FF: All the Right Moves - Chapter 14, page 129 - COMPLETE

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Rattyswami

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Posted: 11 years ago

#111

Great Update, but a few things:-

1. When will Mr. Khan learn his anger is going to be the end of any relation btw him and Zoya, friendly or otherwise

2. Wht's the deal with Rohan??? Snooping around in the LION'S DEN😲 May he rest in peace🤢

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Preeti

@FaultInMyStars

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Posted: 11 years ago

#112

Just one thing...
you are the best writer out here!😳

Update soon!

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mrs. varun dhawan but you can call me fari. :)

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Posted: 11 years ago

#113

Phew! Caught up with the chapters I missed! 😃

Can I just honestly say that I like this story a lot better than your other one? 😳 I'm not really sure why, I just like it WAAAY more! 😆 It's more romantic, more entertaining, I love the concept and storyline, and it's funnier, too! 👏 👏

The fall-and-catch part in the beginning was fab! 👍🏼 I hear a "mitwa moment"! 😉

The pancake part was awesome, too. 😛 Made me hungry, truthfully. 😆 😆

And of course, there is some sort of interesting mystery in your story as well. ❤️ Can't wait to see that progress, especially why Rohan is snooping around so much; he's just acting really weird in general.

Continue soon! 😳

-Fari 😳 ❤️

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@daydream.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#114

Oh, and another thing I wanted to say! I think your writing is even more awesome now than it was before! 😃

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princess101

@princess101

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Posted: 11 years ago

#115

I loved the update thanx for the PM and update soon😃

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PalyGirl

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Posted: 11 years ago

#116

Originally posted by: -LiveLoveLaugh-
Can I just honestly say that I like this story a lot better than your other one? 😳 I'm not really sure why, I just like it WAAAY more! 😆 It's more romantic, more entertaining, I love the concept and storyline, and it's funnier, too! 👏 👏

-Fari 😳 ❤️

Fari,

I think you like this story more because it takes place in the Khan Villa. The last story was placed mostly at Zoya or Asad's offices so it didn't connect the family so much. This story is in their house so it feels closer. Najma and Dilshad are also more actively involved, increasing the 'family' feel. But the last mystery was necessary to set up for the next adventure.

Thank you for your feedback!

Paly

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Rupali

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Posted: 11 years ago

#117

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amazing update! I loved Zoya's snooping Asad's possessiveness Rohan's secrecy and Najma's fangirling self! I can't wait for the next part: please update soon!

Edited by Love-AsYa-4ever - 11 years ago