking but his intense eyes and husky voice made a strange longing stir within her."
I totally fell in love with these lines. You got right into the feels. The intense eyes, the husky voice. So beautifully written, Esha..👏Trust me its all KV 😆 But thank u so much 😉 I was inspired by the talks at our Heaven 😆
And that Shaad guy. I actually like your portrayal of him. But still wanting Aahil to look elsewhere and letting Jannat believe that she is not Sanam. Ugh!
Gosh it was a heavy ride of emotions. I honestly felt the pain and loneliness of Aahil. That fact that he wanted to bring her back with him to the Mansion, but wouldn't do anything against her will was heartbreaking. I loved how you took previous quotes into the story and led Sanam question her mind.
"He was hiding a world of pain, but those eyes failed to hide anything from her. Jannat didnt know why, but she wanted to somehow ease his pain."
I felt his pain too! In fact in this entire journey, I feel that the character whose pain I felt the most was Aahil! He is just too pure and innocent yet passionate and fierce I wanted to bring out the Sanam inside of Jannat and am glad I was able to do that 😳 Its high time she questions!!
Remember how you said that you could picture a solid showdown between two good looking actors. Well I think it's my turn to imagine that. Gosh, I loved to read two male guys giving each other a glares and all. You did justice to the whole scene between Aahil and Shaad. 👍🏼😳Thats exactly what I had in mind! Glad u were able to see it as well 😉
The two heartfelt prayers filled me with so much love. Their love is so pure and honest that it makes you feel their struggle and pain.
"Aap mujhe iss kashmakash se nikaliye! Mujhe meri pechaan wapas de dijye! Main aaj bahut kuch mang rahi hoon lekin mujhe patha hai ke sache dil se mangi hui dua kabhi khali nahi jaati!""Usse door rehna aasaan nahi hoga lekin mera pyaar itna bhi kamzoor nahin hain! Ek na ek din woh mere paas wapas zaroor laut aayegi! Mujhe meri pyaar pe yakeen hain! Aap bas mujhe itna takaat dena ke mein usse alvida keh sakun! "
And the part where Aahil raises his gaze and looks into the moon. Beautiful! ❤️
You said it! Their love is so so pure n honest that we cannot help but feel their pain! Spirituality plays such a important role as they both pray when they feel lost! Its so beautiful! I wanted to capture that and I am so glad I was able to do justice 😳
Eshaa.. I feel like I could write a whole essay on your perfect story. And that small scene at the end was the best part of it all. So loved you finally put it into words.. Such a beautiful thing to ask by the Nawab Saab toward his Begum Jaan. ❤️ I will keep my hopes of them reuniting together! <3
You've got me wanting for more. I really hope you update soon, because honestly, I wouldn't be able to wait for too long. <3 😳
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