One Shot - Mr. Olive Green Tee

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ChandlerBing

@ChandlerBing

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Posted: 12 years ago

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-Devanshi-

@-Devanshi-

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Hey there! 😊

This was a lovely one-shot! No names, just descriptions and expressions by Zoya in first person(at least I hope so😆)! Absolutely brilliant!

And the title is so apt too. I loved the description of the surroundings and how that one guy(obviously, Asad) catches her eye😆. Suddenly, all her fatigue has vanished and she is ready to go and take their orders😆! Classic Zoya!

Another awesome part about this story was how she realizes that he wasn't looking at her but her friend. Ouch! That must have hurt! But in the end I get that warm, fuzzy feeling in me when you mysteriously write that the gaze followed them till the end of the room because I would like to think that the guy was staring at her for sure😳

I hope what I have said is right because if I have mixed up the two girls, its going to be extremely embarrassing for me!!😆

Forgot to mention, I would love it if you could continue it. It would be a treat to read more!

Edited by -Devanshi- - 12 years ago

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Surya.Ravi

@Surya.Ravi

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Posted: 12 years ago

very nice one shot..😊

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CrazyBilli

@CrazyBilli

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

Lovely one..😊 I could relate to it..Can u give a 2nd part plz???😳

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Mishti

@MayurnASYA

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

great os..

loved your writing...so simple and different..

can you continue plzz...

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lakshmi

@meow23

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Posted: 12 years ago

cn v hve a 2nd prt to itt

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rajnid68

@rajnid68

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

now who gets the green signal from the green tee..

wont you continue..

beautifully written. .

wld love a pm if and when u update..

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Dee

@Enchantress

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Posted: 12 years ago

Hey I loved this... Just so perfect and real.. You know it happens truly.. We are in a social place and enjoying with our friends suddenly we see a handsome guy and we feel all jelly feet .. We keep staring at them every now and then, ask our friends to accompany us to here , then there.. so that we could just get a glimpse of them... And, then we see that the same person is looking at us.. But can't make out was his gaze for me or my bestie... Their we start comparing ourselves with our bestie the one thing we never ever did, we do for that random guy. All of a sudden we come to know that our bestie is more and more beautiful and graceful.. And we are nothing.. nothing at all infront of that beauty.

Actually it happen with me a lot..😆 I loved this one shot.. But you need to continue this. And, if possible do pm me when you do so.. Will wait..

Dee