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Tanvi

@KulfiBai

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

RES~! 😎

You guuuyyysss, sending PMs about everyone's work but YOUR OWN 🤣

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NAVI55

@NAVI55

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#22

Res...Unres...

Well, here I am a day later...

And all I can say is ...

WOW...WOW...WOW...

Zanu darling, you are a genuis👏

What a simply amazing composition this was...

This gave me goose bumps reading it...

Your words had a flow...A magical touch to it which captured my imagination and left me enthralled...

The mention of a blank diary had me confused for a moment...But then when I read the entry that was penned...I of course was confused once again...

The photogragh was another conundrum...On one hand Asad could see a female figure whilst the Doctor saw a picture of a younger Asad...

How can a blank diary suddenly have words written in it??? How can two people see two totally different images...

Was this real or merely a hallucination on an extremely troubled mind and lonely soul?

This was just so surreal...and described so real...

This piece of yours propelled me to an alternate universe, where dreams and reality merged.

This was brilliantly executed and fabulously narrated👍🏼

The way you depicted Asad and Zoya sitting on the beach, snuggled to each other was just beautiful...For a moment there I wanted to be on that beach, ensconed in that moment...That's how perfect it was...

That moment when she said to him "Don't go", sent a chill down my spine...and when he said that he won't, he will remain with her forever, made my heart flutter and almost stop beating...

Does this mean that I am technically dead? and I am writing this comment as a ghost😆

(Oh, well...I always wanted to be casper😆)

The last part...had me numb...That was totally not what I was expecting...

I had thought he would get his happily ever after in this world...but how wrong was I? He had to journey elsewhere for that perfect happy life...

An awesome concept Doc...Something to question the mind...You made me think once again...as if Farz piece wasn't enough for me😆

Take a bow dear...You rocked this...

I am sure I will be back with some more ramblings...Because there is so much more I want to say but right now all the words elude me...

Mwah🤗

Edited by NAVI55 - 11 years ago

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NAVI55

@NAVI55

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#23

Me on page 5...😭

How upsetting😭

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jasminerose

@jasminerose

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#24

This was fabulous.

Very different. Intrigued me all throughout.

Amazingly written.😊

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amare_ashy

@amare_ashy

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#25

Hunz! 🤗

Have I told you how amazing you write? This was such a beautiful read that I couldn't stop reading it after each line..

It just had something magical to it - And of cos, loved the ending and they are eventually together...

It was interesting that only Asad could read what Zoya was writing in that book and no one else could... I think if I found a book like that, I would be intrigued but at the same time, freaked out that no one else could read what I saw... Hahaha..

It's interesting how their destinies crossed... Zoya from the other world and Asad from this world.. Them meeting each other through dreams.. Was this all Asad's imagination of Zoya? Was it all just delusion to keep his misery and torment behind so that this solace would give him peace and happiness he yearns for?? Hmmm...

Loved the parts when Asad found her at the beach - them snuggling into each other - just gave me all those feels.. It's a beautiful feeling being embraced in the warm love of your loved one. And then she says, Don't go - deep words that probably gave Asad the strength to do what he does at the end.. Brilliant sweetheart! Just brilliant. 😳

Nonetheless, it was absolutely brilliant Huney bud! You should keep writing - Write a book one day! I'll defiantly read it..

❤️

Edited by ash_ed - 11 years ago