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GoodGoneWrong

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: life4me
Very beautifully written. Loved it.

thanks for the sweet words

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GoodGoneWrong

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

Originally posted by: aashiqua
amazing stuff...update soon

thanks dear...update on Thursday

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

Tadaaa, look who is here?! All the way from...Antartica 😃

It took a while but you know what they: der aaye durust aaye. So here I am, ek dum fresh and in a very good lazy mood 😳

This brought, ek dum back, to the Christmas time and mood. Loved the way you described Christmas time. I could totally imagine myself sitting there and enjoying it, as if I was Zoya.

The cold, the snow, the people, the lights, the coffee (I prefer tea or a hot chocolate) just everything was so lovely.

she had bumped into a tall solidly-built guy she had never seen before (Can I bump into him too?) 😳

the absence of Jeeju and Aapi (Ah, they are not here)

Asad Ahmed Khan or A-sad A-mad Kaan as Danny called him (It's Khan from the epiglottis)

"I owe you one." (So what will he give her eventually?)

After his voice, she noticed a lot more about him, especially his deep brown chocolate eyes, his Greek God looks and the attractive dimple that peeped out ever so slightly whenever he smiled (Can I add one more thing? His jawline...) ☺️

"He thought we were out on a real date. He did not want to be the third wheel (Aww...Mr. Khan. You can never be a third wheel) 😉

woh actually (Lovely, his signature line) 😊

Zoya was lost in his voice and eyes (Seriously, who wouldn't?)

"Oh good...good" - "Woh...I mean... good night." (And he falls in love with her...)

Okay, that's it! I have made my choice: this SS is your best! There is something real about it; the way Christmas is celebrated, the way she goes to the Franks for the Christmas dinner, the way she meets a guy through another friend and the way they story develops.

Brings the reader totally in the mood. Very well written, good flow in the story, easy and very light 👏 A very feel good story! 👍🏼And I am totally loving it 😃

Oh one more thing: I fell in love with Asad Ahmed Khan all over again... 😳

Rivi, thank you sooo much for this! Again, this is your best work. BAS.

BTW...thanks for mentioning my name. Did I really push and encourage you to write? I did not do anything! This is all your own time and effort! Phir bhi, thanks! 🤗

I want to read more...jaldi, jaldi 😛

(Yes, I am going to take that encouragement very seriously now. Matlab, stalker alert!)😈

Edited by metoyou - 11 years ago

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GoodGoneWrong

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Posted: 11 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: akaswan
Awesome i just loved it 🤗

Continue soon please 😃

thanks...next part Thursday

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GoodGoneWrong

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Posted: 11 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: Ani-asya

Me superb di.. Hope u are fine..
u think Thursday??
Looking forward to the next part...

Thanks dear.. yeah Thursday it should be.

I am good.

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Swetha Natarajan

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Posted: 11 years ago

#26

Wow!!! Super!!! Lovely!!!
Fantastic!!!! Cute!!!! Mind blowing!!!!
All the praises in the world!!!! Really
It was sooo goood!!!!!
Asad is really cute withvhs who actually...
And as usual zoya is bubbly

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GoodGoneWrong

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Posted: 11 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: ashrina
Wow!!! Super!!! Lovely!!!
Fantastic!!!! Cute!!!! Mind blowing!!!!
All the praises in the world!!!! Really
It was sooo goood!!!!!
Asad is really cute withvhs who actually...
And as usual zoya is bubbly

Aww thats very sweet of you to praise it so much. Thanks.

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anopama

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Posted: 11 years ago

#28

this is absolutely beautiful
wow asad and zoya at christmas
and asad is enjoying so cute
loved how he asked her if she and danny
continue soon and thnx for pm

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GoodGoneWrong

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Posted: 11 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: anopama
this is absolutely beautiful
wow asad and zoya at christmas
and asad is enjoying so cute
loved how he asked her if she and danny
continue soon and thnx for pm

Thanks anopama. I am glad u liked it.😊